Yeah, I decided this story needed a remake desperately. I felt there was several problems in the story that arose when I started writing it-say-a year and a half ago?
Either way I few of these was-I felt-that the first few chapters of the story seemed to star something that never went to anything, a bunch of new clones without much personalities but their names would appear-almost randomly-occasionally. There was one big plotline that never went anywhere and one minor plotline that disappeared just after appearing.
Also, the last name conversation over Ryloth was just awkward and bad.
This version way better organized then the prior story and I know exactly where I want it to go and what every chapter is going to bring forth and be about. Unlike one or two years ago, I actually organize my writing a lot better so I know what the heck is happened later on.
"Chronicles of Talon" is up and about by the time ya read this!
I'm sorry about all of ya that liked the "Story of Talon" but hope you understand and forgive me. This story will start of after Jade's death and will depart from the older quite a bit.