Hello, review leavers!
After having received the nicest review from a guest half a day ago (which was left 2,5 days ago, not sure why it takes FanFiction SO long to deliver these!), I thought it was about time to personally thank each and every one of you who took the time to write. It really is true, that reviews are what fills our hearts with joy! Without them, you have no idea if what you're doing is pleasing anyone.
I never wrote fanfiction before in my life (I do something completely different, for a living!), and even this was done from a slightly "embarrassed" corner. I'm no writer, so who would want to read my story? In the end, the need to "push" this baby out, won. I only started to watch H50 about 2 years ago, and only discovered FanFiction about a year ago. I had no idea that people wrote FanFiction, but find it amazing that they do – to the delight of many TV and Movie fans, I'm sure!
And one day, on one of my outdoor exercise sessions, this idea came to my mind. As all ideas, great and small (this is very small, naturally), it started with a general outline of what I would like to see happen (this was shortly after 9.11). Then, the idea grew a few branches. Then, I decided to jot down some bullet points, sometime later transferred it to a word document. At some point, the points became around 50… I begged for a Beta, got two. The first one, disappeared after 2 emails exchanged. The second was busy with her exams and after she graduated, she disappeared too. So I had two choices: do the same or press on. By this time, I had started to write down ideas or small sentences on my "Note" App, and would then send them to my email address, to compile the text at home. And words became sentences, sentences became paragraphs. Which is why I have whole chunks of text written, already, but the rest are mere ideas. Thus taking so long to publish. Sometimes, those missing pieces of text don't "flow". I need to marinate them for 1 or 2 days, rework them, marinate some more. This is a process, but I find that, most of the time, the text writes itself. It's very, very interesting, as a process. Anyway, to the comments. And don't be sad that it's just my comments, I am posting a new chapter after this. ;-)
To the Guest who commented "update, update, update", I'll try, I'll try, I'll try… ;-) ;-)
Not sure why it's not showing up on FanFiction…
Guest chapter 29 . Apr 16
love love love this
THANK YOU! Hope you keep reading.
Guest chapter 29 . Apr 15
I LOVE this story seriously like its probably the best Mcroll fanfic I've ever read, but I think at this point we might be backtracking a little. I think it would be very like them to push anything down especially for the sake of a mission, but as Catherine drove away in her car last time she clearly said going back lost its appeal. I think Steve and Catherine need to stop letting each other in and then all of a sudden shutting down like this and at least let little things slip even if they're not ready to actually sit and talk this out. Because that is a little more like them. I think at this point thieve spent enough time together that at least in their mind they should be able to acknowledge that they have feelings for each other and be battling that. I mean I honestly thought during that whole Christmas sequence that we were gonna gonna get something and then they just shut off completely. I love them but they really kinda took a thousand steps forward and two thousand steps back. your talent is incredible and I can't wait to see where you take this story next.
WOW – thank you from the bottom of my heart! ;-) ;-) ;-) You've made my day. Week. Month, probably ;-)
There's no backtracking, believe me, I know what I'm doing (I think). Don't forget a few things: Steve and Catherine don't communicate. Catherine thinks he's still with Lynn. She's conservative, in that respect (I don't find that conservative, I find it being a decent woman with a lot of self-respect, but hey, sign of the times…). Steve was very hurt by what she did, but instead of being a Man (capital M), he decided to get angry. He threw an ultimatum at her face. Gave her no choice. Failed to realise that she may have had her reasons. The fact that going back to work may have lost its appeal, doesn't invalidate the fact that Steve has done nothing to show her that he wants her back. Don't forget that Catherine left, after Kono's wedding. She loves her job – she'll continue doing it - why not? If you can't be happy in love, at least be happy in the Professional aspect of your life…
She came back on 7.07 and he was mad. M-A-D. He rolled his eyes at Lynn, when introducing Cath, as though saying. "What is SHE doing here? What a nerve! Sorry for this", and Lynn was like: "OK, calm your horses, it's fine." Then, when he realises she's come to help his mother… that's when he starts to see her in a slightly different light, I hope he was embarrassed. They have their talk on the plane, which is, really, no talk at all. He asks when she was recruited, she tells him Afghanistan, he huffs and that's it. That's no conversation! But he's mad. The way they say goodbye, on that airstrip… he realises he still loves her (don't forget when he tells the other McGarrett that the right woman has already come and gone because he couldn't hold on to her, and when he tells Harry that he used to have one of those "the only one I ever let in", and he was already dating Lynn at those times!), but would never have the courage to tell her. First, because he has a girlfriend, second because he refuses to tell her that he regrets telling her what he did. But the way he touches the plane… he knows he loves her. His look, it's clearly evident. The man is a good actor. So he goes home and tries his hardest to be happy with Lynn. Sort of like a… mad dash. "I WILL be happy with this one, if only to show the other that I can be happy without her!)
Then, she comes back on 8.20. He's still mad, as evidenced by his reaction to Lou's antics behind her back, in the bullpen (not ordering him to STOP that immediately), but he cuts her some slack. They have that silly "I'm doing perfect without you, I'm even dating!" conversation, and again, he remembers that she's the one. That funny scene where she climbs the tree… clearly, some nicely done sexual innuendo, there! Her return had such an impact on him that on 9.01, so in theory, 10 weeks later, we learn that he broke up with Lynn. Because he realised, no matter how hard he tried, she would never be the one (as I detailed in the beginning of my story).
So, then, 9.11… he's single, now. She comes to his aid. Drops everything. And they spend one month together. So this is the time he finally forgives her for lying, for leaving, for not opening up to him. Though, in this last part, he also shares the blame. Big time. He realises she's the one. But he's grieving. Joe just died. And he has a lot to think about. That kind of man would never jump into a relationship (or even just sex!) with the love of his life, (or any woman, for that matter!) without thinking it through thoroughly (see how he's approached his "dating" dinners?). And Montana is a process. He slowly comes back to life, he slowly lets go of his grief, he slowly finishes forgiving her. Christmas was smack in the middle of it, he wasn't going to woo her at her parent's house, without so much as a conversation, right? And it has to come from him, he needs to chase after her. He's the Alpha here, somehow Catherine, when it comes to love, is not an Alpha. Maybe it's just with Steve, and she wouldn't behave like that with other men? Don't know. But she's incisive and very sharp. She says the stuff she needs to say, with slight sarcasm, but lets him take his time. Maybe it was because she wasn't so sure of her standing, in his life (and maybe that's why she left, ultimately), but she never demanded anything from him, definition or affection. And in the end, that was part of the problem, of course. She mistook his actions (or lack thereof) for insecurity about wanting her to share his life, when it was nothing like that (wedding ring!). of course, they'd never lived together, before he settled in Hawai'i, so there was no background to that. But they don't talk. So they also need to learn to do that. And that will take a while. For me.
Regarding the thousand steps forward and 2.000 steps back… isn't that how things are, in life, sometimes? Especially with two people like them? I find this much more believable than just setting the scene for a story and then just blurting out the coming together, without taking into consideration how the characters are constructed, in the original series. There's a lot of baggage, with those two. And if they are going to find common ground and build on their love, it needs to be on a slab of concrete, not a wonky bridge made out of wooden planks, over a canyon, in the middle of an Indiana Jones movie.
CatherineHF0 chapter 30 . Apr 17
I love this story so much! Please update soon!
THANK YOU! I am trying... but I work every day, so it's not easy. But the story wants to write itself, so there's that…. ;-) ;-)
unichick21 chapter 29 . Apr 16
eeek! I love this and wished we got to see more of Steve and Catherine's reunion in the finale. I would love for them to of had a serious talk about what happened between them, their feelings and trying again. Glad you are addressing this in your story and can't wait for you to update.
McRoll is Endgame!
THANK YOU! So did I – but I guess the naysayers and McHaters managed to influence PL just a little bit. Don't get me wrong – I LOVE him for giving us that finale. Yay! Maybe it just gave us the perfect setting to now grow from it and imagine, in writing, how they would've moved on from that to "Steve having grandchildren", as PL put it. No matter what the haters may say (and I've read a few preposterous theories on FB) they ended up together. That, we'll always have! They can't take that away from us ;-)
FicreaderT chapter 10 . Mar 19
You have me very intrigued with this story and I hope to read more. I, too, believe these two are endgame and I'm enjoying your take on how it might work out. I look forward to your next update!
THANK YOU! Hang on tight! This story is far from over. Thank you for the feedback.
AgentD.6 chapter 3 . Feb 10
So far you have brought us a wonderful story that many of us would love to think could happen on the show. But for that to happen, like in your story, forgiveness on both Steve and Catherine's part must take place. Catherine for leaving but Steve for being so reluctant to finally open up to his feelings for Catherine. Re watching episodes let's you see she was simply waiting for him to say I love you and so want you with me! I hope we at least get to see it in your story.
THANK YOU! You are correct – they need to forgive each other and learn to communicate. And lose that stupid fear of looking silly to the other. Yes, she knows that the decision must come from him – look at the final scene! She stood there, unsure of herself, only sat down when he asked her if she was going to, only touched him when he opened his hand. She took the steps, but it was his decision. That's how they roll. Not sure why she's like that, as stated above. ;-) Maybe women shouldn't force definition out of men – most of them say that's the fastest and easiest way to lose them. "If a man wants a woman in his life, he'll put her there."
BlueSky chapter 3 . Jan 28
I really love how you portray emotions in your characters; I feel as though I am experiencing all of Steve's emotions myself! Also, I'm so glad you aren't afraid to let him show emotion, since he is so often portrayed as the stone cold Navy SEAL (which I also love, but is is still human). I truly feel as though Catherine understands him the most out of everyone, after all their shared/similar experiences and time together, so I'm really happy with how that shines through. I can't wait to read more, and thank you for this lovely story!
THANK YOU! As the Brazilians say, "first trip sailor", over here. What would be the fun of a story where we don't delve into the character's emotions, right? That's the only way to understand their actions and how they're built. The dilemmas within them, slowly revealing how they will act. And no, Steve is very human, he just doesn't let his emotions show, but he naturally has them. For me, that's the interesting part. Catherine knows him best, yes – and he knows that. She's "the one he ever let in", his girl, the one who got away. Towards the end, he was finally able to admit that to a stranger (easier than if it had been, say, Danny. I think to Danny, he wouldn't have admitted it). And ultimately, that was the catalyst for the final scene, their reunion. They only got together because Steve finally admitted she was the one (and Lincoln was very skilled at reading between the lines).
Scaramou chapter 3 . Jan 10
I think somethings happened because it's now telling me chapter 1 is at the end and the story begins with chapter 2
THANK YOU for reading my story and for letting me know. I was still getting to grips with this publishing thing… ;-)
Ellaitaly chapter 1 . Jan 4
Love this story! Waiting for more
THANK YOU! Hope you keep reading.
Dee47 chapter 3 . Jan 4
Always love reading more Steve/Catherine scenes, so thanks for sharing! You're doing a great job of fleshing out this storyline that we didn't get enough of on the show.
THANK YOU! I felt that I just HAD to write it, it was within me yearning to get out, like "Aliens"! Ahahahahah!
SteveMcGarrettLover chapter 3 . Jan 4
Loved it! You write so well, and I enjoy everything you do! I can't wait for more, maybe Catheirne can convince him to shower, and she could help?
I am loving this story! It is so raw, so heartwrenching and wonderful at the same time!
THANK YOU! First review that left me speechless. You have no idea how good these are! Re: your suggestion, read above. They are necessarily taking their time and even after, it'll be complicated… ;-)
CatherineMcG chapter 1 . Dec 21, 2019
Wow, great story. Love it. I hope you continue soon.
THANK YOU! Hope you keep reading.
LAURA chapter 1 . Dec 21, 2019
I can't wait for you to publish another chapter of this story, because I really liked the first chapter ... and I can't wait for Catherine and Steve to come together again
love forever Steve and Catherine
THANK YOU! Hope you're continuing to enjoy yourself. They will…. In due time. This is a McRoll story. McRoll forever!
CATH chapter 1 . Dec 21, 2019
Oh my God, another mcroll story, I love it ... I can't wait for you to publish the next chapter,
by the way I would also like steve and cath to be together
THANK YOU! Hope you keep reading. They will… eventually.
Guest, Khellbells and Guest – thank you for the time you took to review. It means the world!
CATH1975 chapter 1 . Dec 22, 2019
I am a big fan of Steve and Catherine as a couple and I love that the authors who publish on fanfiction write stories of the return of Catherine to Hawaii and how they are together again, forever, married and with children ... .Well, I am increasingly convinced and I am super sad, because I have realized ... that in the Hawaii 5.0 series ... Catherine and Steve will never be together again ... that's why I decided that since that I march Catherine to Kiev, never see any other episode in the series, unless Catherine appeared again ... I have fulfilled
changing the subject, I loved the first chapter of your first story of mcroll in fanficion and I hope it is not the last one you publish ...
I can't wait for you to publish the second chapter of the story, to know the conversation between Catherine and Steve.
love catherine and steve
THANK YOU! Luckily, we were both wrong… hope you enjoyed the finale, as I did (as any McRoller did) and are enjoying the story.
GreenEyes09 chapter 1 . Dec 21, 2019
Awesome story, I love it!
THANK YOU! Hope you keep reading.