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AUTHOR'S NOTE


In this segment, I'll be explaining some of the themes, behind the scenes information and my thoughts of the fanfic and in extension the series Star vs the Forces of Evil. I will also be highlighting my faithful readers who managed to review my fanfic and answer the burning questions they had.

I am the type of author who 'writes' rather than 'tell' however I've come to the realization if I done the former it would drag the story so long it would be read by our grandchildren. So the latter then, to save time and address key points of my fanfic.

1. Marco is the focal point.

Easy enough, but it was so much harder than that, because some of Marco's key traits and features are made by other characters like his 'Safe Kid' persona interjected by people around him. This fanfic has him come out on his own after he realizes the mistake of coming to Mewni and seeing how things drastically change with him being there or not. It could be seen too if Marco didn't decide to go to Mewni for the rebellion would things just play out like normal? Obviously, Star has beyond normal strength she could have freed herself, etc but for me, Marco felt shoved into the conflict so he could get an ego boost and fuck shit up later.

Hence why Star isn't so present in this fanfic: she's not the point. But she does come later in the sequel so yay I get to write about it. Not. You can already tell I'm not looking forward to it. When I write something, I tend to put myself into their shoes and sometimes the shoe is so wrong and wretched, it's unclean.

That aside, Marco is going to change drastically again in the sequel, but I will take to heart what makes him…him. Marco for me isn't a vengeful man, so he doesn't hold on to his hate as proven with Tom, so no he won't be an 'Avenger' because of Star spurring his affections or vying for it, he learned his lesson a thousand times over.

This is about his trials and tribulations and learning who he is as a person and what it means to be himself. Self discovery and all that bull.

2. Marco's teachers.

Like Star who has her mother and characters forcing her to change [i.e. Tom and that old lady monster watcher], Marco had two OCs to teach him how to cope in Mewni, he is in a world where his Earth smarts and way of thinking doesn't exactly mesh right. He learns how to be a knight of old and have some sort of control there. Basically if I did not write Oblivion and Buttercup, Marco would be just end up wandering around Mewni and decides to just leave on an adventure without telling Star.

Not to be seen until 2 years later.

Yeah, that idea became the sequel.

The idea of Oblivion came from him finding an old diary and later finding his sword and reading about his past deeds and attempts to live up to them. He would visit historical sites and find more and more clues about the Pendragon and eventually be up to par with the legend. He was drafted to be just to be that, Buttercup was suppose to be his only living teacher.

[The title of the fanfic actually was named after Oblivion at first; him being dead already then also Dark Knight, but then included Marco when he became one too, seeing as a Dark Knight isn't a good thing in Mewni]

As for Buttercup, I thought it would be ironic if Marco was trained by the very foe he despised. It would also give him better insight about the monster's history and predicaments in Mewni and how he would be a better influence. I thought of a rebellion buuut I thought of a better conflict, something no one can ignore.

3. The Blood Moon Ball.

Gosh, how can the most loved thing for Starco shippers be the one thing I hate. It is an absolute. That's what it is. An absolute. Marco and Star destined to be together. OH COME ON. Now all the character building and moments between them is ruined because all us fans and shipper [myself really] only see the BLOOD MOON BALL making it so.

For me it cheapen Marco's growing affection for Star and vice versa, they were getting along fine, hell Star was honest enough to tell Marco about Tom hence why he was so defensive when he first showed up and later on.

So yeah, basically the show became boring: the conflict became petty and the plot predictable.

The Blood Moon Goddess is more of my insert of my primal rage of the incidents in Season 3 than an OC and also one of the driving force in the sequel. I just feel that the BMB was good concept just not for season 1. Which is why I later classify it as a curse to which Tom found it likable to use on Star, probably not knowing the repercussions of said event.

To make clear this is how the BMB curse afflicted the two lovers:

Marco: can not have a 'formal' relationship with another [being buddies is exempted], he will value his relationship to Star more than any other, the curse will indirectly or directly destroy any outside relationship, the moon [goddess] tries to steer Marco to Star because she's in danger.

As we have seen, I'm actually playing on canon plot, Marco breaking up with Jackie, him losing his good relationship with Hekapoo, only being seemingly friends with Kelly. Yes, Marco can't make girlfriends. Unless it's with Star. I know this sounds stupid now, but goddamnit I am committed to writing it as is. Shot myself in the foot. Feck.

Star [is the same as Marco's but is amped up]: can not make physical contact with her 'suitor' or suffer, will consciously search for her beloved, have vivid dreams pertaining to her beloved, that includes cutting open Marco's eye over and over again and beating him senseless, [for shit and giggles].

So the curse doesn't activate unless Marco or Star is consciously pursuing a relationship. Marco isn't going to throw up if he touches Janna by accident or Star if she hugs her father, if it did oh boy this fanfic would just belly up.

4. Eclipsa and Meteora.

The series needs conflict otherwise it's boring, so insert Eclipsa and Meteora, one a schemer of the highest order and the other an unknown threat, how dangerous is Meteora? I can very much guess she's enough to mobilize the entirety of Mewni and you already read that she's merged her Monster DNA with the Butterfly form causing havoc and abomination of the Butterfly lineage in Moon's eyes, at least in my fanfic.

I frankly don't care about Meteora, while she was Heinous she had depth and mystery but as Meteora my interest dwindled, I can already tell she's just gonna be a problem not an antagonist and if she get's upgraded here's what happens: Meteora is seen as rightful to the throne, will convert the Butterfly Kingdom to be Monster Kingdom instead or Monster tolerant, making them equal or go on a genocidal rampage through Mewni. Star and Moon is ousted from the kingdom and labeled usurpers, Eclipsa takes back her throne along with her daughter, Star's dream of a peace between Monsters and Mewman is taken over by Meteora who is both and seen as a better candidate to preach it rather than a full blooded Mewman who is Star. I can go on and on about my predictions and it won't be too far from what I already written.

Eclipsa is far more a better character, since we don't know much about her, we can't really see her as bad…mostly. Which I incorporate into my fanfic: why no one remembers what she has done. Because no one knows, we don't know as fans and readers so I thought it would be a fun nod to the information we do know. Then it became a very important theme in the sequel: no one knows what Eclipsa did, Marco especially who is immune to Eclipsa's mind reading, control and possession.

This is important, Marco doesn't know and must find the truth, because who he is as a person can not act upon suspicion alone. This is already spoiler territory but since we lack context, it's okay. For now.

So in total Eclipsa's role is bigger than Meteora as I believe the series will do to her, Meteora is a seasonal villain and that's fine, she can fade into obscurity.

5. Toffee, where is he in the fanfic?

Yes, the most devious lizard. Because of the information we lack on Toffee I sort of imposed my thoughts on Buttercup instead: both of Lizards, blood related, fighters in the past with the Butterfly Kingdom, smart and many more. I do believe that the Lizards were some of the monsters that saw the ancient Mewmans and probably observed or tried to parley but failed and instead hunted causing a war. In my fanfic, they were some of the monsters that battled the ancient Mewmans later dragging other monsters in the fray unintentionally coming from lands unknown. Since Toffee is immortal as is Rasticore, I believe the two to be extremely old and reason to believe that's how they trump Moon's mother [battle experience] and regeneration also the lack of 'killing spells', which leads me to reveal something about Buttercup…

His mission that he never completed because of Oblivion and why his family hates him…

He was the one suppose to kill the Butterflys *gasp*

Yes, Buttercup aka Marrow Eater aka The Lizard Who Destroys Magic [he is resistant not immune] was actually a Magician Killer/Assassin! Monsters didn't have magic so in my fanfic one Lizard was actually resistant to it and it was Buttercup who was tasked to kill them but ultimately fails.

More on that later.

6. The Traitor Sword.

This ties in with Buttercup since he later studies it from Oblivion, the sword is very loyal think of it as the Master Sword from Zelda, meaning it will kill any holder not worthy and is capable of many feats. I made the sword to counteract Star's Wand originally but when I wrote a draft about it's history, I really liked how it went so I decided to give it a bigger impact in the story. A sword forged by an Immortal, whatever your interpretation of an Immortal is it's essence, powers and such was infused into the sword allowing it to kill other Immortals [think only a diamond can cut a diamond idiom]. The draft was messy but the key traits is that the sword chooses its master, it can change to whatever it needs to be so it can kill the Immortal [the original intendant], is impervious to harm such as magic, wear and tear, time, temperature, act as a conduit to the holder [allowing them to wield magic not produce] and a bunch of other stuff later explored in the sequel. You might think it's an OP item but it really isn't I just never said how it can be shattered or beaten, though I did hint it.

Just know the sword plays a role in the Blood Moon curse and other events later in the fanfic.

7. The Magical High Commission.

Yes, the mighty group of enforcers of the dimensions! Seen as gods by mere mortals!
Brought low by a lowly human with a sword.

Hah! I just know some of you are butthurt about it. Let's get this across, just because you lived for so long and seen so much things doesn't automatically make you invincible or anything special, you are subject to lousy fate nonetheless, you can get killed by a novice or fall for a lame trap. If they were so good how come Ludo/Toffee kicked their asses? Easy, they underestimated him. They didn't expect to find resistance or grow overpowered with unsuspecting magic sucking powers.

SAME WITH MARCO. *minus the succ*

He is a human boy, sure he knows Star, traveled to other dimensions and whatever. But just a boy. Only Hekapoo was wary of him because they spent 16 years together. Hence why Omni and Rhombolus got their asses kicked by Marco, cause they underestimated him thinking he wouldn't get the drop on the two, plus the sword did give him the element of surprise. In the sequel if they did fight, they would treat Marco as if he could kill them with a glance, seeing him as bad as Eclipsa or Ludo/Toffee.

So for now, yes, Marco won by 'sheer dumb luck' and his nifty sword and gauntlets playing some key roles. Just you wait, roger9481.

8. Tom.

The Lucitor's place in the fanfic is just to stir the pot of drama, I don't really have big plans for him, hell I could write him as a cuckold and it would fit the bill either way. And if I just write him out, then I don't have to bother. Buuut, conflict does spice up the story so he does have some part in the sequel, just much later and he will be whining like a lil bitch about Star and Marco and Janna and his pink bunny.

I'll put his ass on the front row so he can feel special.

9. Marco's new teachers.

Yes, Marco can't stay on Mewni because of the fallout so he is forced to find the Blight Knight, Blood Knight and Death Knight to learn and prepare himself for his return to Mewni. Why? Because he just does. And also told to. He got 2 years to kill, he might as well have some crazy teachers making him a badass.

Kidding. No, Marco NEEDS to find these teachers, they are wise warriors who survived countless battles and have taught other students before. Better and worthy students than Marco.

Oh, the things I have planned.

10. Monster Arm.

He plays the role of Marco's dark side, urging him to be bad for the sake of it. MA knows it will die from the charm so it tries to get Marco to do things for it…so it can escape. One way it does is make Marco have sexy time with one of the ladies in his adventures so it grow inside the girl's womb and Alien it's way out. Yeah. Gory. But Marco is wise to this and chooses celibacy since it knows it wants out. So it will constantly tell him to take advantage of damsels he saves, princesses and queens and even his ex girlfriend and friends, trying to drive him to do it's bidding.

Sorry folks no sexy time for you.
Marco is 17 in the sequel by the way.

11. Why I made Marco leave Mewni.

Super easy: because Marco is stale in Mewni, he has no reason to prove himself there he is the literal third wheel in a relationship and he is just hurting himself. This game of who chases who for 3 seasons makes me sick, like for fuck's sake you are just padding the goddamn run time. Take my fanfic for example. Yeah it's not a long fanfic, but quality of quantity. I could have made it longer but what for? Burnout. That's right. I would become disinterested just like my readers so I wanted to finish it while I had good momentum. I'm not going to stretch the fanfic into a mess [i.e. what happened to my Will of the Tyrant, god I feel awful, it's not done yet, super sad face] and alienate my readers, who is also getting alienated by the series's direction and plot.

Plus, Marco would need to leave to reevaluate himself and he can't do it on Mewni. He craves adventure and Mewni is going through a reform, a peaceful one at that. Marco isn't out there fighting armies and winning glory, he is chaperoning Star, yeah that's stale and boring. Heck, I don't think I can make it exciting even in a fanfic.

12. Star.

Gosh, if I could write her out of the story, I would [can you see mah salt right about now!?]. But she just has to be there. You can tell I don't like her development and growth in Season 3, yes while good for her and doing good in her realm...but did she really fix anything?

Yeah, the kids are the future, but if we are going by politics and laws like in the real world, change happens after a LONG TIME and after all the anti-monster coots steps down and I'm sure there is going to be resistance. A lot of it. From the kingdom they govern.

And really politics in a kids show?
Then again I am writing about a kid show and turning it into a mature fanfic. Damnit.

But what really rustles my jimmies is how Season 2 goes into Season 3, I know late gripe but I have to air my salty laundry so I can write the sequel without going nuclear when Star's drama pops up.

So uh spoiler:
When Star leaves Earth forever, she got to unload all of her feelings onto Marco who was currently dating Jackie at the time and in front of all of their friends and schoolmates and before that she had Ruberiot basically spell out that she held romantic feelings for Marco who was in a relationship. So let's put this into perspective: Star confessed both on Earth and Mewni about Marco, did it in front of their friends and Jackie, spied on Marco afterwards and managed to avoid the fallout had Jackie snapped out of her shock. 'But Star doesn't know Earth etiquette she probably didn't know that was not cool', she stayed on Earth long enough to understand that's fucked up and that has to be common sense damnit.

[Skip the Battle for Mewni]
Okay, why didn't the other kingdoms help? Dafuq? Is this a class project where only one out of four people contribute? If the Butterfly Kingdom is allied to the kingdoms that didn't help, you need better allies I swear. BAD WRITING.

[Season 3]
Alright so Star is obsessed with Marco's hoodie, she goes to great lengths to have it, almost kills Lavabo, is this her manifestation of Marco? And when she realizes it she treats it like a bad thing. Word? Talk about doing a complete fuckin' 180 Star, goddamn. Then decides to bury her affection with Marco with being a better princess, fine. Alright enter Tom, some fuckery happens, they dance and now Tom wants to be a 'better prince' okay he says that but when Marco calls him out that a prince's life is political regardless, he fucking ignores it, what a twat. Alright, Tom's words and actions are sometimes self-contradicting, fine, sometimes we do go back on our word, there's your leeway. This also falls on Star too, saying one thing like this when Pony Head was still in St. O's:

"This is terrible! Best friends don't let best besties have bad birthday days!"

So making out with Tom in front of Marco on his birthday isn't a fucked up thing to do? Well, what is Star? Having sex on top of Marco while he sleeps would?

'Oh, but Star couldn't have known Marco seen her doing that or control him to NOT see it.' Then the writers did. Fuck outta here.

Alright so Marco first pops up on Mewni unannounced, enters the castle and gets hit by a burrito and have the guards almost beat his stuffings out. Okay, how dafuq do they not recognize the person who helped liberate their fucking kingdom, I know he was gone for 'weeks' as I remember but goddamn that means that Mewmans have short memory spans, again 'but the plot can't move forward unless we cuck Marco'. I get he came unannounced but shit they came in like a SWAT team on a live stream Youtuber, Star being upset he came unannounced is warranted but she looked less than pleased he was there, like 'shit Marco...you came home early...earlier than expected while Tom and I were alone in my bedroom doing who knows what.' Shit it sounded like a dirty little secret doesn't it?

Then the cape business, I get that River is 'virtually powerless' as a ruler compared to his wife, but for him to gift Marco with the cape and tell him he 'could be' a knight in front of Star and Moon is fucked up since he can't back it up and what he says he didn't expect to see Marco again really shows how 'unimportant' Marco is despite they bonded and Marco keeping his daughter safe. So River blatantly lies to Marco about being a knight and also his cape is equivalent to a second hand bib. Fuck outta here River.

[Can you see where I got the mistreatment of Oblivion from? A knight who fought to established a kingdom only to be forgotten because the royalty and nobles disliked him or saw him as someone disposable, you can bet your sweet ass I'm gonna grill some fuckers in the sequel]

Moon doesn't escape this either. While she just wishes Marco to be good and safe on Earth, when he comes back to Mewni, she sorts him out like he is a chore or problem she has to do. Yeah, I guess he was unexpected but goddamn this boy punched a hole through Toffee WITHOUT MAGIC for your daughter, treat him a little better at the least. So Moon gets the least of my ire out of the bunch.

Now how Star takes Marco being on Mewni: she's nothing but passive aggressive to Marco. Star couldn't just treat Marco like a foreign exchange student like his family did with her, I understand this is Mewni but I don't recall the first episode making Star a servant to Marco just so she can bunk at the Diaz house, 'oh but he's a squire it's different' a squire is a servant-at-the-ready at the bid of their respective lord or master, I looked it up when I drafting how Marco would become a knight before I made him a dark knight instead. So why treat Marco like this? To show that it is not right for Marco to look up to a place above his station [a mere human to a princess of a realm]. It's an excuse to just hang out, what the fuck, just hang out don't make it super formal and what happened to the closeness they once shared? They shared a bathroom together on Earth, sang together in there, Star kept his 'beard' hair, shared misadventures and life and death moments together, fuck she valued Marco's life more than her royal heirloom. WHAT THE FUCK HAPPENED.

Now Star is drawing a line and putting up walls so Marco can't get closer, putting him in a Master-Servant [not the sexy kind] relationship, giving his personal items to her 'boyfriend' and treating his gestures as if they were in some way trying to win her affections. And when he finds some comfort or happiness outside of her service like with Hekapoo, she's pissed, as if Marco has to be in a perpetual state of suffering and must seek redemption from her only to be denied that when he comes asking for it. It's like Star is punishing Marco for hooking up with Jackie even though SHE pushed and goad him on and Tom fucking putting that stupid curse on him to further divide him and Star by making him chase his 'dream girl'. It's as if Star is punishing Marco for not accepting her feelings even though she herself did not want to admit she had it and put Marco on the spot.

Can you see the fuckin' insanity and madness in this?

Star didn't want to admit she had romantic feelings for Marco, when he got away and had her secret on display and confessed to Marco, what did she expected Marco to drop Jackie for her on the spot? [by the way that's fucked up]. And when he comes back to Mewni, she punishes him for seeking her even though she indirectly set in motion that his life would be fucked up from her doing. This makes me sick.

So yes, Star has issues and I would not blame Marco if a Mewni Civil War broke out and he just ditches the place and chills back at home.

13. Politics.

Yeah. I don't like it.

But my fanfic demands it. Please no.

However, Marco has no pleasure of fleeing from this. He HAS to deal with it. He might have to deal with small portions and epic ones but damn, do I hate making fictional politics…into good ones! Damnit! My only weakness!

14. Mina Loveberry

And lastly Mina, originally she was the one to swoop in and stop Eclipsa from escaping with Star only to be fatally wounded and crawled back to the Butterfly Kingdom to warn the queen was in a few drafts. Mina wasn't suppose to break into the tower but then she was pivotal to revealing some good information since Marco and Star wasn't gonna do it as she is the loose end. In one draft she was suppose to tell Moon about Meteora forcing Marco into exile and goes on a search for Star; this draft was super dark, even I didn't like it. Still...I'm debating what I'm going to do with Mina in the sequel, I'm not even sure where I sent her. :-(

15. Grammar

No tmie to porfoaerd!


My Avid Readers

DR. DeCipher,
Thank you, I thought for a moment that the way I wrote out the BMB would be seen as a bad thing but I'm glad it resonated with a lot of readers and with you.

OmegaDelta,
Marco has time to do a great many of things, but in the end he must end up back in Mewni, there is work to be done and fortunately he is the one who could make it right. Despite being branded and wanted in that dimension, Marco isn't cold to their plight...yet.

TheForgottenKnightmare,
I will continue it because I put out waaay too much content before the sequel, too much teasers made.

Shadowmaster91,
Yes and No. Had Marco never met Star and the BMB, I believe he would eventually have the courage to date Jackie and end up married or down the line break up and end up with...Janna. The curse can indirectly and directly sabotage the lover's relationship if the two are NOT dating, forcing them to seek comfort from one another, it is a very extreme curse and it works in mysterious ways to achieve it's purpose.

MRAY 4TW,
Ah, yes, MRAY, your reviews out number the stars above. That said, I purposefully kept the Epilogue as vague as possible due to the plot I have crafted, you'll just have to see the mayhem I am writing for Marco to partake in. Just know there will be a gratuitous use of flashbacks for plenty of the characters, be prepared to be thrown out of loop. As always, I thank you for your reviews many of which provided means for me to improve my fanfic, unfortunately my grammar is shot, as always.

Ezilo,
I know my way through some references, though it might sound sorta out of place at times, I use them mostly as comedic effect, it doesn't have to always be so serious. And yes, I will continue the good work, for the sake of the readers and the fandom.

Guest,
There were a couple of reviews from you, so I'm not exactly sure which is who so I'l answer you as a whole. I thank you for both your short and long reviews and know that I always write to please.

A unimpressive name,
Thank you, making a feasible badass Marco without giving him everything did take some thought. I thought of what I already seen but all of them seem so bland and easy, so making Marco focus on being strong in other aspects worked out, I wanted him to be a man of many skills as to make up for his lack of magic. Ingenuity, resourcefulness and being clever is something that shouldn't be overlooked. As for the Fire Bringer, I can't say I have read it before.

Rebelling Death,
Thank you, and believe me, it's just gets better and better in the sequel, it is just chuck full of everything you would want from a SVTFOE fanfic.

Starcofan09,
Things are just heating up, the sequel will have a lot more fighting, drama, politics, angst, whining, action, romance, character development, bashing and whatever else necessary to make the fanfic an instant sensation. As for the sequel being romantic, well the cast will be older hopefully they will be a bit wiser to the situation.

OMAC001,
Thank you, I do believe a good story and plot makes for a good fanfic!

The Book of Eli,
Thank you for your support, you might have an idea where my sequel is headed but you haven't seen nothing yet, the battles, the drama, the romance, the pettiness? I'm gonna have to crank up the plot to make the sequel surpass the previous iteration, there's gonna be so much of everything really.

Some Powerfull Random Guy,
Yes, I thank you for your support and I am drafting the sequel as we speak. There will be a continuation to this story, I simply have too much to just leave it.

Kaiser Spartan,
Ah, Kaiser, you are a familiar sight as is MRAY, your reviews sheds light on my fanfic and while yes my grammar is shot in certain places I have an explanation for why it's like that: I completely missed it because I was typing so fast, proofreading went out of the window. As for the future set up, Marco indeed got his life back on track as Star starts more in depth schooling in running her kingdom however the geopolitical situation because of Eclipsa has shifted things drastically. I quite like my explanation of the Dark Knights in Mewni which they are native to yes, I mean other dimensions can have Dark Knights, but Mewni of old was mostly known for it.

Oracle6044,
More is to come, thank you for your support.

AchingHeart2011,
There is a lot more chapters incoming and yes, Marco is growing up to be a man and he isn't and shouldn't be downplayed or bullied by others especially since he doesn't go out of his way to fuck up their day. Thank you for your support.

Isolated Polar Bear,
Can't say what Disney would do to the series, they are all about child shows and such, but here? In the home of fanfics? It's all us, baby. I prefer fanfic work because we can let loose, we can write how we feel, how we want without someone barreling at us or losing ratings. Things will come full circle come the sequel next year and no one is safe from an ass kicking. Although...I do hate I'm gonna have to make a whole bunch of fictional political plot, my understanding of it is very small but god do I have to write it like I know it. It's still gonna be good, but lord will I pull my hair over some parts.

roger9481,
Ah, this guy over here. I got your numbers right here, and I'll answer them in order and you know what review I'm referring to:

1. To answer simply: they underestimated Marco. They thought him some puny human, and since they didn't know he was out training with Buttercup and Oblivion, he got the jump on most of them and the sword came into play as well. The only one that had any reason to be wary was Hekapoo who put up a better fight than most.

2. Again, yes the sword is OP but it is a conduit not a power source, the wielder is the one taking the drainage. And I've explained earlier: they underestimated him because he was human and didn't know much about his gear. They also were 'intent' on catching him not outright killing the poor guy.

3. Ah, this part actually correlates to myself actually. I used to go to a karate dojo, before we were taught the actual lessons we were dragged through the shit. The first half was designed to tire us out, the second to teach us the katas. The reason for this was that technique and form must be strong and precise no matter how beaten up you are, sick, weak, tired, etc because whoever was attacking you doesn't give a FUCK if you are READY or NOT. It comes down if you are willing to defend yourself no matter the situation or condition. I didn't want to get my face smash in by someone's foot so guess what: I put those arms up no matter how beaten up I was which bled into how I viewed Marco.
Marco was being dog piled by literally everyone for something that's not his fault, that would definitely push him to keep himself at the ready. Star's fight with him actually let him get a breather since they talked but it didn't do him much good and he eventually gave out.
This argument really sounds like you don't believe in human willpower, resolve or strength.

4. Like I've said the sword can become WHATEVER the wielder needs it to be, so if it wants to deflect something guess what: it's gonna be deflected. Plus the sword is blessed by a literal Immortal and forged by with varies alloys outside of Mewni, even without the blessing that thing is still going to hold up.

5. Yes. It's bullshit. But St. Olga DID THE SAME THING blocking the dimensional scissors and that's canon I just amped the wards. And so what if you're outside of the Earth's atmosphere, what you're going to breathe in a vacuum? Withstand all that tasty space radiation and space debris? Not burn up entering the Earth's atmosphere?

I suppose they can get away with this with 'magic' to avoid being hurt by these facts, but then I would just make another bullshit that they couldn't so it's just gonna be a fucked up circle jerk. Marco barred his dimension from entry, simple as that. I didn't want to make the fanfic complicated.

Maybe Omnitraxis's own powers not working or Star not able to is a stretch but then I could just make another bullshit that they couldn't. Really, I could have made Marco brand those two from using their powers to enter his dimension and get the same effect. Boom bullshit achieved.

6. Yes. It's exactly like you said: Marco didn't want to hurt her. I also understand he is exhausted from fighting which is why he gets his ass handed at the end. Marco just hit his limit and that was it.

Now let's consider Star, yes she fought since she was a child, the Mewni environment demands it, has above human prowess so she can just beat Marco right? I agree that Star has the strength and experience, but technique and strategy I soundly give to Marco.

This part I took a lot of inspiration from Obi Wan and Anakin's fight in Star Wars Revenge of the Sith, I know watch the fight scene and just imagine Marco as Kenobi and Star as Anakin. You see in that final fight Obi Wan is clearly WEAKER than CHOSEN ONE Anakin, Obi Wan defensive while Anakin offensive. In the last leg of the fight you can tell Obi Wan can't keep up any longer and uses the HIGH GROUND to secure his victory over Anakin who became overly confident.

So I decided to do something similar with Marco and Star but with a twist, Marco is physically weaker than Star plus weaken, so he takes up a defensive style cause he doesn't want to attack her and knows if it's a contest of strength he will lose. He was suppose to outlast Star, hope she would then listen to him but he ran out of gas and Star devolved into her primitive Mewman war fury and beats him senseless.

"Yup, the only reason star won was because marco didn't want to hurt her." The definite answer is: yes and no. I could have written it as Marco just lashing out at the last second or take the hit and hope Star comes to her senses, the latter I chose because it was a lot more emotional and heart wrenching to have the one you love strike you down like how Obi Wan felt with Anakin.

"You were the chosen one Star!"
"I HATE YOU, MARCO! YOU HAD SO MANY KIDS WITH SO MANY OF OUR FRIENDS! YOU ONLY GAVE ME THREE!"

The fight between Star and Marco was symbolic of their friendship being further strained, Marco was to leave Mewni regardless if I chose him to go the path of fighting or not.

All in all roger, I like the points you brought up because if you didn't someone down the line would just bring it up anyways. This also gave me the opportunity to explain why things play out the way they did, I like to 'write' how it happens not 'tell' it like this blatantly, so excuse my very forward way [emotional] of explaining some aspects of the fanfic. Critiques like this are fairly common place to me, I used to write on deviantart and those guys are balls to the wall. Nostalgic.

GoldManCharm,
I agree a lot of things are going to happen in the sequel, you might see things you like and not, so much I want to say but spoilers man.

imhere4svtfoe,
You want ships? I'll give you ships brotha, ships for everyone in the sequels! Written extremely tastefully.

Robert's Hammer,
Thank you for your kind words and review, I'll be making that sequel you crave. Just like that mineral.

Quva,
Tease then please. I'm drafting the sequel right now, and though I can let it cook for a while *looks at MRAY* I like how I make rapid updates. The series has so much potential but they are hampered by Disney and other shit, so they seemingly fall short at times so it's up to great fanfic writers far and wide to please the masses. Thank you for your support.

Oracle6044,
Thank you, your review got to the point however I will go around it cause spoilers are bad. The sequel is being worked on as we speak, I can't wait to reveal it! The plot twist is I'm gonna do it slowly from now on. Or will I?

fanguyperson,
This review really spoke out to me, just like when I first read a fanfiction I couldn't wait to review it, making an account just to voice my thoughts and support for the writer. Thank you.

Shadow,
Well the BMB took place well before I wrote the fanfic, however if you refer to my take on the BMB, it's just my thoughts on it and how it sorta ruined the development between Star and Marco.

AchingHeart2011,
I will make more. For you. And the rest of my readers! Marco is growing up as would anyone when they go through an ordeal, just gotta get back up. As for Janna, weeell she craves that Diaz.

Marco The Keyblade Master,
Thank you for your review, I especially like how you think I should write for the show: I can't. I don't think Marco overshadowing Star would be good and well liked as of right now for the tv show not the fanfic. I will make more, see ya soon!

Pluckii,
Best of luck indeed, I just want to write my fanfics and unleash them to be read, it's a lot of fun and liberating to just write how you like. I put lotsa passion into it and I guess some readers can tell I do, fanfiction is a freedom of creativity like drawing or dancing, make what you like and the rest will come naturally.

Feakiu,
I'm guessing the Funny chapter or the Epilogue...well, I'll think about that ship while I draft! And that long con, maybe...just maybe...thanks for reading my fanfic brotha!


I want to thank you all for taking the time to read and review my fanfic, even though it is not canon and hold no official merit to the series, I does warm my heart knowing that people around the world appreciate good fanfics.

And with this I solemnly close this fanfic of mine.
See you all soon in my sequel!

Ciao

I AM NRG

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