A/N: Okay. So you guys know how Chapter 1, 2, and 3 are in 3rd person and all of the rest of the chapters are in 1st person (changing views)? Well, I want to make this chapter in 3rd person.
Do you guys think I should type in 1st person (changing views) or in 3rd person?
In this story: I changed Justin to a more caring brother. In the previous chapters, I made him more of a nerd. And I know how a lot of people on here are obsessed with him and don't want him to be and extreme nerd, so I changed him for all you Justin-lovers! I also changed Max, too. I made him more in character now. One of my friends think they're out of character, so I did research (yeah, I still had to research, even though I've seen pretty much every episode) and made Max more cluelessly lovable! :D
Great News: I think I have improved on my writing skill. So this chapter is the best written out of all of them.
A few days later, Max told Nancy he was a wizard. And he told his family about it. But the Russos were smart and tricked Nancy into thinking they were special affects enthusiasts. Nancy broke up with Max. And she kept the lizard. Max was devastated. A few weeks later, during summer, he remembered the night him and Nancy broke up.
"I lost the most important thing in my life," Max said.
"Oh, Max. I know it's hard to lose your first girlfriend, honey. I'm so sorry," Theresa, his mom, said while rubbing his shoulder.
"What, Nancy? No, I'm talking about my lizard, mom," Max said with a frown on his face.
Max remembered the look on his mom's face. Why was she making that expression? Max missed his dead lizard. He added flavor to Max's salads.
He could never get his lizard back. School was over. There was no way of contacting Nancy to beg for his lizard. He lay on his bed and started to read the summer reading book.
Knock, knock.
Max sighed. "Come in," he said to whoever was at the door.
It was Justin, his brother. He was already starting to get tan from being outside a lot. Max didn't go outside much. He mostly watched TV. He was still tanner than Justin. Max was naturally tan. He knew Justin was jealous.
"Are you okay, Max?" Justin asked with concern. "You never go outside."
"Yeah, I'm fine," Max said taking a gulp from his orange soda bottle sitting on his night stand. Orange soda was his favorite.
"We aren't going to buy you another lizard," Justin said. "Mom says we aren't going to have any pets, especially lizards, for a long time." He sat down in a chair in Max's room.
"WHAT? Why?" Max asked. He was shocked. Mom always bought him pets.
Justin looked around, as if he was literally looking for the answer. "Maybe it's because you sprinkled him on your salad," he said. "We always thought it was expired cheese!"
Max rolled his eyes. "Why would I ever put expired cheese on my salad?" Max asked. "That would be stupid." He said it like it was pretty obvious. Max didn't like expired cheese. It was too… blah. He usually liked a lot of expired foods, but not cheese. Some foods he couldn't tell the difference between expired and fresh. Like his mom's lasagna, for example.
Justin rolled his eyes. He agreed with Max. "Max, you need to get out more." Justin said. He knew his little brother didn't get involved with anything. Whenever Justin left to go to Zeke's house, Max would be sitting on the living room couch, watching TV. Whenever Justin came back, Max would still be there, except he would be eating a sandwich.
"I do get out," Max said.
"Not out of your room, out of the house."
"The Sub Station," Max said.
Justin face-palmed himself. "Outside of the building." Justin said, trying to make it obvious that he meant outside.
Max opened his window and stuck his arms and head out. Then he walked back to Justin with a now what? expression on his face.
"Your whole body," Justin said.
Max looked at the window, terrified, and looked back at Justin. "Justin, that would be dangerous! I could fall!" Max said with concern of his own life. "Unless you use the 'Havity, no gravity' spell…"
"No, Max. We are just going to use the stairs," Justin said walking down the stairs with Max following him.
A/N: Thank you for reading this story. The more I write, the more I improve on my writing skill.
So... Max and Justin were the only characters in this chapter. They were the ones I wanted to improve more. Because in the older chapters, I made Justin too nerdy and Max too.. non-Max-like.
Question of the day: Should I write in 1st person switching POVs? (Examples: Chapters 4-9) Or in 3rd person? (Examples: Chapters 1, 2, 3, + 10)
Again, thank you for reading. I also enjoy reviews. Reviews make me love you more! Even the rude ones... I never get those. I WANT RUDE ONES! But only if you are truthfully being rude, not just because I told you to. I want to review how you usually review. But rude people, please rudely review if you have anything rude to say. Rudeness helps me! (Another word for rude reviews is 'suggestions'... So you can review with those too.)
Remember: REVIEW by telling me if you want me to write 1st person (changing POVs) or 3rd person! THANK YOU!
