Retiring JacobApples

by JacobApples

Hi everyone, this my backing up all my stories and the words of all the people who helped get me through as well as make me a better writer. So this is the archive of those reviewers, the good, the kind, the heartwarming, the amusing, the ones who gave me honesty that made me better and the ones who make you question the intelligence of humanity. Thank you all.

13. The Fellowship of the Evenstar

kcrump88 chapter 1 . Jan 4

If this story is ever finished I'll start it. You've burnt me too many times.

report review for abuseVirodeil chapter 1 . Aug 21, 2019

Awesome beginning. I love a much more proactive and bad-arse Arwen. Whenever I reread the books, I always thought she had so much potential. Tolkien fell short there, though, sadly. She was called Luthien's likeness; but Luthien *didn't* just stay put and wait for Beren to rescue her. So thank you so much for writing this story!

Rey

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 1 . Aug 5, 2019

Elrond might not stop her but I doubt if her ever will let Arwen out without protection.

If smaller company then at least some like Glorfindel, Ellandal and Elrohir would accompany her.

I can't imagine the twins willingly letting her out of their sight.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Jun 5, 2019

Abandoned?

report review for abuseAthena The Alto chapter 1 . May 19, 2019

update, update, update, i LOVE this. Although you did leave boromir out, I suppose you have a reason for that . . .

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . May 6, 2019

And so anither once promising story is abandoned.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Apr 18, 2019

Sorry to hear about the HP burnout. I'm not sure if I want to read this story as the LoTR fandom isn't something I'm THAT familiar with - I watched the movies of course and read the books in my teenage years but both was long ago - but I'm glad you found another outlet for your creativity. Have fun and my best wishes go with you :)

report review for abuseWaka Metalbelly chapter 1 . Apr 18, 2019

Ok, first off, I just woke up to this on my tablet. Last night was nuts. Fear not. This is actually a good start. a bit short, but good.

report review for abusestylo1 chapter 1 . Apr 18, 2019

arwen gets married after the ring is destroyed so if she wakes after her wedding what future does she see and what does it have it to do with the ring?

report review for abusegraynavarre chapter 1 . Apr 14, 2019

I am enjoying this. I am sorry that you are burnt out a bit on HP - I love your Black sisters

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 1 . Apr 13, 2019

Tolkein was a god. Agreed.

Very cool opening. A time-travel fic with Arwen as the traveller - or seer (I guess we will find out:). Bring it on! Super excited that you're branching into Tolkein!

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 1 . Apr 12, 2019

oooh, cool

report review for abuseReader chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

I like the idea , time to wait for more to see where this goes

report review for abusestevefocus chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Good first chapter, looking forward to more.

report review for abuseJukedSolid chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Every time I see an update from you I'm excited to continue reading the tantalizing scenes you had me hooked on previously. So when I see a new story I'm initially disappointed, and then you just have to go and completely blow me out of the water with this prompt!

As far as writers go, I think you are uniquely suited for this one. I'm very interested in seeing it continue, and I forgive you for feeling burned out on HP. Totally understandable.

-JukedSolid

report review for abuseBMS chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Intriguing start.

Will see where it goes, mostly because you're the one writing it.

Honestly, I don't read LOTR fics often. The original work is too BLOODY WELL DONE to leave points of diversion that hold up.

report review for abuseLhjr77 chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

I like the start. I'm interested to see where it goes and the changes that she makes. The Lord Of The Rings was the first real book that I read.

report review for abuseShadeslayerX chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

This is a genuinely interesting direction for the story. Will follow with great interest

report review for abuseTheSandyToadfish chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Airways happy to read your stories even if they aren't HP. That being said have you considered crossovers? Taking those HP characters into new universes? We could always use more good crossovers.

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Cool! I don't really read anything other than HP fanfics, but I like your writing, and I will come on this joyride with you. I mean, getting a few years head start will make some things easier, but getting into Mordor is no joke. But the death toll could be a lot lower.

The question is: will Arwen make use of everything right up front to gain the advantage immediately or try to game events in her favor over the long term. Poor Elrond, though. Arwen pulls an Eowyn, although a little more prepared. Will she go to the Shire first, I wonder? Might be the safest bet. Rope Aragorn into things first and all.

And Gandalf is not to be trifled with. How will he react?

Onward and upward!

report review for abuseMidnightFenrir chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Branching out a bit, are you ? Looking forward to what you'll make with this.

report review for abuseMajora6295 chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

I'm excited for this story!

report review for abuseShadowCree chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Yes please. Ready for Arwen to save us all.

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

What a long dream. I can't blame her in the least for not wanting to go through all the trials a second time.

(Rivendale? I think you mean Rivendell.)

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Awesome first chapter.

report review for abuseMyllinu chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

like it so far. looking forward to more. probably gonna have to go through a wiki or something to brush up on my LotR knowledge.

report review for abuseDarthRevan148 chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Would it not have made sense for Arwen to tell her father to reforge the sword now instead of later? Anyway promising story though I do wish you would finish a story before starting another.

report review for abusemarlastiano chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Interesting approach :)

report review for abuseVoldiesBedroomSlippers chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Interesting concept, off to a great start. I look forward to seeing where this story goes.

report review for abusebero chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Great start plz continue. And don't forget you're other stories

report review for abuseKnightLawn chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

This was a really neat concept.

report review for abuseReluctantSidekick chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2019

Can't wait for more!

Virodeil chapter 2 . Aug 21, 2019

Ooooh. Arwen as leader! Awesome! And Legolas follows her stoutly... Perfect. You didn't seem to follow the Hobbit films in this, too, given the lack of mention about Tauriel, so it's even more perfect in my eyes. (No offence meant to Peter Jackson, but his interpretation of Legolas in that case seemed more like a bad-boy teen than an elven prince...)

Looking forward to the sparks between Legolas and Gimli. :grin:

Rey

report review for abuseInfinityMask chapter 2 . May 17, 2019

I didn't notice you make. This story.. this seems interesting as long as the pairing stay that way. Lol. Arwen and Aragon is one of my fav and I rarely read or maybe never read story where they're paired with other people. Lol. Let's see what will happen in the fellowship!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 2 . Apr 13, 2019

Great start. The son of Gloin will be much harder to convince than Legolas. Should be fun, wonder who will be called on next. The shire will be last I expect.

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 2 . Apr 13, 2019

Mushrooms? What's a mushroom in "review" parlance? I'm no fic-noob but have I missed something?

You're moving fast! Normally you do quite a bit with dialogue as well - very interested to see the middle-earth dialogue you build in as the story develops - particularly since you've been so, so very careful with it so far - your craft is strong!:) Thank you - really enjoying this and looking forward to where you take us!

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

this is great. Looking forward to seeing where you take the story

report review for abusemuggledad chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

Great story. Tolkien was my gateway author to fantasy and I've lost track as to how many times I've read LoTR.

This story has great potential. I love your pacing, dialogue, characterazations and general writing style.

Press On JacobApples! Forward, Ho!

md

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

Yes, the poor fathers of these two adventuresome, troublesome children of theirs. And poor Legolas, getting dragged into a Dwarven stronghold.

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

Hahaha! Have a mushroom! :D

Interesting. Arwen is putting together the Fellowship, it would appear. And whither then? Why, off to Mordor, of course.

I do believe that Thranduil has been well and truly snookered. It will be most amusing to see his reaction when he finds out what, exactly, Arwen and Legolas are up to...

report review for abuseAdam Redmayne chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

From a fatherhood and legacy perspective i can understand Thranduil's issues with his only son...no matter how much he might live up to that high elf arrogance and dickishness attitude lmao.

report review for abuseAppoApples chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

Sorry the picture that keeps getting replaced ff .net is having issues again.

report review for abusewadethewolf chapter 2 . Apr 12, 2019

This is getting very interesting.

Virodeil chapter 3 . Aug 21, 2019

You know, if you wish to use the Sindarin language for the male and female elves, you could use "elleth" and "ellon," not "elleth" and "elf"... The latter just sounds weird, as if "elf" belongs to the language, instead of an English interpretation.

So glad, though, that you gave many depictions of the world as seen from the POV of an elf. I just you would've given more... (This greedy reader... :P)

Nice to see Legolas behaving as young as he seems in the books, but still princely. And glad knowing you didn't disparage Gimli, although Tolkien indeed didn't have many nice things to say about the dwarves.

Speaking of the books, you already changed so much of the canon events, you know. You needn't fear that you follow the books too closely; you simply *can't*. LOL And I *highly* enjoy that! So thank you so much for continuing along this path you're making!

Rey

report review for abuseGuest chapter 3 . May 11, 2019

Sassy diplomatic Arwen back at it again

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 3 . Apr 15, 2019

I can't help grinning as I read this. Love the early forming of the fellowship and the early stirring of the greatest elven and dwarvish friendship ever written. Thank you! More please;)

report review for abuseKX chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

As with most of your writings you can consider me a fan. Only caveat being of course that it likely means longer updates for the rest. But that is like complaining about finding coin money because they are more unwieldy in comparison to paper money

report review for abuseGuest chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

Good chapter. Guess I was wrong off to the Shire we go.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

A good concept you have here. Gandalf lollygagged a long time before starting the wheels in motion to destroy the ring. Even a few years earlier and both Sauron and Saruman would be weaker. Anyway keep going, a good start!

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

You are doing a great job of showing the beginnings (again) of Legolas' and Gimli's friendship.

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

I love how murder is the tipping point for Gimli.

"Hey, wanna come with?"

"Meh."

"We can indiscriminately kill all the goblins and orcs we meet..."

"I'm in!"

Hahahaha! Gimli, don't ever change, you cuddly little dwarf you.

I do hope Elrond doesn't screw things up by sticking his oar in. But I can just imagine what is going through his head when he receives Thranduil's letter. Hehehe. He's going to go spare when he realizes Gimli is the shadowy figure, though.

"You both bickering like humans is, indeed, quite loud."

AHAHAHA! Burn!

report review for abuseGlorandar chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

A creative and unique approach to the LOTR tale. Very enjoyable to read.

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

love this. Arwen the badass is perfect.

report review for abuseWrathofAjax chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

well I like it so far. Nice to picture Arwen in the fellowship. modernizes it a bit

report review for abuseTheRadiantFire chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

Loved this chapter! I'm very curious to see which way you'll be going with this! It's really cool to finally read about Arwen in depth, and I can't wait for the next chapter

report review for abuseReluctantSidekick chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

Love it!

report review for abuseMyllinu chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

nice chapter. but is she going to find Gandalf, or will Gandalf find her?

report review for abuseKatia0203 chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

This looks to be quite fun and interesting!

report review for abuseVoldiesBedroomSlippers chapter 3 . Apr 14, 2019

I don't usually follow new stories chapter by chapter but this one is intriguing. A quick editorial comment...

"There are far safer ways to create such a fraud between our peoples"

* I assume you meant "feud"

Virodeil chapter 4 . Aug 21, 2019

Awwh! You planned to kill off Arwen at the end, after all? I thought she planned to wait down the ages doting on the descendents of her love, as mentioned in the first chapter... And the tugging on her being like that, it sounded suspiciously like the "soulmate bond" many writers write about in the Harry Potter verse. No offence meant; just personal preference, and I usually avoid such stories...

Elladan and Elrohir joining in the group was nice, though. I love them. I was sad when knowing that they didn't join the canon story till more than half-way down the tale. Now they're there from nearly the start! Thank you for involving them in this. I hope Gimli will get more role soon, though.

Rey

report review for abuseInfinityMask chapter 4 . May 17, 2019

Nice~ good job! Lol

report review for abuseDeathLock chapter 4 . Apr 19, 2019

IGNORE MY REVIEW ON CHAP 5...i check it on wiki and she is 2900-ish and she chooses to become mortal during the books...didn't know, sorry to bother.

report review for abuseVoldiesBedroomSlippers chapter 4 . Apr 17, 2019

Hoping to see all four Fellowship Hobbits next, although I expect trouble convincing Bilbo to pass the ring to Frodo.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 4 . Apr 16, 2019

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseTheRadiantFire chapter 4 . Apr 16, 2019

Ah I feel so bad for Gimli... hopefully Aragorn will try to make him feel more comfortable or strike up a conversation with him! Can't wait to read more about Arwen and Aragorn as well!

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Poor Gimli, having to be surrounded by elves. At least, like he said, hen they get to the Shire there'll be Hobbits.

Also, poor Arwen, having to be babysat on her adventure. It's understandable, but still. And at least she can spend the time with her brothers.

Lol, Arwen is such a troll.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

I just love this story! You are doing such a wonderful job with it! I can not wait to read whatever you have planned next.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Very good. As for requests hmmmm Ganda... Pip! Mary and Pippin! They are always fun.

report review for abusemarlastiano chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Very romantic :)

report review for abuseReluctantSidekick chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

It's really getting good!

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Yay! Love it

report review for abuseWrathofAjax chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Well you said requests were welcome, so here's mine. please leave in the most epic magic scene in the entire series, The fording of the Bruinen (the water horse scene)m including the whole crying to Frodo scene. it was one of my most favorite scenes in the movie trilogy. very moving

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 4 . Apr 15, 2019

Welp. At least Elrohir knows what's what. Changes to the Fellowship? Temporary additions? What will happen when they realize exactly what she plans? I can't imagine that they will be okay with a jaunt to Mordor. Well, it seems that Elrohir might be up for it. We'll see about the other.

Poor Aragorn. He prolly wasn't thinking about elves being a source of danger. He gave the right answer, though. "I would follow you anywhere," instantly, and without hesitation. Now, it remains to be seen how Elrond is going to react to this latest development. And react, he will, I'm sure.

alec-potter chapter 5 . Aug 5, 2019

Fantastic chapter.

report review for abuseInfinityMask chapter 5 . May 17, 2019

So merry and pippin wouldn't play important role. It's a shame. Their growth as character is amazing. Tho I agree that the journey would be easier without them... most likely... btw what will happen to rohan?

report review for abusepineapple-pancake chapter 5 . May 10, 2019

I loved that last line from Bilbo xD!

And you might want to fix something: Aragorn elvish ancestor is Elros who died in SA 442, he was the twin of Elrond, but none of them were raised in Rivendell. That place was funded by Elrond in SA 1697, over a thousand years after Elros died.

report review for abuseOlly chapter 5 . May 7, 2019

It's a detail but Isildur isn't "Elendil's son of Gondor". Elendil was high king of Arnor and Gondor, when he died the crown of Arnor was supposed to go to Isildur, his eldest son, and the crown of Gondor to Anarion, his youngest son. But both Elendil and Anarion died during the war against Sauron, because of that Isildur reunite the two crowns but he never intended to pass the crown of Gondor to his sons. The crown of Gondor went to Meneldil, Isildur's nephew and Anarion's son.

But great story ! I can't wait to see how it will unfold.

report review for abusealex lockstein chapter 5 . Apr 26, 2019

I like the story so far, but Boromir seems to have been forgotten. If he is left out, the story will be without one of the chief motivators. Besides, he could prove useful if he is included, and allowed to continue past Amon Hen. Keep up the good work.

report review for abusenagiten chapter 5 . Apr 27, 2019

may I use your idea for a story of my own? or just take inspiration from it?

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 5 . Apr 24, 2019

This makes me giddy with anticipation!

report review for abuseJake chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

It is spelled HENCE.

All the same great chapter

report review for abuseGuest chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Lol bilbo is the king of one liners, I love it. Great job can't wait for more.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

I am glad you are continuing; well written and a new twist. Keep the chapters coming.

report review for abuseBlack' Victor Cachat chapter 5 . Apr 19, 2019

LOL love that last scene!

Very interesting and original fic. Looking forward to more! :-D

report review for abuseDeathLock chapter 5 . Apr 19, 2019

I thought that she wasn't that old in the books...or immortal(due to being a halfling)...cuz that was always sad in the movies to me, so i just conforted myself that it wasn't so ..,thx for the chapter XD

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 5 . Apr 19, 2019

Awesome chapter. What about Boromir are they going to pick him up on the way? Are you going to have Pippin and Merry still be heros of both Ronin and Gondor don't remember witch came to who.

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Bilbo took this much better than he had last time. I certainly don't blame you for not including Merry and Pippin in the nine. They grew to become great warriors, for hobbits, but you have to ask, what did they lose in exchange? During the Battle of Pelennor Fields, they began to shine, and by the time they charged after Aragorn they had all grown up, but then they returned home and yet never arrived.

Bilbo is right. And all his children tremble at the fact. After all, everything that makes them a nuisance to anyone was learned from him.

report review for abuseKatia0203 chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Aww but why not take Merry and Pippin? They make a great and significant impact on the story. That's disappointing

report review for abuseWaka Metalbelly chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Two issues. Firstly, yes you really did well with this so far. Arwen is *almost* mary sue, but you balancing it just fine. So that said, I want more dammit. Second, Fiance should be replaced with 'Intended' or 'Betrothed'. Toodles Noodles.

report review for abuseTheRadiantFire chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

This is great!

report review for abusekurotatsu72 chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

I have one quibble about the timeline. You've said previously it's less than a decade before the main sequence of the books takes place, but Bilbo left the Shire for Rivendell when Frodo turned 33, on the night of his 111th birthday party. And I'm almost certain that Frodo himself was 50 before he left the Shire with the Nine on his heels.

report review for abusemarlastiano chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

:)

report review for abusestylo1 chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

im curious to see how it will go cause in all honestly lotr only won with luck something that will be hard to recreate. best chance would be to kill sauroman first gather the horseman of rohan ride for gondor and then mordor to make the same diversion as before while frodo goes through the mountains

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Man, goosebumps throughout. LOTR is buried deep in my soul, and this brought back so many memories. One of the most powerful moments in the whole trilogy is when Frodo says "I will take the Ring, though I do not know the way." The willingness to suffer for others, others who will never even know that you suffer, is the essence of love.

Arwen isn't playing around, here. She is moving fast and hard, taking every advantage when it comes and striking hard at her goal. As befits a several-thousand-year-old warrior. I liked how she set Aragorn in his place re: her coming with. She is not a child. She is a woman and a powerful warrior. And honestly, isn't it better that you live and die together? That's what I think, anyway.

And yay! Bilbo gave up the Ring freely again! That will help him tremendously, just as it did before.

report review for abusegraynavarre chapter 5 . Apr 18, 2019

Will Boromir or Faramir be in this? I really loved Faramir (damn you, Peter Jackson for what you did to my Faramir)

alec-potter chapter 6 . Aug 5, 2019

Nice chapter.

report review for abuseMurkglow chapter 6 . Apr 25, 2019

First of all, let me just say that I love this story. I love the idea behind it (Arwen having a major vision of the war), I love the use of relatively unused characters (Arwen and her brothers), I love how sure and direct Arwen is in pursuing her goals. All of this is great and is a welcome change from "OC/Self insert" stories which seem to make up most of the LotR fandom. I have this favorited and will be eagerly reading every chapter as soon as it comes out.

One thing that jumped out at me with this recent chapter though: I'm a bit unclear on the timeline used for this fic. Chapter 1 mentions "a few short decades" before the war. This obviously isn't a big deal for the Elves, Wizards, and Dwarves (nor Aragon for that matter as he was 88 at the time of the war) of course but can be more of an issue for other characters. It's a good reason, for example, why Boromir (41) can't be part of the fellowship this time around as he would only be 11-21 if you took "a few" (2-3) decades off him. Frodo when he left with the Ring was 50 so a few decades off still leaves him at 20-30 which is young for a hobbit (adulthood for a hobbit is 33) but not too young. Sam though was only 38 during the war, putting him at 8-18 with those decades off... That's pretty young. Merry was roughly the same (36, so 6-16) but Pippin was the youngest hobbit at only 28, which would put his age range at between -2 and 8! A bit too young to be running off with Bilbo at this point I should think...

Now one could say it was only a single decade before the war (putting Pippin at a more reasonable 18) but then there are events to consider. Bilbo leaves the Shire on his 111th birthday which was 17 years before Frodo left the Shire with the ring. Since Bilbo is there that means this takes place at least 17 years before the war so, at the absolute oldest, Pippin would be 11.

This is hardly a big deal by any means and can just be hand waved away (if you really want) but it's kind surprising when we're getting used to the idea of this being a few decades in the past, to then to see Pippin in the story when he should be a young child at most...

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 6 . Apr 24, 2019

Just loving it. The language is wonderfully formal which makes it all the more fun when hobbits and dwarves speak. Great to have this from the elven perspective!

report review for abuseLifeIsAGreatAdventure chapter 6 . Apr 24, 2019

Understood that you'd want to bring Sam along on this but at this point in time he would be the equivalent of about 10 in human years according to most of the workable age translations I've seen. Bringing him along and making him as mature as you have is a serious weakness in this fic.

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

Merry and Pippin refuse to be calm in any way. I'm glad the Fellowship is having that bonding time.

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

i am really enjoying this

report review for abuseGuest chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

Good chapter.

report review for abusekurotatsu72 chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

One comment. There are nine Ringwraiths, not seven. The Seven Rings were for the Dwarves.

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

Hmm. "If we fall, we fall together." That is definitely something I agree with.

Better to all die together than to have someone left behind.

Bilbo speaks wise words about courage and the importance of looking to who you want to become. It's far too easy to simply fall into thoughtless habit and routine and be surprised by your future self. Much better to make your future self someone you will like.

Glad that Merry and Pippin will get some adventure; the defense of the North didn't feature in the trilogy, except as a passing comment, but the two hobbits will certainly have the opportunity to play a role in the upcoming war.

Man, this chapter was packed. The nine Nazgul aren't abroad yet, but they are evil and terrible enemies. I hope they miss out on a lot of stuff.

I laughed when Arwen and Estel both said "NO" to Moria so emphatically. Heh. And describing young elves as having much trouble to find was priceless.

Great chapter. Really looking forward to where this story goes. And I think it might be time to read LOTR again.

report review for abuseTheRadiantFire chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

Very curious to see how much you'll use from the original storyline and what will be completely different! Nice chapter, I'll be waiting for the next one

report review for abuseKatia0203 chapter 6 . Apr 21, 2019

Yay! Merry and Pippin!

Fyrefenix chapter 7 . Sep 14, 2019

I'm so glad you brought in Tom Bombadil, I was really upset they missed him out in the film version. First LoTR fanfic I've read for years and I'm really enjoying it. I like the interactions between the characters, Arwen is really coming to life for me, as are her brothers. I hope Legolas and Gimli attain the deep friendship and respect they developed in the books. Ready to read the next chapter now. Keep up the good work, as they say!

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 7 . Aug 5, 2019

Nice chapter.

Await the return of the Wizard.

report review for abuseDragonbornJedi chapter 7 . May 5, 2019

First let me say I love the idea of this story and how well you are writing it! You have been doing very well with both the characters and the pacing of the story. Very well. I look forward so much for the next chapters! I was wondering, if this is several decades before the original timeline then will Denathor and Aragon/Thoringil be meeting again? And if not them perhaps someone else in Gondor who knew Aragon will reunite with him? Thank you so much for writing this I am enjoying it immensely! Keep up the good work!

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 7 . Apr 28, 2019

Who cares about the ages of the boys:) Fanfic means you can play, right? Right. Settled.

Adore how you make this world come to life so vividly and thank you for doing what Peter Jackson was unable to do and bring Tom Bombadil into the Fellowship storyline, lol:) Loved it as always!

Your faithful fan.

report review for abuseAraytigre chapter 7 . Apr 28, 2019

A Fine Tale here being told, a new adventure to some, yet familiar to others, this being said through yet another's voice, as seen with new eyes. Fortunately, though he may be old, and not quite as spry, but Bilbo's mind is as sharp as ever. Soon, the final companion shall arrive, in his own fashion, as is the want of Wizards. Thank You. TTFN

report review for abuseWarriorsCre3d chapter 7 . Apr 27, 2019

This is great, I've never seen ANYTHING like it. Such an original idea and to well carried out. Will we be seeing more Arwen and Aragorn moments soon? This is brilliant and I can't wait for the next chapter

report review for abuseKatia0203 chapter 7 . Apr 27, 2019

Lovely chapter! You wrote the treachery of Old Man Willow very well, and I could almost see it in my imagination through your skillful writing. Also I am intrigued about Arwen and her decision to love Aragorn and live a mortal life. I wonder, would she ever decide to not forsake immortality but still be with Aragorn? I've always wondered if perhaps that would have been better; she'd be able to see future generations grow until she felt weary and could sail West. She'd be with the rest of her family and eventually, at the end of days, she would be with Aragorn again, along with everyone else. She's very strong; I believe she could avoid fading, but I could be wrong. Tolkien clearly believed she needed to choose a mortal life, so perhaps she is meant to here in this story.

Anyway, I'd like to say that your story is wonderful and I'm on the edge of my seat! Thanks for the update!

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 7 . Apr 26, 2019

I love those songs. I got chills reading them. Old Man Willow is powerful indeed to ignore Elvish songs. Glad to see old Tom make an appearance, even if it was a brief one.

And as you point out, there is a downside to immortality. Everything else dies, but not you. You just continue on. Interacting with other immortals is a leisurely thing, but interacting with mortals is not. Seeing mortals grow and die, generation after generation, that would be trying, to say the least. It's like being an observer, but never actually participating in a game. You can't value winning or losing because ultimately, it means nothing to you; it doesn't affect you at all. Arwen is right: retreating across the sea is simply bowing out of a changing world in favor of an unchanging one. Now granted, elves aren't human, so there is probably something there to deal with, but if one is going to live in Middle Earth, then one must *live* in Middle Earth.

(And no worries on the ages. That's the glorious thing about fanfiction!)

report review for abuseWrathofAjax chapter 7 . Apr 26, 2019

the hobbits are teenagers, according to hobbits culture. the age of adult hood is 33 I think. also yessss Tom Bombadil ftw. I see so few LotR fics that go off the books as well as the movies.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 7 . Apr 26, 2019

Awesome chapter.

report review for abusestylo1 chapter 7 . Apr 26, 2019

dont hobbits age like humans? bilbo was the oldest one at 111 i think that kinda fits with human life span, so mid 25 isnt really a teenager anymore no? though with hobbit mindset they will prob still behave as such

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alec-potter chapter 8 . Aug 5, 2019

Nice musings of Estel.

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 8 . May 20, 2019

Loving it as usual.

report review for abusepineapple-pancake chapter 8 . May 10, 2019

I have really liked this version of the story in which Arwen is in charge :P She is quite the leader lady ordering everyone around very subtly, all the fellowship thinking that they are doing what they want to do, while they are doing her bidding.

report review for abuseAraytigre chapter 8 . May 9, 2019

As a Father, I can understand where Elrond's heart is, but I also know that no matter how much it may tax my heart, I know that she must do as Her heart bids her, as I and her Mother did also. Hopefully Merri and Pippen won't be too hard on Bilbo for his deception. Little does Aragorn know how prophetic her words will be. Thank You TTFN

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 8 . May 8, 2019

great chapter

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 8 . May 8, 2019

Thanks for the shout out! :D

Poor Strider and Gimli. Wading through all that snow when everyone else simply walked on it. Heh. Elrond's conversation with Galadriel was good: he is rather the overprotective father here, and he does need to trust his children (who happen to be thousands of years old...).

Interesting to see Arwen as a seductress. Doubly interesting to see the dwarf is the one who points it out. Heh.

And Legolas hurling Gimli was hilarious. :D :D :D

You know, I wonder if the number of years really means anything, without the corresponding life experience. I mean, this Arwen is totally different from canon Arwen after only a few years of extra experience. Canon Arwen is likely very sheltered, in a sense, like all elves, living in a timeless sort of *now* instead of fully engaged in the world. From what we see of elvish communities, apart from hunting orcs, it seems that they want for nothing. And in wanting for nothing, they needn't strive for anything, thus remaining children, in many ways. Wasn't always like this, for sure. Fëanor and his contemporaries fought Morgoth, and Elrond fought Sauron. Perhaps, his overreaction to everything Arwen comes from his experiences of seeing elves die instead of pass over into the West. Interesting things, here.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

Good chapter. Poor Elrond. Gimli will get there...eventually.

report review for abuseBryan chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

I have followed you for the Harry Potter story's with special pairings But I am glad to see you write This story as well, it is a great story

report review for abuseMurkglow chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

Holy cow, Legolas must be crazy strong! Gimli would weigh a freaking ton given his size and heavy armor (plus his weapons, supplies, ect...) and if Legolas can just toss him as dead weight without any help from the dwarf? Dang.

Next up, poor poor Elrond. I love that he has Galadriel for comfort because I don't care how much of an epic elf lord you are, that news would be crushing for anyone. I look forward to seeing what he and everyone else (including Glorfindel) decide to do.

Lastly, the pass over the mountian and the camp at night was well done. I like the attention Arwen is paying to the health and safety of the hobbits and her steel determination. It'll be interesting in the end to see the arguments around her immortality and whether Aragorn (and her brothers) can talk her into watching over her descendants (I'm guessing no but you are bring the idea up a lot so maybe...). Gimli is going to need to crack it seems before things get better for him though, I wonder when it will happen... When he meets Galadriel I suppose?

In any case, great chapter.

report review for abusefallendemon248 chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

Can't wait for them to meet Galadriel and see what she has to say

report review for abusev3Olympus chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

I've been anticipating this update for so long and I'm glad it's out! (really shouldn't be one to talk since I haven't updated my stories myself!) I love that I'm seeing a lot of Elladan and Elrohir here. We could really enjoy that time. I'm waiting for Glorfindel too! I love this story so far, and if there's a reason I'm keeping quiet, it's coz I'm waiting to finish reading the whole of it!

report review for chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

lmao, it's just so funny to picture Legolas throwing Gimly across xD

report review for abusemarlastiano chapter 8 . May 7, 2019

Thanks. ️

Marauders Apprentice chapter 9 . Jun 15

Meh. Arwen staying on after Aragorn passes away is obviously the sane and rational choice. But when I turn to high fantasy it's to enjoy the wildly unrealistic romanticism of the genre, I get more than my fill of realism out of real life already. Other than that small complaint I find this story expertly constructed and delightfully executed, I sincerely hope you pick up this story again someday soon.

report review for abuseSteamdriventurkishstateopera chapter 9 . Mar 6

I quite like the immortal divergence. The spirit and content of the dialogue also feels different but consistent with the themes of Moddle Earth. This fic feels possible.

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 9 . Aug 5, 2019

Nice chapter.

Hope Gandalf will finally make entrance in the next chapter.

What must Sauron be planning.

report review for abusenagiten chapter 9 . May 24, 2019

hmmm interesting having Arwen keep her immortality

are u going to be giving Aragon his own? never understood why half elves never had whatthe elves do...plus wouldn't Arwen be half too since her father was one but her mother was just a elv true a nobel/royal elf but still Aragon mother was an elf his father of elvish blood so why not have Aragon be more immortal then he is?

ok they had to use the trope and will they wont they stuff but still there are many ways to ensure they live together and no one has to give up anything

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 9 . May 20, 2019

I love the last line. The choices you have Arwen make and the people that support herright down to Strideris a glorious, difficult piece which you handle so well. nice! Thank you!

report review for abuseDuder chapter 9 . May 11, 2019

When it is time for Mourning one expresses grief and remembrance of a departed loved one. And when MORNING arrives a new day has begun, bringing with it new life and new memories.

Don't confuse the two.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . May 10, 2019

That was a significant turn in the story. Good chapter though where is Gandalf?

report review for chapter 9 . May 11, 2019

Really good chapter. There were quite a few lines spoken by the elves that really seemed to capture that 'elven wisdom' preconception most of us have on the elvenkin, nicely done!

report review for abusebrandonack96 chapter 9 . May 11, 2019

So will Arwen still be the queen of men eventhough she chose immortality instead of a mortal life with the man she loves?

report review for abusepineapple-pancake chapter 9 . May 11, 2019

Thank you for this long chapter to enjoy. I am very happy that Arwen decided to keep her immortality, for me it always seemed like the right path to take, especially after seeing examples of joyful and capable widows in my life. And it would be good for her to consider marrying again if she is not meant for single life.

And regarding fire drakes :P It is Sindarin, not Silvan. The language of the Sindar Elves is the main one spoken in middle earth. It can also be called elvish ("What is the elvish word for friend?"- Frodo), yet that is less precise because there are many elvish tongues.

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 9 . May 11, 2019

I wish I had a fire drake. It'd be so cool.

It's nice to see Arwen being the medic. Her abilities are likely far better than Aragorn's.

Trust a dwarf to be bold enough to flatly refuse to tightrope-walk. And any lightness in Middle-Earth is to be cherished.

Galadriel's idea is very interesting. At least it's a better reason than Arwen got in canon.

And she's still sneaking up on and scaring her boyfriend.

The flames of rage and hatred can get very comfortable. At least Celeborn was able to provide a different fuel to burn.

report review for abusemarlastiano chapter 9 . May 10, 2019

Good and Sad :(

Guest chapter 10 . Jun 13

This has been a fascinating read. I hope to see more, when you eventually return to the story.

report review for abuseLord Damon Darkfyre chapter 10 . Jun 10

This is extremely well written in the Tolkien-esque style. And I hope to see more in the future. Your blend of Tolkien's style with the modern is such that I have rarely seen. Hoping for an update sooner than 2021, but for a story such as this, I can wait. Favoriting and following story.

report review for abusewolfecub1 chapter 10 . May 22

More, please!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . Jan 27

Very nice story, well written. Thank you for sharing your story with us

Rust Hava

report review for abuseproton104 chapter 10 . Oct 1, 2019

Please, please, please update soon!

report review for abuse1sunfun chapter 10 . Oct 1, 2019

Very good idea and story.

report review for abuseFyrefenix chapter 10 . Sep 14, 2019

You are weaving a wondrous tale here and I am thoroughly enjoying it. This seems to be written in a different style than your HP stories, more Tolkeinesque in your wording and sentence structure somehow. Anyway, an enjoyable version of events and I patiently wait for the next instalment.

report review for abuseKingtaso chapter 10 . Jun 28, 2019

Interesting. While until now,you have clearly managed to stay off the path of making Arwen a Mary Sue, don't forget that, in the end, she is but one maiden. The greatest since Luthien, without a doubt, but still one girl.

report review for abuseKEB chapter 10 . Jun 19, 2019

Great story, once again! Love your writing. Thanks!

report review for abuseLilyRose9 chapter 10 . Jun 12, 2019

This is such a fascinating story! I've loved Arwen and Aragorn for years (my original OTP) so its so cute to see her pursuing him! And the new Fellowship is awesome! I can't wait to see what happens next! Are they going to meet younger Boromir/Faramir? What is Gandalf going to do next? Can't wait!

report review for abuseNeskat chapter 10 . May 31, 2019

I don't have much to contribute but to say that this is a great story and I very much enjoy reading it. Please keep writing! You don't often find well written stories that manage to be epic tales while keeping the tale lighthearted enough.

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 10 . May 25, 2019

loved the chapter. Gandalf getting his marching orders while Bilbo was having fun with him was great, and glad to see Thranduil and Elrond teaming up to clear up Mirkwood.

report review for abusenathnathn chapter 10 . May 22, 2019

Great work.

Just a question any plans to include thing from shadow of war?

A few chapters ago I pictured them telling the tale of the ranger of gondor around a fire

Maybe a omake.

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 10 . May 21, 2019

Well, I hadn't expected submission my Elrond to Thranduil, but then again I had not expected Thranduil to go along with it. Love the description of the well-prepared elven war party! Thank you!

report review for abusethe Korvin chapter 10 . May 19, 2019

not bad

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . May 17, 2019

I feel torn. I LOVE the Harry Potter stories you have started writing, but I have to admit that this one is amazing as well.

report review for abuseInfinityMask chapter 10 . May 17, 2019

Hmm.. I wonder if this would make thranduil hate arwen? Or maybe just resent or slightly dislike her?

report review for abuseghostcrab311 chapter 10 . May 17, 2019

Poor Gandalf. Lol! And poor Thranduil. :( Two powerful old men are disappointed in this chapter. Two young hobbits are given a priceless gift! Fireworks!

report review for abuseshallowords chapter 10 . May 16, 2019

this is awesome

report review for abuseDuellist chapter 10 . May 16, 2019

I love this. It is a common-ish thing to do in HP, to take a main or unexpected supporting character back to a point in time, a convergence or hinge point in history, where their knowledge and experience make a difference and ward off disaster or an unacceptable future. I have never seen it before in Tolkien, and find myself, like Frodo, completely enamored.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . May 14, 2019

Bad tidings. Good chapter.

report review for abuseStorSpeaker chapter 10 . May 16, 2019

So, I've been following some of your work for a while. Disorder of the Phoenix, being my first fix of yours. I honestly love so much of this and it's amazing, and I really hope you continue this, can't wait for the next chapter!

report review for abusepineapple-pancake chapter 10 . May 15, 2019

poor fathers. That must feel awful.

report review for abuseAraytigre chapter 10 . May 15, 2019

Whooo Boy, Gandalf the Grey just had several overripe Tomatoes dashed into his face, and is now off chasing down the Fellowship (fortunately without Merri or Pippen), and Lord Elrond is out and about slaying Orcs, Goblins and Spiders where ever he finds them, then convinced King Thranduil to take up said quest (and pledging His forces to said King), this, after telling him that their Children Are Not going to be married (or whatever it is that the Elves do for Marriage). The Fellowship is on their way after a brief rest. I noticed that Arwen hadn't discovered why the arrows bounced off of Frodo, while we know why, he was wearing the Mithril Chainmail that Bilbo had for His adventure. Thank You. TTFN

report review for chapter 10 . May 14, 2019

Bilbo and Gandalf didn't feel like their characters as they conversed. Elrond and Thranduill did feel like them if a little too straightforward for elven nobles(?. Anyway, great chapter and can't wait for Merry n Pippin demolishing Rivendell

report review for abuseTheRadiantFire chapter 10 . May 14, 2019

Nice chapter! Can't wait to read more about the group dynamics more

report review for abusefallendemon248 chapter 10 . May 14, 2019

I don't know why but this is looking really good I'm so excited

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 10 . May 13, 2019

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseOleanne chapter 10 . May 13, 2019

Oh what an interesting tale you weave. Nice to have the elves more involved in this venture and Gandalf too. Great chapter! - Elrond bowing low to Thranduil - A nice touch to have King Thranduil lead their forces!

report review for abuseDragonbornJedi chapter 10 . May 13, 2019

Wonderful! I could not help but smile when I read the section with Gandalf and Bilbo!

Thank you!

report review for abuseDadycoool chapter 10 . May 13, 2019

I'll have you know, a wizard is never late. He arrives precisely when he means to.

It must've been extremely eerie to show up in an elven hall to silence and darkness. At least Bilbo had a bit of fun with him. I wonder if Elrond will ever forgive him. He'd probably give him about the same treatment he'll give his children.

Poor Thranduil. Expecting good news, but getting pretty much the worst news ever. Honestly, he took it very well.

report review for abuseVoldiesBedroomSlippers chapter 10 . May 13, 2019

This continues to be a most intriguing and original fic. I don't normally follow unfinished stories one chapter at a time, but I find myself quite addicted to this one. Thank you so much for taking the time to write it. I look forward to future chapters.