Author's note: Recently, I have been going through old Bleach fanfics. Compared to Bleach: Fan Works, the level of badfic is no where near like these fanfic writers.
User Name: Oshikko
Summary: Kurosaki 'Amity' Tomoe is Ichigo's twin sister. She thinks herself special and complains because she is so normally bland. Truth of the matter is, she is not as nice as people make her out to be.
Rating: M
Genre: Family/Fantasy
Fan Work Number: 1.5.1
Warnings: Has sexual scenes and teenage pregnancy.
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Author's note – Jolene Meyers specifically told me, if her fanfic is so badly written, why don't I write the better version. So, I am taking up her challenge. Here is the real story of Kurosaki Amity.
Ichigo's Twin Sister
~Tomoe's Rebellion~
The female sat at the small cafe table, watching as her fellow classmates shopped at the fashion boutique across the street. Her middle school uniform was completely prim and proper. "That old hag. If she has money to send me to this rich girls school and to have me arrive in a limo, surely she has enough money to give me an allowance."
Her body flinched as a male suddenly sat down next to her. "So, having no allowance, is that why you only order a water whenever you come here? What grade are you in?"
Amity felt her cheeks flush up. In front of her sat a rather handsome man dressed in the high school uniform from the school attached to her own, though during middle school, the boys and girls were separated. "I'm in seventh grader..."
"My goodness. I thought you were in the seventh grade, your body is so dainty and small, so lady like."
The male however smirked. "Just kidding. You look like a very mature fourteen to fifteen year old. Especially with that rack that you have." He waved a waiter over, watching as Amity swallowed hard. "I guess you can fill yourself up on my good looks?"
"Hai..." Amity felt her cheeks flush up. She watched him place his order. "Good god, you aren't planning on eating in front of me."
"So what if I am?" the male eyed her through narrowed eyes. The ice cream was brought over and he took a spoon and scooped up a bite as the light brown haired female suddenly licked her lips. He put it into his mouth and watched her. "Close your eyes and open your mouth." Amity complied and found a spoonful of the treat being stuck into her mouth.
"That tastes good."
"I have a proposition for you." The male reached out and stroke her chin. "If you become my girl, anything you want is at your disposal. Jewelry, clothes..."
"You mean, you and I would be a couple?" Amity found her eyes snapping open. "I agree."
He then pushed forward a pad. "Write down your body measurements and what you would like to start off with. I'll have a limo pick you up after school and drive you to my house. Does that sound all right?"
"Yeah... it is about time I get out from under that old hag." The curly haired female felt a finger placed on her lips.
"Those aren't nice words for a lady." The young male pushed the ice cream forward and then slipped away.
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Amity waited the next day for the limo to pull up and a man got out. "You must be miss Kurosaki Tomoe."
"I prefer being called Amity..." the girl stated, getting into the limo and sliding in. She gave a nasty look to a few girls as they watched her get in. She wasn't the first person to have a boyfriend that lavished on them. Plus, her aunt always sent the limo for her. They drove up to a mansion that had an elegant air to it. She was led up to the males room.
"Hello Amity..." The young male grinned at her, his hand directed to the dress hanging against a closet. The dress was a beautiful red satin with black trim. "Do you think that I'll just let you have the dress because you are my girlfriends? We're going to play a game of strip poker."
"I am not sure I like this." The female turned to head out of the door.
"Funny, I picked you as my girlfriend due to the fact that I thought I finally found the girl who was two years younger then me and was willing to go all the way." The boy let out a sigh, glancing out of the ceiling.
Amity sat down on the ground. "Deal out the cards."
The boy smirked and dealed out the cards. "I choose the piece of clothing that comes off of each of us whenever you lose. If you win, you either get the dress if we are both fully clothed or you get to put a piece back on. If we are down to just our birthday suit, not counting socks and accessories and you lose, we have sex and you get the dress. If you choose to forfeit, then we have sex and you get the dress."
"I won't forfeit that easily." She smirked, pulling out the cards, only to suddenly have him win. She blinked a couple of times as he removed his top shirt of his uniform. The next time she lost, she found him removing his undershirt for his uniform and then the undershirt that protected his upper clothing. She found herself turning red as she glanced at his stomach muscles.
His finger ticked under her chin. "You like what you see?" Amity then found herself unable to focus and the next thing she knew, he was down to his boxers and then he was in the nude. Her face flushed red as he sat back in a provocative manner. "You do like what you see." Unable to focus, she lost again and he pointed to her blouse, which she hugged. "Oh, come on Amity... or should I call you by your real first name if you don't comply?"
At that, she pulled her shirt over her shoulders, exposing a good deal of her torso. His hand reached out and stroked her stomach. "What is your problem?"
"You're my girlfriend. I am allowed to touch you." The male stated. "You have a smooth stomach, no muscle."
"I'm sorry that I am such a plain girl." She muttered, placing her cards down and hoping that she would win. He shook a finger at her and then pointed to her skirt. At that, she hurried to remove her skirt, letting it drop, just in time for his hand to grope her behind. "Hey! I am going to win one of these times. Don't get cocky!"
However, the next round she lost, which forced her to remove her bra. Both of his hands reached out to grope her breasts. Seeing her face turn red, he let out a laugh. "You can touch me anyway you want." He took a hand and pointed to his private area. "Why don't you touch me there?"
"I am going to win a round."
"I am closer to winning then you are, and truth is, you had the advantage at the beginning." Another round occurred and she ended up removing her panties. There was just one more round and she played her cards down, only to have him place his cards down, winning. He went and scooped her up and began to carry her to his bed.
"How can you have won every round?" She then blinked. "You... you cheated."
"If I did, it was only because I happen to want you so bad. You are my angel fallen from heaven and you fell into the ranging water without clothes of your stature and it up to me to provide for your every need." He then smiled. "Don't you want to have me?"
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Amity found herself enjoying her relationship. Everyday they played a game and every day it ended in them having wonderful sex with each other. It then became her turn she felt, to provide the game and she requested a particular outfit from her boyfriend and asked him to meet her at her own home while her aunt was at work.
She met him at the door in a maids outfit. He smirked at her. "What did you want that particular outfit for that you had to tell my driver about it?"
"Welcome home master..." Amity stated, a smirk on her face. She then grabbed his hand and led her up into her bedroom. "What is your first command master?"
"You didn't do any cleaning, so I need to punish you." He sat on the edge of her bed and pulled her over his lap so that he could spank her behind. "This is a lot of fun. I didn't expect to find a girlfriend who happened to like pain so much."
Everything continued and the busty female found herself naked on the bed. Her boyfriend was going all the way along with doing naughty things with his hands. She wanted more. However, the door suddenly creeped open. "I told her that you were coming to visit this month, so I don't know why she didn't show up. She may not be..."
There was a slight pause and the next thing she knew, her boyfriend was being pulled off of her and flung across the room. "Get your hands off my daughter!"
"Dad!" At that, the female sat up, covering her private parts and her face flushing up. "Dad... you have no right to do this!"
"No right?" Isshin suddenly turned towards her, slapping her hard across the face. "I let you live with your aunt due to the fact that she kindly offered to take you in and teach you to be a proper Japanese lady and you wanted to go."
"I wanted to go because you're an idiot! You are an embarrassment to be around!"
"Well guess what! You are going to be moving home! I think your aunt will agree with me on this. Pack your bags."
"What... but..." The dark bruises appeared all over her body. "This is my life!"
"It doesn't work that way. You are a high school student now. How long has this relationship been going on!" Isshin snapped, then stormed out of the room, dragging the young man with him.
OMAKE
There came in a flux of reviews. Jolene found herself pissed at Oshikko. "Seriously, my character is not a slut! She is still a virgin you ass hole! Why didn't you put in any warning of what was going to happen either! This would NEVER happen!"
"I bet if you had your way, your character could have sex with any character she wanted to and still be a virgin. As far as you are concerned, she can do no wrong. That isn't at all realistic you know."
Jolene responded back. "Well, since it is my story, I can do something like that. What part of fanFICTION do you not understand."
There came another review, this time from Christina. "First you have the nerve to rape me, and then you go and rape someone elses character! You are an idiot!"
"Seriously... I did not rape you in my other fanfic. There was no rape in this chapter either." Oshikko commented.
Then came the next review from Animus Rover. "Cool sex scenes..." Someone choose not to respond to that comment.
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Author's note – Evilhumour told me he doesn't like Jolene. :)
