CAPITALS- comentary
Chapter Ten- Gryffindor Versus Slytherin the first game
With the cheers from the Slytherin crowd still ringing, the Gryffindor team appeared. "LADIES AND GENTLEMEN, HERE COME THE GRYFFINDORS LEAD BY WOODS. HIS CHASERS ARE BELL, SPINNET AND JOHNSON. THE BEATERS ARE THE RED DEVILS THAT ARE FRED AND GEORGE WEASLEY. AND THEIR SEEKER IS (Okay. Quick A.N: I searched for ages to find a name I could use from the first book. No character from the Gryffindor house that suit the purpose. J.K. I know Harry never really spoke to people. But surely there should have been more characters. God, that suck. So people, another OC is introduced today.) Kira White. Harry watched the line before seeing the Seeker. She looks around Harry's age therefore she must have been a second year. Her hair looked untameable whilst her grey eyes were slightly haunted at the sight of Harry. She had a small petite body that looks like it had just started to develop.
Harry's eyes wandered along the line before coming to rest on the other three girls. Bell was similar to Kira, however she was taller along with blonde hair and Brownish eyes. Johnson and Spinnet were both darker skinned with brown eyes. But Johnson would wear her hair with braids.
Harry pulled his eyes away from the team because of the arrival of Madam Hooch. The grey haired witch glared at all the players before releasing Bludgers and snitch. The golden snitch circling both of the seekers before disappearing. "Now then, I want a nice clean game, all of you," she said, staring directly at Flint. His face took on an innocent expression.
"Mount your brooms!"
Harry straddled the smooth wooden handle of his Nimbus Two Thousand. Madam Hooch's silver whistle gave a piercing shriek. Fifteen brooms rose up, high, high into the air. They were off!
"AND THE QUAFFLE IS TAKEN BY MARCUS FLINT AND HE STREAMS TOWARDS GOAL. FLINT IS FLYING LIKE A REALLY UGLY BIRD HERE! FLINT SHOOT! BUT IT'S SAVED BY WOODS, THE FANSTASTIC GRYFFINDOR CAPTAIN AND KEEPER. HE THROWS IT OUT TO JOHNSON WHO IS STILL REFUSING TO GO OUT WITH ME."
"JORDAN!"
Harry didn't know the boy who was providing the play-by-play action, Lee Jordan, but Flint had warned Harry to pay him no mind. Though he was minded by the stern and impartial Professor McGonagall, Jordan still let his Gryffindor bias show.
"AND GRFFINDOR SCORE TO GO TEN-ZERO AHEAD." Harry circled above high above the game below. He noticed that the opposite seeker was zooming around the stadium looking for a glint of gold. Gryffindor then scored another three goals in quick succession. The three chasers for the lion were working well together whilst Woods was having the game of his life. "AND THIS GRYFFINDOR TEAM LOOK GOOD FOR THEIR LEAD." Commented Jordan. This seemed to strike a chord with the Slytherin watching from the stands as they let their displeasure know as Gryffindor scored again to make the score fifty-zero. At that moment, Flint called for a time out. Harry zoomed down to find Flint yelling angrily at Bletchley.
"What's the fuck the matter. Has something hit that thick head of yours?"yelled the red faced captain at the scared keeper.
"Can I make a suggestion." Spoke up Harry, a idea sparkling in his brain.
"What Potter?" said Flint.
"We need to take out the keeper." Said Harry, a smile on his face which was echoed on his captain's.
"Good idea. But the Bludgers aren't getting close enough." Said Flint.
"I'll distract him. Make sure your trolls don't mess up." Said Harry as he mount the broom and resumed his previous position above the game. The rest of the team followed him. The Gryffindors rejoined them in the air and the game resumed. Harry then sent a hand signal to Flint to let him know before renewing his grip on the broom before diving like a hawk toward the lonely red figure at the red end goalposts. "WAIT A MINUTE. WHAT'S POTTER DOING? HAS HE SEEN THE SNITCH?" Jordan yelled as Harry hurtled towards Woods. However at the last moment as Woods braced himself for the crash, Harry corkscrewed under the broom as two Bludgers crashed into Wood, one smashing his broom and the other colliding with his head, causing a deep cut to appear in his temple. Woods fell to the ground as the Gryffindors turned their fury towards Harry, howling abuse to the now floating Harry, who just did nothing but smile at them, enraging them further.
"POTTER MUST HAVE CHEATED THERE, SURELY. ISN'T THAT ILLEGAL?" yelled Jordan. That didn't stop Slytherin. Pucey scooped up the loose Quaffle and sent it soaring into the centre post. Johnson gained possession, but was cut off by Flint, howling his warcry, who stole it from her.
It was turning into a rout. Bole and Derrick had clearly knocked out Wood, and without a Keeper, Gryffindor's chances were sunk. One of the Chasers might guard the rings, but she would not have Wood's experience. The two remaining Chasers could never beat three, not with the way Flint had gone insane. The score slowly turned in Slytherin's favour. It was now 100-60 to Slytherin. That's when the snitch was finally sighted. Both of the seekers saw it and began the chase. Lion verse Snake. The small, fast golden ball stood at the bottom of the Slytherin goalposts and they both flew at similar speeds at the golden ball. There was only one thing that was going to happen.
Crash.
The two brooms collide and the two seekers fell about ten feet before they hit the ground. Everyone was looking for the snitch. The one that was clutched tightly in the hand with the green sleeve and the snake crest on it's robes. The Slytherins and their supporters all let up a tremendous cheer. The whole team began to converge on him.
"Bloody brillant!" Flint shouted in his ear, nearly deafening him. He picked Harry up and swung him around in a circle. Bole and Derrick bruised his shoulders with their slaps of congratulations. Pucey and Montague raised him up in the air above the crowd of fans that had raced on the pitch. Raining praise down upon the boy who won them the game.
Harry Potter. The boy who won.
Hello Readers
I know. Long time-no update. Here's the thing. I was uninspired before I read through this story again and thinking of a new idea on the story.
So hope you like this chapter. Feel free to leave a horrible comment because I want them. I care for all reviews. Good or bad. It make me a better writer.
Next item on AN. Is anyone a good drawer? If you are, please PM me about a project for me. No money involved. It's related to this story.
Now about Hermione. I have a really gruesome plan in her future. No, she WILL NOT be in Harry's Harem. I'd just can't see her in it. Sorry.
I got a suggestion for a time skip which is tempting. I'll sit on that idea for a while.
Now the Poll. 11 People are going the harem.
People that are going to be in it:
Ginny
Daphne
Tonks
Tracey
Fleur
Poll results so far:
Gabrielle: 36 Votes
Astoria: 32 Votes
Su Li: 7 Votes
Gryffindor Chasers (as a Group): 20 votes
Luna: 18 Votes
Patil Twins :17 votes
Susan Bones: 13 Votes
Lavender Brown: 4 Vote
Cho Chang: 3 Vote
Katie Bell (single): 6 vote
Sophie (My OC): 8 Vote
Romilda Vane:1 Vote
Sally-Anne Perks: 1 Vote
Marietta Edgecombe: 1 Vote
Lisa Turpin: 1 Vote
Amelia Bones: 5 Vote
Andromeda Tonk: 1 Vote
Bellatrix Lestrange : 8 Vote
Minerva McGonagall: 5 Vote
Aurora Sinistra: 5 Vote
Penelope Clearwater: 1 Vote
Plus the Fifth year summer romance.
So if you want to have your favourite character in the Harem. Vote now via Review or PM. Oh yes. You can vote for every chapter because I have problems remembering names and such.
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