Review from I don't like you

B to the oring... You should get an Award for not writing a sex-scene... I'm not gonna read your stupid & dirty stories anymore... Good luck with your 'fantastic' stories ;) Bye Horndog... I'm sure you'll have 100 kids later... P.s Why don't you start writing a PornBook ?

"Good luck with your 'fantastic' stories" makes you sound jealous. Actually, the whole review makes you sound jealous. And your review doesn't even make sence because the chapters I wrote for this story don't even contain sex. Oh, I'm sorry. You seem to get scared by the word sex. P.s. I don't like you either.

LOREN'S POV

I fall into his arms. He wraps them tight around me. He tucks my hair behind my ear and then moves his fingers back over my cheek to my neck. Then we hear the honk of a car and slowly let each other go. Eddie's still staring into my eyes. It felt so intimate.

While we wait for our ice cream I look at Eddie one more time. He looks back at me and has this weird look in his eyes.

He looks back at me and has this weird look in his eyes. He looks confused. I realise we're staring in each other's eyes again. How can just looking into Eddie's eyes feel so intimate? It's weird, I have never felt this with anyone. I force myself to look away. In a minute we get our ice cream and Eddie pays for us. We sit down on the terrace and just eat in silence.

Eddie: What just happened?

That's the question that has been flowing around in my mind since we walked away from the car. I can't tell Eddie what it meant to me because he did tell Chloe he and I are never happening. But why would he ask what happened if it didn't mean anything to him? It doesn't have to mean anything. I almost fell and Eddie caught me. But apparently it also meant something to Eddie.

Loren: I almost fell and you caught me.

Eddie: That was it?

Loren: Jup, what else?

Eddie: It just felt kind of intimate.

He felt it too. But what if he feels that way with every girl. I know I only feel it with Eddie but maybe he would feel the same if it was Chloe.

Loren: No... If it was Chloe instead of me...then you would have felt intimacy.

I looked down while saying that but now I look up and see Eddie's eyes staring into mine.

Eddie: No, I never feel that way with Chloe.

Then he averts his gaze by looking down. He looks like he regrets telling me that. We keep quiet after that. Partly because I don't really know what to say. When we finish our ice cream we get back into Eddie's car and drive home. This time Eddie doesn't open the door for me. Really, now he's afraid of being intimate with me? I walk inside and into my room. I sit there for about ten minutes when Damian walks in.

Loren (suprised): Damian?

Damian: Hey, Loren.

Loren: What are you doing here?

Damian (scratching his neck): Well you kinda disappeared on me during our date.

Loren: I'm sorry.

Damian: No, it's okay. I totally understand.

Loren: Why didn't you visit sooner?

Damian: I didn't really know if you would want me here considering we only went on one date. You lost your mother and my presence wouldn't make that better.

Loren: Well, I'm glad you're here now. How did you know I was here?

Actually, I don't know if I'm glad he's here. Part of me is but the other part is still thinking about that intimate moment with Eddie. Damian being here just makes things ten times more difficult. I just had a moment with Eddie and now Damian's here.

Damian: You and Eddie seemed really close so I figured. Besides, I asked a few of your friends. How are you doing?

He walks over to me and sits down next to me on the bed.

Loren: I just miss her so much you know. At first it was so hard to believe, it still feels so surreal. It was like my dad all over again but ten times worse.

Damian: What happened to your dad?

Loren: He died when I was twelve.

Damian: That's rough, I'm sorry.

Tears start rolling down my cheeks. I try to hold them in but don't succeed. I just hope this doesn't scare Damian off.

Loren (sobbing): I'm sorry.

He quickly sits closer to me and pulls me into a hug.

Damian (soothing): Hey, it's okay. I don't mind.

I pull back a little and look into his eyes. It doesn't feel the same as with Eddie. I feel nothing, maybe a little passion but that's burried in my pain. I move my head closer and press my lips against his. We start with slowly moving our lips and I can feel he's holding back because of my lost. But that's the thing, I don't want him to hold back. I push my tongue into his mouth to heat things up and it works. The kiss becomes wilder and he places his hands on my ass, pulling me closer. I part my legs and place them each on a side of Damian's body. I bend my knees and place my feet on the bed. Damian pushes my tongue back in my mouth and follows with his own tongue. Now he's the one exploring. I can feel him place one of his hands on my breast. I open my eyes for just a second because it feels like someone's staring at us. I was right, from the corner of my eye I can see Eddie standing in the door opening.

EDDIE'S POV

I brought Loren home and she immediately disappeared into her room. I decided to give her some space and after that I went to check up on her. It turns out she doesn't need me to check up on her though or maybe she does because it seems like Damian's tongue is stuck in her throat. Suddenly there's this sting in my heart. The longer I look at them, the more painful it becomes. Does it hurt me to see Loren making out with someone else? I guess it does a little. That moment we had next to my car, I felt something. Something I've never felt with anyone else. I've felt it a few times but all those times were with Loren. Like that time I asked her to help me make Chloe jealous. The feeling was stronger that time but maybe it was because we actually were intimate. Then there was that time I put my hand on her cheek and looked into her eyes after that dude from the party harassed her. And then this morning when she kissed me. That are just a few examples. There are so much more in all the time I've known Loren. I never thought they meant something. Then I see Loren opening her eyes and I know she saw me. It would be creepy to keep staring so...

Eddie: Damian, what are you doing here? I didn't even know you were here.

That makes them pull back. Loren crawls of his lap but keeps sitting next to him.

Damian: I just wanted to be here for Loren.

Eddie: By sticking your tongue in her throat?

Damian (to Loren while standing up): Maybe I should go.

Eddie (stern): Maybe you should.

Loren: Damian, you don't have to.

Damian looks at me and the only thing he sees is me glaring at him.

Damian: I had to go anyway.

Loren pecks his lips and then Damian leaves. I look at him leaving and when I turn around I see Loren glaring at me while standing up from the bed.

Loren: What the hell was that?!

Eddie: He really thinks he can come here while you are grieving and just stick his tongue into your throat.

Loren: Well actually I stuck MY tongue in HIS throat!

Eddie (getting angry): Why the hell would you do that?! You just lost your mother!

Loren (also getting angry): You're the one telling me to do fun things!

Eddie (angry): Sticking your tongue in that jerk throat is NOT fun!

Loren (angry): You don't decide that for me! I can make my own decisions!

Eddie (angry): Well, you just proved that you can't!

Loren (angry): Damian is a nice guy!

Eddie: Oh, please, he just acts that way. All he really wants is to get into your pants.

Loren (angry): HOW WOULD YOU KNOW?!

Eddie: I know his type.

Loren (really angry): HIS TYPE?!

Eddie: Yeah, acting like he's innocent until he got you to have sex with him and then dump you as soon as he's done with you.

Loren (really angry): You don't know anything about him! Why are you acting this way?! Why can't you just let me make my own decisions?! I never EVER told you you couldn't date Chloe and let's face it SHE'S A BITCH!

Eddie: Don't talk about my girlfriend that way!

Loren (furious): OH MY GOD! I CAN'T TALK BAD ABOUT YOUR GIRLFRIEND BUT YOU CAN TALK BAD ABOUT MY BOYFRIEND?!

Eddie (angry): He's your BOYFRIEND?!

Loren (furious): YES AND I DON'T GIVE A SHIT ABOUT YOUR OPINION!

Eddie (angry): Well, I'm gonna give it to you anyway.

Loren (furious): GET OUT OF MY ROOM!

Eddie: I thought it wasn't your room?

Loren (furious): GET OUT!

Loren walks closer to me and then my mom walks in.

Katy: What's going on in here? I think the neigbours can hear you guys scream.

Loren (angry): What's going on is that your son should mind his own fucking buisness.

And then she slaps me on the cheek. She slaps me so hard that my head turns to the side. I open my mouth and move my jaw from side to side to make it loose. Then I rub my hand over my cheek. That really hurt. I had no idea Loren was that strong. How did we get from that moment in front of the ice cream shop to Loren slapping me?

Loren (angry): GET OUT OF MY ROOM!

I'm deciding weather to leave or not. My mom doesn't, she walks out of the room as fast as she can. If I leave Loren will still be mad at me. If I stay Loren will hurt me...badly. I decide to stay and stand there with a satisfied smirk.

Loren (angry): I mean it Eddie, GET THE HELL OUT OF HERE!

I don't so Loren immediately tries to slap me again but I catch her arm and pull her close against my body. There it is again, that feeling. We're staring into each other's eyes and I can feel my heart beat fasten. I can hear Loren breath havily. She licks her dry lips and that makes me want to lick them FOR her. I try to swallow but it's like all the tension from this situation is stuck in my throat. My hand tingles from touching Loren's arm. The longer we stay this way the stronger the passionate feeling I have gets. Then suddenly Loren kicks me in my balls making me let go of her. In my weak state she pushes me out of her room and closes the door. That doesn't mean I don't believe she felt the passionate feeling too though. Why is it that I don't get this feeling with Chloe? Do I love Chloe? Three questions... Can I live without her? I guess that...after a while I will get used to it. It's not like my life sucks without Chloe in it. Do you accept her flaws? The fact that she's a bad kisser? Maybe I can bare it I mean I've managed to bare it until now. But thinking about getting those disgusting kisses for the rest of my life makes me sick. Just like the thought of having sex with her. The fact that Chloe always wants me to buy her clothes? I guess I can accept that until all my money is gone. Do you ever get sick of spending time with her? Truth to be told, yes. Sometimes I've had enough of her voice, of her face, of her everything. I guess when I love her I'll learn to see past all those things. So, that's it. I'm not in love with her (yet)? In the mean time my balls fucking hurt. I walk downstairs for as far I can manage. My mom's in the kitchen so I walk over there and ask for a bag of ice. She gives it to me and I put it on my balls sitting down.

Katy: Eddie, what on earth is going on with you and Loren? You seem to get bruised a lot since Loren moved in.

Eddie: She was just really...angry at me. Can I have another bag of ice for my cheek?

My mom chuckles a little bit and then fixes me another bag of ice which I immediately put on my cheek.

Katy: What did you do?

Eddie: I caught her making out with Damian and I kind of made him go away.

Katy: Then what?

Eddie: Loren and I got into a fight and I made it clear that I don't approve of the guy.

Katy: Let me guess, you didn't really tell it in a subtle way?

Eddie (sighs): I guess not...at least that's what the bruises tell me.

Katy: So, what's the real reason you don't want Loren to date Damian?

Katy seems to know Eddie's feelings better than he does himself huh? Will she get him to tell what he really feels?