A/N: I was told that my FemRyo fanfic is bland, not good, and not exciting. And there was also another person who categorized this fanfiction as a Mary Sue story. Here, I have a few words for all of you.
For people who hates bad and Mary Sue fanfics, then maybe you should close this page and not read this anymore. You might (highly probably) get very very very bored. You would also probably feel that I had ruined your day and I don't want to do that to you. I really do like writing this fanfic and I don't intent to stop writing it. I WILL continue to write this fanfic until the end of the story.
For people who think that this fanfic is still bearable to be read, even though it is not good or exciting, I will welcome you if you still want to continue to read it. I hope that you will like it someday and that you won't regret having stumble on it and having read it.
And for everyone who like this fanfic and accept it with all its goods and bad, be sure that I poured my heart and soul into writing it to make it be something which will be worthy of your interest and attention.

And well, I believe that the person who told me that my fanfic is bland, not good and not exciting wasn't completely wrong. I admit myself that this story can bet more enjoyable to read for all of you. I can also tell that probably some of you think the same thing as she did (I will take that the person who send me the message is a girl to make it be easier - Sorry if I made a mistake!). Through your reviews, I can feel that you are holding yourselves back and that you don't dare to tell me when there is something that you don't like, or when you think it's bland and not exciting. Okay, I know that you want more FujiXRyo moments! Skeep this one! FujiXRyo times are coming in the chapter 54-55! So wait for the chapter 54-55, which happen to be the next ones!

But here I seek your true opinions about this fanfic. Please, tell me sincerly where and what do you think it is bland, boring and Mary Sue. And if you were me, how would you change it to make it be more interesting? Thank you for your help!

And now, here is chapter 52 for you, followed by chapter 53. It's two chapters in on shot.

Enjoy!


Note:

"Here.": normal speaking;

'Hiyaaaaah!' : thinking;

"You baka ahou!" : mental conversation.


"Here," Fuji said as he gave Yukimura the contract, certifying that his family business had returned back to his hands again.

"Minna, arigatou," Yukimura thanked them.

"We would never let you down," Sanada said warmly.

"Honto ni arigatou (1)," Yukimura repeated, still staring at the contract in his hands.

Yukimura turned to Ryoma.

"Echizen, thank you, for winning for Seiyou Academy," Yukimura said softly. "I couldn't do it, but you did. Thank you very much."

Ryoma opened her eyes, surprised. He was thanking her when she beat him? This had never happen before. To tell the true, it was quite disturbing!

"Domo… senpai…" Ryoma blushed, unsure of how to reply.

"You did very well, Yukimura. I praise you," Sakaki-coach beamed. "Even when you were transferred to Genhoujii, you continued to improve Seiyou. Thanks to you, everyone grew up and became stronger. And you helped Echizen achieve Ten'i Muhou no Kiwami. You truly are Seiyou tennis club's pride."

Ryuuzaki-sensei nodded in agreement. Yukimura was shocked as well as everyone else too. They would never have thought that Sakaki-coach could say that after the mess they had gone though.

"A… Arigatou, Sakaki-coach, Ryuuzaki-sensei," Yukimura stuttered.

"Buchou, you are transferring back to us, right?" Kirihara asked.

"Yes. Now that I no longer have a reason to stay at Genhoujii, I'm coming back," Yukimura said, smiling. "Chichi will accept my request after I give him this paper."

"Yaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyy!" the regulars cheered, happy to have him back. It just wasn't the same without him around.


They went to party in a five star restaurant that belonged to Atobe with chef Kawamura cooking for them. The entire floor was reserved for them. They ate, chatted, danced and generally goofed around. Nanjirou, Rinko, Ryoga and Nanako joined with them as well. The boys sat around Nanjirou, listening to him talk. Ryoga played games with a couple of other guys. And of course, Karupin was there too.

"Kupin, you are a very brave boy!" Kikumaru cooed, giving Karupin a nickname. "You are the best kitty in the world!"

"Meowwwww!" Karupin purred, his chest puffed up. He was put on a velvet red cushion - a royal seat for a cat that deserved to be treated like royalty. Kaido was the one who had the honour of carrying the cat on the cushion of glory.

"Here, an extra grilled fish for you!" Momoshiro said, giving him the prize.

"Meooooooow!" Karupin squealed and bit into the token.

On a wide screen, the games Inui had recorded were showing. The people who weren't eating or playing watched the game. They were still amazed by Ten'i Muhou no Kiwami. They weren't bored of watching the same game over and over again. As they watched the three first games, Ryoma frowned, suspicious.

"Senpai-tachi, you lost the three first matches and made a draw on purpose, didn't you?" Ryoma asked - stated being the more appropriate word - with an eyebrow raised.

Marui and Niou whistled, their hands behind their heads, dancing on their feet. The others didn't say anything but neither did they deny it.

"So I was right," Ryoma concluded, scowling lightly.

"It's a very good psychological attack, Echizen-chan," Oshitari said.

"You make your opponent think that they will win and then attack them. That way, their defeat tastes more bitter!" Yagyuu added.

"And they deserve it! After what Torada did to Yukimura!" Gakuto exclaimed defensively.

"You played with me again!" Ryoma grunted.

"Maa maa, Echizen-chan," Marui tried to smooth her. "If we hadn't done that, you wouldn't have been able to wake up to Ten'i Muhou no Kiwami, right?"

"Sou sou (2)! You should thank us for that, you know!"

Ryoma only grunted again. And alas, she, the honoured person of the night, once more fell victim of Kirihara's, Marui's, Niou's and Ootori's enthusiasm. Much to Ryoma's dismay, the-joy-of-glomping-our-human-size-stuffed-toy-Ryoma club gathered again and squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeezed her in their (undesired) enthusiasm. Just wanting to have a second bite of ootoro (3) seemed to be a forever hopeless wish for Ryoma.


Sitting in a corner, Yukimura and Fuji watched them.

"Fuji, you haven't done anything yet?" Yukimura asked with an eyebrow raised.

"What do you mean?" Fuji replied, head slightly tilted in confusion.

"About telling Echizen-chan about your feelings for her," Yukimura said.

Fuji blinked. "What feelings?"

"Fuji, I am not blind and you perfectly know it," Yukimura said, deadpanning. "I have noticed it long before the training camp. When it had started, you weren't even aware of it."

". . ."

"I didn't tell you because I thought that you should discover it for yourself. But after you realized it, I can't believe that you're making walls against your feelings. Why do you deny them? Why don't you just tell her?"

Fuji kept silence for a moment.

"It wasn't the right time," Fuji finally answered. "Tezuka was in Germany and you were being transferred. It wasn't the right time."

"But Tezuka is back, and so am I. What other reason is stopping you? What is the real reason behind your denial?"

". . ." Fuji watched Ryoma for a moment. Then, he spoke again.

"It's to protect her."

". . ." Yukimura didn't need any more explanations. He immediately understood what Fuji meant.

"If I was a simple man, then I could freely act as my feelings tell me," Fuji said. "But each time I want to approach her, I'm being held back by my name. I fear that something bad would happen to her if people of our sad kind knew about my feelings for her. That Ryoma-chan managed to stay unharmed in our school up until today is a miracle, considering that she comes from the common world. She was very lucky to be placed in a homeroom where the students aren't bad people and is able to be friends with them. However, outside of her homeroom, I know that not all of the students share the same opinion about her. They have a very low opinion of her and they want her out of the academy. However, they haven't done anything bad to her yet. That's because she is our regular and she is always surrounded by Kirihara, Marui, Niou and Ootori."

Fuji looked over at Ryoma's table.


Right now, Ryoma and Kirihara were fighting over food again. Ryoma wanted to protect the fried fish from Kirihara's hands while Kirihara fought to get another fish from Ryoma's plate. In the process, Kirihara knocked over a plate with food, which was sent flying through the air. To the horror of the other boys, the plate landed… on Sanada's head.

'Hyiaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!' everybody screamed in their heads, not daring to voice out their fear.

POP! TWITCH!!!!!

Everybody froze. Ryoma and Kirihara became two perfect statues incarnating their fear. They had decided that their food was no longer the most important thing. Something else was more important.

Their life!!!!

If they wanted to enjoy more food in their future, they better saved their lives right now.

"Why you two…" Sanada slowly said, growling.

"Gulp!" Kirihara and Ryoma swallowed heavily, their faces turning blue.

Sanada stood up from his seat. Kirihara and Ryoma cringed. They stood up as well.

"Grrrrrrrrrrrr…" Sanada growled again.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Kirihara and Ryoma yelled as they ran away around the room, Sanada trailing behind them.

"Rawwwwwwwwwwwr!"

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Kirihara and Ryoma sped up and headed straight to where Marui, Niou and Ootori were.

"Ah! Wait! You baka! Don't come here!" Marui panicked.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Unfortunately, Kirihara and Ryoma didn't hear him, too absorbed in escaping with their lives.

"Rawwwwwwwwwwwr!" An angry red-eyed Sanada was just a few meters behind them.

"Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Marui, Niou and Ootori yelled, running away too, scared to death by the god-of-death Sanada.

"Hey, didn't the plate that Kirihara knocked over belong to Kikumaru?" Gakuto asked.

Kikumaru froze on the spot. He was so close to the exit door. Everybody now saw him trying to escape out of the room. Kikumaru slowly turned around, facing them.

"Ah… Hahaha…!" Kikumaru embarrassingly laughed.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Kirihara, Ryoma, Marui and Niou ran passed him. Mad-black-grizzly Sanada was still right behind them.

"Nyaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Kikumaru escaped too, since he already got caught trying to run away.

"You idiots! Run to the other side! Not over here!!!!" Shishido shouted when the group came running in the direction where his table was.

Sadly, the scared rabbits didn't have enough time to change the course of their escape path.

"Ah! Let's get away!" Momoshiro yelled as he jumped over the table. Shishido and Hiyoshi jumped over the table and ran away as well, enlarging the group of the poor hunted and terrified rabbits.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!"

They headed straight to another table.

"Jirou-senpai! Get out of the way, PLEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASE!!!" Ryoma yelled on the top of her lunges.

"Huh?" Jirou opened his eyes and raised his head to see a horde of people running into his table, with Ryoma and Kirihara in the front. "Waaaaah!" Jirou jumped from his chair, running away so that he wouldn't be run over. The horde knocked the table where Jirou was 0.1 second ago.

"Rawwwwwwwwwrrrr!" Monster Godzilla Sanada still didn't forgive them.

"Who are the monkeys now?" Atobe asked no one in particular as he watched the running group.

Oshitari chuckled while Ooishi sighed. Tezuka pinched the bridge of his nose in exasperation.

'Did I come back from Germany for this?' he wondered, sighing too.

"My, such healthy young people!" Rinko commented as she watched the group running around the room. "It's good to see so many lively and healthy young men!"

"Well, if they want to continue to be this lively, they better run faster," Oshitari replied, smiling amusedly as he watched the gap between the hunter and the hunted get smaller and smaller.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!" the terrified group put more fuel in their legs.

Nanako chuckled while Nanjirou snickered. Inui, a stopwatch in his hands, raised an eyebrow.

"Sanada is more effective than my juices? How can it be?"

"Sadaharu, they are kind of used to your poisons by now. They managed to survive it up 'till today. But an angry Sanada, they don't taste this everyday. Their lives are more endangered right now," Yanagi said as the running group passed in front of them again.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!"

'I'm happy I'm not a regular!' Yuuta thought.

Ryoga sweat dropped as he heard them talking. But he shut up. He was thinking that it was better to not tell anyone that it was him who had put the damned plate next to Kirihara. Because he hadn't known who the plate he had found belonged to, he had put it in a random place. Sadly, said random place had been a cursed random place.

Glint!

Ryoga suddenly shuddered. He felt a cold piercing stab in his back. Very slowly, he turned around on himself to see Yagyuu's blank glasses fixed on him - directly at him.

"Gulp!" Ryoga swallowed his saliva.

'He knows!' Ryoga thought.

Ryoga swore he saw cold icy blue waves dancing around Yagyuu.

"You baka ahou moron! This whole mess is all your fault!" Yagyuu silence form was saying.

Ryoga gulped again.

"I didn't do in purpose! I swear!" Ryoga yelled in his head.

The waves around Yagyuu grew bigger and danced more furiously. Gakuto and Kaido, who sat next to Yagyuu, shivered and tried to warm themselves up with their hands.

'Why it is suddenly so freezing here?' they wondered.

But the waves around Yagyuu didn't fade. Ryoga sweat dropped, his eyes held prisoners by Yagyuu.

'He refuses to believe me!' Ryoga thought with dismay.


1) Honto ni arigatou: Thank you very much.

2) Sou sou: That's right! That's right!

3) ootoro: fat tuna sushi.

A/N: Again, please, tell me sincerly where and what do you think is bland, boring and Mary Sue. And if you were me, how would you change it to make it be more interesting?

Thank you for your help!