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'When your team won, where did you hide the flag?' A dauntless-born girl asks four. 'I'm not going to tell you that, marlene' four returns rough. This "marlene" laughs flirty to four but especially he doesn't like it. I laugh a bit and i see Tris does the same.
We just jumped out of the train and are now searching for a place to hide the flag. I totally don't know where we are so i decide to say nothing.
'Navy pier!' yells a really hot guy. 'My brother was in the team that won. They hide it in the carousel.' Than we'll go there i think.. Just before i want to say that will says it: 'then we'll go there' the last days i talked much with will and he's really nice. We've got the same interests and we laugh a lot. In candor there weren't boys i was able to laugh so much with and we feel each other perfectly...
'Chris' will says. Apparently everybody walks and i stared and didn't walk. It's night so i can't see good but in the distance i can see some buildings. I recognise these buildings but i don't know what they are.
We walking eastwards, away from the buildings. Than i know what they are.
'He will' i say while punching against his shoulder ''aren't we near the erudite headquarters?' 'Yes a bit southerly' than i see his look becomes a bit straighter. Apparently i'm not the only one missing home.
After a few minutes walking in silence "marlene" takes her flashlight. Finally i can see something but than "hot guy" has to be sturdy 'Are you afraid for darkness, Mar?' 'If you want to step in glass..' But she expand her flashlight. Nooo. Why do these stupid dauntless (including me) always have to make everything harder.
Than we can see a huge wheel. It's white and there are around 20 red carts hanging on it 'you'd imagine, people sat in that. For fún!' Will says. I laugh.
'Than you'd be dauntless' tris says. She of course never did something to make fun. In candor we hadn't things like this but we laughed at least. So i think this is a bit a sad version of a wheel, a Dauntless wheel wouldn't have carts. You should just hang at it and hope you'll survive. I smile. I see tris and will looking at me. Apparently i said the last aloud.
Tris's soon focused at something else but will still stares at me. Why would he? I start talking to him hoping he'd stop starring: 'i bet you don't dare to jump in the swamp.' 'You first' we both laugh. Than we arrive by the carousel.
'In ten minutes the other team chooses their location. I suggest you'll use this time to make a tactic.' Four says. Than he gives Will the flag and goes yo the carrousel.
Will starts talking about his tactic but "marlene" interrupts him. 'Who had give you the leading?' She says.
BITCH.
'Nobody, but somebody has to do it' go on will. You're better than this bitch. I see "marlene" wants to punch will so i decide to stop them. By talking. I just say a tactic i don't agree with about wait for them like cowards but at least "marlene" don't punch will. We all start arguing. I agree with will's tactic but everybody says something different.
A few minutes later i hear a gun chatter. I look in the direction of the sound and see tris running away. Okay.. What's she doing. Than i see she's running to the wheel. Does she really want to climb in it? I start walking to her but Four stops me. 'You'd better stay here, i'll look what she's doing.' 'I can take care of myself' i say a little too mad. 'Trust me' okay. I don't like this but okay. i walk back to the team.
"Marlene" apparently isn't really happy i left so she start yelling at me how stupid i am and why i "scared Four away" 'So you all don't do anything so if you want action come with me' she says finally. Than she walks away. 'We should stay together.' An older girl says. i think she helps training the dauntless-born so the half of our team walks with marlene (the ones who want to shoot without tactic). Than will touches my shoulder. 'Chris, let shoot something'
if there's one thing i don't want to do right now is go with a bitch that just yelled at me 'sorry will but i stay here' 'okay, but you'll regret it' than he walks away. Luckily drew also leaves. We still are with 6 people. The older girl that introduces herself as Lauren, the boy Uriah. 3 other dauntless-borns i don't know and (of course) Me.
I talk with Lauren and Uriah. Our conversation isn't really interesting but it's funny. They came to me because they respected it that i stayed as only transfer. Uriah asks me about my fighting skills and i tell they aren't really good. Than he shows me a fighting skills but he accidentally he hits his arm and falls, by little balance. We both laugh.
Than unexpected the wheel starts turning. 'What's going on?!' I yell, still half laughing cause uriah's arm becomes blue/purple. 'Maybe the other team is near and we didn't even hide the flag.' I hear but i don't know who said it
After a few minutes i hear a voice from behind me 'Where is everybody?' I almost jump out of fear. I turn around and see it's four. And tris. Smiling. 'You let the wheel rotate?' Lauren asks 'are you become crazy?'
Tris stays next to four like she's the world but she doesn't even dare to talk. 'It doesn't matter, we know where they are' And they know where we are. Oh and now he and tris are amazing
'We?' I say with a bit spot. If i didn't follow her or he didn't stop me I would stay there but now they are amazing.
'Yes while you were doing.. Nothing tris climbed in the wheel to find the other team.' O now tris is amazing and we weren't! I wanted it but he forbidden me and now he says i didn't do anything. Really hasn't he feelings?
'And how will it continue?' Uriah asks. Four looks to tris and she starts telling a tactic. It's really smart. I bet four just told her this and she must say like she's genius.
In the tactic we separate us in 2 teams. One as bait and one as searchers for the flag. Of course tris goes in the finding flag team. Really i love her but she shouldn't act like she is amazing. So i also want in the finding flag team. With uriah.
I start running because i want to be near the flag before tris is. one problem: she's faster. This is the first time we really run and she's fast!
After a long run i see the flag but tris also does. The flag hangs in a huge tree so tris is to small for it. Haha. I decide to not push her away and ask it (kind of) nice. 'Come on tris, you already proved yourself. Please let me take it.' Than i take the flag and start yelling. We won. Everybody runs towards me and start yelling and congratulate me.
I like dauntless like this.
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Hi! Here is part 11 :-) soo did you liked it?
I just want to thank you and i really like that people all around the world read it. So thank you if you're from:
Spain, (i'm going to spain in the summer :) )
United Arab emirates, (omg i really want to go here once)
Germany, (our nightbours :-) even if i don't like your language. Deutsch ist nicht geil, glaube ich)
Barbados, (i never heard of this before fanfiction but i watched pictures of it and it's beautiful!)
Singapore, (i like china)
Hong Kong, (i really want to go there! And i like the food :p )
Ireland, (i like green and gold and orange and rainbows and dwarfs)
United Kingdom, (londen (not the only city but the one i was last)is just amazing. I really liked it when i was there: big ben etc. )
Canada, ( i like the falls there and it was amazing when i was there :-] )
United States, (this country is simpely amazing everyrhing there 3 i can write a complete story about how amazing it is but everybody just know it is)
France, (je ne parle pas trop bien mais français est bon. J'aime ça paroles. Et marie le pen est stupide)
Brazil, (haha i'm still proud we beat you with football at the WK in 2010. Do you remember :-) )
Finland, (i like saunas and your hear colour is gorgeous)
Australia, (i like kangaroos and desert and once i'll go to australia :) )
Philippines, (there is simply amazing and not a bit but a lot. i've never been there but i just really like it)
Norway, (i like trolls :) they are amazing and cool :) like your country. I only was 5 when i visited norway so i don't really remember but i liked it)
Belgium ( (als jullie franse belgen zijn hebben jullie peg) belgen zijn gewoon geweldig en hebben het beste accent van de wereld en 'alle en gij zijn de coolste woorden ever)
or of course The Netherlands (ajax kampioen tralalalala)
(Omg north-America, south-America, Europe, Asia, Australia) (i only miss Africa!)
And thank you for your reactions. Can you please give me some tips about grammar cause i want to improve it. Like if i make lots of mistakes with adverbs or tenses etc.
I love you all and thanx!