Review Corner

In a study full of notebooks, notepads, books, manga books, and DVD copies of TV shows, A figure was sitting at a desk in the study. He was a boy around nineteen and was 5'2" with brown hair, glasses, brown eyes, and was wearing a T-Shirt with Ryūko from Kill la Kill on it. He was also wearing black cargo pants and black cowboy boots.

Currently he was jotting down notes after watching the seventh season of Red vs Blue. "... Dammit, still nothing." He sighed, putting his pen down. He then turned around.

"Hey readers, sorry about that. One of my newest stories is getting to be a real headache…" Dragon Emperor0 sighed. "This will be the first of something new we're trying out called a Review Corner!"

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"...What the? My echo must be broken." The boy sighed. "... Where on earth is Thermal? He said he'd be here."

As if on cue, a door opened and the co-author in question walked in. He was a tall man standing at 6'4" with dark brown hair and brown eyes. He was currently sporting a plain black shirt and blue jeans.

"About time." Dragon Emperor0 sighed.

"Sorry about that. Had to take care of some last minute chores." ThermalsniperN7 replied.

"Well now that you're here, let's get started." The author nodded.

Reviews

Nechroz: An Immortal with kind of suicidal tendencies. Seems legit.

Dragon Emperor0: It's legit, trust me.

ThermalsniperN7: Oh yeah. Big time.

Guest: I'd read, but IzuOcha is fucking boring. There's nothing interesting about ochako. I can barely stand her in harems, much less the main focus. But, you seem to be going in a decent direction, good luck!

Dragon Emperor0: First off: Fuck you, Ochako is best girl, fuckin' fight me. And second: IzuOcha is adorable. And third: that last point is the only thing that I agree with.

ThermalsniperN7: Not how I'd word it, but I have seen a picture of the ship in question… It's absolutely adorable. Change my mind- I dare you.

OLDONOM: Great start. Always nice to see more izuocha and interesting premise. Looking forward to more.

Dragon Emperor0: Finally someone with some brain cells. Thank you for the compliment.

ThermalsniperN7: Well, good to know that there are people out there who can appreciate the pairing.

pippothehippo: Interesting. The main complaint I have from the first chapter is the fact that toddlers feel "love" for a significant other like that. it would be love for a sibling at that young of an age.

Dragon Emperor0: Uh, I dunno man. I had a crush on a girl in my class when I was six, just saying, it happens.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. Childish crushes are a common occurrence, so it's not that absurd.

ZobbleStone: Where is chapter 2?

Dragon Emperor0: Opening chapter dude, expect more of those in the future.

ThermalsniperN7: Yep. Those will be common.

Only1Scorpion: So I just read this first chapter it was amazing btw. I do have a idea for his power set because one for all Upgrades a person's quirk maybe he should gain the power to steal and another person's quirk and then Duplicate the quirk so the other person doesn't lose his quirk it's just weaken, and have the immortal be able to give other people the quirk as well, oh and because he can duplicate the quirks he can give it to has many people as he likes (I want to see all of class A with massive regeneration quirks). Hero name maybe the (Immortal king) or (the undying knight) or maybe (bane of evil)

Dragon Emperor0: The ideas are okay but not what we have planned for the story, sorry.

ThermalsniperN7: Sorry dude. We already got plans in mind. Thanks for trying to help out, though.

HeroLuffy726: Ummmm, what the heck is with this chapter? Weird.

Dragon Emperor0: See above Review.

ThermalsniperN7: What he said.

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update thank you

Dragon Emperor0: Same to you.

ThermalsniperN7: Nice to know we're doing something right.

InfernoKnightmare: Someone else who knows the greatness of Johnathon Young.

Dragon Emperor0: Oh yeah.

ThermalsniperN7: His music is awesome.

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update thank you and awesome job with adding King into the story as the brother

Dragon Emperor0: But of course. Can't have a story inspired by Ban and Elaine without King.

ThermalsniperN7: Too true.

Ohma flame:...and so one for all was given to a near immortal being

Dragon Emperor0: Yep. Suck it All for One.

ThermalsniperN7: Have fun dealing with Izuku, ya quirk greedy dumbass.

Ohma flame: Hero name! The Immortal Hero: Ban!

Dragon Emperor0: Perfect.

ThermalsniperN7: We are SO using that.

Nechroz: Angsty child meets his childhood, presumably dead, crush. That's my summary. Thanks for coming to my TED talk.

Dragon Emperor0: … Is that supposed to be insulting?

ThermalsniperN7: I honestly can't tell.

HeroLuffy726: Something tells me the answer to why her brother didn't know is going to be overly convoluted. I know you're trying to stick to the theme of the relationship between Ban and Elaine, but you really didn't need to include the part where King tried to kill him. It just feels like you're forcing it. I don't really mind so much having an OC brother, more just trying to shoehorn it in so it adheres to how it went down in Seven Deadly Sins.

Other than that the chapter was pretty good. You managed to cover the whole training without it feeling rushed, and I think other than the above mentioned part, the character interactions were good.

One other thing though, could you leave a break line between the intro song thing and the story? It's a little hard to tell where one ends and the other begins

Dragon Emperor0: Like I said before, you either stay true to the source material, or don't do it at all.

ThermalsniperN7: Gotta keep it as authentic as possible.

Lokino.999: Love this absolutely great story

Dragon Emperor0: Thanks.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. This story is fun to write.

Nechroz: I've never thought that the image of Aizawa getting kneed in the balls would be this funny

Dragon Emperor0: ROTFLMAO! I KNOW RIGHT?!

ThermalsniperN7: That has to be the best image ever!

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update, thank you and the battle I have waiting for and this is an interesting matchup also.

Dragon Emperor0: TBH, At first I had thought of it being King and Iida, but then when I considered the history Ochako has with Bakugo in this story, the logical part of me said: go with this. Instead. I think it worked well.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. I'd say it turned out alright.

Ohma flame: Grudge match! Rules: no killing and last man standing wins. Fighters ready!?

FIGHT!

Dragon Emperor0: The way you worded that reminded me of Rocky 2 for some reason.

ThermalsniperN7: That's a little weird. Nice to know we were able to get some people hyped, though.

joshheintz1996: I love this concept and the confident Izuku. I'm excited to see how many people he freaks out during the sports festival or him butting heads with Gran Torino

Dragon Emperor0: Oh you have no idea. I also plan on making a reference to Ban vs Hendrickson in the Izuku vs Todoroki fight. Also prepare for some Luke and Yoda Flashbacks with Izuku and Gran Torino.

ThermalsniperN7: As for Izuku butting heads with Gran Torino… Yeah, that should be a treat.

Venator1995: I like this. I do. And the opening is awesome. But adding it to every single chapter just feels like padding. That's my only complaint tho. Keep doing good things.

Dragon Emperor0: … Is this the only person who's complained about the opening of the story in all of our stories?

ThermalsniperN7: I don't even get why he's complaining about the openings. They're fine.

omniscient tree: this is soooo fucking goooooood. i love tsds and my hero and i've never read a story where izuku has bans powers, and i gotta say i'm loving this story cant wait for the next chapter

Dragon Emperor0: Ah, I do so love it when readers compliment us and our stories, what about you?

ThermalsniperN7: Same.

Ohma flame: And so...we just wait of the other sins.

Dragon Emperor0: In other stories maybe, not this one.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. We got stories waiting to be set up for the others.

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update and I am glad Izuku managed to get through to King.

Dragon Emperor0: Yeah, he was totally being stupid.

ThermalsniperN7: He really was. Going off of eyewitness reports alone isn't the brightest move.

Nechroz: Well at least Greed and Sloth are friends again.

Dragon Emperor0: Yep. All's right with the world.

ThermalsniperN7: Indeed.

AbyssDragonslayer777: Actually when Ban steals perception from others it's called "Zero Sign" not Phantom Hunt.

Dragon Emperor0: We know. In this story, Phantom Hunt was a foreshadowing prototype special move to Zero Sign. Creative liberties man.

ThermalsniperN7: Yep. Creative liberties are awesome.

Forsaken Dragon of the Void: I am sorry, but why are you writing this as if it's an anime and not a fanfiction, I can deal with an opening even though it is not really needed, but having Mic describe them is also odd, especially when he is not there. Most writers write fanfictions as stories in a novel instead of as an anime. I don't mean to be disrespectful, it's just an unique way of writing that I only see react fanfiction do.

Dragon Emperor0: ...Thermal, mind explaining our writing process to this brain dead nimrod?

ThermalsniperN7: On it. The reason we do our writing the way we do is so we can make it feel as authentic and even immersive as possible. And frankly, I think it works really well for us, so we're sticking with it.

Beraxus: Loving the story so far. Can't wait to see how Toga reacts to him. This reminded me of an idea I had with a MHA X Black Clover crossover where Izuku is Asta

Dragon Emperor0: Toga would probably love him, S&M needs an M to work. And she fits the S very well. As for the crossover, I say go for it.

ThermalsniperN7: Something tells me Toga would be liable to become a hero just so she could be with Izuku… Hm... Wonder how that love triangle would go…?

Dragon Emperor0: Knowing The Seven Deadly Sins? Probably like Jericho x Ban x Elaine all over again.

ThermalsniperN7: Sounds legit.

Greer123: I loved the way you wrote the fights for this chapter. Hope you are doing well.

Dragon Emperor0: Thank you. Same to you.

ThermalsniperN7: We're doing just fine.

WT Aids: So 3 other ppl got over 110 points?

Dragon Emperor0: I have no bloody idea what you're talking about.

ThermalsniperN7: Ditto.

Ohma flame: Izuku...GO!

Dragon Emperor0: He's gonna go… and go hard.

ThermalsniperN7: And he won't stop going, and he won't stop going, and he won't stop going… I had to do it.

Kamen Rider Aegis: Honestly, I went back and forth in my head about King's pairing. While I love King X Diane, it just wouldn't feel the same if it was an OC based off of her. So, I think in this story, King should be with Tsuyu

Dragon Emperor0: After careful consideration… yeah, you got a point.

ThermalsniperN7: It really doesn't feel right if he gets shipped with an OC based on Diane. Tsuyu it is.

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update thank you and I like how you got to the USJ battle. I really want to see Izuku and King work together and fight.

Dragon Emperor0: Yep, those two are a better team than they are enemies.

ThermalsniperN7: So true.

Greer123: Izuku is going to lose his shit.

Dragon Emperor0: No one touches Ochako and gets away with it. Not in this story.

ThermalsniperN7: And those who do have chosen death…

iron-slayer-dragon: I'm excited for more chapters

Dragon Emperor0: Stay tuned for season 2.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. Stay tuned. You'll like what comes.

Pater P0n: tsu x taida

Dragon Emperor0: Well, verdict's in.

ThermalsniperN7: Yep.

Ohma flame: Holy shit

Dragon Emperor0: Be afraid, be very afraid of the Fox's Fury!

ThermalsniperN7: Oh yeah. Never piss off Izuku unless you wanna die!

NinjaFang1331: Excellent update and to see that even Izuku had a breaking point.

Dragon Emperor0: Seeing the love of your life die twice? Yeah, the breaking point is the dark side of the moon gone at that point.

ThermalsniperN7: Truer words never spoken.

Tim Curry's Toxic Love: I wonder if we'll also see Escanor, Meliodas, Merlin, Gowther, and Diane. We need Pride, Wrath, Gluttony, Lust, and Envy to complete the box set!

Dragon Emperor0: There will be, in separate stories at least.

ThermalsniperN7: Seeing several different varieties of Izuku will be awesome.

Kakarifers: I'm liking the story so far - pacing seems okay. Immersion wise? The intro thing with the song like it's an anime opening is a bit jarring.

Dragon Emperor0: Again with the opening bitching? No one else has complained about this before, what gives?

ThermalsniperN7: I'm not about to repeat what I said earlier, so I'm not saying anything.

Pinkypi: he would've wrecked the nomu if he'd stolen it's physical abilities Kappa. and could easily wreck Tomura with a fox hunt to snatch his heart instead.

Dragon Emperor0: He could have, but he was concerned with Ochako. Kinda hard to think strategy when the love of your life is in imminent danger.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah. Can't think straight while someone you love is in danger.

Tim Curry's Toxic Love: I already look forward to seeing what comes next.

Dragon Emperor0: So do we.

ThermalsniperN7: Yep.

Kakarifers: Still just as jarring as ever with the opening thing going on - it's even a good chunk of the chapter this time. Kinda short and not as fleshed out as I'd expected given the previous chapters, but it was to be an end to your first season, so to speak. Like the opening sequence was a sixth of the chapter length by words. That's kinda steep honestly.

Dragon Emperor0: ... I just can't. Seriously man, no one asked, some chapters are going to be shorter than others, jeez.

ThermalsniperN7: I doubt I'll be able to understand why people complain about stuff like this…

4-Skywalker: oh yeah nevermind my previous statement

Dragon Emperor0: Ignored.

ThermalsniperN7: Same.

4-Skywalker: You know, if afo could take izuku's quirk away, he could die just like ban when his soul was almost devoured,

What I want to know is how you would bring Ochako back for that plot point?

Dragon Emperor0: Eh, nah, we don't plan on having that happen.

ThermalsniperN7: Yeah, we got other plans.

NinjaFang1331: Great work with the USJ ending

Dragon Emperor0: Thank you.

ThermalsniperN7: We wanted an awesome ending to this, and I think we pulled it off.

Dragon Emperor0: And with that, we're done.

ThermalsniperN7: First review corner I've been a part of… This is different.

Dragon Emperor0: Yep. Well, see you guys next week!