Old Chapters Revised!

Hey readers,

Sorry to say this isn't Chapter 26, but as I mentioned in the hiatus announcement, I was thinking about revising the first ten chapters (and intro). I went ahead and did all of that anyway, and now I'm simply letting you all know.

They're still largely the same (Chapter 7 actually has very few changes at all), but just with better plot consistency, less wordy sentences, and expanded-upon dialogue, now that I actually have a better understanding of the characters.

I might revise more of the story, if I have the time, but fate will decide that (also, I've never really thought much about writing different stories, especially for Yandere Simulator, because I can't keep a consistent idea going).


In other news, I've also been scouring the internet to find famous people who kinda look like the Sisters, so that you all have an idea of their individual appearances. I'll say who here in case you don't read my notes at the beginning and ends of chapters. I'm also writing out each Sister's respective song I associate with them.

Massacre: So far, I haven't really found anyone who looks like Massacre in real life, since her face is rather unique. Not that that's a bad thing, obviously, but it's actually something of a good thing, because it reinforces the idea that Massacre is pretty attractive (not in a beyond-belief way, of course) compared to the rest of the Sorority if you can't really think of a comparison to judge against. This might change as I keep looking though. Her theme is "Countess Bathory" by Venom.

Carnage: Her model (whom I found out is pregnant and pretty close to due recently) bears a fair resemblance to Emmi Silvennoinen, ex-keyboardist of Ensiferum (Finnish folk metal band), but Carnage also has Silevennoinen's replacement Netta Skog's more youthful looks as well. Given Carnage's character, the comparisons are strikingly appropriate. Carnage's song is "Valhall Awaits Me" by Amon Amarth.

Cutthroat: She looks a lot like Léa Seydoux, whom my fellow Americans may recognize mainly as "that blonde French girl from Mission Impossible 4 and Spectre." There's a few small differences in that Cutthroat has a wider mouth and thinner lips, along with more flared out nostrils (yes, I'm aware of how odd that sounds, but it's true). I think of "Jesus' Tod" by Burzum as Cutthroat's theme.

Frenzy: The most accurate comparison I can make to Frenzy is a tanner Evanna Lynch back when she was playing Luna Lovegood in the Harry Potter movies, mixed with Torturer the Noise Raptor as mentioned on my bio page (mainly in wearing a mask, having bloodshot eyes, and a short blonde haircut, but swept in the opposite direction in the case of Frenzy). "Raining Blood" by Slayer is Frenzy's anthem.

Lacerator: In terms of general face structure and eyes, Lacerator looks like Marion Cotillard, but her actual expressions look more like Bunny Meyer, aka grav3yardgirl. Given her nature, Lacerator's song is "Hail, Genocide!" by GWAR.

Bloodmaw: Resembles a younger Maggie Gyllenhaal with a less lined and waxy face. "Fuck Off and Die" by Darkthrone is her tune.

Huntress: As Shawn Raven pointed out to me a long time ago, Huntress looks like Shailene Woodley, though I also see a bit of Emma Watson as well. I associate "You Better Run" by Motörhead with Huntress.

Knives: Knives is almost a dead ringer for Janis Joplin, just with a thinner face around the cheekbones down to the chin. Like Carnage, given Knives' characterization, the comparison is very appropriate. As I mentioned way back in Chapter Five originally, Knives is one of my personal favorite Sisters, so I have a few songs linked to her. They are "Breaking the Law" by Judas Priest, "Fire in My Heart" by Huntress, "Supernaut" by Black Sabbath, and "3's and 7's" by Queens of the Stone Age.

Executioner: She took time to find a lookalike, but the closest I could manage is Jennifer Lawrence, but with more squinted eyes and thinner lips. Executioner's anthem is "Until the End" by Breaking Benjamin.

Legion: Legion was tough too, but I finally decided Miley Cyrus is the best I could come up with, but with bigger, wider eyes. Legion technically has two themes, "Animal I've Become" by Three Days Grace in her normal state, and "Bleed" by Meshuggah when the Voices and herself go crazy.

Bonesaw: The Sorority's medic looks largely like Renee Zellweger before getting work on her face done, mixed with Elizabeth Gillies to offset the age gap between Bonesaw (age 31 in the story) and Zellweger (47 as of this writing). Finding a song for Bonesaw is difficult, so I'll come back and write this in as soon as I find it.

Anyway, feel free to go back and read the new versions of the intro and Chapters 1-10!