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Joined 07-08-13, id: 4857132, Profile Updated: 08-12-19
Author has written 5 stories for Ultimate Spider-Man.

PM me if you'd like a review on your work.

Thanks,

-Afe


Here's some advice...

If you're going to improve anywhere, start with the dialogue. If you're still doing the whole "he said/she said" gig, then start moving away from that and start using different verbiage to make the dialogue flow easier. Special note: you don't always have to identify who says what at the end of a quote. That's what context is for.

Don't force romances. We're all guilty of it.

Stop giving a f*k about how many favorites/followers you have. If you enjoy writing a story, trust me, eventually somebody is going to come over to see what the hoot is all about. If you allow yourself to be discouraged by those numbers, then you are not going to have fun trying to get published in real life.

One does not simply deem themselves the "Official" writer of any fandom. That's pretentious. I don't care how good you are at writing. Nobody is ever the "Official" anything.

Don't sell your chapters from Fan Fiction. You're the worst type of writer on this site if you do so. Get published.

Buffer chapters just to update something is worse than not updating at all. Try to give each of your chapters some sort of significance. Otherwise, they'll feel like unnecessary chapters.


Here's some quotes, I guess...

Enjoy them, if you're into that sort of thing...

"The most important cage you can free yourself from is the one in which you care what others think of you."

"I'm still me no matter my mental health."

"If nobody will help you, do it alone."

"Be an outcast; be pleased to walk alone."

"I have learned that friendship isn't about who you've known the longest. It's about who came and never left your side."

"Our memories of yesterday will last a lifetime. We will take the best, forget the rest, and someday will find that these are the best of times."

"Not to understand a treasure's worth till time has stole away the slighted good, is cause of half the poverty we feel, and makes the world the wilderness it is."

"You don't need a certain number of friends. You need a number of friends you can be certain of."

"In prosperity, our friends know us. In adversity, we know our friends."

"Good people are like candles; they burn themselves up to give others light."

"An honest enemy is better than a best friend who lies."

"Our prime purpose in this life is to help others. And if you can't help them, at least don't hurt them."

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The Phantom reviews
Director Fury sends Spider-Man and his team to a top-secret SHIELD base known as The Archive, unraveling the identity of a former agent known only as "Phantom". With the discovery of a conspiracy to destroy SHIELD once and for all, Spider-Man is left to fight Taskmaster and his army of mercenaries, all while figuring out his feelings for Ava, and saving New York City.
Ultimate Spider-Man - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 30 - Words: 175,701 - Reviews: 195 - Favs: 135 - Follows: 91 - Updated: 8/12 - Published: 2/5/2014 - [Peter P./Spider Man, Ava A./White Tiger] Taskmaster, OC - Complete
More Than Just Friends reviews
Written in 2016 and stored in my collective archive, here's an Ava/Peter romantic one-shot that I used to practice for the romance scenes in "Vanquished Revenants". Enjoy. Image Credit to DeviantArt User: KazEremos
Ultimate Spider-Man - Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,062 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 10 - Follows: 6 - Published: 8/5 - [Peter P./Spider Man, Ava A./White Tiger] - Complete
It Feels Like an Epilogue reviews
To the writers of the Ultimate Spider-Man cartoon show fandom and community. It's been fun.
Ultimate Spider-Man - Rated: T - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,865 - Reviews: 10 - Favs: 8 - Follows: 3 - Published: 7/28 - Peter P./Spider Man - Complete
Vanquished Revenants reviews
The third and final story of The Phantom Trilogy. Set two years after the events on Island M, Spider-Man reunites with an old friend, Agent Coulson, who warns of a pending attack from the Reaper and his forces on Asteroid M. With the aid of Phantom and Specter Haven, Peter reunites with his old team and his beloved Ava, helping to save the world one last time.
Ultimate Spider-Man - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 44 - Words: 272,720 - Reviews: 259 - Favs: 44 - Follows: 31 - Updated: 11/1/2018 - Published: 6/1/2016 - [Peter P./Spider Man, Ava A./White Tiger] Nick Fury, OC
Specter Haven reviews
The second story of The Phantom Trilogy. Spider-Man and White Tiger join Phantom in his mission to recruit the three other mutates that were created by Magneto into a secret team called Specter Haven. Emotions run deep between the two heroes as they try to uncover a global plot to enslave humanity, while trying to have a relationship, and discovering the identity of Magneto's ally.
Ultimate Spider-Man - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 46 - Words: 314,095 - Reviews: 247 - Favs: 70 - Follows: 47 - Updated: 5/4/2016 - Published: 7/23/2014 - [Peter P./Spider Man, Ava A./White Tiger] Sam A./Nova, OC - Complete