Flame's comment corner... Comments I have about the story so far that I want you to know
HEY, FURIOUS, I'M TELLING THEM ALL OUR SECRETS...about fc
I know that people don't like when someone posts a chapter of one huge author's comment...But this might be all you're getting for a while, saldy, so I'm posting it anyways...
And because I need to Rant...
And please leave a comment to let me know if I should just shut the HELL UP ALREADY
K, on to the comments about the story:
'Moments'
Looking back on a lot of this stuff...I cannot believe I wrote it... Or hmm, actually I can't believe I wrote it and then showed it to Furious and then posted it...I was on something...But then again, Furious, you wrote a lot of 'moments' too..i'm gonna count them out now dammit...
K nevermind, all I know is theres a very 'holy omg' MarVex scene by Furi...
-Uh... I did the XemSai "No one will hear you scream" conversation
-Listening through the doors on Friday to find out who was where...and some inapropriate sentances I almost wanted to finish...
-Axel being suggestive after saving Roxas from Friday...
-Ok I found the marvex scene O_o That scene isn't one of those things where it's like "Ok, they probably mean something else, not that.." It is that...As far as I know...
-And I found the end of the XemSai scene not written by me...That scene is one of those scenes where it's like "Ok, they could mean something else, not that"
-Most of these 'moments' just strongly imply that something has happened...
Weird fact: the part after axel saves roxas from friday and he's like "do u wanna go out sometime?" that's not how it originally was... Something else happened...like, more stuff... And in the scene where Sora bursts in the room, Roxy wasnt wearing any clothes... I'm sure that in older versions of the chapters, I still have the original scene...But Furi owns this story just as much as I do, and she wanted to change it, so I don't have a right to show you that original scene...Unless you ask for it...
OK another 'holy omg i cannot believe I wrote this' part uh... BLAME CRACK...AND THEN HE DIED, DRUGS ARE BAD, THE END...
O_o I want to hurt myself for writing that... (Yeah, this is me reading through the story and posting my reaction here, without telling you what I was reacting to)
Favorite Scenes:
-So hard to choose... But I think my favorite was when Axel walked into his room and Xigbar is just there with a monopoly board XD
-And when Axel asks "Why the Hell why?" I'm sure it's completely incorrect but it just sounds right...
-And with the board games: "Xigbar is ALWAYS on top" Comment... You know what, I could just rewrite every line in the story here O_o...
-That one part with Roxel and Axas...
-And the 'Do all three' comment
"All three who?"
-"Because I'm wasting all your minutes"
"Dammit, got it memorized?"
-And when Riku wakes up in the castle and spazzes out: "Oh my god the ghost was right! I"M SORRY. I"LL KISS ROXAS AND SORA WHATEVER YOU WANT, just don't hurt me!
The Author
Originally our comments to the characters, we changed it cuz I wouldn't want to read a story of the writers talking to the characters... And by changing it...Look where it got us...another like... 18 or something chapter just because of that alternate relaity book. And in as otry, with barely any plot and the plot line looks like
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with a million different plots/parts/story arcs or whatever that we should have seperated into different stories, that book is what holds it all together...
So they're Xigbar's comments...Or Demyx depending on who has the book at the time
The Narrator
Started with...Axel, I believe wanting to narrate himself cuz he didn't like the narrating or something, I don't remember...
Sometimes it's real narrating the character's don't hear...
Sometimes it's the Narrator Narrating... Which is usually written in italics... The identity of the narrator is still unknown (and we don't know if we should keep it that way or not)
But the characters didn't like the narrator, so a new one appeared...Who seems to act almost the same as the old narrator...
"Too bad, I'll narrate my own life, thank you very much!"
And just cuz I love love love these lines:
"I was uh...Going to clean up your lab for you! Axel looked away, he always did that when he told a lie...Oh shit, now you know i'm lying. Facepalm...Well whatever, i'm gonna go look for Demyx's Diary. Axel walked out of the room leaving behind a confused Vexen."
The Weather...
It was summer when we first wrote this...Ands ummer has a particular...feel to it...One that I can't describe and Furious understands it but no one else gets it...
It has a certain...smell almost,but not a smell, well kind of...
It's warm, and the air feels warm and kind of humid when you breathe, and the windows are open so you get the fresh air..there's a difference in smell between fresh air outside and fresh air inside... And just re-reading these chapter, i'm reliving the moments of how the weather was cuz that's how my mind works...And when that weather and everything that comes with it is back, I can write more chapters like that...I hope someone out there understands O_o
I will also need more crystal light juice power crystals..I used to just eat that stuff i didn't even mix it in water...It was like those sugar filled straws only WAY more powerful...
And as soon as we wrote the power outage/thunderstorms chapters, we started having that kind of weather, which was creepy...
Fun Fact about Flame: Becuase of the "Cat's eye" scene, I now refer to myself as "The Cat's eye"
Roxel and Axas:
I must make a seperate section for these two...I suppose what Xigbar thinks Axel and Roxas' kids would look like...O_o He wants them to have kids, lol jk...
I love their lines..."Fear the cat's eye"
"Uh, I think we gotta die now..Orders from THE BOSS. See ya!"
"Oh my god we're fading away!" They both faded suddenly...O_o
"Hey, I won!" Victory music started playing in Axel's head. "Oh wait, that's my ringtone." He answered his phone. "Hello? Got it memorized?"
Cuz I didn't want OC's in the story too long and I didn't know how to get rid of them O_o
Ringtone joke from Advent Children...
I'm just gonna end it here because I don't want to bore you too much...But these are comments I've wanted to make about the story...
And if this wasn't my story, I would want the Author to tell me a bit about what was going on in him/her/mar's head...
*Manually spell checked so I'm sure I missed something*
So yeah, no filler chap right now...sorry lol...
I'll post this at the bottom, but really it's at the top now...And I keep adding to it every 2 seconds..whoops Comments I have about the story so far that I want you to know
K First off, this part here is not an Author's comment cuz I'm writing it in the actual word document before writing this chapter thingy...So it kind of is, cuz i'm the author and I'm commenting...but not about the chapter... So never mind...
I want a Q & A... I don't care if you don't have any questions, cuz starting now, you have questions..
jk, any questions anyone has about FC or about us...Just ask, even though no one cares about us and won't ask about us anyway...
Also more suggestions for what you want more of in the story... We will be adding more Zexion cuz you asked for it too...
I live for yaoi basically...so ask for more romantic scenes lol...of specific characters