why is it called Revenge? well, it's our revenge against Ruto. every chance i got i chucked a stone at her, or threw her, or something of that nature. also there is a strange twist in this chapter...if ya cant figure it out now, it'll be obvious in the next chapter. i am sorry things have been going slow lately. highschool gets kinda busy at the end of semester. i tried to make it as long as possible, and i didn't leave you at much of a cliff hanger, just in case it takes me a while to complete the next chapter. now, on to the replies!

ranma hibiki : lol, funny review, thanks!

Medlei although Ruto would be a lot better with clothes and less of a snobby personality, i think it makes the game more interesting by having someone to hate who is not a villian. or if you are a snobby person, having someone you can relate to in the game ;) lol, thanks for the review!

variabler Sora is not after the character from Kingdom Hearts, she is my own made up character. I just figure Sora would suit her as a name. besides, isn't the Kingdom hearts Sora a guy? Yes, i know Raven has healing powers, but for one thing, she is losing her powers, and for another, it would make everything too easy for them if she can just heal them instantly.

Shadow Link50 really? I made her a snob? i used exact text from the game, (thanks to Ranma hibiki) so i cant have MADE her a snob if that exactly how she is in the game. and dude, or dudette, i have no originality, i'm about as creative as a bucket of water! besides, it's all in good fun, and it's not like it'll insult her or anything cause she isn't a REAL person.

NoOnSh lol, i wont shoot you, i'll only shoot you if you dont review. In the game ruto is kinda pushy, and i used Exact text from the game, so that i dont stray from the facts of the gmae, but i did add some text in this chapter, i dont think i added anything in the previous chapter. thanks for the review

Devil Seifer no prob, just dont forget to review next time, meaning, right now! thanks for the review.

Liobit wow thank you

Midnight's Call raises eyebrow what's an OOC? and thanks for the review

IS It just me or am i short on reviews? oO'' only 8? did i miss anyone? i kno alec dude sent me one but i replied by mail, so thats 9 reviews... it feels too little...

Rite, now on with the story!

Revenge

While Link had Ruto perched happily above is shoulders, the group made their way into the door beside them, and were faced by a bunch of bouncing bubbles.

"Shaboms!" Navi squeaked.

"Your flying lightbulb is annoying." Ruto said, Link just glared at the floor. Sora grinned Evilly and whispered something in Link's ear, so Ruto couldn't hear.

"I'll have you beheaded if you're talking about me in a bad way!" Ruto huffed. Link grinned when he heard what Sora had to say. He took the lead and led the way down the narrow red passage. One Shabom was slowly bouncing it's way closer to them.

"Link get out of the way or that bubble is gonna hit us!" Ruto told him. Link didn't move, but instead chucked Ruto at the bubble causing it to pop. Ruto shrieked angrily.

"HOW DARE YOU!" She screamed.

"My bad." Link said simply. Ruto, red faced, allowed him to pick her up again and carry her on his shoulder. Sora, Raven, and Harry were all trying to stifle their giggling, but in vain. Ruto's face turned a deeper red as she yelled for Link to keep going. The narrow passage opened up to a large room with a lot of shaboms bouncing around in the middle of it, where a large ditch was, preventing them from getting to the other side of the room. Link looked down into the ditch and saw that there were more monsters hidden in the shallow water at the bottom. To their side was a skullatula spider on some rough wall.

"We go down there." Sora said as she jumped down. Harry, Raven and Link followed after her.

"Throw her." Sora said, pointing to the ledge opposite them.

"What?" Ruto shrieked, but before she could object further, Link had already chucked her on top of the ledge.

"But now we're stuck down here." Raven said. Small red shadows in the water were slowly advancing on them, and Link didn't like it.

"Sora?" Link said, pointing at them.

"Just avoid them, go hit that skullatula and get the token." She told him, Link hurriedly went after the skullatula, avoiding the things in the water, and the shaboms.

"Got it!" Link said, running back to them while stuffing the token in his pack. Sora quickly stepped on the switch and the water began to rise.

"Oh, I get it." Raven said miserably as the slimy water rose above their neck level and they had to swim to the ledge Ruto was on. They came out drenched and slimy.

"I hate this place." Link commented as he picked up the grumbling Ruto.

"Join the club." Raven said. They continued down into another narrow passage and out the next opening. This time they were in a small circular room with a moving platform that was making it's way up.

"Duck." Sora said, and as Harry and Raven ducked, Link didn't react fast enough, and a stone was shot from the Octorok in front of them. It was shot rather high though, and instead of hitting Link, it hit Ruto, right in the face. Once again the group had to stifle their laughter and they climbed up on the platform and made their way up while Ruto moaned in agony.

"Put me down Link!" Ruto said, "I don't want you carrying me anymore, I always get hurt! Now I want him to carry me!" She said pointing at Harry, who stood there looking utterly shocked. The group laughed again as Harry picked her up and placed her on his shoulder with an angry glare at the rest of the group. They reached the second room they had gone in since entering Jabu, the circular one with one lonely Bari floating around. They ignored it again as they made their way back into the room where they'd first found Ruto. Avoiding the holes and the Bari, the group exited this room into a narrow passage that split off three ways. They entered the passage to the right, avoid the worm-like things in the passage, and had to huddle on a large switch to get it to press down and open the door for them. Inside were the same red shadows they'd seen before, and the door had locked behind them.

"Stingers!" Navi reported.

"Use a bomb, just throw it in there before they come out." Sora told Link, who took out a bomb, and threw it in the middle of the room. It exploded, instantly killing of three out of the five stingers. Harry used a spell to get rid of the rest. The door behind them unlocked and a chest appeared.

"Treasure!" Link said gleefully.

"Your new weapon." Sora told him as he dug inside the chest taking out a neat looking boomerang.

"Wow!" Link said happily.

"It's very useful. Just use Navi to aim and then launch it." She said. The group made their way out and through to the next passage, and into yet another door, which again locked behind them, and they were met with a long tentacle that dropped down.

"It looks funny." Sora said giggling. Navi flew up to around it and reported back to Link.

"Try and hit it's weak spot." she said. Link looked up to see an area of the tentacle where it narrowed into a thin line. He took out his new weapon with a glint in his eye as he used it for the first time. In just a short while, they were rid of the weird tentacle, and they had obtained a map of the area. The green slime that oozed around this particular area seemed to disappear at the death of the tentacle. They continued onward for a while, battling shaboms, another tentacle, and more ugly monsters, and obtaining a compass. Eventually, after collecting the skullatula tokens in the room they were in, they went into a door which lead to a circular room with a platform in it's centre. Ruto started to wave her arms and squirm as she yelled.

"That's it!" she said, "That's what I've been looking for! throw me up there! onto the platform!" so Harry obeyed and chucked her happily on the platform, where a shining blue stone was. "oh my goodness! I finally found...my mothers stone...I got very upset when lord jabu-jabu swallowed it...while I was feeding him, he suddenly swallowed me! I was so surprised I dropped it inside...but, now that I've found it, I dont need to be in here anymore! So take me home right now!" she finished, no sooner had she said this that the platform she was on began to move, and carried her up.

"Bye bye!" Link said, waving.

"No, not bye bye, she has the stone we need. I've forgotten this was gonna happen." Sora said with a grim expression. From above they could hear Ruto scream.

"What's this? A squid?" she yelled. Then the platform began to descend again, except this time it was surrounded by spikes and a large bulky monster with a big round snout sat atop it. Link pointed up at it.

"Ruto got uglier!" He said.

"No you idiot! That's Bigocto!" Sora said. It jumped down from the platform and stared down at them. The group stared in horror at it. Link just whined. It suddenly spun around into the ground.

"Run!" Sora said.

"Where?" Harry asked, looking around, while trying to avoid the spikes that stuck out into the already narrow area where they were in.

"Just run in circles, in whatever direction the Bigocto runs!" Sora said. She began running one way, but then the Bigocto popped up in that direction. Sora shrieked and began running the other way, along with the rest of the group. To make matters worse, the spiked platform was spinning.

"We're all gonna die!" Link whined.

"No we're not, look we're getting closer to it's ass!" Sora said.

"And why is that a good thing?" Raven asked in a bored tone. Sora side glanced at her and noticed that she ran like the rest of them.

"Why aren't you flying?" Sora asked.

"Um..."

"Now's not the time! What do we do?" Harry asked, saving Raven from having to answer.

"Throw your boomerang Link!" Sora told Link.

"I'm gonna die!" Link said simply.

"My hero..." Sora said in an annoyed tone. Harry instead sent a stunning spell at it. The monster froze and a large green orb appeared in it's behind.

"Ew." Link said, forgetting his panic.

"Hit it with your sword! Quick we don't have much time." Sora told him. Link hastily obeyed and stabbed it twice with his sword. The monster groaned and jumped, then spun around and began chasing them. It seemed to have gotten faster.

"Link hit it with your boomerang when we get close enough!" Sora said. Panting as she ran.

"Fine!" Link said. They once again ran up behind the Bigocto and this time Link managed to hit it with his boomerang. Once again he stabbed at it with his sword.

"Something about this is very wrong..." Link muttered. They continued this pattern until at last the monster gave one last groan before dissolving into a blue mist. The spikes from the platform disappeared, and it sunk into the ground, allowing them to climb atop it.

"So we're done here right?" Link asked, smiling as the platform ascended.

"Nope, that was just a mini-boss, the actual boss is so much more harder to beat." Sora said. Link continued to grin stupidly as he let that information sink in.

Okay listen up, i need you guys to tell me how i can improve, if theres a part of the story you found that didn't make sense, something i missed, orthe paragraph structure is messed up. Just not grammer or spelling, i can figure that out on my own. It's just that i wanna see if i can actually write stories or am i just another teenage author (yes i am thinking of publishing stories in public, as in not online, like in a bookstore..) anyways, i know i'm not that good, but i want to improve so that's where i need criticism. Also any ideas, thoughts or general points are always welcomed in your review.

Game text thanks to ranma hibiki.

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