Hi everyone! It's ArwenLove here... well should I say Annabeth? I would really appreciate some reviews maybe even any follows or favorites. Mostly I want truthful reviews, I want people to say whether my stories are good or bad and please explain how I write a story and get more chapters. By the way, I'll be writing stories on my profile page because the stories I post never work so I have two of the same story! I'd appreciate people telling me how to post and write stories please because I love writing on fanfiction so here the first story (thoughts are in italics okay.):

The She Devil

Once again the Company Of Thorin Oakenshield were travelling. They came across a small stream where there was a young shivering human girl! "Please help me, my village was attacked by orcs and I was the only survivor and as the orcs came past I... I jumped in the stream to hide." Thorin took pity on her and once she told him her name (Celestial) they made a camp in a dark but comfortable cave and gave out blankets.

Balin told Thorin not to trust Celestial but he insisted on bringing her to Laketown, if Gandalf had been travelling with the dwarves and Bilbo he would have seen through the lies immediately. Celestial brought on fake tears and ran into the forest while Fili and Kili were on watch, Kili ran over to her (completely out of sight), leaving Fili to keep watch! "Oh, what a shame Kili, Son of Dis, so full of life but trapped in a tomb." Fili charged a yelled a battle cry just a Celestial kissed Kili... Fili stabbed the She Devil and she vanished in a slight puff of violet smoke, she had been defeated!

Thorin and the rest of the company, who had arrived at the scene a moment to late, stood, gawping at the sight of Kili's limp body... no one knew he was alive but he was, well and truly alive. Everyone was crying except from Thorin, but that changed in an instant because soon he was. "Dwalin"Thorin turned around his eyes red from tears "I think we will... need a shov- "STOP!" Gandalf rushed out from the thick trees and past the overwhelmed company. "He is alive, Thorin."

He can't be, Celestial just took his life before Fili... took hers. Thorin was shocked at the news but over joyed