Freedom has a Price

by Bleedndreamz

Naruto had a problem. He had no one to train him for the chunin exams, but more importantly, he had no one in life there for him that would also judge him. So naturally he was desperate. Yet you know what they say... "Desperation only attracts vultures."

25. Story is being rewritten

I bet you all never imagined to see this even get another chapter post? Well, neither did I. Anyways I decided the other day to read over the story a bit, as well as some of the reviews. In the past couple years, I have grown a bit as a writer. However my understanding of developing characters has grown greatly. So I have decided as a bit of a project to return to this story in hopes to shape it into something I myself can enjoy now.

So for me this means making the characters a bit more thought out. Making the plot points and sequencing of the storyline a bit more compelling. Adding things in to portray a better story. Better dialogue between characters. Things like that.

Anyways why I am here telling you all this is not to get your hopes up or anything like that. I cannot promise that once I go through all of the chapters that I will wish to continue the story. It is my goal that by going through these chapters that the new product will feel like a new, but better story entirely.

What I am looking for is beta readers for this story. Now what I ask is please, don't just ask to be a beta reader to just take a peek at the story early. You don't have to worry, it will start to be posted relatively soon. So those people aren't what I am asking for. I am looking for those people that really loved the story, but felt that I could have done things better or differently. I want people who understand how to develop a story, and how to make compelling characters.

The things I am looking for are ways to make situations in the story feel more compelling and believable to the reader. So I am toning down on the bashing that I didn't realize I was doing when I was younger. I am changing the order in which some circumstances happen, and adding in completely new ones altogether. If you think you would be a good fit for this sort of thing, leave a review or PM me. I will email you what I have done with the chapter, and would like to receive your feedback on it before posting.

I will be taking down this chapter within a few hours, as I am working on this right now. (So really only reply if you have some free time on your hands as well.)