A/N: Well, I have some depressing news. I knew that sometime, I would get that harsh review from someone who clearly didn't understand the concept as a whole for my story. And that review can be seen when you click to see the other reviews.
Now, I have sent a message back to this user, and I will place the explanation for his/her "problems" here.
1 - "Good job. You've created yet another Mary Sue."
Well...acually, no. She has weaknesses (total faint count: like 6) and she has a temper. She is emotionally unstable and relies on a constant to keep her going.
2 - "And you're a little late. There's already a god(dess) of the night and a
god(dess) of the changing seasons."
See Chapter 10 (Zeus speaking)
"I believe that we have a very serious matter to discuss. The fact that the goddess Nyx, the goddess of night...has faded."
This is an issue I understand. IN THIS STORY, the goddess has faded! Is there anything wrong with such as that? No, I think not. I used my imagination to fix a previous error, and that's okay.
Chapter 10 (Demeter speaking)
"And...the changing of seasons, you realize...usually falls to me. But I have been made aware of your powers being when the few days where it is not quite fall, nor spring, nor winter or summer."
Example of this: It is whithin the calender year of "fall" but it is 100 degrees F. ...not fall, not winter, not spring, not summer!
(Ps - I also found some more issues with this. HELP!)
Thank you for reviewing and at least TRYING to look and examine the story before critisising it. This review has hurt my feelings... (woah, that sounded cheesy).
UPDATE on this Note:
Sorry if I sound like a brat. I'm not, really, and I'm just trying to get a point across. That point is: I'm not really experienced. This was my first story, and I was not understanding in the ways of the fanfiction proper writing system. I hope that "get" this in the way that I hope you will. I'm currently working on a new story with Brian (Tell your friends!) and that'll probably have less issues with the storyline because Brian isn't a goddess or whatnot. I'm happy that some people like this story, and if you don't...please don't leave a flame review stating how my story is messed up and that I should delete or majorly change it...'cause I'm not going to. I'm going to keep writing, and learn from my mistakes as I go along. I don't have a fanfiction magical godmother (bibbity, bobbity, boo anyone?)...so I'll teach myself with some guidance from others. In the future, PLEASE sight chapter problems NICELY so that I can fix them, and if it's a storyline error BEFORE chapter 21, I'm not going to go fix it.
Please don't hate me, think I'm immature, or stop reading just because I blew up a little at my first flame...please?
Sylvanna