I'm that guy who always criticizes a movie or t.v. show, etc.. I complain how predictable it is or how bad the dialogue is. (see star wars for example) But it's easy to be a critic. I envy the worst writer of the worst story ever writen because they have done something I've never done. Finished a story. I have so many ideals. But I have yet to manifest them in the form of a finished story.

So now it's time to put up or shut up. I'll start with some short stories. No chapters. Then hopefully work my way up to an epic.

The only thing is, I need help. The best way to help any writer is constructive criticism. This is where you come in. (Yes you sitting at the computer in nothing but your boxers and eating cheetos.) I need you to be specific. Don't just tell me what you don't like tell me why you don't like it. You can even tell me how you would do it differently. I am open to any and all suggestions.

Thank you in advance for all your help. And for god sakes put on some pants.