I had many misunderstandings with this chapter, so I'm making some alterations. Tell me which one you like better!
Chapter 11
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"Much better," he said and swung me onto his back. Soon, he stopped again.
"Now are we there?" I asked jokingly.
"No. I smell... werewolf."
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Edward tensed as Jacob emerged from the woods. "Going for a little stroll, were we? Bella, can I talk to you without him," He shot Edward a hateful glance, "here to distract you?"
Edward growled quietly and I whispered in his ear, "It'll be alright, I know Jacob well, you don't need to be worried. We'll only be a second." He sighed and kneeled so I could hop off his back.
"I won't listen in to give you guys privacy, but you scream if anything happens, Bella. I'll be right here," Edward whispered, loud enough for Jacob to hear. Jacob quivered but didn't transform.
"Let's go over here," Jacob said through clenched teeth. I followed him slowly so I wouldn't trip over anything. Jacob sat on a fallen log and motioned for me to sit next to him. As I took a seat, Jacob cleared his throat.
"Bella, I'm going to say something and I don't want you to interrupt me." I nodded and Jacob continued.
"Bella, Edward isn't good for you. He wants you for your blood, and nothing else." I tried to interrupt, but Jacob continued loudly. "He left you broken and I had to pick up the pieces. I love you, Bella. More than he ever can or ever will. He's a leech, a bloodsucker, and I could be so much better for you. I… I can't live without you, Bella. Please… marry me instead." Jacob got down on one knee with a little black box.
"Be my wife?" he asked. I was flabbergasted, to say the least.
I shook my head and stuttered, "Jacob… I... I can't. You're my friend, and nothing more. Edward and I are meant for each other, and… I love him deeply, and I know he feels the same. I want to be friends with you, but I also want to marry Edward. Please, please don't make me choose between you!" I began crying silently and looked up to see Jacob shaking violently with pure rage in his eyes. This was the scariest I'd ever seen him look.
"Jake?" I whispered. He transformed, and I was rooted to my seat on the log. He pounced and tore into my neck, and I tried my best to scream. The salty, rusted odor filled my head and I felt myself losing consciousness. My vision swam through a red haze of pain. Somewhere on the surface, I heard Edward's anguished roar.
Edward. Goodbye. I felt the pain drag me under, and I lost all rational thought. Blood… pain… Edward… Jacob… Charlie… dead… vampire… I suddenly felt a wave of fire crash over me, and I screamed in agony. My body was being burned alive and stabbed with white-hot knives. My skull was cracking open and my skin was being shredded. I could hear my ribs breaking and rearranging themselves.
I was being swept into a whirlwind of broken glass, slicing me apart at the seams. I only remembered feeling like this when James bit my hand a year ago... Edward must have bitten me. The pain only worsened with each beat of my doomed heart. Fire was coursing through my arteries. I felt my skull crack and reposition, and I wailed in agony. Cool arms wrapped around me and lifted me from the hard earth.
Edward. The coolness of his skin dulled the pain, if only slightly. I felt wind whip my burning scalp and realized we were running, running faster than ever before. I heard a door open and close and I was set on something cool and soft, but I missed the iciness of Edward's skin. I reached my arms up to him and he enveloped my shaking, soft body in his granite one. My heartbeat slowed slightly, and I cried out. Edward held me tighter, but it didn't help me anymore. The only thing I knew was pain- pure, back-breaking, endless pain.
I screamed and shook as my heart began beating slower but pumping the venom with more force. Every inch of my body was covered in needles, stabbing me deeply and repeatedly. I wasn't sure how long I had been laying there- it could have been weeks. Memories crashed into my brain full-force. My head ached with the loss of them. As memories of Edward came, I held on to them like a life raft, but to no avail. Then, the worst pain of all came. My heart beat once with such force I thought it would burst out of my chest. Then, I felt nothing. My heart had stopped.
I opened my eyes slowly and blinked a few times. Everything came into focus, and it was clearer than I've ever seen. I could see a bug climbing up a tree trunk outside the window about one hundred yards away! I turned to the direction of a sobbing noise, and I saw a bronze-haired boy crying, but no tears were coming out. I stood up to go comfort him, and he lifted his head up.
I smiled politely and said, "Hello, I'm... I'm...I don't remember. Where am I? And who are you? And why are you crying?" The boy began sobbing even harder.
"Did I say something wrong?" I asked confusedly. He shook his head.
"I'm Edward, you're Bella, and we're engaged. And you and I are vampires." He dissolved into sobs again.
Okay, similar, but with one major difference. Bella doesn't remember! I really wasn't proud of either chapter after reading them again, so I decided to rewrite the second half completely. I'm deleting the other two attempts. Sorry they weren't my best!
Maggie
