Hello everyone. I'm sorry, but this isn't another chapitre. Rather, I got a rather heated review from someone. So, in light of this, and some things I wanted to get off of my chest, I want to address this review, along with explanations of the top two concerns I keep getting from my reviewers.

First, let's address the review in question while my response is still fresh in my mind.

From Brogramn (Not from myself, but rather someone using my pen name).

No flaws but, you have one utterly stupid decision for the story.

This is SUPPOSED to be Naruto or the other REAL characters life.

But instead you oh-so-very-much focused on a NON-EXISTENT Character that doesn't belong to the series!

Now first tell me, what do you call something in a fiction that has a person who had a bad past, and taking the spotlight in a way whatsoever etc... Don't know? Well let me tell you, it's called a MARY SUE or MARTY STU in a male's case.

So this story's flaw is that big. See what I mean? Sasuke is ooc.

Your corrupted filthy mind did not search nor bother to find out what kind of personality they have. Get me?

This is not a flame, if you consider it so, then be it. I don't care.


I had to take a break and go to class after reading this one out of my mailbox. I really had to mull over what he/she was trying to point out to me. People might consider this a flame, but I don't. Negative reviews are sometimes refreshing from nothing but positive reviews. However, I must admit this one is the most hostile review I've ever gotten.

The first half is also related to my first of the top two concerns: the controversial Haraise. I thought when I first wrote the opening chapitre, that Haraise would be seen as just another OC the author used to put his own touch or flair on the series. What came of it however was more of a litmus test to the readers and Naruto fans. People would read the first part, and then send a review saying they either 1) didn't get why the first chapitre was about an OC, or 2) condemn me for not involving Naruto quite a bit in the chapitre. The proverbial chosen few that read on, however, eventually found out that the story is centered on Naruto's view.

This is quite a shock. And let me be blunt when I say, that I was surprised at the sheer ignorance of the readers who wrote in about Haraise. It almost seemed that they ignored everything about the chapitre except for the first part. I would ask this of future readers: not just my story, but if you ever see a story and only read the first part, you're not getting the whole picture! It is important that you sound informed, and many don't seem to be, to be honest when they send these complaints.

The Second half of the letter seems to speak to the reviewers view on the series. For lack of a better definition, he/she is a Sasuke fan. And by Sasuke fan, I mean the dark, brooding, 'I'm a chick magnet because I treat everyone like trash' Sasuke. Just goes to show what women really want, eh fellas? Forget being nice and considerate, try being a jackass and see if they want to date you then.

A personal joke aside, this Sasuke is ooc because I made him that way. I made it so that he and Naruto grew close at an early age. They were comrades of similar circumstances. And for your information, reviewer, I know Sasuke's character well. For me, it was a process of thinking what Sasuke would be like if he had support from an early age to deal with his sudden clan extinction. If you notice, Sasuke is still a reserved person, but an open person to those he truly trusts. Sounds like something Sasuke would be, right?

You go on and berate me, saying I'm corrupted and defiled. You are acting like I'm a speaker of heresy or blasphemy. Sir/Madam, it's an anime, not the Second Coming of the Lord. I enjoy Naruto, but apparently not as much as you do, as you spit at me for changing one aspect or two of your favorite characters. You say I didn't bother to take a look at the characters or their personalities. I say that you, reviewer, are the ignorant one in this situation.

Now that that's out of the way, I would like to conclude with the other big concern I keep getting. That would be that the fight scenes are too short. People keep saying that they're not long enough, or that characters die way too fast.

I tried saying this before, and I'll say it again. Fighting isn't this intricate and complex ballet of sorts, like one would see in Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon. Fights are simple, effective, and usually end in a manner of minutes.

That fact aside, I also have said before that the fights are longer that one would see on paper. I use phrases and words like "the two combatants exchanged blows, neither seeming to give an opening." I use these to let the reader imagine the fight in their heads, and those can be as long as the reader wants them to be. Apparently though, people think the fight sequence ends as soon as the sentence ends. They think of the period as the point where the fighters go to the next move or attack. This is not, NOT, NOT the case!

The Orochimaru battle, in my head, was at least a good fifteen minutes, of intense fighting. If the readers can't stand to wait that long, or think a battle should be something along the lines of an hour long, then that's their problem. In reality, a fight going on for more than a half-hour is exhausting, and an hour long fight would make it so that both combatants would be numb all over.

Anyways, I just wanted to get this off my chest. Thanks for listening.

KPAAF

The Real Brogramn