Hey. I'm not new at the story writing business, I just never had anyone to criticize my work. So don't be too hard on me...lol. But seriously, I'm open to any suggestions you have to help me make my story writing better. Also, keep in mind, if the story gets boring, that I'm really bored, so I have to do something to keep myself busy. Enjoy, and let me know what you think, good or bad.

UPDATE!!! Okay, 17 now, been at this for a while, so I should know what I'm doing. So, feel free to point out mistakes with mean or sarcastic commments, and I won't take them personally.