And then the reviews began!
Keldeo The Critic- Summer Part 1 Attempt 1 by FictionaryMan03895
(Third Person Perspective this time)
"So here comes my favorite part, Chapter 3: Brotherly Love," Keldeo said.
"Yeah, I like this chapter too!" Ryan said.
Chapter 3: Brotherly Love
Omniscient POV
"Ryan," Jordan's mom said firmly, "be sure to clean your dishes and put them in the dishwasher."
"Yes, Mom" Ryan responded in a friendly voice. After the young lucario did as his human mother told him to do, he came back over to the kitchen table and sat down next to Jordan.
"Wow. I mean, there's Martha Speaks, and then there's this. I mean, you really are a part of the family, Ryan."
Ryan smiled proudly, "Yep! I know! Isn't it great!"
"But don't forget the other characters!" Keldeo said, "They each have their own unique personalities and goals."
"You were awesome today, little bro" Jordan said. "You guys were, too," he said to Sam and Dragon, "especially you, Sam. Maybe I should teach you Rain Dance so then you could be faster than a speeding bullet!"
Dragon, Jordan, and Ryan laughed. However, Sam just smiled. Everyone soon started to wonder if Sam was preventing himself from laughing. He was always known for his seriousness. In fact, two other pokemon that Jordan had always called him "Serious Sam" whenever they weren't happy with his seriousness.
Helping Sam with his sense of humor was one of Jordan's goals for the summer. Another goal was raising Dragon to evolve into a charmelion, and then into a charizard. Dragon didn't care about being a charmelion. But he definitely cared about being a char izard, because he wanted to fly. Dragon's father was a charizard, and he always wanted to be like him. On the day Jordan captured Dragon, he promised that that little charmander would be a charizard someday, so that he could fly just like his dad.
"Hopefully these will be actual plot points that author will develop!" Keldeo said in a loud voice.
"Why are you talking like that?" Ryan asked.
"Uh. . .never mind. . .you sure seem to be confident that Jordan's up to the challenge!"
"I know Jordan can do it" Ryan muttered to himself. The young lucario always had confidence in his human brother.
"Do what?" Jordan asked as he looked at Ryan.
Ryan looked up and responded, "Train Dragon to leap tall buildings in a single bound."
Jordan silently laughed. "I guess you're already more powerful than a locomotive, little bro."
"Well, I wouldn't say 'more powerful'" Ryan modestly replied.
Then Jordan got out of his chair and stood behind it.
"Get up."
"Huh?" Keldeo said in confusion.
"What?"
"That's an order" he said firmly.
Ryan knew that whenever Jordan said those three words, he was serious. Ryan had a bad feeling about this, but decided to do as Jordan said.
"Wait, what?"
"Did I do something wrong, or did Jordan have something to tell me?" Ryan thought to himself. Then Jordan was clinching a fist, and then he grabbed Ryan's scarf. "He was going to hit me! Why?"
"What the-?"
As Jordan pulled his arm back, Ryan closed his eyes and turned away. Then, Jordan gently placed his knuckles on Ryan's left face. Then Ryan opened his left eye and saw that Jordan was gritting his teeth and squinting his eyes.
"OOOOOUUCH!" Jordan screamed. Then he fell on his knees, grabbing his wrist with his left hand. Then Ryan soon figured out that Jordan was joking. He stood in silence and looked at Sam and Dragon, who were at the table, and his human mother, who sitting at the table. Then four out of five of them burst out laughing.
"Jordan, you almost gave me a heart attack!" Ryan chuckled as he looked down at Jordan. "Please don't scare me like that again" Ryan then said as he calmed down.
"Sorry about that. I just having fun" Jordan replied.
". . .Okay. . .I have no idea what that scene was about. . ."
Ryan was chuckling, and he said, "What, you don't get it? Jordan said I was 'more powerful than a locomotive.' When I didn't believe that, he pretended to prove it by punching me, and then acting like I was so strong that it hurt him. Get it?"
Keldeo thought about this for a moment, then he smiled and said, "Oh yeah! I get it! Ha-ha-ha. . .okay moving on! We get to see a Pokemon Sitcom done right!"
"Ryan" Mom said firmly. "Did you take a shower, yet?"
Ryan was now a little bit nervous. He was supposed to take a shower every three weeks, usually to prevent fleas and dry skin, as well as getting rid of the smell.
"Sorry, Mom" the young lucario replied. "I guess I forgot."
"I reminded you early this morning."
"Okay. In my defense, it was around 11:30, and I usually head out the door to Jordan's school thirty minutes before class is dismissed."
"I said 'early this morning'. 9:30 to be exact."
Ryan couldn't think of anything else to say in his defense. "Fine. I'll head upstairs right now." And with that, the young lucario rushed upstairs and into the bathroom.
Jordan, Mom, Sam, and Dragon heard the door shutting and the water running. The fifteen-year-old boy lead the little buizel and little charmander to the backyard, and then he turned around and looked at his mom. "Mom!" Jordan shouted across the kitchen. "Did you make sure to feed Kyle, Max, and Robin?"
"Honey, they're your pokemon. You have to make sure they are fed." Mom said quietly. "And you don't have to shout when I'm in the same room with you."
"Eh heheh... Sorry, Mom" Jordan said as he rubbed the back of his head. Soon, Jordan took care of feeding the other three pokemon that he had. Then he sent them out into the backyard so that they could play. "Be sure not to light anything on fire, Dragon" Jordan called out to the little charmander.
"Charman. Charmander. (I won't. I promise.)" Dragon chanted back as he waved back to Jordan.
"I find this so charming!"
Ryan shrugged, "I don't know. It seems like a normal day for me. Don't Sitcoms usually have something unusual happen every episode?"
Keldeo nodded, "Yeah, but this family has Pokemon, and that's pretty unusual. Anyway, we get a quick scene with Serious Sam."
Jordan knelt down to get closer to the little buizel. "Are you sure you don't want to tell me what's been on your mind for almost a year?" Sam crossed his arms and bowed his head. "Sam, I'm just trying to help you. You need to try to loosen up a little, or else everyone will keep calling you 'Serious Sam'."
"Bui buizel buiz! (It's not like that!)" snapped Sam.
Jordan didn't know exactly what he said, but he could tell that Sam was offended. He sighed as he knelt down and put his hand on the little buizel's back. "I'm sorry, Sam. I just want you guys to get along well with the others. Just try not to get mad at anyone." Sam hugged Jordan before he went outside with the other pokemon. Jordan went back inside and shut the backdoor behind him. He looked up and heard a sudden stop in the running water.
Keldeo though for a moment and said, "Yeah, where are we on the Angry Short Tempered Grouch-o-Meter?"
Suddenly, a meter depicting the faces of various characters appeared, and Sam's face appeared next to it and slowly moved alongside it.
"Let's see," Keldeo said as he watched the meter's progress, "We're past. . . Knuckles the Echidna from Sonic the Hedgehog. . .Oscar the Grouch from Sesame Street. . .which puts us right between-."
DING!
"Yosemite Sam from The Looney Tunes Show and Lucas the Lucario from Breaking the Chains! Wow, that sure is a huge grouch!" Keldeo said in vague, ironic surprise.
Ryan stared at the meter and poked it with his paw, "How did you. . ? I mean, where did this. . ?"
Keldeo shrugged, "The author did it."
"Oh."
"So, now Ryan and Jordan have a flashback about their brotherly bonding."
"Look at you" Jordan whispered.
Believing it was referenced to his fur, the young lucario sighed. "Please don't laugh. I look embarrassing."
Jordan silently chuckled. "I'm not talking about your fur. I'm talking about how you've grown up. I mean... you're taking a shower tri-weekly a-and... it feels like yesterday I was giving you your first bath."
"That was three years ago" Ryan spoke softly. Jordan came over and sat down, leaning against the bathtub. Ryan put the towel back on the rack and sat down on Jordan's right side. "Well, my fur isn't gonna dry up that fast, so I guess we can talk about it."
"Okay. Well,... it was when you were two-weeks-old."
(Flashback)
"Ryan, why are licking yourself?" Jordan asked.
"Riol rio riolu. (I'm giving myself a bath)" the riolu responded.
"Did you just say that you're giving yourself a… bath?" Jordan asked as he raised his eyebrow in confusion. Ryan nodded. "Well… I don't mean to be offensive, but… you're not doing a very good job at it."
"Rio? (What?)" Ryan shouted.
"I-It's not like that, Ryan. I-It's just that… licking yourself doesn't really make you clean. In fact,… it makes you a bit more dirty."
Ryan widened his red eyes in confusion. Then he sat up and listened to what his human brother had to say.
"Ryan, if you want to clean yourself, you need to use soap, not saliva." Jordan explained. Ryan felt disappointed. Understanding the riolu's facial expression, Jordan wanted to help. "I'll tell you what. How 'bout I give you an actual bath, right now?"
"Wait-wait-wait."
"Huh? what is it?" Ryan asked.
"You're a dog-like Pokemon, right?" Keldeo asked.
"Yeah," Ryan said.
"So, why are you doing a cat behavior? I mean, you're not a Meowth or a Purrloin. Licking themselves is what cats do."
"Says who? You're not king of the universe!" Ryan challenged, "If I wanna lick myself, I'll lick myself!"
"Ugh. . .this is really awkward," Keldeo moaned, "Let's back to the story, where the trainer gives his Pokemon a bath. Well, we haven't seen that before."
"What's that supposed to mean?" Ryan said with suspicion.
"Oh nothing. Well, this scene wouldn't be complete without some tickling."
Three minutes went by, and Jordan had already gotten Ryan wet and had already washed his head and arms. Jordan took his soapy hand and washed Ryan's chest, and then as he washed Ryan's stomach, the little riolu began to chuckle lightly. Jordan smirked as he decided to have some fun. Then he tickled Ryan in the stomach. The little riolu laughed more and more, and soon Jordan laughed along with him. Soon the twelve-year-old boy and his riolu stopped laughing to catch their breaths.
"Did you like that, little brother?" Jordan asked as he started washing the end of Ryan's tail. The little riolu nodded and wagged his tail with excitement. "Hold your tail still, little bro!" Jordam chuckled as he grabbed a hold of Ryan's blue, soapy tail. "I enjoyed that moment too" Jordan softly spoke as he continued washing Ryan's tail. "We seemed very happy together." Jordan then looked below Ryan's waist. Thinking that he would have to touch below the waist, Jordan felt embarrassed, and his face turned as red as Ryan's eyes.
"Uh… Ryan,… do you mind… washing… below your… waist…by yourself?" Jordan hesitatingly asked. Ryan looked at his human brother in confusion. Then the weird and awkward thought hit him.
"Ri rio! (I get it!)" Ryan said. "Riol ri riolu! (I'll do it on my own!)" The little riolu stood up and held out his paw to let Jordan fill it with pokemon body wash. Then Ryan turned around and wash-
"We get it!" Ryan said as he quickly pushed the scene aside with his paw.
"How did you do that?" Keldeo said in surprise.
"Uh. . .the author did it?" Ryan offered.
"Does that feel better, now that you're clean?" Jordan asked. Ryan nodded. "Guess you won't have to lick yourself anymore" Jordan chuckled.
Keldeo smirked and said, "Joyful licking scene in 3. . .2. . .1. . ."
Ryan smirked as he gazed at Jordan's brown eyes. Then suddenly, the little riolu tackled Jordan, and as soon as Jordan was on the rug, fortunately with his head up, Ryan started licking him on the left cheek.
"Ryan! Ryan, please stop! That tickles!" laughed Jordan. As soon as the little riolu stopped, he laughed along with his human brother.
(End of Flashback)
"Yeah, that scene was cute, but I want to see something with some hardcore action and heart," Keldeo said.
"Well then, check out the next two flashbacks!" Ryan said.
As soon as Ryan's fur was dry enough, he and Jordan both agreed that he could come out of the bathroom. Jordan went into his room to watch TV, and as Ryan was about to follow in, he decided to go somewhere else. Somewhere for peace and quite. So he walked past Jordan's bedroom door and rushed downstairs.
It wasn't too long for Jordan to figure out that Ryan was missing. "Hey Mom!" Jordan shouted as he rushed downstairs into the living room. "Have you seen Ryan? I've been looking all over the house for him."
Jordan's mom came out of the kitchen. "Ryan told me that he was going to be over by the lake."
"Of course!" Jordan face-palmed himself. He felt stupid for forgetting one of the places his lucario brother loved. "Thanks mom." Then Jordan rushed out the front door.
Soon, Jordan was walking on the sidewalk. Then he came upon a road sign that said, "Verity Lake ahead". Then he walked into the forest. There weren't too many trees there, but there were just enough to consider this place a forest. They were as tall as an average giraffe. Their leaves were bright and green, and their bark's brown color was slightly brighter than Jordan's brown hair.
It wasn't too long until Jordan saw a big body of water. It was the lake. The reflection of the sun sparkled in the rippling water. The lakefront was bright and green. There were also flowers on the lakefront. Their bright white, yellow, and purple petals brought more color to the lakefront, and their sweet scent mixed nicely with the fresh air. It was very peaceful.
Jordan looked around the lake to see if he could find Ryan, who was no where to be found. Then he looked down on his left side, and there the young lucario was, sitting in the shade under a tree, cross-legged with his eyes closed, and smelling the sweet aroma. Jordan could tell that Ryan was very happy. He decided to join his little brother, and sat down next to him in the shade. Jordan took his left hand and gently scratched the back of Ryan's right ear. At first Ryan was startled by this sudden feeling, but then he felt very relaxed.
"Oh… That feels good…" Ryan spoke softly.
Keldeo shrugged, "I guess we needed another reminder that Lucario's a dog-like Pokemon!"
"I can understand why you love it here, Ryan." Jordan kept his voice low. He didn't want to ruin the quietness. "It's so peaceful out here. I kinda wish this was our backyard."
Ryan silently laughed. "Me, too, Jordan. Me, too."
"Although... It wasn't peaceful when we first came to this lake." Jordan smile faded as he remembered a bad memory. When he started to remember it, Ryan stopped smiling as well.
"I remember that day too. It was three years ago."
"You were just one-week-old."
"Now, this is kinda mind-blowing. What happens next occurs when Ryan is only one-week old!" Keldeo said.
"Pokemon are different than humans, Keldeo, you should know that," Ryan explained, "We're not helpless during our first year in life. Pokemon mature very fast. "
Keldeo smacked his forehead, "Oh yeah, now I feel dumb. Most Pokemon can use moves and battle right after hatching."
"So. . .back to story?"
"Right."
(Flashback)
Jordan was shoved onto the grassy ground. He looked up at a stout kid with dark red hair. The sleeves on his white shirt appeared to have been torn off. He was accompanied by a Geodude, who was looking tough and ready to beat Jordan up.
"Shaun, please don't do this." Jordan begged.
The bully drove his left fist into the palm of his right hand. "You should've thought about that before you said 'no'."
"Shaun, for the last time, it was my lunch money. You should've brought your own!"
The big bully grabbed Jordan by his dark grey sweatshirt. "You wanna know what happens when I don't get lunch money? I can't get lunch. And when I can't get lunch, I get hungry. And when I get hungry, I'm not happy. And when I'm not happy, I get angry! Do you wanna know what happens when I get angry?"
"You turn into a big, green, cranky superhero?" chuckled Jordan.
Keldeo deadpanned, "Yeah, I really don't think taunting someone bigger and stronger than you is a good idea. Ever heard of running, Jordan?"
Shaun took his other fist, and violently punched Jordan on the left side of his face. As the punch impacted Jordan, he fell back, into the ground, violently.
"Yeah, not a good idea."
"Lay of Jordan! What about this punk! He even brought his Geodude with him! Why? Jordan didn't have any Pokemon with him! What, was he planning on attacking Jordan with him! What a total psychopath!" Ryan ranted.
"Relax, he gets his. Because here comes Ryan the Super Riolu to save the day!"
Ryaaaaan! The Riolu!
Ryaaaaan! The Riolu!
Ryan slid back as he landed on the ground. The little riolu growled at the big bully as he stood in front of his human brother. Shaun covered his mouth, and then, as he looked at Ryan, revealed a small stream of blood running down his chin.
He's a Riolu!
He's a superhero!
"You… little… TERMITE! You broke one of my teeth out!" The big bully spat the tooth out of his mouth and growled at Ryan. Then he looked at his Geodude. "Geodude! Teach that worthless mutt a lesson!"
He just hatched one week ago!
The small rock pokemon clinched his fists and start bouncing towards the little riolu. As Geodude was about to punch Ryan, Ryan shoved the palm of his paw onto the rock pokemon's forehead. Then, a huge blast of light blue energy burst out of Ryan's paw and out on Geodude. (2)
And his name is Ryan!
The big explosion sent the rock pokemon flying past Shaun and into a tree. When Geodude fell onto the ground, yellow static electricity began to cover the rock pokemon.
He's super smart! And super brave!
Shaun was now intimidated by his dilemma. His Geodude was hurt and paralyzed, and there was an untrained riolu that already knew two powerful attacks. His heart was pounding, and his forehead was sweating, and his hand was twitching as he reached for his poke ball in his pocket.
"F-Forget this!" the big bully stuttered. "I-I'm outta here!" He pulled the weaken and paralyzed Geodude back into its poke ball, and ran away.
"Rio Riolu! (That's right! You better run!)" Ryan shouted.
Ryaaaaan! The Riolu!
"Was that whole 'Krypto the Superdog' theme song parody really necessary?" Ryan asked.
"Of course it was!" Keldeo said indignantly, "Besides, that show was awesome! They need to bring it back!"
Ryan shrugged, "Well, okay!"
"By the way, those bold numbers refer to footnotes on the bottom that tell you what moves Ryan used. Like we're not smart enough to figure out what they were on our own. . ." Keldeo said.
"Not all Pokemon fans are experts," Ryan said.
"Or own a Pokedex, apparently. . ." Keldeo mumbled.
That's right! Team Rocket has received a female Pikachu, and to tell us she's female, she has a flower in her hair! Yeah, it's not like female Pikachu's have any real natural sexual dimorphisms like, oh, I don't know. . .maybe. . .AN INDENT ON THE TAIL TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE A HEART! USE - A - POKEDEX!
"I should read 'Pikachu's Girlfriend' one of these days," Ryan said.
"Don't. Oh, and hey, do you have any hidden skin pouches on your body?"
Ryan looked around awkwardly, "Uh, no. . .why?"
"Oh, no reason. So, Jordan is amazed to see Ryan's power."
The little riolu turned around and ran to his human brother, who was lying on the ground, grunting in pain. Jordan struggled to get up. When he looked up at Ryan, he noticed tears running out of his eyes. The little riolu was terrified at what he saw. There was blood running out of Jordan's nose and lower lip, his face was bruised from all the punches, and there was a big, black eye on Jordan's right side. Jordan grunted as he sat up straight.
Keldeo jumped, "Man! Seriously, Ryan, you could've jumped in a little sooner-."
Keldeo was cut off when he felt Ryan place a paw on his back.
Keldeo gulped, "Uh, n-never mind. . .you can take your Palm- er- paw away now. . ."
"Ryan…" Jordan spoke weakly. "You saved me… I didn't even know you had super powers." The little riolu smiled and shrugged. Jordan reached over to Ryan and wiped away the tears from his eyes. "Thank you." The twelve-year-old boy smiled.
"You didn't know? He's a Pokemon! Of course he has powers! All Pokemon have powers!" Keldeo said in annoyance.
"I think he meant that he didn't know I had learned moves yet," Ryan explained, "That was the very first time I ever used moves."
"Fine, but he could have phrased it better," Keldeo said.
"Speaking of powers. . ."
Keldeo nodded, "Yeah, it's just about that time, isn't it."
Ryan put his left paw on Jordan's right thigh, and then closed his eyes. The little riolu linked his mind with Jordan's, and sent him a telepathic memory.
A memory of the day he was born.
Jordan saw in his mind an image of himself standing in a living room, with a newborn riolu, who was wearing a small, red collar, in his arms.
"I'm gonna name you… 'Ryan'. Do you like that name?" The little riolu smiled and nodded his head. Then Jordan hugged the newly-named riolu, Ryan. "I love you, Ryan." Ryan felt happy to hear that as he relaxed in Jordan's warming hug.
After seeing the telepathic memory, Jordan looked Ryan in the red eyes. He was surprised at what happened next. With his right paw, the little riolu pointed at his right eye, then at his chest, and then at Jordan. Then he held up two of his three fingers.
". . .it feels like I'm missing something. . ." Keldeo said.
"What, you didn't understand it?" Ryan asked in surprise.
Keldeo shrugged, "Sorry, I can't really make those motions out."
Ryan sighed, "Why not think about it for a minute or two."
The music for Jeopardy suddenly starts up, and Keldeo got into a thinking position. The entire musical score played through once, and Keldeo suddenly gasped and nearly jumped for joy.
"I've got it! 'I love you too!' That's what you meant! Ha-ha!" Keldeo cheered.
"Congratulations, it only took you two minutes to figure that out," Ryan commented dryly.
By the way, this isn't criticism of this wonderfully touching scene. I understood this scene perfectly when I read it, and enjoyed it a lot. it's one of the best moments of the story. Keldeo just had a brief moment where he wasn't using his brain.
Ryan had never responded to when Jordan said that he loved him before. Jordan was so happy, he was speechless. Then, with out thinking, Jordan picked Ryan up and brought him into a nice, warm hug.
As Ryan hugged him back, he concentrated on his tail, and deliberately and slowly wagged it.
Jordan gasped and chuckled at the appearance of Ryan's light blue tail. "Ryan! Your tail is wagging!" Ryan looked up at Jordan and laughed.
Jordan let Ryan out of his arms and let him sit cross-legged in his lap.
"Ryan… I know we're not brothers by blood…" Jordan remembered that he was still bleeding. "…Or should I say 'by DNA'. But that doesn't mean we can't be brothers by heart. We'll always be brothers. I promise. But I can't keep this promise on my own. Brotherhood is a two-way street. Can you promise that we'll always be brothers?" Jordan leant his hand out in front of Ryan. The little riolu stared at it for short moment. Then he smiled and shook his paw with his human brother's hand. Then Ryan leapt up to Jordan, and wrapped his arms around him.
"Ri-ol-u rio" Ryan spoke softly.
Jordan didn't completely understand Ryan's speech, but this time, he knew exactly what he said.
"I love you too, Ryan." Jordan wrapped his arms around Ryan.
"And so, they are now, brothers. Wow, this one did it a lot sooner. . . ."
"What do you mean?" Ryan asked.
"Oh nothing, so back in the present. . ."
"Jordan, I really do love you as a brother."
"I love you as brother, too, Ryan."
Then Ryan came up to Jordan on the front, left side, and hugged him. Ryan made sure that his chest spike was gently between Jordan's arm and side. As Jordan hugged him back, Ryan couldn't help but slowly wag his tail. Jordan silently chuckled at the wagging of the tail, and Ryan silently laughed along with him.
"Extended licking scene in 3. . .2. . .1. . ." Keldeo said.
Then, without thinking, Ryan looked up at Jordan and started licking his face, causing Jordan to laugh out loud. The young lucario's tail wagged a little faster as he licked the left side of his human brother's face and as he heard him laughing and begging for him to stop. Ryan soon stopped and laughed along with Jordan. Then Jordan stood up and rubbed Ryan's head. His tail was still wagging, but Ryan was soon able to control it. Jordan turned around and looked at where he came in from.
"We should go home, now, Ryan. Mom's probably getting worried about us." Jordan spoke in a soft, but serious tone.
"You're right. Hey, Jordan?" Jordan looked down at his lucario brother. "When we get home, can we talk more about the camping trip?"
"He had to bring up the camping trip" Jordan thought to himself. He was starting to have second thoughts on it. "Um… Why don't we talk about it on the way home?"
"What? Why? You already invited Rex. Why are you having second thoughts!" Keldeo exclaimed.
"Well in Part 4: What's The Point?-" Ryan began, but Keldeo interrupted him.
"And another this, the first three chapters say chapter, but the remaining chapters say part. Why the change? It makes no sense."
"Whatever. So in Part 4: What's The Point?-"
"We get a pretty silly reason," Keldeo said.
Ryan looked away form the TV and looked at Jordan, who was lying down on his bed, with a depressed face, and his left hand on his forehead. Ryan was starting to worry about Jordan. Then he thought about reading his mind.
"No!" the young lucario thought to himself. "I shouldn't read his mind. That's a bad habit and an invasion of privacy. I should just ask him." So then, Ryan got up from the couch and walked over to Jordan, and put his paw on Jordan's right shoulder.
"Oh yeah, and Ryan can read minds. Yeah, that's not important."
Sarcasm Sphere Self-test complete.
"You okay, Jordan?" the young lucario asked his human brother. "You don't look so happy."
Jordan brought his hand down and inhaled air through his nose. Then he exhaled it and said to Ryan, "What's the point in all this?"
"What do you mean?"
"What's the point in this camping trip? I mean… it's just pointless and mindless violence! That's all we are just doing! Fighting. I feel like… this is just… sin and vanity.
"That's the whole point of the entire Pokemon World! Battling! He just literally stated why Christianity cannot exist in the same world as Pokemon!" Keldeo exclaimed, then he face hoofed and said, "I'd hate to borrow from a sub-par comedy but. . .take it Patrick Star!"
Patrick looked at the campfire and said, "Hey, if we're underwater, how can their be a-?"
The fire then promptly went out.
"You see what he did there! He broke the story!"
"If you would read the next sentence. . ." Ryan said in an irritated tone.
"Jordan, I don't think this is a sinful thing. I mean, there isn't any killing. It's… like a sport, like soccer or boxing."
"But then," Keldeo replied.
"Okay. Maybe it's not sin, but it is still vanity. There's no importance to it." Then Jordan sat up and crossed his legs. "Ryan… I think we should cancel the trip."
"What? No! Jordan, I think you're looking at it the wrong way!"
"Ryan…, please just leave me alone."
Keldeo shrugged and started to leave, "Well, that's it! The story's broken! Bye Ryan!"
THE END
Performed by Keldeo of the Swords of Justice
Credits
"Wait! Wait! Hold on a minute!" Ryan shouted desperately as he pushed the Credits aside.
"Will you stop breaking the Fourth Wall!" Keldeo shouted, "I mean, how could the story possibly recover from this? How could the author possibly turn this around?"
Ryan stared at Keldeo for what felt like a long time, and then he said, "The best sources of wisdom are people who are older than you, right?"
Keldeo nodded.
"Job 12:12 says 'Wisdom is with aged men, And with length of days, understanding.' Proverbs 1:8 says 'My son, hear the instruction of your father,' right?" Ryan continued.
Keldeo nodded again.
"Well then," Ryan said with a smile, "Dad reminded us about a certain Christmas morning. . ."
"Jordan doesn't want to do the camping trip anymore, because he thinks its pointless" Ryan answered.
"Is that true?"
"Yes, Dad. I just think… this is just a waist of time."
"That's not true, son" the dad replied. Then he turned to Ryan, who was now standing in front of the bed. "Ryan, can you bring your compass to me, please?" he said as he pointed at Jordan's desk, which was across from them.
"Sure thing, Dad" the young lucario responded, and he walked over to the desk and picked up a small hand compass that was next to Jordan's computer. Ryan opened it up and saw a small picture of Jordan in red pajamas, Ryan, as a riolu, wearing a red collar, a treecko, and an eevee. All four looked very happy, and in the background was a Christmas tree. Ryan brought the compass over to his human father, and gave it to him. The dad then showed the picture to Jordan.
"Do you remember when this picture was taken?" the dad asked.
Jordan looked at the picture and smiled. "It was Christmas morning, the year before last. Ryan was able to talk just like a human, and it was his last Christmas as a riolu."
"That Christmas changed… your lives."
(Flashback)
Then Jordan pulled a package out from under the tree. The package was as big as a shoe box, and it was covered in red wrapping paper and a green ribbon. He tore the paper off, and revealed a cardboard box. Jordan then opened it up, and he and Ryan peeked inside. They were both surprised at what they saw.
Inside the box were two poke balls and a navy blue pokedex with a poke ball decal on the case.
"Dad…" Jordan muttered as he brought the pokedex out of the box. "Is this…"
"An actual pokedex? You bet it is."
"Dad… I don't know what to say. Thank…"
"Pretty cool, isn't it? Why don't you pull out your poke balls, now?"
"Okay." Jordan pulled the two poke balls from the box, and tossed them onto the floor, away from the Christmas tree. As the poke balls opened up, one pokemon came out of each. Jordan and Ryan were amazed by the sight of both pokemon. One of them was a little, light green gecko with a dark green tail and yellow eyes. The other was a cute, brown fox with long, white fur on his neck. Jordan grabbed his pokedex and scanned both of them.
"Let's see. How about I name you…" he said as he pointed at the treecko. "…Kyle. Do you like that name?"
"Treecko!" the little treecko said enthusiastically.
"He said that he loves that name" Ryan said.
"Thanks, Ryan" Jordan said. "Now. How about I name you…" he said as he pointed at the eevee. "…Max. As in like 'maximum possibilities'."
"Eevee eevee!" the little eevee shouted with excitement as he performed a backflip.
"Ryan, I don't need a translation for that."
Keldeo shrugged, "Yeah, I'm seeing some back-story for Jordan's other Pokemon, but-."
"But there's more," Ryan cut in.
Jordan then stood up along with his father. "Dad, I don't understand. Why are you giving me a pokedex and two additional pokemon for Christmas?"
The dad then put his right hand on the fourteen-year-old boy's left shoulder. "Because next year, you'll need them."
"Wait. Dad, are you… letting me be… a Pokemon Trainer?"
"Yes. I want you to explore the pokemon-inhabited region of Washington and Canada. I know that you and Ryan want to have an adventure, and that you two want to help me with my studies. There is still a whole lot about pokemon that the world doesn't know. You two can store as much data as you can in your pokedex, study pokemon, and you can have some fun on the way by training and battling pokemon. So here is my question: do you want to go out there and explore the pokemon-inhabited land?"
Jordan was overwhelmed. He had no idea what to do next. Then he looked down at Ryan, Kyle, and Max. Jordan then smiled and looked back at his dad.
"I'll do it. Thanks, Dad." And with that, Jordan hugged his father. "Merry Christmas."
"Merry Christmas, Jordan."
(End of Flashback)
"Maybe I should have been more thorough with this" the dad said to Jordan, who was now sitting up, with his back on the pillow. "Jordan, we know that these are God's creations, right?"
"Of course we do, Dad" Jordan replied. Then he looked at Ryan, and rubbed the young lucario's head. "One of them is right here."
"Jordan, God wants us to know more about what He has created. And remember what Reverend Peter said at church last Sunday?"
"He said that God has a plan for each and every one of us" Ryan responded.
"Thank you, Ryan" the dad said before he turned back to Jordan. "Jordan, if this is God's plan for you and Ryan to explore and study what He has created, then I believe that canceling the trip would be the wrong thing to do."
"Dad's right, Jordan" the young lucario said. "You're like the team captain and I'm like the goalie, on one of God's many teams."
Jordan stared down at Ryan's compass. He looked and saw that the red needle was pointing right at him. He thought of it as if Jordan was heading south, and he was supposed to go north. Then he looked at his dad and his brother.
"You're right, and I guess that the gym battles and the tournaments are another way to meet new pokemon, and to have lots of fun along the way." Jordan then closed his eyes, and bowed his head. "Thank you."
"So the trip is still on?" Ryan asked.
"Definitely" Jordan said as he gave Ryan a light punch on the arm.
"Thanks for your help, Dad" Ryan said to his human father.
"You're welcome, Sport."
Soon the dad left the room, leaving only Jordan and Ryan.
"You're such a good brother, Ryan" Jordan said.
"Thanks, big brother" the young lucario said. Then he held out his right paw. "Can I have my compass back, now?"
"Sure" Jordan said as he gave the compass back to Ryan. Then the two looked out the window that was behind them. They looked past the horizon, and saw a mountain. Ryan stood in front of the window and held his compass forward. He and his human brother looked at it, and saw that the red needle was pointing towards the window, towards outside, and towards the mountain.
"We're heading in the right direction" Ryan said.
To Be Continued…
Keldeo's eyes became so wide and sparkly that he almost looked like a My Little Pony.
"OH - MY - GOSH! That was poetic! That was gorgeous! That was a flawless melding of two worlds that so many people have felt were unrecognizable!" Keldeo exulted. He then smiled and pulled a sly look, "You knew what you were doing, FictionaryMan. Oh, you knew how the reaction and build up would go. Oh, you knew!"
Keldeo jumped for joy, and reared up on his hind legs, kicking his front legs around in excitement. "What a glorious illustration of what achievement and aspirations means in the lives of those who follow the plans God lays out for them! How contests, challenges, exploration, and the enjoyment of life is none other than a gift from God Himself!"
Ryan stepped back as Keldeo began prancing and trotting around in happiness, "Hey, Keldeo. You can relax now. . ."
"And with the incredible illustration of the compass pointing them onward on their right, true path! HA! Take that, foul 'Golden Compass'!"
Ryan smiled and shook his head, "Well, I guess it is about time for another one of those breaks anyway. . ."
We'll be right back!
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