He's baaaaack…

DISCLAIMER: Death Note… For me? Thank you Ohba-sensei! Thank you, Obata-sensei! Don't worry, I'm only going to borrow it for a while…

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::BONUS 6::

LIGHT YAGAMI REVIEW: SECOND OPINION

A.I – Alternate Incarceration

(Chapters 26-30)

FFYP-det-Yagami.

My name is Light Yagami. As you may well remember, I sent you a review in early October last year, concerning your fan-fiction entitled 'A.I – Alternate Incarceration'.

Against my better judgement (or perhaps because of it – I didn't want Misa to get any ideas from you without me being aware of what I was up against), I continued to read your fan-fiction after sending the review… and until recently, it appeared that you had not taken my suggestions into account.

However, I am pleased to acknowledge that your last instalment, 'Chapter 30: Doomsday', has changed my opinion of your capability as a writer. Whilst I take little pleasure from depictions of my friends and acquaintances being humiliated, your depiction of my triumph over L is both realistic and entertaining. I am willing to overlook the plot-holes and somewhat confused grasp of grammar, as it is now clear to me that you are – at the very least – trying to improve.

It is unfortunate to note, though, that whilst I am beginning to see you in a different light, there are still some problems that I feel must be addressed. First of all, I do possess some concern about the content of the next chapter: the heavy implications that your Light and Misa characters are going to… indulge one another… are somewhat disconcerting, and – especially considering the 'T' rating – could affect the overall tone and audience for your fan-fiction. I, for one, frown upon depictions of myself in overtly amorous heterosexual and homosexual acts (despite what many people seem to think…), and I am sure – or at least, I hope I'm sure – that many people would agree.

Any intelligent, level-headed person would agree, at any rate.

Secondly, I am somewhat worried about the plan to get rid of Misa. From my own particular point of view, it is difficult to see exactly how this will be achieved – whilst the 'Light' in your story is motivated, he doesn't appear to be planning anything. From experience of earlier chapters, it seems as though you are relying solely on sporadic ideas, and that you have no real narrative planned before you start writing: as can be evidenced by the introduction of Mary 'Wedy' Kenwood (I find it difficult to believe that ANYONE would be able to guess who the 'mysterious figure' was from the "clues" you gave)… My advice to you is to think calmly about what could happen next, send a reply message to me stating what you have come up with, and then we can discuss it together. I am more than happy to help those in obvious need when they require expert assistance.

Otherwise, keep up the 'good' work.

Regards,

L. Yagami.

P.S. I'm still a little offended by your pen-name. Please do something about it.

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Author's Note: What a relief… I haven't done something like this for months, and it's always fun to do…

To respond to Light's queries…

1) Light and Misa getting it on… Well, seeing as I've actually had people expressing their concerns about this anyway, I suppose I should really cover it to make sure that everyone is on the same page…

The only reasons I would change any story to an 'M' rating would be because of graphic violence, mature subjects (implications of rape, severe insanity, or use of drugs (which is unlikely) or because it contained more swearing than a sailor could handle.

A.I. isn't going to have any of that in it, and I just don't WRITE sex. No matter what happens in the next chapter – or any of the chapters following – the worst that's going to happen is that some people might end up naked, or in a bath/bed together. No descriptions, no explicit actions, no nothing.

Sorry to burst your bubbles there… XD

2) Despite the fact that I admittedly am rather terrible with planning stories (I either plan too much and never write it, or plan too little and end up writing complete nonsense), I know exactly how Light is planning to get rid of Misa. Oh dear…

Thanks to readers, reviewers, and people who suggested that I should do this. I should really have publicised my poll in the last chapter…

Stay tuned!