Sigh, why is it that every time I write something like this, I feel like I'm being mean?

Well, if that's the case, please let me know. I promise I wont be offended and I'll try my best to be nicer.

Chapter 9

Awkward Descriptions

Have you ever read a story, and the author makes a reference to something, but they don't know how to describe it.

For Example:

Nami glared angrily at her captain. Her teeth did that weird anime shark face thing.

Or

She was wearing a black dress. (It's like the one Robin wore at Enies Lobby, only it had blah, blah, blah.)

Ugh, the first one was a terrible example, but you get the point.

Whenever I see this, it just breaks up the flow of the story for me.

I get not really knowing how to describe something, but when people do this, it just feels like they're taking the lazy way out.

Maybe it's just me, and I mean this in the sincerest way possible, but I don't understand how hard is it to give your own details on something, when you're copying the design from something you've already seen.

But if you really don't know how to describe something... then I guess what I do is to try and break it down into its most important features.

Just for arguments sake, lets break the shark face reference down into its key features:

A glare and pointy teeth, the face may be red or show an exposed vein.

So when I put it all together, I get:

Nami glared heatedly at her captain. Her face was red with anger and her mouth curled back into a snarl, exposing her teeth, which looked as if they had been sharpened for some odd reason.

Or when I use the other example:

She was wearing a short black dress that had white trimming around the edges. It cut low, exposing her voluptuous chest. The way the light hit it made the sequence sparkle, accenting the flowery design imprinted in the dress.

See it's not that hard if you break what your describing down into the main features, for me at least.

It may be different for you but just try and give it your best attempt. Writing anything, descriptions or even an entire story, gets easier with practice.

Instead of telling us what it is, show us.

~Done

And if you have anything you want me to address, please let me know :)

As always thanks for reading. I hope you have a wonderful day/night. Bye~