A non rhyming poem I wrote a long time ago...that's my excuse anyway, if this sucks!

A Warning To All Those That Wish To Be Immortal

Raindrops are dancing above my head
Yet I care not for their brief interludes of sorrow
For my pain is eternal, it knows no bounds
Cursed to walk this Earth for evermore…

Until the Apocalypse is upon us,
Until the seven seas become one,
And the world is engulfed in a maelstrom of storms
And the Reckoning beckons, ever closer…

Little do they realize that I do have a heart,
A heart of darkness perhaps,
A broken shattered heart,
Yet a heart it is, and still it beats.

Relentlessly it beats,
Reminding me of the sands of time passing
Each grain a portion of some mortal's life
One step closer to their ultimate end

I see the creation of the Universe
In a flash of brilliant white
Yet nothing still soothes the pain
Of a lost soul wandering the night.

Yes, immortal I may be, but
At what price has it been achieved?
Too many lost ones, too many loved ones,
All ghosts of mere memories.

So I warn you now, before
You drink that magic potion
For awaits you is
A starlight vial of eternity
And a whole lot of pain.


Go for it...tell me what you think!