This was how I originally planned to end it. But I figured it would be better for the plot of book two if I ended it the other way
Holly's POV, Above-Ground.
"What is it?" Artemis asked throwing a worried glance at me when Kara paused; I didn't know what but I knew something was wrong and I could see Christine could sense it too but dismissed it when she noticed Kara didn't react
Panicking Christine quickly said
"Nothing it's just odd that Opal isn't taking this chance to insult us…"Christine said "Here I'll transport you up, give me a sec."
The screen fizzled away but the look on Christine's face just before it disappeared worried me
I shut my eyes as the teleporting began, the sensation was… indescribable. pain followed by an odd giddy feeling. I could see and feel a bright flash of light; though my eyes were closed it still was overly bright. The light died down and I opened my eyes to find metallic grey room with an entire wall dedicated to a massive computer screen strikingly similar –if not identical– to the one in Foaly's office.
Suddenly I heard a maniacal blood curdling scream from Opal
"Run Mummy! Run before she-"Kara yelled running towards me but she was interrupted by psycho opal
"OH no you don't!" she yelled, a wild look in her eye as she pulled out a neutrino yelling "you will not ruin this for me you MISERABLE FILTHY MONGRELS!" she yelled shooting wildly all over the place
Frozen in a odd fearful trance of some sort it was shattered by the sound of crying coming from somewhere on my right
'Oh my frond…Kara!' I thought hurriedly as my brain processed everything that happened.
Rushing to her side I knew it was too late
"Kara sweetie its going to be okay, stay with me honey, stay with me" I said trying to will my nonexistent magic to work "Heal! Come on dammit HEAL!" I yelled but to no avail not a single familiar blue spark. Not one.
"Mummy! Mummy what's wrong? Mummy why isn't it working?! Tell me mummy! TELL ME!" Christine shrieked while shaking her sister as though it could bring her back
"I don't know baby… I don't know why it's not working" I said feeling my heart freeze up "I don't know…"
Artemis's POV, Above-ground.
My eyes recovered finally and I saw the heart-wrenching scene before me: holly sobbing holding a limp Kara whose hand was being held by a weeping Christine… oh my god KARA!
"Wha… what happened? Holly what happened?" I managed to stammer out my heart beating a broken beat
"She shot her Arty… Opal shot our baby." Holly said her voice as flat and lifeless as the body in her arms
"She was only seven years old. Seven, and Opal killed her." I said as I felt my heart crumble as I looked at my daughter's lifeless body. I felt like I had been hit by a lorry going 60 KPM, my knees folding under me as I kneeled to sob with the rest of our family. I don't know how long we sat there before LEP arrived.
They gave us a respectful space as they muttered quietly among themselves. Finally I felt a hand on my shoulder as I turned to look
"I'm sorry for your loss but we're going to have to take your daughter's body and get statements from you all. I'm so sorry" he said before having her body gently taken from Holly's arms starting a new wave of tears.
Gently I lifted Christine onto my hip and carried her like I did when she was a little girl
"Come on Holly there is nothing for us here" I said taking Holly's hand to help her up before walking up out of the tunnel made by the LEP.
Christine's POV, Above-ground.
A month after she died they held her funeral, something a little girl should never have to do is go to their own twins funeral.
I sat front row wearing a simple black frock and a simple black ribbon in my hair.
I waited politely while everyone said their good byes and giving their condolences to Mummy and Daddy. Daddy even proposed to Mummy last week, so soon there will be a real wedding, not like the one with Opal.
As it neared time for me to say my good bye I bit back tears and held my last gift to her ever tighter.
It was finally my turn to say good bye. Walking up there I failed miserably at holding back tears as I saw my sister, my twin, laying there lie she was asleep. Leaning over gently I whispered
"I will always miss you Kara, don't you worry I'll make opal pay for what she did. I love you Kara" I said sobbing quietly, as I wiped my tears I put my last gift to her in her hand
A perfect white queen.
How do you like this alternate ending? Is it any good? Is it better?