This is a story about my fan made character, Onyx :D all criticism is expected, wanted, and awaited :) yea i mean hateful like (this story sucks because *stuff*) so uhhh please give reasons WHY it sucks so i can improve as a writer! (ﾉ ヮ )ﾉ*:･ﾟ ﾟ･: *ヽ( ヮ ヽ)