I've started school so there's gonna be a wait... To be honest I finished this a while ago, i just never had time to post... whoops.
Carottal Said: I love the plot idea, as many people I guess. And can't wait to see if Zoro managed to get lost on his way to hell (that's what got me to read it first, imagining Sanji reaching hell to discover he got there before Zoro).
I hope Sanji will succeed but I'm afraid... After all, this story sounds like Orpheus and Eurydice, and knowing the end... That maybe why I'm worried about what lo said to the crew. Was it me or did she say she could open the door to one person and one only? But then, are two people able to pass the door on the way back? I want to believe they will.
There are a few unneeded words in some of your sentences, and some missing comas. Maybe if you have time you can check the previous chapters again.
You should not be so insecure about the way you're writing mourning, for now it is great
Anyway I should sleep now so I'll stop here. Thank you for the freezer story.
First of all, Thank you thank you thank you. And shush, I was gonna have that happen . Ah yes I'm not a fan of sad ending fics at all and yet I am pulled into them all the time. I hate when that happens in movies, when the same amount of people who came through can only go out. I guess you'll just have to wait and see XD Thank you, ass you might have seen now I have even less time, so thank you I will try to pay more attention to that! I just write on my phone because I never have time when Im on a computer DX Im glad I can write mourning correctly! It's just a delicate thing I guess, I don't mourn like 'normal' people do. I didn't want to over do it.
Ice Said: That's rude. 'A pathetic excuse like those." Well, Ussop, Nami and Chopper maybe be weaker than Zoro or Luffy or Sanji, but they are respectively strong compared to people who are normal villagers. Did you forget they defeated CP9? Just because you are weak doesn't mean you are pathetic, or anything you say is pathetic. Some people are strong, some are weak, it doesn't matter. Should I say you are pathetic? I'm sure you would take offense to that.
Okay, where do I start... I was trying to say that their excuse was pathetic because Sanji knows their strong. He knows they can hold their own in a fight, so the excuses are pathetic. I think i've done a good job of showing how strong the so called "weaker" members of the crew are not weak at all. I hate when people say that. I would never call anyone from that crew pathetic. I hope I've explained myself properly. (P.S. Im very strong, I take after Zoro! XD)
Guest Said: Awesome! Wait Zoro, Sanji is on his way! update soon please..
Thanks, and I'll try to squeeze some ZoroxSanji in there somewhere next time! Maybe if you have an account and favorite/follow this fic then I might be more motivated to write faster ;) (and maybe tumblr?) Ignore me Im hopeless.
SanjiRoronoa Said: Wow... A male writer! I haven't seen many of those... Welcome to the community! (Though you don't need my welcome...)
Anyways, keep it up! It's very beautiful... I was really surprised that she kissed him right off the bat! That's never happened to Sanji before. Or has it? How would we know? It could just be left out of the manga/anime...
Anyways! I'm off topic. One more thing. I just wanted to say as soon as I read "Of course Zoro would never let him get distracted" (or something I forget) I thought 'Hmmm that's so true! Zoro always snorts or something and pisses off Sanji when he does that...'
Thank you! Of course I need your welcome! I love your welcome. Yeah, I guess Sanji had some time to think about his feelings before the fight at that island went down, but maybe I made it sound differently? I don't remember... Ah I'm glad there's no OOCness or at least a small amount! I hate OOC -.-
Off to the fic!
Chapter twelve - Shitty Geezer
Sanji can't believe he almost let that woman distract him from finding Zoro! His lust was clouding his judgment and making him forget what he was supposed to be doing there. That woman was perfect though. Ample bosom, and beautiful behind. She was perfect. He can't help but think he's seen her somewhere before.
Where did she come from though? She seemed to just appear out of thin air, rih
Luffy appears in front of Sanji. A smiling bouncy rubery captain that steals food in the middle of the night, the man who will get him to the All Blue.
Sanji pauses in his walking, weary at first, because why would Luffy be here, but he eventually disregards this thought and smiles, happy to see his captain and friend.
"Luffy what are you doing here?" He smiles and walks up.
Luffy just smiles showing his molars. "I wanted to see what this is all about! This is so cool Sanji! look at those white things!" He points towards the white lightning-ish looking things are.
"yeah, they're pretty weird huh…" Sanji turns to look at him. Luffy, his loving and weird, and spontaneous captain and friend. "Where are the others?"
Luffy put on a face to show that he was thinking. Pouting his lips and furrowing his eyebrows he put his thumb on one side if his chin and hooked his fingers around the other side so he was holding his rubbery chin.
"I think they're sleeping, look it's so dark you can't even see the ground!" Luffy lost track of his thoughts and started jumping as if the floor might give out under his feet.
"Luffy... What are you doing here?" Luffy isn't supposed to be here. Only Sanji... Right? Wait did Luffy come with him at first?
"I'm coming with you!" Luffy says excitedly "We can have an adventure here then you can cook back at the ship and we can go to our next adventure!" He smiles and walks up to Sanji, you wanna go see what those white lightning streaks are?" He asks and then darts off before Sanji can answer.
Signing with a smile on his face Sanji walks over to the white light things that have been making quite curios.
To his surprise there really far away. Luffy is running towards them and he is getting smaller and smaller.
Sanji pushes himself into a run to catch up with his captain who's gradually disappearing. Sanji catches up when Luffy stops finally in front of the white lights.
Sanji slows his pace and walks up behind Luffy. These white electric looking things are about four feet in the air and are about as tall as Sanji.
Sanji's eyes are locked on the middle of the line. He's staining right into the middle, leaning dangerously close to touching these mysterious things.
But he sees something he recognizes. Or rather, remembers. If he looks close enough Sanji can see his memories. His own memories trailing around in there shooting every which way.
There are some from when he joined the crew and all the baratie members said his soup tasted like shit, and there are some memories just from this night, where he's accepting to walk into the portal.
"Holy shit" Sanji whispers. Luffy's watching him, then smiles.
"Is that you?" Luffy points right to the middle of the mass of memories. Sanji's eyes dart towards it.
Yes that is him. That's him young skinny and clothes torn apart. Sitting next to an equally as skinny old man with a missing leg. They're in a ship, waiting for food.
A sick feeling coils up in Sanji stomach, that's after him and Zeff were rescued from the rock and they got food.
Sanji reaches his hand out to touch the image. "Yes that's... Me." Sanji's fingers touch the memory and everything goes dark.
All Sanji can hear is his own breaths and the thumping of his heart. Frowning at the darkness he tried shouting to Luffy but there was no response.
Then everything clicked back. Well not back to how it was exactly, it's different now. He's standing in some wooden ship. It smells like mold and gold. Nami would love to raid this place.
He's facing a wall to he turns around, his hands tucked into his pockets incase he has to defend himself.
When he turns around he sees himself. And the shirty geezer... But they're both much younger. Much much younger. And skinny, and broken.
This is his memory!
Sanji's eyes widen with his realization. Sanji's back to the moment when he was saved. He's reliving it from the sidelines.
Food is passed along the table by hands and shadowy figures whom he didn't remember. The food doesn't smell great now that he's remembering it, but to him it was the best food he's ever tasted, even to this day.
Zeff is eating slowly, his weakness slowing him down. And little Sanji doesn't even touch the food. He's just staining down into his lap with a blank expression. Zeff is sending him glances between every bite of food, but young Sanji doesn't seem to notice.
"Hey kid, don't be greedy." Zeff gruff voice makes Sanji a little homesick.
Young Sanji glares up at Zeff. "I'm not even eating, I can't be greedy." Young Sanji's voice sounds hollow and broken. It's cracking and very gravely. Sanji remembers this.
"You may not eating, but you're feeding your hunger and it's being greedy after this long while." Zeff shovels more food into his mouth.
Young Sanji stares at his plate, and finally reaches a shaky hand up to grab a piece of food. Young Sanji's chair jolts from a kick under the table.
"Don't use your hands like a neanderthal. Use the utensils." Zeff shoots a glare over at young Sanji.
Little Sanji stick his young out and grabs a fork. Stabbing a piece of food blindly he shoves it into his mouth. After a second of chewing he frowns but swallows the food.
"Gah that didn't taste good at all" young Sanji wipes his tongue as if that'll get the taste out.
Zeff looks at what is left on the fork and bursts out laughing.
"What you shitty geezer!?" Sanji threatens Zeff with his knife, for the second time, and pouts like a child.
"That's an eggplant. Your first bite of food was an eggplant!" Zeff laughs more. Little Sanji starts yelling at Zeff as he continues to laugh and calls him eggplant.
Sanji smiles as he watches this memory. A lot of be finish started on the boat he was saved on, the Prince. And the beginning of that shitty nickname, Sanji grimaces, but also of much more too.
Everything fades away until only young Sanji and zeff a bickering remain. And eventually that fades to black as well.
He was being greedy and didn't even know it. He was just doing what he wanted... Luffy.
Sanji's eyes open and Luffy's standing next to him peering curiously at him. "Neh Sanji, are you okay?" Luffy pokes his cheek.
"I'm fine." The blond man snaps and swats at Luffy's hand. "You're not you." He states. Luffy's eyebrow raises.
"You're not Luffy I mean. You're another shitty delusion." Sanji frowns at himself for believing the images.
"What are you saying Sanji? Of course I'm me! No one else can be me!" Luffy smiles and puffs up his chest. "I'm trying to become the pirate king!"
Sanji's eyes widen. So there's a flaw!"you're not Luffy! Stop impersonating him! You can even get his speech right you shitty image!" Sanji yells at the image of Luffy. He's 100% sure this isn't Luffy, there's no way it could be.
Luffy smiles and disappears into the air. Another trial passed. Sanji stares at the empty air, not really believing that Luffy was never really here. He feels so lonely all of the sudden now.
Well... Time to go on.
I wrote this on my phone so ignore anything that might have sounded weird! Alright I'll see you next time.