My review for chapter 13. I skipped to much details, sorry. Mostly filled with dialogues, no romance, PEACE!"
Reply to an enormous burst of reviews (Finally... I thought people were starting to loose interest.) (Too much mistakes in chapter 13)
AFictionalMind (C13): Yeah,... research,... I did that. (sarcastically whistles)
(C12): Can you see the black letters? Lol, creeps me out too. A pretty stupid girl trying to asking us to point at something that is right in front of her.
(C11): Also PM'd you back about the research stuff... No, really that's why I go to the fridge, just to forget why I came there in the first place.
ChipmunksRule4ever(C8): oh my God, you're right, I think I kinda accidentally stretch out their attitudes to a bad couple style.
(C7): Our school's a complete opposite. No free lunches, people bad with English (no one can speak english, except me and my friend/s), no exchange students, you're lucky to be in Finland, cause my school sucks in education.
(C6): Hey, you're better than me. I've read your story 'unstoppable' , 31k words, 125+ reviews. With that amount of package, do you still think I'm better than you? Dude, don't get all insecure, you're better in writing stories that I am. Oh, and I can't reply to all of your reviews, so, I'll just leave it to this, I still got one more riddle for Mr bucky.
Mrbucktheweasel6= You're answer is me, or human beings. I've read that from a game called,... (I'd rather PM you the name) MGQ.
You've got my last riddle right,... now here's new: While walking across a bridge I saw a boat full of people. Yet on the boat there wasn't a single person. Why?
Phantanos: Should I? I was kind of planning to keep them with Dave.
Well this calls for another poll.
SHOUT OUT TO CHIPMUNKRULE4EVER: 100th REVIEW, THANKS, DUDE.
Brittany's Point of View
The estrous is finally gone for now. The full moon is not going to come back for a while, but I still better be careful, who knows what might trigger my instincts.
It's 12:43PM, we just had lunch. We're all sitting at the couch - Simon with Jeanette, Theodore with Eleanor, and me with,... um,... let's just say that Alvin's been busy.
"Hey, where's Alvin?" Theodore asked.
"He's busy." I answered.
The others looked at me with a confused look.
"Doing what?" Simon asked.
"ALVIN, I SAID NO!" We heard Dave yelling from the music room.
"Does that answers your question?" I said. The others took a peek at the music room, Alvin and Dave having a little conversation.
"AAAALLLVVVIIIIINN!"
Did I say little?
Alvin's Point of view
"Come on, Dave, Theodore's got to ask Eleanor out." I pleaded, standing on the drum set.
"No problem, but he's not going with the car." He answered, giving me a frown, sitting down on his piano stool.
I returned with a tighter frown. "Oh, come on, why?" I asked.
"Because, Alvin, I know what you're up to. You're planning to have a little joyride with your brothers. That, Alvin, is dangerous and something I won't allow." He answered, obviously.
"What? No, we just wanted to show off our cars." I half lied.
"Well, in that case..." He smiled, giving me relief. "No!" He said, turning my relief into a frown.
"Oh, come one, Dave, what does it takes to have us drive around with the girls and have dinner?" I asked.
"Well, Theodore's going to have to get a ride on Simon's or your car." He said.
That sounded twice as bad. "What? Oh come on, just a little ride? Please?" I gave him the puppy dog eyes that Brittany usually gives me. Somehow, I'm not very good at it.
"Please?" I said, widening my eyes.
"ALVIN, I SAID NO!" He gave me a glare. "And one more thing, you're not good at that." He said, referring to my puppy look.
"Damn, how does Brittany pull that off, anyway." I snapped. "Oh come on, Dave, just for once."
"No." He answered.
"I'll dust the windows,..."
"AAAALLLLVVVIIINNN!" He screamed. That always give pain to my ears.
"I'll clean my room." I negotiated.
"Alvin, drop it. Don't make me ground you, that means don't let me take away your date with Brittany." He threatened.
I stayed silent for a few moment and frowned, until I heard a voice coming from the door, two of them.
"Hey, Dave?" I heard.
I looked over to that direction, Theodore and Brittany approaching us. Both of them jumped up and stood on the drum set where I was standing on.
"What is it, guys?" Dave asked.
"It's alright, Dave. We won't go on a joyride with Alvin, we're just going to have dinner and all." Theodore stated in a sweet voice.
"But,... Theodore, I can't risk it." Dave said.
I listen, but suddenly, Brittany gave a little shove on my shoulder.
"Hey, Alvie." She greeted.
"Hey, Love Puddle, what are you doing here?" I asked.
"Watching the master of cuteness." She answered.
"Well, thank you very much, please hold your applause." I assumed it was me.
"Not you, sudsee, Theodore." My mouth dropped.
"What about me?" I asked in disappointment.
"Aww, Alvie, you're cute too." She placed her paws on my shoulder and pecked me on the lips.
"But, how is he the master?" I pointed to Theodore, who was busy talking to Dave.
"See for yourself."
"Theodore, you're too young to drive, why don't you get a ride with one of your brothers." Dave protested sweetly.
"But, Dave, I'd like to drive just for once. I drove an R.C. before,..."
"But Theo, I-" Dave spoke, but didn't continue.
"Oh, come on, Theodore, don't give me that look." Dave said.
Could it be? I took a closer view at Theodore. His eyes were much widened, his mouth was curved to a sad face, his brows were arched back. Whoa, he IS good.
"Theodore, don't do that." Dave scolded sweetly. I know that feeling of not being able to say no.
"Please, Dave." Theodore pleaded with a sweet, innocent voice. Dave couldn't help but awe in the cuteness.
"aww, come here." He reached for him, placed him on his palm and gave him a hug. After moments, he placed Theodore down and FINALLY agreed. "Alright, Theodore, but don't let Alvin get you to do some stunts, alright? And be careful."
Theodore nodded.
Dave reached for his pocket and pulled out a key that has a green 'T' on it.
"Here, keep it. I'll give you the car, later on."
Theodore took the key and admired it for a while. "Thanks, Dave." He said, before hopping down from the drum set and outside the music room.
Both me and Brittany looked at Dave with a 'whoa, that's new' kind of face.
"What?" He noticed us staring at him.
"Did you just say yes?" I asked.
He sighed. "Look, it's hard to say no to Theodore. Especially when he's giving you that look." He said.
"I know that feeling, dad." I said, looking at Brittany.
Brittany looked at me back. "What?"
I smiled. "You stole that face from Theodore, didn't you?" I tagged.
"Well, I had to make sure that you'll never say no to me." She explained.
I placed a paw on her shoulder and touched her nose with a finger from the other paw.
"Well, you're the cutest girl in the world." I said in a baby voice.
"And you're the awesomest chipmunk in the world." She replied with the same tone.
She pulled my neck closer to her, pressing my lips against hers for a simple kiss.
We heard a sigh coming from Dave. "Please, Alvin, Brittany, I'm a diabetic, please take this somewhere else."
Both of us laughed and hopped out of the music room.
"So, wanna hang out upstairs?" I asked.
"So you want more of last night?" She asked.
"Hmm,... maybe?" I teased.
She gave me a light punch on the shoulder. "Ow!"
"Haha, in your dreams, Alvie." She giggled.
"Does that mean we can make out?" I teased back.
She stopped walking and looked at me with a glare. Let's say I was a little intimidated.
"Hey, I'm just kidding." I said.
"Prove it!" She said.
I didn't know what she meant, I just kind of flinched at it.
"What?" I asked.
But before I knew she could answer, she grabbed my neck and pulled me into a passionate kiss. I was caught by surprise, hehh, why that naughty chipette. I placed my paws on the side of her waist, pulling her closer and deepening the kiss. Sighs were excreted from either one of us.
I felt the urge to placed my paw under her shirt (She was wearing her pink shirt with a pinker jacket over it), and I obeyed. I slipped my paw under her shirt and felt the fur on her belly, she didn't protest. She pulled my neck closer to her for a deeper kiss.
She moaned softly as I rubbed the fur under her shirt, up and down. I slowly let it run towards her chest, caressing it while she gave a soft moan.
I slowly run down from her lips down to her neck, kissing and licking every part down her collarbone, letting her give out another moan.
After a few moments, she pulled and broke away and looked at me with a sly smile.
She leaned in closer to my ear, "Well, aren't you one naughty chipmunk. Why don't we take this upstairs,... somewhere private." She whispered seductively to my ear.
If she still had her estrous, I would'v said no, but now she's normal, I think we can control.
"You're a bad girl,... lead the way." I whispered back.
She took my hand and I followed her up the stairs to the bedroom and continued doing our 'thing'.
I decided to extend the plot. Some people were asking for some Theonor, even just a bit, so I gave them what they asked for. Just a few more chapters and on to the next sequel.
Author's question: Does anyone here think I should post lemons? Because I already made a document that has not been uploaded yet. Basically a side story (Alternate storyline) to chapter 10. Should I post it? It's lemons.
Q: Tell me if you've encountered this conversation.
Girl: Hey, honey, I'm sorry to tell you that I accidentally slept with someone last night. It was just an accident, I still love you, do you hate me? :(
Boy: Of course not, it's an accident right? Calm down, it's okay. :)
Girl: Thank you for being understanding. :)
Boy: Ah, crap, who am I kidding? Who's butt am I kicking? Who is it? Who's the guy? _
Girl: Umm... actually, it was a girl. :(
Boy: hhhhmmm... O_O Tell me more... ^_^