The What If Anthology?

by FFCriticReviewer

In a single story, we ask the "what if?" question and try to find answers to the archive's most personal heart of characters, events, stories, and even explore the wonders of "what if?" it can.

35. Marches45

Story:

Payback (Carine: The Mind of a Psychopath) by Marches45

Star Rating: 0.5 out of 4 stars

Review: The funny thing about cartoons is that we know that two characters like each other and are going to end up together, but a fan pairing is actually more stronger than the actual canon one: Gumball and Carrie. These two have connected in the most bizarre scenarios, but have any actually proceeded successful (with the exception of The Dark Night Of The Soul)? No, they haven't. Now, many stories have started this kind of rave with fan childs with their own shenanigans. Let's begin:

Gumdrop (OC) has discovered a prank when someone has written on his forehead. The culprit is Carine (OC, yet again), who has been the victim of abuse. Now, with the tables turn, the person in control isn't the man of the house, but rather the woman of the house.

I have to say that the story is very childish and breaks so many character traits. If Carine is now more dominated by natural causes and could have done it, then how could she have been lowered to the little guy when she had it in her, with no back-story? Along with some of the very few unnecessary OC and characters to be appear, it doesn't seem they should be involved in this. The idea of sibling rivalry has been done and trash, but this isn't an exception. I don't this story understands the meaning of children, unless they wanted to be a kiddie plot with adult dialogue, which doesn't work out, unless you know how to use it. We have OCs with no intention refresh our minds of who they are, and just assume them as the children of a pairing that doesn't have enough kids of their own to prove who they are.

I did like the fact it didn't have as much grammar errors as the usual stories here. The characters, though...maybe needs a different change.

One-Shot: A story of OCs that are too old to be still fighting, with little to no ground of realism anymore of this overrated pairing of children: Gumball and Carrie.

Summary: We have your favorite pairing, Gumball and Carrie, have their kids at their own shine, but show that they have too much bad parenting to be a dark and very un-amusing very of Cheaper by the Dozen. Each OC is there by respected owners, but what sort of reason do we have to explain it forward?

~ I'm Fan Fiction Critic/Reviewer Henry Peters