Sorry about deceiving you all, but this really set me off as you will probably tell. I couldn't let this go so i had to respond and since he was a "guest" I can't just pm a reply, se a coward that's ripping me to pieces, lovely.
Here the review and my response:
Using the same word twice in a sentence is redundant, as you've already used it once, there's no need for it twice, now using it trice in a sentence is an anathema of the writer's world and would be the equal of Writers Suicide-That means that you know so little words to use, that if it was a professional looking at it, they'd discard it and send you back to School. It lacks creativity that you cannot use more words, and most of all, it reeks of Laziness, and the worst thing a writer can express is that.
Do you not want people to feel engaged, when they read your work? I feel bored when I see the same word twice. Diversity but consistency.
This is not a Good start on a story.
By SugarPieCrumbles.
Dear SPC, (your name's to long, don't complain)
Firstly, using the same word twice IS NOT redundant, some times its necessary because the word has two meanings and you use them twice to convey both meanings, e.g. had had, first one is used to see the past, second demonstrates possession of something, so obviously your misinformed here. Strike one, in my opinion.
Secondly, I don't know enough words? I don't use half the words I know because I'm not some snob that uses over complicated words to say something when I know a nice short and simple word, that frankly can ensure that EVERYONE understands what I mean. Strike two.
Thirdly, I'm not lazy, I do my research when I need to, I diligently translate the words, and I make sure that my writing is coherent for people to understand. Strike three, your out, but I'll continue because I feel like I'm on a roll here.
Fourthly, back to "School", that goes with NO capitals, unless you want to use it in a name, in which case it will go with a capital, also "Laziness" same as school, but in this case, it has a capital when its at the start of a sentence. Strike four, your already out, so instead, I hear the Xenomorphs crying out so prepare yourself to become lunch to the hive, or become an incubator, whatever.
Fifthly, you only whine in this review that you don't like story, the previous points were for you to have more to say than just "I don't like your story" to be honest your whole pointless review was a waste of time, as it can be summed up in the last sentence. I can't be bothered with more strikes.
And lastly, you go back to school and learn some manners. that review could be said in a polite way, but instead its trash, that you took time out to write, time in the day that you wasted just because you wanted to feel like you were making another person miserable, well sorry but I'm not miserable, because I have a ton of reviews for this story on TWO platforms and among all of them there is only one other like yours.
The public have spoken and I'm NOT sorry to say that your opinion is unwanted and so expressing it was a waste of time.
Thank you for taking the time to review, no matter how wasted.