Hey guys, Impact here. First, I would just like to ask you guys a few question on how I did. Please put your answers in the reviews section.

1. What was your favorite character in this Fanfic?

2. What was your favorite part of this Fanfic?

3. I did my best to integrate Jeffrey into the story, while at the same time doing my best to avoid having him become a Mary Sue. Did I do well?

4. What do you think of this Fanfic overall? Did I do a good job on it?

Now that the questions are out there, allow me to explain how I made this fanfic.

It all started when my father brought home a copy of TLBT 2. I had shown some interest in the series before, but this really sparked my overall interest in the series. Then, in June, I came across this site. I immediately began looking for a good TLBT fanfic, and it wasn't long before I came upon the masterpieces that came from Elise Lowing. I really enjoyed her fanfics, but ESPECIALLY the first one, since she had written it so well that it felt more like an action-packed novel rather than a fanfic. This inspired me to do my own. However, my first attempts didn't meet with any success. At first, I tried to do a crossover with Fire Emblem, but complications and boredom from writing that one made me scrap it and go for a normal one. But my first attempt at a normal TLBT fanfic failed because my OC ended up too much like a Mary Sue, so I was forced to go back to the drawing board AGAIN. Finally, I decided to go for an alternate universe fanfic of the first TLBT movie, and I came up with this. Because I don't have the first movie, though, I had to use Elise Lowing's fanfics as a source, hence why some sections share similarities with her. My biggest challenge, however, was making sure that Jeffrey, my OC, didn't end up like a Mary Sue, so I took some steps to avoid making one.

First, his abilites. Even though he is the great grandson of a hero of World War 2, Jeffrey was not originally the Action Hero that he is in the story. Originally, Jeffrey was a very kind person, and he was only planning on beginning to use firearms when he was 18, which is normal. But Alan's disappearance forced Jeffrey to take up hard training by himself as early as 14. He trained himself to run or walk long distances without getting tired, and he trained himself to have extreme accuracy with the M82A1. This explains why he has such great accuracy, and why he has seemingly endless endurance.

Second, his Physical Description. It is a pretty realistic physical description for a human 15 year old male.

Physical Desc

Weight: 125 lbs.

Height: 5'6"

Hair Color: Dark Brown

Eye Color: Icy Blue

Ethnic Group: Caucasian (Well, duh, he's a Scot, so of course it's Caucasian)

For Jeffrey's attire, he usually wears military style clothing, like a camo shirt, camo jeans (those things actually exist), a tactical vest (when he goes outside the valley), and heavy duty boots. This is because he often has to travel a long distance whenever he goes outside the valley.

Third, his personality. Before Alan disappeared, Jeffrey was very cheerful and energetic, as well as being one of the kindest humans in the valley, somewhat akin to Ducky. But when Alan disappeared, Jeffrey spiraled into a deep depression, becoming very withdrawn, since he did not want to fail anyone again. He eventually got out of the depression by pressuring himself to run for long distances without tiring, and began training with the M82A1 to get pinpoint accuracy. By the start of Turas Gu Gleann, Jeffrey is much stronger physically and emotionally, and has gained a dry sense of humor. However, the events of Turas Gu Gleann make him a lot more nervous, and he suffers from a mild case of Shell Shock by the end. The extent of his shell shock is that hearing the kids screaming or crying is a trigger for his anxiety. When anxiety strikes, Jeffrey is far different. If he has his weapon with him, he is a lot more likely to open fire on random objects. As much as his anxiety affects him, though, he is still a kind but firm leader, and actually has the least fear out of the main group of 6, since he is the best in a fight.

Hopefully, by playing his traits realistically, Jeffrey will have avoided the Mary Sue stereotype, something that plagues a lot of fanfics. Sorry if this is so long, but I needed to put in some info in so that you could understand what I'm getting at.