Author's note: I know that I don't usually post my notes at the top, but recently, I received this
'Sorry to tell you this, but your story is quite disjointed and inarticulate
and please, use a Beta to proofread your work!
Some sentences are very hard to understand...
That's pity because the plot was somehow interesting.
And apart Draco's self-pity, you don't describe enough people's inner
emotions, such as Harry's for instance.'
Now…I'm not sure if that was constructive critizismn, but some parts of it were very rude. From my knowledge, this person disliked my story, on top of that they didn't read the whole thing. If they would actually read the whole story, they'd see character emotion. 'That's pity because the plot was somehow interesting'? That is rude, and it angers me that they don't bother to read the whole story. On top of that…I'm a beta. Please, don't leave rudeness in your comments, if you're planning to critique, actually read the story. Remember, I own not what J.K. Rowling owns.
His mother, wasn't a happy site to see at all. Her veiled face shows her anguish along with her black garment. Draco sighs as he gets off of the train and walks towards Narcissa who pulls him into a longing embrace.
"I've missed you so much…" She trails off, rubbing his back. Draco doesn't know how to reply so he steps back and gives her a weak smile. "You look just like him…" She starts again, cupping her sons face. He feared this would happen; he didn't want her to be reminded of Lucius. Ever since he'd gotten out of Azkaban, he'd been terribly ill and they all knew it was only a matter of time until he passed away, but he didn't want to admit it.
Both the Malfoy's left the port leaving both Pansy and Blaise astonished by how fast they'd left. The Golden Trio exits the train only to find that Draco's left. Both Ron and Hermione show small signs of distress as Ginny begins to go off joking about him…something Pansy hears.
She already half way there when the first insult comes from Ginny's mouth as Blaise attempts to stop her.
"What was that Weasley?" Pansy asks, crossing her arms staring her straight in the eye. "Oh leave us be Parkinson, can you tell when you're not wanted?"
"I'm free to indulge in the conversation when it involves my friend; you'd better watch your mouth Weasley because two faced Potter won't always be there to protect you." With that Pansy turns around causing a breeze while her hair flips.
She catches up to Blaise and the two begin walking leaving the Golden Trio standing there. Unnoticed by them all, Astoria Greengrass sits on a bench looking at the two walk away.
"Draco Malfoy…" She starts tapping her lips turning her attention toward the golden trio.
"I think I'm going to go inside of the station and get something to drink, stay here." Ginny says as she breaks from Harry who only nods.
Astoria rises, following Ginny into the station making sure that she is not seen. As soon as Ginny is situated, she feels a tap on her shoulder from Astoria.
She looks down at the smirking Greengrass placing her drink on a nearby table. "Astoria….from Raven Claw, what can I do for you?"
Astoria giggles a bit smiling at the older girl. "You and Harry make such a cute couple!" She starts as Ginny's face lights up. "Thanks, we get that a lot."
"Well, recently…I've seen Malfoy trying to…pull one on him lately, and he's made Harry swear not to tell or else he'd curse him."
Ginny's face glows with anger. "Wants I get my hands on the prick of a wizard! Thank you Astoria, it's time we put Malfoy in his place."
Three days into the Holiday break and St. Michael's was already back in business with a few changes. Both Hermione, Ron, Neville and Luna decided to work there after Helena's persuasion. Of course, the relationship was taking time to grow between everyone else (excluding Helena) and the two Slytherin's, but things worked out okay…of course, Daphne was fired before a second's glance and no one had problems doing so.
The only problem they all faced was the distance between the shop and their homes, which were very far away. Narcissa had invited them to stay in her manor during the Holiday's and gladly they accepted.
Both Harry and Ginny sit on a park bench, watching as snow falls and as children run by. Ginny lays her small head on her lovers shoulder, smiling as a snowflake lands on her nose.
"Harry…" She says, trailing off causing him to look down. "Yes, Ginny." He replies.
"Recently I've heard that Malfoy has been harassing you...is this true?"
Harry feels his heart stop for that instant. First of all, who told her, and second of all it was the other way around. He looks at Ginny with a shocked expression quickly shaking his head.
"No Ginny, that's a lie...he'd never..."
"Never what? We can't trust him! I know he's threatened you Harry and you just need to be truthful." Ginny replies, grabbing on to his hand.
"No, Ginny that's a lie..who ever started it_"
"It's time we get Malfoy out of Hogwarts once and for all! When the year starts."
Night falls, and Draco finds himself playing his father's old piano.
"It's a shame you can't play it with me..." Draco says to himself as he continues to play. He had to face it, his father wasn't coming back, no matter how much he wished for it.
His friends were making the whole ordeal easier for him, but it still didn't fill the holes in his soul.
His mother had put on a smile in public, but alone would mourn Lucius. They were all there to help her, and as time progressed, Hermione clarified that they were all in someway a family and they had to be there for each other, no matter what.
So there sits Draco, humming as he presses keys on the piano making some type of melody, then the thought ponders.
Lucius has spoken of a man being in the house as he died, a man that was bright and radiant...who was it. Draco wasn't ready to go looking right away but he'd investigate sooner or later, but for now...he was having enough fun and excitement.
St. Michael's is as busy as always, and by busy that means the only customers are the employees.
"Perhaps we should hang up fliers." Luna says to lighten the situation.
"It's been like this as long as I can remember, we tried fliers on year...it didn't work." Pansy says sitting on the front desk.
"Maybe you should advertise around the school?" Hermione suggest.
"That's a good idea, but do you think people would notice?" Pansy asks.
"I would." Neville says as he dusts the tall shelves.
"Well," Draco starts walking in. "There are many ways to get business."
"And how do you expect do get any customers without publicity?"
At that moment, the door flies open causing them all to stare.
A young girl wearing a read sweater and beige pants with black sneakers walks in. Her hair is black with blue shades. Here eyes are blue as well, and her face is pale.
"I...is this Sa..Saint Michael's?" She asks frightened.
"Uh...yeah." Ron says giggling receiving and evil glare from Hermione.
"I...I need a new wand, mine was broken." She starts shivering a bit.
"You need help looking for one?" Draco asks.
"Yes please!"
The two find themselves running through the store isles looking for the right wand for the girl, later known as Isabella.
"Maybe...I j...just don't n...need...a wand." Isabel says hiding behind her bangs.
"It takes time for a wand to adjust, trust me. Now, why don't you bring your parents tomorrow and we can all look for a wand." Draco suggest patting her back.
"Uh...s...sure!" With that she vanishes, leaving the shop.
"Wait...she dropped a card." Neville says running over to the place where she'd lost it.
"Perhaps it's her identification." Hermione suggest, walking toward Neville and taking the card.
Hermione stares at it shocked as she begins to read the card out loud.
"Isabella Roxanne Snape!"
Draco had been elected to look for the girl and he'd figure the only reason behind this was because everyone else was to lazy to do so.
He'd apperated far off so he wasn't really sure where he was.
He walks in a shopping district holding the card in his hand feeling even more stupid than he already was.
While he doesn't pay attention, someone bumps into him, not hard enough to knock him over, but pretty hard.
Draco looks down to see none other than Astoria Greengrass.
Of course, he grunts and walks the other way but she runs in front of him snatching the card.
"Give it here Greengrass!" Draco commands.
"Or what...hm..tell me you love me and I'll give it back."
Draco rolls his eyes and snatches it from her.
"I told Ginny on you Draco, you're gonna get in a lot of trouble." Astoria says as he walks away.
"And what did you tell her?" Draco jokingly says.
"That you were hurting Harry."
Draco stops for a while, feeling anger run through his blood.
"Lies, Greengrass." He says about to apperate.
"You're in trouble Draco, I hope you know that." Astoria replies laughing a bit.
Yes, I'm an Astoria basher. I know Pansy not all that great, but she should've gotten with Draco rather than Astoria.