AN: Ok guys this isn't my regular thing, but I've been having some issues with the beginning of my own book and finally wanted to know if this settled right. If it wanted the reader to continue or not. If you could read it and let me know what you think that would awesome! If not I understand, since it is not a fanfic, but this is in the works of publishing and I just would like to know if it's good or not. So let me know and enjoy!
Agonizing screams crashed against my ears, my hands baring the weight of his head as his body shook violently, fighting against death with every breath. Tears spilled down my battered face as I mumbled meaningless words to those above, praying that they may show mercy, that they may show compassion for once. His body thrashed violently against my own and I could do nothing but tightened my hold on him as I could feel a familiar coldness overcome him. Death was winning.
Knowing that this was the last time we would see one another, I bent my head over, pressing our foreheads together. Tears dripped from my face and onto his, "I love you," I whispered softly as my sobs grew louder, "I love you."
When I received no reply I knew that I had lost him forever. Never had I felt more alone in the world then at this very moment. For the first time in my life, with all the loss that I had suffered through, I felt abandonment knocking at my heart's door.
Then from the corner of my eye, the enemy that slain the most important part of me rose from the earth, staring blankly at me, his eyes widened in shock and realization. Our eyes didn't even have to meet before he knew what would come next. Without hesitation, the sheathed blade of my sword pierced the tender flesh that stretched across his windpipe, severing his head from his now lifeless corpse as it fell all to easily back to the earth.
My revenge had just barely begun.
"Ahh!" I yelled as I jolted from my sleeping position, gasping for air as I came up. My eyes scanned round my surroundings allowing me to see that I had finally come back to the realm of reality and the world I had escaped was nothing but an illusion.