'The Bridge' Commentary and Review Responses
Well hey there all ya'll out there -(^-^)/
Well first off, I would like to thank the following people for reviewing:
Pyro-Misa, SoulEaterd17, BIG FAN, Psyka, Vannil, Flickering Ember, Mina, Guest, celestialstarynight, momokol, Yay, passerika3, Guest, Trina Dauntless, saphira54325, JESIMASE, 4everLucky18, Jounin Saryn, Asa Nakamura, Emilykim1504, forty2smurfs, semiharisawkward, Vakaros, and last, but definitely not least, KittyKat1399.
The following people for favoriting:
4everLucky18, Adoglover5, AthenaOwl10, EGUZMAN, ElectroGirl444, HitsuHinaLove, HopelessRomanticCookie, Ilovejoey23, KittyKat1399, Mindlessgal, Oceana26, Officially a Psychopath, Pyro-Misa, SoulEaterd17, chabeliss16, darkangel565, fairygirl123, hawkfrost82 , imaloner, melissamelin momokol, random obsession, semharisawkward
And the following people for following:
4everLucky18, Adoglover5, BLOODYroseGIRL12, EGUZMAN, ElectroGirl444, HitsuHinaLove, HopelessRomanticCookie, KittyKat1399, Marik of Yami, Officially a Psychopath, Pugpie15, Pyro-Misa, RandomName316, SoulEaterd17, Souleaterstories, TheElementalPerson, The Illusionist's Wings04, Vakaros, celestialstarynight, chabeliss16, darkangel565, forty2smurfs, imaloner, magic-pearl, meeshellmabelle, miyuki-miura798, momokol, random obsession, schyra, semharisawkward, skittlesAM
Review Responses
Vannil- Thank You for the kind words. J It raised my ego a lot. xD
Flickering Ember- Dem peeps is sup-sup stup-stup (super stupid xD). I LOVE CHOCO CHIP COOKIES *^*, and that's what milk's for xD. SPAZZING OUT IS GOOD! YANDERE! That is now my new favorite word. xD OH MY GOD iloveyou. Be my bestfriend. NAUW.
Mina- ermergerd I love you too ^-^
celestialstarynight- Yes, I do love to keep people waiting, but not for as long as I actually did through this story. LOTS OF PERSONAL DRAMA IN THAT ONE.
Jounin Saryn- muahahahahaaa… you know all the things :D Thank you, I don't know why it's more popular either xD.
KittyKat1399- Thanks for shortening your name xD. Thanks for being MY very first review and favorite and follow EVAR! 3 loves to you!
Actual Chapter Commentary
Overview- So it was winter vacation, and I was sitting in my neighbor's house because her nephews were over and my little brother wanted to go and stuff and I brought my laptop. I had recently found this website, and was in phase 1 of FF addiction. xD And I woke up and wanted to see how to post stuff on here. So I wrote something SoMa really quick (because I absolutely LOVE SoMa) and posted it while sitting at the dining room table looking like the girl on the cover of Falling in Reverse's album 'The Drug In Me Is You'. And then all this happened. And I loved EVERY minute of it. Except my horrible time keeping and writer's block xD.
Chapter 1- I honestly had no idea what I was doing when I posted this story. Honestly it was just a test on how to post, and I thought "Hey, what if people want me to continue this?" so I put the 'review for more' thing. Then I later realized I was being a review-whore, so I stopped and let you guys flow xD.
Chapter 2- How this came to be is I got excited after seeing that my story got freaking 30+ views in 5 hours, so that night instead of going to sleep I stayed up and wrote another chapter on the notepad on my iPod. I went on the computer the next day and was like "Holy crap that chapter was actually waaaaay longer than the first one." And the views raised, and I got excited.
Chapter 3- Had to put the Maka/Spirit tension in there xD and you GOTTA have sexual tension xD it's just not a story without it. And introducing the TsuStar up in this bizzzzzzzzzz-ness xD and I just saw 'Pitch Perfect' so yeah you can tell by the songs xD
Chapter 4- Maka/Spirit awkwardness, a forgetful Maka, and a Kid; perfect.
Chapter 5- I am honestly not good with writing Black Star. -.- But I like the way he isn't so worried about his ego with Tsubaki. There's TsuStar for you. 3 But a foreshadowing of their relationship… DUN DUN DUUUUN! And getting Kid all worked up! xD I love it… I go back and read the chapters and go 'Whoa. I wrote that?' 'That happened?' 'Where have I BEEN?' like a freaking idiot not even knowing what's in my own story xD. Sounds like me.
Chapter 6- HAHAHHAHAHAAAA BLAIR! I love Blair-chan… =^W^= I knew I somehow had to put Blair in this, and flirting with Soul was the best option xD.
Chapter 7- I love Soul and Maka's banter, so I tried to capture it… not sure if I did a good job… -.- and Tsubaki makes a crapton of food xD. I tried to make the fountain some kind of symbolism, but I'm just completely unorganized xD. Patty's a troublemaker, Tsubaki doesn't know how to use technology, Kid has an OCD, and Black Star thinks he's a god. Dat summary.
Chapter 8- Maka has emotional problems (Which makes her more like me ^-^) But I reaaally felt bad for Maka in this chapter. It also made you guys more anxious about Kid, Soul, and Maka finding out about each other. And I was happy about that. Also, KidLiz tension xD
Chapter 9- There was a reeeaaaally long pause in posting between 8 and 9, so to make up for it, I put a catch up and a jump-forward in time ^-^ hope everyone was alright with that. And the thing with the dream- I had no idea what I was doing, so yeah, it was basically a filler chapter. And then Maka goes out to eat in the same restaurant as she and Soul did, comparing the differences in her experiences ^-^ technological crap FTW! And Kid getting so cutely excited! I love kawaii Kid xD
Chapter 10- If you didn't notice already, I deleted the apology… EEYEAH. And revealing that Maka knows Tsubaki, and Soul is heartbroken that she hasn't talked to him, and Kid is going to give him GIRL ADVICE?! WHAT?!
Chapter 11- I called this the part 2 of the story because Maka's pretty much better now and we're moving on to the next plot-driving problem in this story. This was probably my favorite chapter other than the dream at this point, cause I love Eruka, so that's kinda hard xD. We found out that Maka, Liz, and Patty are cousins, and the invitation for the dinner. I actually planned for more chapters than there are after this, but it flowed. We're getting close to the finale! (Why does Maka let Liz control her so much? xD)
Chapter 12- The shopping! I had to do some dress research before I wrote this. The blue dress I took from a pretty pink one, but changed the color because I love Maka in blue xD. The black dress I invented in my mind with the help of a swimsuit top I found on Google. I want to make this dress. I think I will. Yes. xD A FAMILIAR DRESS lol I got the dream to fit in somewhere! YAY! And I loved how I made them run into each other… teehees for me… Whenever me and my friends go to the mall, we ALWAYS eat frozen yogurt. You just can't attend the mall without fro yo. It makes me sad that I didn't add more of Soul's background though… tsk tsk, going to have to focus on that in the next story xD
Chapter 13- THE BIG FINALE! I'm not sure if this chapter flowed, or if it was kind of choppy, but I really didn't want to do a bonus 'aftermath' chapter so this is what you get. Laziness… Always gets the best of you… The only thing I reaaally want to focus on in this chapter is the eye color meeting. I knew I wanted to do that since Chapter 7. It's such a beautiful way with all the interesting colors Atsushi-san puts into these characters. I actually planned the whole ending and relationships during Chapter 7… xD So Tsubaki's preggos, DAT SISTER CODE and ERMERGERD SOMA KIDLIZ TSUSTAR MY WONDERFUL SHIPS! And had to get the SoMa feels in the end~!
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Love you guys! See you all in the next story!
- Ms. Square