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Chapter 10

NOTE! NOTE! NOTE!
I think I am improving a lot!

You think wrong.

I am listening to all lot of the conscrutive critism that you all gave me and I am working on making my story better I hope you like it! Nya! NYA! ^_^

Lillyblossom was dreaming!

Well, he did not like being called Lillyblossom, and had decided instead to call himself Deathheart.

Raise your hand if you saw this coming! *raises hand*

Deathheart made him sound so much scarier! In fact, as he was walking back from the gathering he told his name to the dragon and it was so scared that it turned into a mouse, right there! He had not eaten it though, it could still breathe fire! He would keep it until later.

Anyway, Deathheart was dreaming. He was in a place that was so dark, he could not see anything! It did not help that he only had one eye! But in this big black space, there was nothing but darkness! No moon, so stars, no sun! All there was was darkness and mist. Deatheart liked it though. It was evil, just like him. He started walking around, but found that even if he was moving, he was not going anywhere.

He was floating!

"Hello!" he called out, moving so it was like he was walking but also sort of swimming. "Is anyone there?"

"Yes. Hello."

As soon as Deathheart looked up, he found himself face to face with a cat. A cat with white fur with big red splotches like blood, all over his body, and some faded yellow spots. To Deatheart it looked like all the color was dripping off his pelt!

Perhaps he's related to Rock?

He hissed and moved back, finding he could walk again, even though there was no ground.

"Who are you?" Deathheart hissed. He was very hungry and wanted to eat the cat right there,

Oh yeah, I forgot he was a cannibal.

but when he swiped at it, his paw went right through him! "You're a ghost!" he meowed.

"Yes, I am. My name is... Ancient.

And that dramatic pause was needed because...?

Because I am old, older than you or the forest! But I have come to you Lillyblossom-"

"Deathheart." Deatheart meowed.

"-Deathheart, to ask you for help."

Deathheart laughed! He laughed so loud that his entire dream space rumbled around him! He pounded his paws on the floorless-floor and wagged his tail like a dog! he laughed way longer than he could in the real world, and by the time he was done, he felt like he had no more air in him! He had laughed almost to death! And then he turned to face Ancient.

"Help you! Ha! do you not know! I am evil, I do not HELP cats! HA!"
I know, right? How could he be so stupid to think that you would help him?
But Ancient was laughing too! He did not have as powerful a laugh as Deathheart, but he could keep on laughing forever because he was already dead! But he did eventually stop laughing and faced Deathheart. He purred loudly and spoke again.

"I am evil too! That is why I ned you! You are avery evil cat, but you are also sort of small,

Small?

and you do not know how to be evil properly!

This I have to agree. Come one, you didn't attack those morons that calll themselves Clan cats because they were laughing at your name.

I can help you! I can make you even more evil!"

"SHUT UP!" Deathheart growled. "I am NOT small, and I am more evil than you could ever be! I do not need any cats help!" he tried to turn and run, but he was floating like a fish again! "FOXDUNG!" He yelled, trying to get away from the ancient cat who had insulted him.

"You are wrong Deatheart. Eating the wrong cats has made you undersize.

Whaaat? What do you mean, wrong cats? Guys, I'm starting to feel a little creeped out by this Ancient guy.

Your leader named you Lillyblossom in front of all four Clans. And right now, all your evil cats who you had not long ago are gone. And a fox ate your dragon-mouse!"

"What! How do you know this?"

"I am evil, but I am also wise. and if you listen to me you can also be wise. I am offering you everything you have ever needed to rule the forest! Trust me!"
Then he did something remarkable! He went up to Deathheart and licked his face!

EWW! That is digusting!

Right where his eye had been!

Even more disgusting!

And then Deathheart had a new eye!

WHAT THE FUCK?!

it was black, black like death! But as Deatheart began to laugh, it glowed rainbow!

"I have given you something amazing, Deathhaert. I have given you this special sight, so we may communicate in the waking world. And if you listen to me, I will make you very, very bad!"

Deathheart nodded frantically! He wanted to wake up and try out his new eye, right then!

Try it out? It's an eye, for StarClan's sake, not a skateboard!

He told that to Ancent!

"Okay then." Ancient purred.. he walked up to Deatheart and touched noses with him. Then he purred and rubbed Deathearts face with his muzzle!

Woah, woah, woah. Moving a bit too quickly there, buddy.

But Deatheart did not wake up! He waited, and asked Ancient "Why have not I woken up?"

"I just wanted to say goodbye..." Ancient said in a soft tone. "Now that we are bonded by the, um, evil sight

Evil sight?

We will be closer than any two cats in the forest. And I just wanted to see you off before you left my home and went into the waking world."

Deatheart recognized that tone of voice! That was love!
EW! LOVE?! HOW CAN SOMEONE LOVE DEATHEART THAT WAY?!
"Ew! I do not want to love you, Ancient! I just want to be taught to be evil! I am a bad cat, and I do not love you!"

He did not miss the look of sadness in Ancients eyes as he faded away. it made Deatheart happy that the cat was sad, but it also made him a little sad himself.
Oh no... tell me he's not... no... guys, HE'S FALLING IN LOVE! GIVE HIM SOME MEDICINE, QUICKLY!
Then he woke up! He had been sleeping under a log with his dragon-mouse next to him, but now it was gone! Perhaps it had really all been real! He ran to a puddle and looked in, and sure enough he had a new black eye where his old scar had been. And when he called out in his brain for Aincent, he found that hie eye turned gold, and he could hear Ancients voice!

"Very good, my...um, apprentice!"

He still had that dumb love voice! But Deathheart shook it off. That dumb cat would learn that he was an evil cat, and he could not love any other but himself! So instead of acknowledging it, he shhok his head and began to walk.

"So how do I be more evil?" He asked in his brain.

"Okay, the first thing you must do is go to your old camp and Kill Jasminedung. She will get in the way of all your plans!"

"Jasminedung?" He asked. "I thought I already killed her! I know I did, she tasted awful!"
Poor Jasmine! I can't believe that the author's calling flamers mean yet she creates a charcter in the story who smells bad and is named Jasminedung based on one of her bad reviewers. How mature of you, Tainted Purifacation.

Jasminedung is a different kind of evil than you, dear. She does not even have potential to be a king of cats or a horrible leader! She is just a bad seed among cats. And that makes her impossible to kill, unless you kill her again.

Am I the only one who's really confused right now?

Until she is out of the way, your plans can not go on."
Er, why? What can she do to stop you? Or are you just being mean to Jasmine again?

"All right then, I will kill her! Where is she?" He looked around, not knowing if Ancient could see out of his eye or brain or...whatever. But he only heard Ancient sigh in his brain.

How can you hear someone sigh in their brain?
"I do not know. I have not walked this place in a long long time. The best thing you can do is look around for her. She has an awful stench you won't forget!"

Deatheart bounded off into the forest in search of Jasminedung. He smelled lots of things in the forest, he smelled mouse and fox (That must have been the one that ate his mouse-dragon because it also smelled like fire!) and he smelled the smell of all of Tranquidream and Moonshimmers kits...

"You can not eat those!" Aincents voice popped in.

As Deatheart was running along, he sighed sadly. "Why?"
Because they'll taste disgusting. I mean, they have Moonidiot and Tranquilstupid's blood! How can you eat that?!

''What makes you think tiny cats will make you grow bigger? You must not eat those kits unless I say so! there are plenty other to choose from."

"Okay..." Deatheart sighed sadly.

Then he smelled something! Something that to him, smelled wonderful! it was like death and rotted skin and old blood mixed with hate and anger!

That's not wonderful, that's gross!

It was the most wonderful smell in the entire forest to Deatheart

Psycho.

He did not know where it came from, but he chased after it until he found the source! and the he saw her! The big gray cat with wide green eyes that still looked sort of dead! Jasminedung!

In his head, he heard Ancient tell him to kill her, but for some reason he did not want to. When Jasminedung had been a Clanmate, he had not seen her as anything more than a big loud annoying cat. But now that she was undead, he could see her true use. She was evil, and he loved her!
WHAT?! You can love?!

''What are you doing!" Ancient meowed. "Kill her!"

"I can not!" Deatheart

I just noticed that she started misspeling Deathheart.

meowed. "She is too wonderful! I love her, Ancient!"
*shudders* He can love... that's... creepy.

''Nooo!" Ancient yowled, and Deatheart could feel his own sadness in his body. "But I love you, Deatheart! Why do you think I gave you this gift? I will continue to teach you to be evil, but I will also be very sad. And now I feel like I have permission to ask you for a favor-"

But Ancient was cut off! Jasminedung had leapt at Deatheart, and was trying to kill him!

Yeah, I don't think she likes you Deathheart.

But she was still a zombie, and Deatheart tossed her off easily. Then he he rubbed his face with hers and purred out all his love!

Anybody else feeling both creeped and grossed out?

And for a split second, it looked as though she was going to purr back! But then a bright light shone out of nowhere and she screamed as loud as a dead cat

What, do dead cats scream louder then living ones?

could and fell to the ground, dead again.

Sunsetshine: Now you know what's like to die twice.

Deatheart was MAD! He jumped up and looked around for the source of the light! Then a small group of cats leapt out of the bushes and faced Deatheart! He didn't recognize most of them, but he saw his two stupid sisters, and he realized all the other smaller cats would be their kits! He growled loudly!

"You killed my love!"
I knew you weren't really the good guys!
"We had to, dear brother." Moonshimmer said in her sweet-as-honey voice.

I hate that voice.

"She was a bad cat, a very bad cat, and we couldn't have her running around our territory being mean! and we can not have you doing that either! So get out!"

"No!" he hissed, shuffling his paws in the ashes of Jasminedung. "I will not leave! I will rule you all!"
YAY!

''Then we will kill you!" Said a small voice. Deatheart looked around and saw that two small black kits had said it.
*laughs* Yeah, right! Like that's gonna happen!
"My kits are not afraid to harm you. They have powers of love and light, and they will take away your evil, just as they did with Jasminedung." meowed Tranquildream.
Seriously? I swear, if this author isn't copying Disney, no one is.
"Ha! I would like to see them try!"

"Okay then. My kits, Moonshimmers kits, Get him!"
And what, you're just gonna stand there and gossip? You're wonderful mothers...
He expected them all to run at him, but instead they all got on their paws and began to pound the earth until it glowed!

*starts crying* HOW BAD CAN THIS STUPID STORY GET?!

it glowed brighter and brighter until one kit, a pure white kit with a small black heart on it's chest, stepped forward.
Moonshimmer's kit, I presume?
"Now, Lovekit!" Yowled Moonshimmer.

Deatheart got up to run, but Ancients voice interrupted. "Do not run! I will protect you! Stand still!"

And so he did. And when the beam of light hit him, he could feel tiny flames licking at his fur, but it did not do anything! in his brain, he could hear Ancients voice yowling and protecting him! The cat really did love him! But even though he was safe now, he still did not love him back!

When the kits had failed, Tranquildream screamed and rounded them all up and ran back to camp! But Ancient told Deatheart to Tell Moonshimmer to stay! And so he did! Moonshimmer looked worried, but stayed because he had asked politely!

'Now..." Ancient said. "Tell her to go to the edge of the territory and find the bones of an old dead cat. Tell her to bring him back to life!"

"Why?"

"Because it will help make you even more evil! Do it!"

He did so, and Moonshimmer looked confused.

"Why would I do that?"
''Because..I have turned a new leaf. And those are the bones of a cat I killed.I would like to apologize to it."
You're an awful liar. But knowing Moonidiot, she'll buy it.
It hurt him to sat the word apologize, but it got Moonshimmer to do it.

Told you so.

With Deatheart in hot pursuit, they ran to the edge of the territory where, sure enough, the bones were. And then Moonshimmer went right over and touched them! And then the bones glowed and glowed!

Creep-ay...

And then they turned into a cat! Not just any cat, they turned into the cat Deathheart had met in his dream! But then Moonshimmer gasped as well!

"Ancient!" Deathheart screeched!

"Phantom!" Meowed Moonshimmer!
WHOAH! THEY'RE THE SAME CAT?! HOLY COW!
"Thats right." The cat said, licking his ginger body and golden spots. "You have brought me back to life, my love." He said to Moonshimmer. Deatheart saw Moonshimmer sway under his gaze, and realized he loved her too!

"I am back, but I have a problem, dearest." He said to Moonshimmer. "Even though you are wonderful and sweet and gorgeous, I have become evil!

Wait, how did Moonshimmer manage to bring him, who's evil, back to life, and not Screepaw, who was only pretending to be evil? Is this StarClan's doing? I mean, based on the awfuly flawed logic, it's gotta be...

And I am in love with Deathheart now! I have given him more than a few stupid kits, and I will protect him from you and your good ways! Because you rejected me, Deathheart and I will rule the forest!"

Yay! Go team Evil Creepy Guys!