Wings of Freedom

by LetMeBeThyAngel

Inari is the sister Isabel kept hidden to protect her. When Isabel is taken away, Inari is left alone. She vows to rejoin her sister so she becomes a cadet, only to find she's dead. Her heart turns cold. But then a fellow bitter soldier shatters her resolve. When she meets Levi, will he warm her heart and vice versa? Or will his dark secrets only sink her further into darkness.

10. PLEASE READ Author's Note 2

PLEASE READ! I Want Your Opinion!

So I've recently received a review regarding my sentence structures and my use of multiple tenses. I was told, by the reviewer, to keep my writing to all one tense, either present, past, or future. As a writer, I value critique, but if I were to stick to only one tense, the story would sound choppy and I wouldn't be able to hit on some key points. For instance, if I strictly use present tense, how am I supposed to delve up the past, allowing readers insight into a character's past that proves crucial to the plot development? Like if I strictly wrote in present tense, I wouldn't have been able to write about Inari's mother's past with her pregnancy because it happened in the past. Also, using multiple tenses in a single sentence is sometimes better than the traditional one tense structure. It allows better flow/sound to the sentence.

So for all of you grammar Nazis out there (I admit I am one too), I know what I'm doing. I believe I am a skilled writer (since I have been told that by all my mentors and professors), even though I'm only human and make mistakes sometimes. The point is is that as any other writer would do, I will use all the tools available to me (including the use of multiple tenses) in order to create a driven, pleasing, enticing, grammatically correct story. Now readers, would you prefer a bland, choppy, "grammatically correct" story with one tense throughout the whole thing? Or would you prefer a developmental, flowing, grammatically correct, pleasing story that uses multiple tenses?