Lightning Edgeman ZERO: Cool Fefnir/X battle I can't wait until the next cool fight scenes!(:D)
Me: I'm glad you liked it, but I'm afraid you'll have to wait quite a while before the next fight scene. I'm traveling to South Carolina tomorrow and won't be able to update for at least three days. Sorry! But I hope you like this chapter just the same.
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Alisi Thorndyke: Hey Matt. :) Great Job with this chapter. Update when you can. :)
Now about your Megaman Axess fic, I can't wait to read it either. I even forgot you talked about writing it. I still have it saved, so after i write chapter 1 to my new story, then I'm going to go back and read over what you sent me about the story. Like i said, In the Megaman Battle Network series (EXE, Axess, Stream and beast) everybody loves a Lan/Maylu fic so I know for a fact it would be liked. :) So all things considered, it's going to be good.
Oh and about your Holiday one-shot, I'm going to send it to you instead of posting it becuase I have been thinking on it and now that i have the idea for it, it's too late to post it as a holiday fic. So look for it from me next week.
Well that's all.
Alisi T.
Me: I hope you like this chapter too, Alisi. I have several new fans of this story, and I never thought I'd get this many so far.
That Megaman Axess fic, I think you're talking about the one with Tori? Well, it's not really a Megaman Axess fic, though it will involved things like that in it. I base my NT Warrior stories mostly on the games than on the TV shows, so it may be a little different.
I eagerly await the one-shot, whenever you can send it.
P.S. There is a little surprise for you at the end of the fic. It is in the story, I think you'll like it. I've been waiting for this chapter to come up for a while.
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Archaon: My pleasure! Writing and receiving reviews is the best thing about fanfiction.
I like the personality you are giving to X as well as Alia... um, I MEAN the mysterious navigator;-) The part with him whistling and with the Bobs was good comic relief for the battle that followed. I particularly liked the way he snatched the ID data. Although I'm not extremely happy Fefnir died (or didn't he?), the action scenes were good and he fought decently. I can't stand when the guardians are written as weaklings. The only ability you forgot to use was his buster's jaws XD. A suggestion: If and when X fights against Harpuia, make sure to have him use his electric drones along with everything else. As far as I know, I'm the only one until now that has written that in a battle.
Another thing about battles: You did well with improvising but it can get even better if you consider the environment. That fake wall ambush was a good one. Everything can be used as a weapon in a pinch: sand, collapsing walls, other enemies... Zero knuckle is not really a new weapon, or at least shouldn't be.
I never suggested you use ALL 64 weapons. You would need ten chapters for that. A couple and when needed though wouldn't be too tough.
I know Mary Sues (As Zero was about to die, a mysterious reploid named Archaon crashed through the two thousand floors above him, landing and kicking all four guardians' heads off at the same time. Ciel rushed to them and after making sure Zero was alive, hugged the newcomer, who I must say was very handsome indeed.) Anything less blatant than that might or might not be considered a Mary Sue. Most of the time, it's really a matter of opinion.
My summarized opinion about Ciel goes like that: She is a prodigy and definitely from a wealthy background (education plus funds for Resistance). It's really possible she has no living close relatives. She only has good intentions but the road to hell is paved with them. She feels guilty for anything wrong that happens( made copy X to prevent Neo-Arcadia from collapsing, made Elpizo leader, he went loco and tried to kill all humans except for her, researched energy source for peace but had to reject a truce because of Weil, could not restore Zero's memory although she is an expert, got used by Weil and NA became hell for both humans and reploids) She also has to send Zero to suicide missions and she knows what happens( remember she always listens through Zero's transmitter). All in all, she would never accuse Zero of anything substantial. Heck, I'm not even sure if she would accuse anyone of anything, since in her mind, her actions have endangered everybody. Instead, she would always find a way to blame herself and try to fix it, very much like X (pacifist- prototype of reploids- fought mavericks). There is much more but this is growing huge...
Also, if you haven't already, you could read the script of X6-X8 to get X's character better. He has more lines in these games than in the first ones.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
Me: First off, I love your long reviews. There is nothing I like better than a nice long review that tells me a lot about things I should improve or suggestions to the story. Thanks buddy:-)
There is one thing you'll discover later in this chapter, but I think I'll tell you now. Megaman X's watcher is not Alia. I've seen things like that happening before, but I decided that I wouldn't do that in this fic. For the moment, she's just a mysterious watched until you read this chapter. You might recognize her name! ;-)
I will take into serious consideration how Harpuia's attacks will be used. He is the Number 1 guardian, in my opinion, and I'll do everything to bring proper justice to that, other than (BOOM! BOOM-BOOM-BOOM! X is DEAD!) stuff. I'm certain you'll appreciate it.
64 weapons. Personally, I don't believe X could move if he had that many. I may give him more flexibility, though I have to say I'll most likely leave him to his basic skills. Just the things he has at the beginnings of Megaman X games. I may have to add the charge weapon sequence to his powers. Oh, and Fefnir is definitely dead, no mistake.
I tried to use all the weapons Zero had because when I was in the process of writing this, it was before Megaman Zero 4 was released. I had not heard of the Nero Knuckle, so I could not incorporate it. (I personally don't think it was such a great idea either. Even the name, Zero… Knuckle? Kind of odd in my opinion.
That Mary Sue definition of yours was hilarious! There are a lot more defined ways of explaining them though, I think if you read Banbie Bunny's real story, you would have a better idea. Nice definition though.
Ciel does display a bit of pacifist attitude now and then, but not so often and not nearly so sickening as X was in the X series. You would think he would have a more positive attitude, but with Ciel it's understandable. Interesting outline of Ciel, I'll have to think about some of those things…
I might or I might not read the script to the Megaman X 6-8 games. I might get those games and I don't want to get it spoiled.
Well I have to write responses to the other reviews. Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you like this one too.
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RavenIga14: Haha, what a couple of slackers. Aw poor Fefnir, well 'all is fair in love and war'. Please update.
Me: Yeah… poor Fefnir. Aw well, I guess you'll still like the future chapters anyway. More of that is yet to come though, so be prepared. :-)
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supercookies567: Sorry for not reviewin for a long time because i just dont have the time these days but i like how you wrote the story i hope you update soon
Me: I'm glad you took the time, supercookies567. (That name is hilarious!) this will be the last update for a while, I hope you like it.
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golden-eyedwolf842: Sorry for such a bad review. But I didn't have time to write a good one. Anyways, I thought that your story is very nicely written! Can't wait until the next update.
Me: Thanks a ton, wolf. I like the review, even if it isn't long. The next update will have to wait a while, but meanwhile, here's a short one. I hope you enjoy it.
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ZBoi: ahahaha i alwaes like zero fic keep up the good work! update soon!
Me: My first review of the year:-D I like a good Megaman Zero fic too. I'll try to keep the next chapters better and better, so keep reading. (And reviewing if you have the time. :-) )
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This chapter will be kind of short, but it will at least show some activity concerning Zero in the middle, and I hope you take the time to review it. It will be the last update for a few days, so here it is!
Ciel shook Megaman's hand. "You did very well Megaman X. Thank you. That dish will give us the hacking capabilities we need to intercept the broadcasts of Neo Arcadia."
Megaman nodded. "Your welcome. I just wish I didn't have to fight and kill Fefnir. He was.. sort of a good guardian. I still wonder why he follows Dr. Weil."
Ciel shrugged "I have no idea. It's too bad you had to draw so much attention to yourself. I hope they don't draw any conclusions as to our plan. How are you feeling?"
Megaman rubbed his red face thoughtfully. "Um.. a little overheated. I need some repairs; Do you have any capsules around here?"
Ciel nodded and pointed to a room next to her lab. "That has a capsule. It should be sufficient. Zero used that room you know..." Her face softened as she remembered the last time she had been there. "Zero had had some bad dream or something like it. He was very unsettled and… he asked me what I would do if he joined Dr. Weil's side."
Megaman- trying to be comforting, patted her on the head. "I know. I think I know how you feel, Zero always had a bad dream whenever he went to sleep during the Maverick Wars. Don't worry, if everything goes well we should be able to get him back. Evil can never keep him down. Let's just hope he doesn't think of attacking the base again."
He took the flame chip out of his pocket and handed it to Ciel. "Here. I can't use this. My X Buster isn't compatible. Say, you wouldn't have an energy module would you?"
Ciel nodded and handed him one. "Sure. Why?"
Megaman took it and sent the energy to his face. The burns disappeared. "Thanks. I just need to heal those burn marks. See you later."
Megaman walked into his room and lay back in his capsule. He immediately felt energy run into him and aid his auto repair systems. "Aaah..." he sighed comfortably. It felt nice, the newer more modern techniques felt better on him than he could even remember the old ones being. The energy felt like pure oxygen feels to a human when it's been deprived of fresh air for days. For thirty minutes he lay, taking in as much energy as possible. Amazing. The repairs often took several hours to complete, and yet it was almost completely done in half an hour.
Then the door slid open and a girl walked in. She wore completely white armor and had a special antennae on her ear. She had blond hair and completely green eyes. She walked up to Megaman and shifted his arm. "Megaman?" she asked. Megaman opened one eye sleepily. "mumble..mumble.. yes? Who are you?" he asked.
"I'm your watcher." the girl replied. "I'm glad that you managed to escape from that station. I was worried sick."
Megaman got up from his capsule and stretched. "It was no big problem getting the guards. Just Fefnir. Hmm..." he looked her over. He smiled and laughed a little bit.
The girl looked a little confused. "What is it?" she asked "Is there some paint missing from my armor?"
Megaman shook his head "No no. You just remind me of someone I used to know. Her name was Alia. She was my watcher on my missions." The watcher did look like Alia, except she had a more feminine face than Alia did and she was slightly smaller. She looked slightly abashed at his comment. "Oh." was all she said.
Then she straightened up and looked official. "Miss Ciel wants to see you." she said "As your repairs are finished, she has another mission she wishes you to complete." Megaman nodded and they both walked to the lab.
Dr. Weil was not happy. He couldn't figure out why Megaman had stolen the dish, but he was sure angry that all of the guardians didn't intercept him at once like he had planned. "You fools!" he screamed at Leviathan and Harpuia; Who stood looking ashamed. "Why didn't you get him altogether! Now Fefnir is dead and it will take long enough to just repair him completely and revive him!"
Harpuia looked up at him. "Forgive us Lord Weil. His attack was unexpected and Fefnir was ordered to attack before we even received news. We would have helped him if we had known."
Dr. Weil still couldn't contain his rage. "I need more than just excuses, Sage Harpuia. It's no good if you haven't destroyed Megaman X. Now it will be harder to get him with just the two of you."
He sat back down on his throne-like chair. "And where in the world is Zero? He should have been repaired ages ago from that battle."
Leviathan stepped forward. "We don't know sir. He hasn't woken up yet, I believe he is in shock."
Dr. Weil nodded. Then his face grew nervous. "Do you.. do you believe he remembers Megaman X?" he asked. Leviathan shrugged. Dr. Weil stood up quickly. "Get to the main HQ. Listen for any attacks from Megaman. Go now!"
Leviathan and Harpuia bowed and stepped out. Dr. Weil hovered out of the room and down through his base to where Zero was kept. Zero lay motionless in his capsule. He didn't appear to be moving at all. The meters above him measured his blood pressure and pulse. His pulse was abnormally high. Dr. Weil put both his hands together and a small ball of purple energy formed between them.
"Listen to me Zero." he spoke in a calm soothing fashion. "I want you to forget that reploid you saw. He is nothing more than an imposter. You must destroy him and not let him go. Do you hear me? He is your enemy, not your friend. Now awake out of this stupid shock and pull yourself together... like a real guardian." the energy hovered over him and began to enter Zero's body.
But before it could fully enter, Zero suddenly jolted awake. He swatted at the energy and it floated away. He got up and grabbed Dr. Weil's shirt and pulled him close. "Weil..." he growled menacingly. Dr. Weil was not afraid, but surprised. He eyed him suspiciously. "Yes?"
Zero's face turned into one of complete hatred for the man who stood before him. "You made me kill Ciel, and her sister! How could you, you century old piece of space dust! Whatever evil you've placed in me won't keep me down, I'll- aaaaaugh!"
The energy floated back to him and entered him from behind. He jolted back and screamed as if he was being electrocuted. Dr. Weil created more dark energy and placed it inside him. Zero fell back to his capsule breathing heavily. Dr. Weil smiled.
"So, that is how it works. Every time more dark power attempts to enter you, your good side seems to fight at its ultimate level. Well, You will learn that your ethical mind is not strong enough to defeat this dark power, it cannot be destroyed, even by you. Now wake up my legend..."
Zero stirred and then opened his eyes. The pulse rate dropped down to normal level. He got up and smiled at Dr. Weil "Thank you Lord Weil. I almost thought I'd never wake up. Is there anything you would like me to do?"
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Ciel explained the mission to Megaman. "I'm not entirely sure where they keep the schematics for those laser turrets. But I believe that repair teams could. If you can cause minor damage to one, I believe that you could draw a repair team to you and they might have the blue prints."
Megaman nodded "That sounds simple enough. When do I start?"
"Whenever you prefer Megaman. Just like Zero, I never forced him to do a mission. If it suits you, then why not go now?"
Megaman nodded and smiled. "Sounds like a plan to me. I'll go right away."
The girl saluted "And I'll get back to my post." she said "Please be careful, Megaman X."
"Same here." added Ciel. "For all we know, if they receive any attacks they may suspect you." Megaman waved his hand dismissively. "You don't need to worry. I can take on some gigantic laser turrets any day, or my name isn't Megaman."
The girl laughed. "It isn't! Your name is Megaman X."
"Whatever." Megaman mumbled.
"Well I have to get back to my research." said Ciel "So whenever your ready, get to work."
She walked out. Megaman got ready to teleport out. "Oh by the way," he said to the girl "You know my name, but I don't know your name."
The girl blinked in surprise and then said. "My name? Oh, it's Alisi." She answered "Alisi Thorn."
Megaman nodded "Okay then, Alisi. Let's get to work!"