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Before Eragon had a chance to voice any objections, Telsy said from the opposite side of Cyvr, "From the time I was ten to eighteen, every dragon egg was presented to me. None hatched. I was seen as a leper to all the other children who had dragons hatch for them- I was royalty, daughter of Vrael, expected to have a dragon by the time I turned five years old, but not one egg would even shudder at my touch. Then Cyvr appeared out of an invisible cloud, a dragon whiter than Isidar."
We both needed each other, Cyvr continued. I had no Rider and she had no dragon.
"I was on Vroengard, in my father's castle. The entire city of Doru Araeba was in ruin- Galbatorix was on his way to finish my father- Isidar had been poisoned months before and died that morning. I didn't know his Eldunarí was on the island as well, or I would have taken it right then. I had no idea what was coming. My mother had been taken hostage and there were no other Riders and dragons left- except Oromis and Glaedr. I remember that morning very well- total and complete chaos. He told me to stay in the castle, he was going to handle Galbatorix and be right back. That was really the only time my father ever showed any emotion or caring for me. But there were no guards left, no one around to watch or protect me as my father went to his death."
I chose that time to show myself to Telsy because Galbatorix was distracted, Cyvr said, and when Galbatorix came back to raid the castle after finishing off Vrael, Telsy had disappeared…
If you truly are the unnamed dragon, Saphira interceded, how are you smaller than Thorn and I? You must be centuries older than Glaedr and yet you are no bigger than eight months old.
It is one of my more noticeable defects, Cyvr responded, I stopped growing almost seven hundred years before Galbatorix's birth. Although my lack in size works to my advantage at times when I wish to pose as a hatchling.
"Wait," Eragon said, "If you're really not from this time period and you didn't hatch for Telsy, then Galbatorix must still have the last egg!"
Telsy nodded. "This is another reason why Jarnunvösk is so important. The longer we keep Galbatorix distracted, the longer we have in the castle. The longer we have in the castle, the more valuables we can take."
She paused. "Arya should be right behind us. She'll get the egg while Islanzadí and her elves will take care of the Eldunarí's and we'll take Shruikan."
Their procession began moving once more.
Insane, Saphira said to Eragon, Cyvr must be over 1200 years old!
He must know so much… Eragon replied, so much knowledge of the Ancient Language, the elves and dwarves. He's managed to survive through two wars and kept his entire existence secret from Galbatorix…
Several moments passed, and the tunnel began getting narrower.
Saphira growled, pushing herself forward. Her wings grated on the walls.
We're almost there, Cyvr said. Arya should be right behind us.
On cue, footsteps could be heard coming up behind Saphira.
Eragon, Telsy, Saphira, Cyvr, Arya said, greeting them.
I told them of Cyvr's true origin, Telsy said, they know everything now.
Arya was silent for a moment. It was your choice, she said finally.
A sliver of light could be seen in between Cyvr's shoulder blades.
Arya, Telsy said, you must find the last egg whilst Eragon and I go for Shruikan. Is Galbatorix still on the roof?
Yes, he is still talking with Jarnunvösk. But it won't last for much longer- he's not a fool, Telsy. He's aware that we're almost in the castle. He won't let even Jarnunvösk distract him from killing us all. Speaking of killing us all, Arya said, her voice thick, how are we going to get back out of the castle after…this?
Telsy replied, We're not leaving until we stop him.
How are we going to do that? Eragon asked.
We're going to banish his name, Cyvr answered.
