[A/N] Hey guys this is SilverSaiyan44 back with the tenth chapter of Revenge of the Saiyans. Before we get started, I'd just like to thank all of you for supporting my story this much. I know I won't shut up about it, but I want you guys to know how much it means to me that you take time out of your day to read my story.
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Chapter 10 Taming the Beast
General Zarbon had just arrived at Frieza's flagship. Once he had docked, the Mutant warrior exited his ship, only to see a group of low-level soldiers saluting him. "General Zarbon sir!" they said in unison. "At ease," Zarbon replied as he walked past the grunts.
The general smirked as he entered the corridor leading to Frieza's chamber. "A proper welcome for a beautiful warrior such as myself," Zarbon thought to himself vainly.
Several minutes later, Zarbon arrived at the door to Frieza's chamber. The two guards stationed at the door quickly passed him through due to his rank and the fact that Frieza had been expecting him. As the entered the room, Zarbon saw the back of his master's floating chair. It appeared to be facing the viewport.
The Mutant general walked further into the room and kneeled. "Lord Frieza," he greeted. The hovering chair slowly rotated to face Zarbon. Once it was facing him, it began approaching the general slowly.
"Ah Zarbon, nice to have you by my side once again," the ruthless Arcosian said as his chair hovered closer to the Mutant.
"The formalities are not necessary Zarbon, you may rise," Frieza granted. The Mutant warrior took his master's advice and stood up, he noticed that Frieza was only a few feet away from him at this point.
"I assume you're eager to receive your new orders, correct?" Frieza asked. "Yes milord," the general answered politely. "Well you'll need to be debriefed first. As you may recall, I mentioned to you yesterday that we have a greater threat than Turles to deal with," the galactic tyrant began.
"Yes sir, I remember," the egotistic warrior answered. "Good. Now the threat in question may surprise you, it seems that Vegeta and the other two monkeys have decided to go rogue," Frieza explained.
A look of surprise sparked on Zarbon's face, "Really? What did they do?" he general inquired. "They started by completely wiping out all life on Frieza Planet No. 79, before going to the planet Driscalia (a planet they had attacked previously) and defeating all of my forces there," the tyrant explained, the annoyance obvious in his voice.
"If I may ask, where are they now?" Zarbon queried. "Their current whereabouts are unknown, but I sent Dodoria out to find them," Frieza responded.
"Would you like me to go as well sir?" the Mutant warrior asked, assuming those were his orders. "No Zarbon, your orders are for you and your men to remain here on my flagship to defend me in case an attempt is made on my life," the Arcosian explained.
The general was slightly taken aback by the order, "Understood sir," he replied obediently. "Good, now I've had quarters prepared for you, if you'll just follow Namole he'll lead you to them so you can settle," Frieza said, gesturing towards the henchman.
"Thank you Lord Frieza, you're most kind," Zarbon responded with a respectful bow before following Namole out the door.
"Just follow me sir. And don't worry, your belongings will be brought to your room within the hour," Namole said. Zarbon simply nodded in response as he was deep in thought regarding his meeting with Frieza.
"Why would Lord Frieza be fearing an attempt on his life now? Could it be the Saiyans he fears? I never thought those monkey-tailed barbarians would be this much of a problem for us," the general pondered to himself as he followed Namole down the narrow corridor.
As he walked, Zarbon continued thinking. "I suppose Lord Frieza's feelings regarding the Saiyans, will be revealed when Dodoria relays their location to us. Now all I can do is wait, and continue serving him to the best of my ability."
It was about midday when Vegeta returned to Capsule Corporation. He hadn't expected to come back so late, but after eating and conversing with his squad, the Saiyan prince decided to spend the night at the ship.
Vegeta walked into Capsule Corp's main building and decided to check on the lab. He walked into the laboratory and began walking towards Bulma's section to check on her progress.
As the flame-haired warrior walked through the lab and passed by several workers, one of said workers caught his eye.
It was a woman with long black hair, she seemed to be typing something into a small computer in front of her. As Vegeta got closer to her, he suddenly recognized her to be the girl from the Pilaf Gang.
During breakfast the previous day, Yamcha revealed the girl's name to be Mai. She was wearing a white lab coat rather than the grey trench coat she had on before. Similarly to his first meeting with her, something about Mai intrigued Vegeta but he couldn't understand what.
He studied her for a moment, trying to figure out what it was about her that he found so interesting.
Suddenly, Mai stopped typing on the computer and stood up. She turned to walk in the direction Vegeta had come from and noticed the Saiyan prince staring at her. Vegeta's look of curiosity quickly changed to embarrassment, then to anger.
"What are you looking at woman? Don't make me hurt you," he threatened. A feeling of terror came over Mai, "Y-Yes sir!" she squeaked as she hung her head in fear and ran away.
Vegeta snuck a glance at her fleeing form before shaking his head violently and walking away. Mai looked back at the flame-haired man, "He'd be pretty handsome if he didn't threaten to kill me every time I saw him," she thought to herself.
Vegeta walked over to Bulma's work station. He found the teal-haired woman atop a ladder welding into a large metal sphere with the Capsule Corp logo on it. "What are you working on?" the Saiyan asked.
Bulma stopped welding, removed her welding mask, and looked at Vegeta with an expression of annoyance. "Where the hell have you been?" she asked sternly.
The Prince of all Saiyans shrugged, "I got side-tracked and decided to spend the night at the ship," he answered casually. The heiress of Capsule Corp rolled her eyes before speaking to him again. "Oh yeah, this is the gravity chamber," she said, answering the prince's first question.
Vegeta's jaw dropped when he was told that this practically complete structure was the gravity chamber. Noticing his amazement, Bulma added "Don't get too excited, this is only the exterior. The gravity machine and the training room will take us at least another week or two to finish."
The royal warrior sighed heavily upon hearing this. "It can't take that long to make a damn gravity chamber when you have instructions on how to do it," he grumbled. Bulma heard this and became instantly furious, "Oh really!? Then why don't you do it yourself if it's so easy!" she shouted.
"Quit your yelling woman, where's Yamcha? I need to see him," Vegeta asked. The teal-haired scientist's mood seemed to lighten upon mention of her boyfriend. "He's outside training. Oh, and he's wearing his old outfit, it makes him look so manly," she gushed.
"Outfit?" Vegeta said in confusion. After a second of thought, he recalled the green bandit outfit that he'd suggested Yamcha should wear.
A smile lit the Saiyan prince's face as he remembered. "Well I'm going to go see him," Vegeta concluded as he walked towards the door to the outside. "Alright, see you," Bulma said nonchalantly as she got back to her welding.
Vegeta exited the lab into the outside. He walked around looking for the scar-faced man for a few minutes before hearing several grunts. The elite warrior followed the grunts until he found Yamcha attacking the air as if it were his enemy. Just like Bulma had said, the former bandit was wearing the green outfit that Vegeta had seen days prior.
The royal Saiyan noticed that Yamcha also had the sword that was locked away with the outfit secured in a sheath which was tied to his white belt.
Vegeta also noticed that the small blue cat known as Puar was cheering Yamcha on in the background, "Go Yamcha! You can beat anybody!" she cheered. The Saiyan prince walked up to the former bandit, "We need to talk," he said bluntly. Caught off guard by the surprise entrance, Yamcha took a second to respond.
"Well hello to you too," the long-haired martial artist greeted with a smile. "I'm disappointed in you," Vegeta stated angrily. "Why's that?" Yamcha inquired. "Because you haven't been teaching me any of your special techniques! Both Nappa and Raditz have learned the ki-sensing technique whatever that is, and Raditz learned the Afterimage which I could barely comprehend!" the elite warrior yelled.
A look of fear suddenly took over Yamcha's face. "S-Sure, I can teach you those techniques. I guess I need to start being a better training partner," he admitted. "Perfect, then we'll start right away," Vegeta announced eagerly. Suddenly, a loud grumbling sound came from Vegeta's stomach.
The royal Saiyan rubbed his stomach, "We'll start right away… after lunch," he clarified before marching back into the building. Yamcha and Puar laughed at the Saiyan's display of hunger as they followed him inside.
"It's s-still f-freezing!" Nappa exclaimed. "Yeah, n-no k-kidding," Krillin said. "Still cold hmm? I figured you would have gotten used to it by now," Tien added with a smirk.
The three bald warriors and Chiaotzu had been standing under a waterfall for two hours straight. Tien had claimed that though grueling at first, standing under the water for a long period of time helped increase endurance, tolerance and focus.
Eager to better themselves physically, Nappa and Krillin had stripped down to their briefs and stood under the waterfall as they were instructed. The triclops claimed that the aggravating feeling of the cold water on their bare skin would wear off after a while. However two hours later, this wasn't the case.
"I thought you said this was supposed to make us more tolerant, I've never been less tolerant of anything in my life!" Nappa cried. "Man, for an elite general of a warrior race, you sure do whine a lot," Tien quipped.
"I have to admit, I'd consider myself a pretty tough guy, but even I can't stand this," Krillin admitted.
"If you guys really want to chicken out then go right ahead. Just remember that Chiaotzu, the youngest one of us, can do this easily," the bald martial artist explained calmly. Nappa and Krillin glanced at Chiaotzu's innocent face.
The former general clenched his fists, "Screw it, I can handle it as long as you guys can," he stated confidently. "Me too!" Krillin shouted, the determination showing in his voice.
The four warriors continued standing under the waterfall for another half-hour. They had hoped to continue longer, but were interrupted by a voice yelling "Hey Tien!" followed by the sound of gunfire.
The sound broke all four of their concentrations. Krillin swallowed hard, "That's not who I think it is, is it?" he asked with despair.
At that moment, a woman walked out the back door of Tien and Chiaotzu's house. She was a beautiful woman with milky white skin, sharp angry eyes, and long blond hair. She wore a skimpy green tank top, yellow short-shorts with a red belt buckle, a red bow in her hair, red fingerless gloves, and red sneakers with yellow laces and green socks.
She wielded a miniature machine gun which Nappa assumed had been the source of the gunfire. "Yep, it's Launch," Krillin said fearfully. "What's her deal?" the bald Saiyan asked. "Why don't we go find out," Tien suggested as he exited the waterfall.
The four of them quickly dried themselves, put their clothes back on, and went to meet with Launch. They landed in front of her on the cliff. "Is there something you need Launch?" Tien inquired politely. "Yeah! Aren't you muscle-heads ever going to come eat something!?" the blond yelled.
It was at this moment that she noticed Nappa. "Who's this numbskull?" Launch asked bluntly. "Hey! Who are you calling numbskull!?" the former general responded angrily. "She's a very good judge of character," Ghost quipped. "Don't you start," Nappa ordered.
"Whatever, so you guys comin to eat or what? The food's probably cold by now!" she yelled.
Krillin shuddered slightly as he remembered how awful Launch's cooking was from when he was a child. The tough girl noticed this and shot him an annoyed glare, "Don't think I didn't notice you Krillin! I know what you're thinkin, but you'll be happy to know that I didn't cook this meal," she explained.
Launch then smirked deviously, "I have something better in mind," she said vaguely as she turned away and walked back into the house. Curious as to what she meant by that, the four warriors followed the blond into the house.
As they entered the dining area, the group of four was shocked at the sight before them. There was a feast of a meal before them, the tables were lined with delectable dishes, the lovely smell of the food wafted into the fighters' faces. Nappa could feel his mouth salivating at the sight.
The group then noticed that there were five chefs standing behind the tables with slight looks of fear on their faces. "So instead of wasting my time cooking up a meal that you scumbags will whine about, I decided to turn to these guys. Best in the business, right!?" she asked sternly as she stared daggers at the five cooks, causing them to nod in fear.
"How did you afford all this?" Tien queried, noticing the fancy silverware and the posh quality the food was in. Launch smirked at the question, "Well I recently made a rather large withdrawal from the bank," she replied mischievously.
The three-eyed martial artist rolled his eyes as he understood what she meant. He decided to save explaining the moral problems of robbery to her for later.
Tien took a long look at the food before turning towards the door, "I appreciate the gesture Launch, but we have a lot of training to do," he explained apologetically. Launch gritted her teeth, "Fine then, have a blast with your training," she grumbled as she turned away and crossed her arms.
Nappa suddenly stepped in Tien's way. "Listen, I understand the importance of our continuous training, but it wouldn't be too much of an issue if we took a short break," the elite warrior explained.
Tien considered the proposition momentarily. About a minute later he had made the decision, "Alright fine we can take a-" before the triclops could even finish his sentence, Nappa and Krillin had already pounced on the feast and began digging in.
Tien sighed to himself before he and Chiaotzu sat down and began eating as well. None of them noticed Launch smiling in the background. The blond-haired woman then noticed the cooks looking at her, "Whatcha lookin at! This aint no show!" she snapped as she pulled out her gun and began firing at the ground under the chefs' feet.
The five cooks panicked when they saw the machine gun and ran out the door as fast as they could. Tien chuckled at Launch's violent behavior while Chiaotzu looked at him with an expression of confusion. Meanwhile, Nappa and Krillin would occasionally let out a laugh between bites.
"Alright Gohan, now that we've eaten, let's see what that martial arts training did for you," Raditz stated. "Sure Uncle Raditz, I'm ready," the young half-Saiyan responded with determination.
The long-haired elite studied his young nephew as he approached. Gohan still had the innocent look that he had before, but he seemed more confident and strong. "There's no way that half a day of training changed the boy too much," Raditz thought to himself.
"Ok Gohan, since you don't have too much experience with fighting, I'll make it easy for you. If you can land a single hit on me before I knock you out, then you win. Agreed?" the Saiyan warrior asked. Gohan nodded, "Alright, that sounds fair," he responded. "Don't let your guard down Gohan. I may hold back slightly, but I won't hesitate to hurt you," Raditz cautioned.
The son of Chi chi nodded again, the smile still present on his face, "I understand," he said politely. "He shows no fear? This may prove to be more interesting than I originally thought," the elite Saiyan said within the confines of his mind.
Gohan stood several meters away from his uncle and got into his fighting stance. Raditz noticed that the stance mirrored that of Kakarot. "I see you taught him your fighting stance Kakarot," the long-haired warrior said to his younger brother who was watching from the side.
Goku chuckled, "I'm glad you noticed," he said. The savior of Earth then looked to his son, "Alright Gohan, remember what I taught you," he instructed. The young boy smiled at his father, "I will Dad," he stated.
With that, Raditz got into his own fighting stance. The two combatants stared each-other down silently, waiting for their opponent to make the first move.
Eventually, Gohan chose to make the first strike as he ran towards his uncle and pounced at him. Raditz was able to easily block the first punch his nephew threw, but had slightly more trouble with the sudden barrage of punches that followed it.
The first son of Bardock managed to repel his nephew's assault and countered with a hard punch to Gohan's face, sending him flying back. As soon as his nephew smashed into the ground, Raditz considered that he may have punched Gohan a little too hard.
However, just before the elite Saiyan ran over to see that he hadn't wounded Gohan, the young half-Saiyan quickly pushed himself off the ground, stood up, and wiped up the bit of blood on his mouth with the back of his hand.
Raditz noticed that the expression on Gohan's face was as if he hadn't even been fazed by the blow. "There's no way he's gotten that strong," the long-haired warrior thought in disbelief. He wished he could ask Spectre to scan the boy's power, but he'd made it a habit to train without his scouter to hone his ki-sensing ability.
The young fighter ran at his uncle once again. He jumped into the air and prepared to kick Raditz in the chest. To the boy's dismay, he flew right through his uncle and landed in a heap on the ground. "An Afterimage!" the boy thought to himself frantically, recalling what his father had told him about the Afterimage technique.
Gohan quickly turned around only to see his uncle flying at him with a kick of his own prepared. The son of Goku managed to throw up his arms to block the attack, but it proved futile as Raditz's kick smashed through Gohan's defenses.
The boy was knocked back and landed on the ground several feet away. As soon as Gohan got up, he noticed that his uncle's tail was waving around at his side behind him.
Seeing the opportunity, Gohan ran at his uncle and lunged at his tail, tackling it and holding it down. "Ha, got your tail!" he mocked. Raditz smirked slightly as his nephew fell for the trap.
The tail suddenly sprung to life in Gohan's hands, lifted him into the air, and threw him off of it at intense speeds. The young half-Saiyan flew through the air until he smashed into a tree and sprawled onto the ground.
Raditz once again watched his nephew to see how he would react. Similarly to before, Gohan got up and brushed himself off with seemingly little pain.
The elite Saiyan then rushed at his nephew. Gohan saw this and threw up his arms to block once again. However, rather than feeling his uncle hit his arms as he had before, Gohan heard something zoom past him and a cracking sound behind him.
The young half-Saiyan looked off to the side and saw Raditz standing there with a devious smirk. Gohan then heard another cracking sound, he turned to investigate and saw that the tree just behind him had half of its trunk destroyed from the bottom.
There was a loud snapping sound as the tree began to fall over. Gohan dived out of the way, narrowly dodging the falling tree.
The son of Goku quickly stood up and ran towards his uncle. He leaped and propelled himself off of the fallen tree, pulling his right arm back for a final attack. As soon as he was close enough, Gohan threw the right handed punch.
SMACK!
Gohan heard the sound and assumed his attack had been successful. He then looked at his fist and found it enclosed in his uncle's left hand. Thinking on his feet, Gohan threw a quick jab with his left hand, but Raditz easily caught that punch with his right hand.
With his arms crossed and restrained, Gohan could do nothing but stare at his uncle's emotionless expression. After a minute of struggling, Raditz head-butted his nephew hard, smashing him into the ground.
The elite Saiyan looked down at his nephew and observed him. He slowly pushed himself up as he'd done before, but what Raditz noticed this time, were the tears that stained the ground under his face.
"He's in pain, in fact, he's been in pain the whole time. Gohan has been holding back his emotions to hide his pain and fear, an impressive feat for a four year old boy," the long-haired warrior thought to himself.
Gohan steadily stood up and looked his uncle in the eyes. "I'm not… done yet," he mumbled. Raditz noticed that the boy's face was red and his nose was bleeding, he felt slightly bad for beating his young nephew in such a way.
"That's enough sparring for today Gohan," Raditz stated. The young boy was surprised to hear this, "But I thought you said that we would only stop when I was knocked out," he said. Raditz slowly shook his head, "No, I only said that to gauge your fear, which I now fully understand," he explained.
Gohan looked relieved to hear this, "Oh, okay. So are we going to start my Oozaru training now?" he asked weakly. The long-haired Saiyan was proud that his nephew had been listening when he talked about the Oozaru beast.
"We'll start that in a little while, for now I want you to go rest up," Raditz instructed. "Sure thing Uncle Raditz," Gohan said as he started walking towards the house. "Oh and Gohan," the elite warrior called, prompting the young fighter to turn around. "Do take care that your mother doesn't see you, we wouldn't want her to worry," Raditz explained.
"Right," Gohan replied with a weak nod before continuing his walk to the house. Once Gohan had left, Raditz approached his younger brother to talk.
"You trained him fairly well Kakarot," he complimented. "Thanks, but don't you think you went a bit far with that, Raditz?" Goku asked with a hint of anger in his voice. "Kakarot he's a Saiyan, maybe only half-Saiyan, but Saiyan none the less. I understand that he's your son, but you must look at it this way: the pain he goes through now, will help strengthen him as a warrior," Raditz declared.
The spiky-haired fighter sighed. "I guess you're right, I was just worried about him," Goku said. "I completely understand," the long-haired man responded. "So what's with that Oozaru training he was talking about?" the tailless Saiyan asked, trying to change the subject.
Raditz sighed in disappointment that his brother had failed to listen to him when he was explaining it to him the first time. "You'll see in due time brother," the elite Saiyan answered.
"For now we'll let Gohan get some rest, it's not dark enough for the Oozaru training right now anyways," Raditz said as he watched the setting sun. "Dark enough?" Goku said in confusion. "Like I said, you'll see in due time."
Several hours later, Raditz told Gohan and Goku that it was time for the Oozaru training. Both father and son followed Raditz via nimbus and flight.
"So where are we going?" Goku asked as he flew alongside his brother. "You'll see soon Kakarot," Raditz answered vaguely. They flew on for several minutes. "So how did you convince Chi chi to let Gohan stay out this late?" the gi-clad fighter queried.
"She said that since I've been so polite with her, she trusts me to watch Gohan," Raditz explained. "So she doesn't trust me then?" Goku asked slightly sadly. The long-haired warrior simply shrugged, "Apparently," he quipped.
They flew in silence until they arrived at their destination, a large, barren rocky area. They landed on a cliff where Raditz began to work on something.
He held a small device in his hand. Neither Gohan nor Goku could tell what it was from a distance. After about two minutes, Raditz walked up to Gohan and kneeled so they were at an equal eye level.
"Alright Gohan, it's time to start your Oozaru training," the long-haired Saiyan announced. The young boy smiled, "Great, what do you want me to do Uncle Raditz?" he asked eagerly. "Well first, I'd like you to put this in your ear," Raditz said as he handed his nephew the small device he'd been holding.
Now that he was seeing it up close, it was obvious to Gohan that the device was an earpiece. He placed the earpiece deep into his right ear.
"Good, now this next part may be a bit strange," the elite warrior cautioned. "I can handle it," the son of Goku said reassuringly. "Okay, well I need you to take off all of your clothes and go stand far off in that mountain area," Raditz instructed.
Gohan had a look of confusion and fear. "What?!" Both Gohan and Goku yelled together. "Listen, I know it's really weird, but it's important that you do this. I promise I won't look if that makes you more comfortable," Raditz offered. "Well… okay," the young half-Saiyan responded awkwardly.
Raditz turned away from his nephew, "Go ahead, I swear on my life that I won't look," the elite Saiyan said reassuringly. Gohan began to slowly take off his orange gi.
Two cringe-worthy minutes later, Gohan was fully nude. "I'm… ready," he said awkwardly. "Perfect, now I need you to run far away from here in the direction of those rocky mountains," Raditz instructed. "O-Okay," he replied as he walked over to the edge of the cliff.
The young half-Saiyan leaped from the cliff and ran as fast as he could away from it. "What kind of training is this exactly?" Goku asked skeptically. "Don't worry Kakarot, you'll see," Raditz said in same vague fashion as before.
Five minutes later, Raditz turned and saw that Gohan was a fair distance away. "All right Spectre, turn on the microphone," the elite Saiyan ordered. "Right," the AI replied as he activated it.
"Gohan, this is Raditz, do you hear me?" he asked. A few seconds later, Gohan responded, "I hear you Uncle Raditz," he said. "Good, you can stop running now," Raditz instructed.
"Is there anything else you want me to do Uncle Raditz?" the half-Saiyan asked. "Yes, one more thing. I need you to stare at the full moon," Raditz ordered. "The moon?" Gohan replied.
"Yes, stare at the moon for a while, you'll know when to stop," the first son of Bardock clarified. "Okay," Gohan responded.
"NO!" Goku shouted. He lunged at Raditz and tackled him to the ground. "I know what you're doing! I won't let you turn Gohan into a monster!" he yelled as he tried to hold his older brother down. Raditz managed to push Goku off of him and quickly got up.
He then placed his left foot on Goku's chest to keep him down. "Listen to me Kakarot! I understand that you've had bad experiences with the Oozaru transformation, but you mustn't relate your experiences with the boy! This is the purpose of this training, to train him to control the form so that he doesn't turn into a monster! Do you understand!?" he shouted.
After a few seconds, Goku stopped struggling. "I understand," he said softly. Suddenly, the two brothers were interrupted by a blood-curdling roar. Raditz took his foot off his brother's chest and looked over to where Gohan had been standing.
He saw exactly what he had expected to see, an enormous great ape with bushy brown fur, gleaming red eyes, and razor-sharp teeth.
"Well Spectre, your calculations were definitely accurate, there was a full moon tonight," Raditz quipped. Goku stood up, brushed himself off, and looked at the Oozaru. "Wow, so that's the ape monster I turned into as a baby?" Goku asked. "Indeed," the long-haired Saiyan replied.
"So how are we going to stop him?" Goku inquired. "Leave that to me, it's part of the training," Raditz explained.
The elite warrior then raced away to confront the great ape. He landed on a rocky pillar not too far away from it and prepared himself. "Alright Spectre it's time, activate the microphone and turn up the volume," Raditz ordered. "You got it," the AI said as he fulfilled his partner's request.
"Ready," Spectre reported. "Oozaru, this is Raditz! Listen to my voice!" he commanded. The great ape seemed scared of the loud voice in its ear as its eyes got wide and it began roaring uncontrollably.
"Listen to me beast!" Raditz yelled. The Oozaru placed its hands over its ears, trying to block out the voice. After a few minutes of the beast thrashing about, it noticed Raditz standing on the pillar.
The ape began slowly walking towards the pillar Raditz stood on. "You dare threaten me!?" the elite Saiyan shouted. The monster ignored him and kept stomping in Raditz's direction.
"Yield beast! On your knees, now!" he screamed. The ape seemed greatly disoriented by this, he smashed his arm into a nearby mountain out of rage, completely crumbling it.
"I SAID NOW!" the long-haired warrior shouted. This time, the monster was unable to defy. It placed its hands on its head as it sank to its knees. "Good. Now you monster, tell me your true identity! Say Gohan!" he ordered.
The beast placed its hands on the ground in front of it and looked at Raditz with pure hatred. "SPEAK NOW!" the elite Saiyan roared at the top of his lungs. The monster looked as if it were having an internal battle rather than external.
"Grrrr… groooo, gooohaaaa- RAWR!" the great ape roared. It had come close, but failed to finish the name and returned to its monstrous ways. The beast suddenly lifted its head up until it was on Raditz's level.
"Bwaaaar!" it growled as it fired a large yellow ball of energy from its mouth. Raditz quickly took off from the stone pillar, barely avoiding the energy attack.
"Looks like it's time to take this thing down," the Saiyan warrior thought to himself. As he flew, Raditz took care to avert his eyes from the moon to avoid taking on the transformation himself. He began charging energy into his right hand, causing it to glow purple.
"Take this monster! Saturday Crush!" the elite Saiyan shouted as he hurled the purple ball of energy at the beast. It collided with the Oozaru's head and exploded, causing him to yelp in pain.
Raditz then flew up to the monster's head and began pummeling it with a barrage of lightning-fast punches. The beast yelled out in pain. It tried to swat Raditz out of the air, but the long-haired warrior flew back to dodge before landing a hard kick on the Oozaru's forehead.
The monster placed its hands over its face in agony. Raditz circled around the beast and struck him on the side of the head. The Oozaru screamed in anguish.
The elite warrior circled around the ape a final time before charging at the back of its head and delivering a brutal double-kick to its neck. Raditz never broke off the kick, he simply kept pushing forwards, forcing the great ape to smash face-first into the ground.
CRASH!
The mighty Oozaru let out a final roar before losing consciousness. About a minute after the beast was knocked out, it began shrinking in size. The fur on its body also began to dissipate as it reverted. Eventually, the great beast had been reduced to a sleeping four year old with a monkey tail.
Raditz landed next to his nephew and picked him up. He took the earpiece out of the boy's ear and tucked it under his tail. The elite Saiyan then flew back to the cliff where his younger brother had been waiting.
"Wow, I never imagined that Gohan could turn into such a monster," Goku said as his older brother landed.
"It's a skill any Saiyan can perform, so long as they have their tail," Raditz explained. "So that's why you were so mad about me losing my tail," the tailless Saiyan said with a look of realization on his face. "Took you long enough to notice," Spectre jeered.
"Anyways, get Gohan's clothes on so we can go home," Raditz instructed. "Sure thing. So was todays training session a success?" Goku asked. The long-haired warrior shrugged, "Kind of, we learned today that Gohan's mind exists inside Oozaru. If I can manage to unlock Gohan's mind from inside the monster, then the form would be fully controllable and a useful asset against Frieza," Raditz explained.
"Do you think Gohan will be able to handle it? He's only a kid," the spiky haired warrior said. Raditz crossed his arms and stared out at the night sky (diverting his eyes from the full moon) "It will be hard, but I truly believe that Gohan can handle it. It won't be easy though, we have a lot of work to do. I only hope that we can complete said work before Frieza finds us."
[A/N] And that was the tenth chapter of Revenge of the Saiyans. I hope that the Oozaru thing at the end made up for the lack of action in this chapter. Also I hope you didn't find the whole Raditz telling Gohan to take his clothes off too… awkward. That was legitimately the only way I could think of Gohan turning into a great ape without ripping up his clothes. And before any of you make the "clothes beam" joke, that never made sense.
Anyways, let's get onto the review responses.
Review (Ch. 9): Looks good. It does feel a little weird that Pilaf and his gang went missing for a long time until GT and apparently weren't considered evil enough to have stayed in Hell after Buu destroyed the Earth. From what I read, it sounds like you're going to place Zarbon and Dodoria in the place of Vegeta and Nappa's original roles. Would be interesting. If Turles is going to appear, can you change his appearance or at least give his appearance more of an explanation than simply being of the same social class as Goku and Bardock? Like a clone? When I've been thinking of Turles lately in a reboot or whatever, I imagine him as the guy who worked with Bardock in the manga that introduced Gine. A former member of the team who left to form his own and died trying to change his planet's fate with his people under the leadership of Bardock and Vegeta's father. Also, after my last review, I looked up a trope called "Cut Lex Luthor a Check" which is pretty much the idea that certain villains can use their talents to make money from more honest work.
• In Dragon Ball Z, Dr. Gero was capable of building machines that have infinite fuel. Given the world's demand for fuel, he could easily become the richest man in the world with this technology. Plus being able to make androids capable of defeating Super Sayians, just imagine if he put that kind of technology into construction or space travel. Too bad he was only interested in getting revenge against Goku.
Kind of gives something to talk about if you decide to make an Android story, doesn't it? I'm not very good at picking favorites, so I'm probably not going to answer that question. Sorry.
-Mike
Response: I'm glad you approved of my introduction of the Pilaf gang. In terms of Turles, I sent a follower PM explaining him, so all of my regular readers will have to wait until Turles is introduced to hear his story. That thing with Gero is interesting, you'll have to wait and see what I have in store for him and some of the other later saga villains, it may surprise you. Anyways, have an awesome day. :)
Review (Ch. 9): Great job of illustrating the techniques Raditz and Nappa picked up. It would have been nice to see Nappa's expression when he discovered he faced more than one Raditz. LOL!
Answer to QOC-Chapter One. I liked the introduction of the AI's which are pretty unique for DBZ fanfics.
-Daughterofrisingson
Response: I'm glad you liked the Raditz/Nappa spar, it was really fun to write. Also, I'm happy you guys are enjoying the AIs, I came up with them last-minute when I was writing chapter 1 and the fact that you guys approve is great. Have a good one. ;)
Review (Ch. 9): Wow everyone is improving but Vegeta, of course he is having Yamcha as a partner. Nappa seems more intelligent than before which is good seeing he was an idiot in the anime. The chapter I liked the most would have to be chapter 2 because of all the action it had and how a low level saiyan can show his courage no matter who it is.
-Hawkman01
Response: Don't undermine Yamcha just yet, he may not be as disciplined of a martial artist as Tien or as passionate about fighting as Goku, but he's definitely a good fighter with a much deeper story to him than in the anime. Anyways, I'm happy you like that Nappa is smarter, and that was a very cool perspective on the atmosphere of chapter 2. Have an awesome day. :)
Review (Ch. 9): I remember saying before that I would post a review once I'm fully caught up. So now that I've read chapter 9, I can speak freely. I hope you don't mind that I number my subjects.
1. Absolutely LOVING the friendship you've written between our favorite three Saiyan Elites (it's pretty exhilarating calling Raditz an Elite, but more on that later)! I was disappointed to see that not many stories on this site even revolved around Vegeta, Nappa, and Raditz during their time in the PTO, much less gave those three a realistic relationship; but you pull it off SO wonderfully!
I mean, seriously;
Vegeta: "If we have to go through that-"
Nappa: "Every time we blast off-"
Raditz: "Then this is the worst ship ever."
Yes, I'm still on about that. I never would have thought to have those three finish each other's sentences; I feared it would have sounded too cliché. But you managed to pull it off and get me hooked on just three little sentences! Their friendship in this story is so dynamic; like normal friends, they bicker, they poke fun at each other, they undermine each other sometimes, they sit back and laugh about the silliest things, and they just hang out.
And like battle buddies, they have and watch each other's' backs, they never leave each other behind or in the dirt, never throw each other under the bus unless they absolutely had to, they have faith in each other, they look out for each other's' pride, and they fight side by side 'til the bitter end. Having Raditz save Vegeta's life like that was a pretty bold and risky move, but have Vegeta upgrade Raditz to Elite status was even bolder and riskier! Yet you once again made it work (maybe I missed something, but did they ever upgrade Raditz's armor to match his new Elite status?).
Vegeta, Nappa, and Raditz's Saiyan bond is what I wish I could've seen more of in DBZ; too bad Akira Toriyama is a jerk to all Saiyans. Seriously, if Vegeta cared so much about the pride of his race, why just leave Raditz in Hell simply because he failed? I understand killing Nappa (Nappa was paralyzed and couldn't fight, so killing him was a kindness), but even finding out the Namekian Dragon could grant three wishes, Vegeta still left Raditz and Nappa out of the picture; he didn't even give them a second thought (at least Nappa suggested they bring Raditz back to life). And you wanna know why? Because plot!
2. While we're on the topic of Raditz, I really like what you did with his personality; he's not too sadistic or too much of an unforgivable a**hole, but he's not too sincere or too much of a douche either. I personally DESPISED Raditz in DBZ because he was an uncaring jerk who blackmailed his own brother and was an unproud scumbag who hid behind a child.
But Raditz is your favorite character, so obviously you're gonna be more forgiving toward his sins. And I'm glad you didn't deck him out to be a total saint, either. Raditz still does whatever it takes to survive, good or bad, but he still looks out for his family and Saiyan race. In fact, I'm glad you gave ALL the characters a happy medium in this story!
2.5. Let me just say real shortly that I'm glad you didn't give the Saiyans a flat, plastic personality. I'm proud you wrote Vegeta (who is my favorite character, by the way) not too sincere but not too much of a cold-hearted bastard either. He indeed has a heart in the show and misses his father and his proud race, but hides in his dark humor and bloodlust. I'm also proud that you wrote Nappa out to be NOT a total numb-skulled brute yet still made him the brick-headed spastic that he is; and I'm proud you acknowledge the fact that he used to be a Saiyan General!
One thing about Nappa, though: he did used to be a general, so how does Tien outshine him in technique? If Nappa used to lead his own army, then shouldn't he be Mr. Technique?
3. Could you please give Krillin some more personality? Because, besides the moment he defended Goku and Gohan from Raditz, so far you've given Krillin about as much personality as a wet paper bag. I feel Krillin deserves a lot more screen time and personality than a lot of writers give him. Most people I've met see Krillin as nothing more than a coward who constantly let himself be punched and punted; but I see him as a humanistic edge to the show who may be afraid of most enemies, but is willing to set aside his fears and face the pain of getting punched around for the sake of his best friends and comrades.
And before anyone can say anything bad about Krillin, let me remind you all of THIS scene:
Krillin: You bastard; you killed my friends... (Lifting the sword high and aiming directly for Vegeta's neck) Now it's YOUR turn!
4. Speaking of a ruthless, bloody, murderpalooza, I'm loving the overall tone of this story! Not only are the Saiyans training the Z-Fighters as if they're their own brethren, but they also have an UNKNOWN time limit. They're trying to build their strength up as much as possible KNOWING that Frieza could very well appear on Earth at ANY time of the day.
Also, TOTALLY ADORING the sparring sessions; keep those bad boys up! Every time I read a sparring session in these chapters, the song The Victor's Dance for the DBZ Kai OST pops into my head and I read the whole chapter imagining that song in the background.
Anyone remember The Victor's Dance? It was playing on Dragon Ball Z Kai when the Z-Fighters (mainly Piccolo, Goku, and Gohan) were training for the Androids' arrival. Just look it up if you don't remember; you'll see what I mean!
5. Pertaining to the Question of the Chapter, I really can't pick just one. I'd have to say my favorites are the first three chapters (it's always three, isn't it...); where Raditz is defending is honor, and Vegeta defends Raditz, and they make their plans to destroy the communication towers and escape! Especially loving the character buildup there.
I guess that's really all I have to say; other than praising you on how gradually you're getting to Frieza's supposed entrance onto Earth (I'm glad it's happening slowly and steadily rather than an all-at-once "BOOM, I'm here; bow before me, monkeys!"), I guess all I have left to say is that I'm SO looking forward to the next chapter! Ciao for now.
-SaiyanEpicness
Response: Wow, I don't know what to say. This is probably one of the best reviews I've ever gotten. Well let me see if I can address a few of the things you said. I'm really glad that you like the friendship between the squad. The reason I did that was because I thought that that was missing from DBZ. After years of working together, it makes no logical sense that Vegeta would treat Raditz and Nappa the way he did.
In terms of Raditz's armor, as of right now, they haven't upgraded it because they don't have armor to replace it with, but there's a much deeper reason that I'll go into much later. In terms of Nappa's technique, he may be good at tactical procedures like troop management, but his fighting technique is fairly barbaric. So that's why Tien outshines Nappa technique-wise.
I'll definitely work on Krillin. He may seem meaningless right now, but you must remember that we're still early in the story, Krillin will get his moment though, don't you worry about that. Also, if you're a fan of the sparring sessions, then I hope you enjoyed Raditz and Gohan's spar, and the great ape battle at the end.
So thank you SaiyanEpicness for this amazing review, and I hope you have an amazing day. ;)
That's it for the review responses, now for the QotC (Question of the Chapter.) This is another question that will probably get used multiple times as the story progresses. Seeing as fight scenes have come up a lot lately, my question for you today is: As of chapter 10, what is your favorite fight scene in the story?
So be sure to let me know of your answer in your review if you leave one. And that's about it. Remember guys, feel free to ask me any non-spoiler question via PM or review, who knows? It may even get used in the next follower PM. Anyways guys, thank you so much for reading this chapter and I hope you enjoyed it. This is SilverSaiyan44 signing out.