'A message to all those who felt cheated'
As I've been informed by reviews, this story ended with a sort-of deus ex machina in which a bomb destroys Pandora. I feel that I have let myself down, as you too feel cheated.
My original intent for this story was vague. I had an idea in my head that I liked and I tried to go with it- some ideas that I had I later found out would not be possible in this fiction, in this universe. I have been told that this ending was rushed, and it was. I found myself in a situation where I had these three good characters, but my original intent felt sloppy when I wrote it. Thus, I wrote another ending that wasn't in my mind when I wrote this story.
The real problem with this story was there was no real planning. This is what I feel is my biggest weakness. I changed my mind as to what would happen after the first chapter, as you may have guessed because it would take the humans six years to arrive at Pandora. The event with the Palulukan where Dia looses his finger was going to tie in with the later story, but I instead forgot about it. I found myself with new characters and focused too much on them, and as you may have noticed the presence of Jake and Neytiri faded out towards the end. Without Planning, I couldn't keep track of everyone.
This is by no means an excuse. There are some elements I like in this story, but as a friend of mine said, his favourite chapter was the second one. When I have an idea in my head, I tend to rush the story towards it because I want to put it down on paper. I noticed that the bomb was perhaps a bad idea when I wrote later chapters, finding that with the timer going, I could not write in anything else.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that I'm sorry. I handled this story sloppily and didn't give it the attention it deserved. I urge you to not be put off of my future stories with this attempt and I promise to take extra care with pacing and planning in future.
Again, I'm sorry and hope you can forgive me for what I've done to my characters and to my story.
-Joshua Chandley