I got this review and it just hurt my feelings... didn't I tell you guys that I am 13... I actually just turned 13 last june and please keep in mind that I am only a 1st year high school student.
Do I have to tell everyone that i really, really don't want to recieve flares? As far as that person is concerned, he just ruined my 'desire' to finish this story. I mean, some of you told me that there are some grammatical errors but they managed to tell it to me nicely, didn't they?
You know, I never really cry over these kinds of things but this review is way past the line! If he thinks that he should just criticize every errors that I have commited, then who the hell does he think he is? Just because he is a good author or just fluent in english means that he can pick on me, right? But then, just by reading this it made me cry...
If my brother was the one who gave me this review then I guess it would be okay for me. But then, he isn't. I don't even know this guy. It was just a very rude thing to say!
Let me ask you this question, my beloved readers:
WOULD YOU DO THAT TO A THIRTEEN YEAR OLD AND A FIRST TIME AUTHOR???
You can answer that question by reviewing to this post. Thanks! If I happened to offend you, I'M SO SORRY...
From: jess )
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I read the first paragraph. With it came multiple grammatical errors, I
think
about five, one such example would be 'Draco found himself at platform
9 and
3/4 on a cold September breeze'. It should be Draco found himself on
platform
nine and three quarters, along with a cold September breeze. Numbers
0-20, in
literature, are written in words. 21+ are written in numerical form.
Also, how
can someone be 'on a cool September breeze'? Are we supposed to find
ourselves
on elemnts of the weather? Am I meant to find myself on the rain as it
pours
buckets and bathtubs around me? Or maybe I am meant to be on the warm
rays of
sunlight as I relax at the beach? Or maybe, just maybe, I am meant to
find
myself among and on top of the precipitation in the early hours of the
morning, when I come home stumbling through the door after a night out?
Basically, you should proof read, or have someone capable of speaking
the
english language do it for you. I don't think I will continue with your
story,
though I'll recommend it to preschoolers, who wouldn't know the
difference
between themselves and the weather they're meant to be on.