Well the POV idea went well, in my opinion.
But I guess it's your opinion that matters.
Now I am going to need some reviews, telling me whether I should stay in 3rd person, or if I should use 1st person every so often. I'm not going to use 1st person all the time, because it's kinda hard to stay in that perspective.
Please Review!
Aelita POV...
I treated Yumi kindly, not just because Ulrich was Ok with her, but I was so glad to see her, I forgot how mad she was.
Yumi had started up with William, which I had thought was to make Ulrich jealous, but they seemed pretty serious. So Aelita figured it was real.
Ulrich and Odd were like two halves of the same person, now. They were starting to finish eachother's sentences. It was amazing just how much they loved eachother.
Me and Jeremy had gotten close to finishing a program that could bring Franz Hopper, my father, back into existence. After I had watched him get destroyed... I couldn't believe that he had gone.
Jeremy was worried, though. "Aelita, you do know what will happen if try to bring him back, and it doesn't work... you do realize that we don't know what might happen. We could lose all the data on his genetic profile. We could bring him back, but he might not be himself. Are you sure you want to risk this?"
"Yes." I said without hesitation "Because there is a possibility he might come back... completely himself."
I wanted to at least meet him again.
I'll bring you back, daddy. I promise.
Ulrich pov
Odd was sound asleep. And I couldn't help but stare.
His beautiful golden hair was almost glowing in the sunlight from the sunrise. His purple highlights shined almost silver. It was like an eclipse, with his highlights being the moon, and the rest being the sun.
I had never thought that Odd could be as romantic as he had been these past months. Last night, he strategically placed candles around the room, and had somehow prepared a delicious meal. When I asked him about it, he told me it was a secret.
After that, we talked about... stuff. Just stuff. We just talked. And after we were done eating, we danced to some music. I told Odd that I didn't dance, and he decided to try to teach me. The operative word being try.
"We" lost "our" balance and "we" fell onto his bed. (Actually that last one didn't need the quote'; we really did fall.)
But that was ok. Because we landed in a way that between regular friends would have been awkward, but between us it was... it was hot!
But nothing too wild happened. Which means we only madeout. But it was still amazing.
Don't get me wrong. I love Odd. But we're trying to take it slow. We also needed the... proper equipment. (X-D)
And after that... we were holding eachother close, and then we fell asleep.
Classes were normal. Lunch was... eventful. Sissi had hit on me, even though she had found out about me and Odd (long story) so Odd had put a cricket in her mashed potatoes. And he said that the two hours of Detention was worth it, too.
After the detention, we spent some time just talking to eachother.
Untill Jeremy called us.
"What is it Jeremy?"
"Ulrich, Odd! You need to get down here right now!"
"Why? Is it XANA?" I asked.
"Not quite... Ulrich... you have to see this..."
His tone worried me. "Odd... let's go."
"What is it?" My boyfriend asked.
"I don't know."
So we made our way to the factory. A XANA attack a couple of weeks ago had destroyed our skateboards, so now we were using scooters like Jeremy and Aelita were.
When we got to the lab, we went to the scanner room. We didn't know what was going on. In front of the scanner was a man, sort of like Mr. Delmas, but it wasn't him.
But I had seen him somewhere before.
Then Aelita said something that explained everything.
"D-Daddy? Is that you?"
Oh shit... we were looking at the man who created this whole place.
We were looking at Franz Hopper.
Bum bum buuuuum! Told you there would be twists. So I got the idea for this sometime last night. Bringing back Franz was a very good decision I think. You'll see why later.
