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PART ONE ( EYE OF THE HURRICANE ) CHAPTER THIRTEEN:
013 || Out Of the Flames
"in which murphy's law should be renamed dumbledore's law because everything he does goes so bloody wrong . . ."
AURELIA WAKES UP, sweating profusely as a scream falls from her lips. Goyle's going to kill me! They're going to kill me — I'm going to die! I'm — Her whole body feels like it's on fire but not in a painful way, her muscles are tensed up — I'm in danger — I'm in — a pillow hits her square in the face, startling her but it drags her out of her panicked stupor because there had been no pillows before. It's just a nightmare, she realises, her body cools down significantly as she lets out a sigh of relief. Goyle nor Rowle are there, neither of them can hurt her.
"Why are you bloody screaming," Hannah asks, annoyed.
Aurelia glances at her "Sorry, bad dream."
Hannah raises her eyebrows, huffing.
"I'm fine, go back to sleep."
Without hesitation, Hannah buries her head under her covers once more. Aurelia glances around the dorm, unsurprisingly Olivia had slept through her scream; Olivia can sleep through anything, she swears on it. Aurelia's surprised to see that Susan hadn't woken up; Susan Bones never sleeps. That statement is only slightly exaggerated, Susan sleeps very little, she's the last to go to sleep and the first to wake up, when she does sleep, Susan's a very, very light sleeper. She crawls out of bed and heads for the bathrooms, as she passes by Susan's bed, she hears a mumble of: "You alright, Blue?"
Aurelia lets out a startled gasp, although she shouldn't have been surprised that Susan's awake; she's still on edge because of that bloody nightmare. Unsure if her screaming woke Susan up or not, Aurelia says: "Oh, sorry, Suse! I —"
"I've been up since four. No worries, Blue," Susan waves her off, tucking her blankets under her chin as she stares up at Aurelia, "I just got up to use the loo a few minutes ago, I saw you tossin' and turnin' but you do that a lot so I didn't say nothin'. I saw Diggory sittin' by the fire when I passed."
"Oh, okay," Aurelia says, nodding as she slips out of the dorm and down the hallway to the bathrooms.
She's in definite need of a shower after that nightmare. Her pale, freckled skin is glistening with sweat and it kinda makes her looks like she's dying. She fees like she's dying, not psychically but mentally. The cool water against her heated skin feels good, she rubs the scrub brush up her left arm and to her shoulder the one where her sun-shaped birthmark resides, as it brushes the mark, a burning jolt rubs up and down her arm, her entire body feels like it's been engulfed in flames — DANGER! Her brain screams — DANGER!
Aurelia blinks, she's not in danger. Why does she think she's in peril danger when she's in the bloody shower? There's no danger here. The burning sensation dissipates immediately and Aurelia continues showering without another thought.
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AS SUSAN HAD said, Cedric had been sitting in an armchair by the fire. When Aurelia had come down and greeted him, he had just stared at the fire like it had murdered his entire family, she knew that look all too well. There had been a piece of parchment in his hand, which he had been debating whether or not he wanted to put it in the Goblet of Fire. And Aurelia had managed to convince him to do it with opposite intentions.
So now, Aurelia's scrambling after Cedric who's practically strutting his way to the Great Hall, oozing more confidence than usual, an excited smirk plastered on his handsome features. Just because she wholeheartedly believed he would win the tournament if he was chosen does not mean she wants him to enter. Does he not comprehend how damn dangerous the Triwizard Tournament is?
Entering the Great Hall, Aurelia's greeted by the sight of Noelle about to put her name in the goblet.
"Hey, Noelle," Aurelia calls out, growing flustered.
Noelle almost drops the parchment in her hands but she quickly recovers. She glances over her shoulder, an almost malicious smirk takes over her intimidating but pretty features "Hello, Aurelia."
"Good morning, Noelle," Aurelia says as she blushes furiously, "Entering are you?"
Noelle's shark-like grin widens "Oh, yes. I am."
"Well, er, good luck."
"Oh, I won't need it," Noelle says, bringing a new air of confidence to the already confident girl.
Aurelia giggles and Noelle stares intensely into Aurelia's eyes as she drops the parchment into the goblet. "Well, see you later, pretty girl," Noelle says, winking as she departs from the Great Hall.
"Wow," Aurelia says breathlessly, not even noticing Cedric stepping up and placing his name in the Goblet of Fire. Noelle's so pretty.
"Hmm, Neville's better." Cedric remarks, ruffling her hair.
"Well, Neville doesn't like me like Noelle, I'm pretty sure, does." — wait, shit! What happened to not specifically saying you like girls? They can't judge you if they don't know for sure so you can't just say things like this.
"Since when have you been fancying girls? Isn't that Liv's thing?"
Aurelia's eyes widen in alarm, she may have told Neville but she's not quite ready to tell more people, not even Cedric, she looks around the Great Hall for a distraction. "Since when have you — uh — oh, shit — since when have you liked — NEVILLE," Neville's tired, round face enters the Great Hall and Aurelia runs for him leaving behind a very confused Cedric who had only asked a simple question.
"PLANT BOY!"
Neville's engulfed in a hug before he even knows that Aurelia had been charging towards him.
"Good morning, sunshine," Aurelia says cheerily, giving him her signature finger-guns move and Neville wishes that the 'sunshine' nickname doesn't make his heart flutter as much as it does.
Neville wishes that the 'sunshine' nickname doesn't make his heart flutter as much as it does.
Cedric watches the two of them fondly before rolling his eyes "'Neville doesn't like me!' she says," he mutters mockingly, the look on Neville's face says otherwise.
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"THAT'S THE SEVENTH Durmstrang kid," Aurelia says to Neville, "They're a bunch of daring bastards, ain't they?" The pair had been sitting in the Great Hall for hours, chatting and watching the students placing their names in the Goblet of Fire.
"Would you put your name in there," Neville asks, peeling an orange.
"No," Aurelia replies, popping a raspberry into her mouth, "I've read so many horror stories about this tournament, the reward isn't worth it."
Neville nods, biting into an orange slice.
"What about you, Plant Boy? Would you enter?"
He snorts quietly then shakes his head "Absolutely not."
"Noelle entered, so did Cedric. And, I'm bloody certain Ellie's going to enter whenever the hell he wakes up," Aurelia says, shuddering.
Neville rolls his eyes at the mention of Noelle, chewing an orange slice aggressively.
"I hate this tournament," Aurelia says bitterly.
"It hasn't even started yet but I'm sure it'll be over before we know it," Neville reassures.
"Anyone entered yet," Ron questions as he, Harry, and Hermione take a seat at the table.
"Good morning to you too," Aurelia says as she rolls her eyes, "Pretty sure all the Durmstrang lot has. As for Hogwarts, I've only seen Cedric enter."
"Bet some of them put it in last night after we'd all gone to bed, I would've if it had been me . . . Wouldn't have wanted everyone watching. What if the goblet just gobbed you right back out again," Harry comments.
"That's not how it works. The goblet takes all the names put into it and when the time comes it chooses the names it deems most worthy," Aurelia explains and Harry and Ron stare at her bewildered as it's usually Hermione who spits out information like that.
"What? I read all about the tournament last year because Professor Binns recommended it to me since I was so far ahead in the class," Aurelia says, shamelessly bragging that she's top of the History of Magic class. Hermione and Draco are usually the top students in classes but when it comes to History of Magic, it's Aurelia's time to shine, and Aurelia doesn't let anyone forget that. It's nice to finally be best at something. The golden one, only when it comes to History of Magic but still good enough to be gold at something.
Laughter echoes around the Great Hall as Fred, George, Lee, and Ellie come running in. She rolls her eyes, immediately knowing that they've found a way to enter. Whatever they've got planned, Ellie doesn't need it as he had just turned seventeen five days prior to this; Ellie brushes his shaggy hair out of his face, he grins smugly as he steps up to the goblet and drops his name in it.
"Done it," Fred tells them as he grins triumphantly, "Just taken it!"
"What," Ron asks.
"Aging Potion, dung brain," Fred replies.
"One drop each. We only need to be a few months older," George adds, rubbing his hands together with glee.
"We're going to split the thousand Galleons between the four of us if one of us wins," Lee says, grinning broadly.
"I'm not sure this is going to work, you know, I'm sure Dumbledore will have thought of this," Hermione warns them but the three boys ignore her.
"Ready," Fred asks George and Lee, quivering with excitement as he pulls out a piece of parchment out of his pocket.
Fred steps over the line and nothing happens, so George lets out a victorious cry as he jumps over the line as well. Then a sizzling sound can be heard and both of them are thrown back over the line with brutal force. They land on the stone cold floor ten feet away, both sporting long white beards.
"Oooh, damn," Aurelia wheezes, laughing. She wishes wouldn't have forgotten her camera in her dorm.
Professor Dumbledore enters the Great Hall, surveying the twins with an amused expression as he tells them to go see Madam Pomfrey.
Aurelia turns back to Neville and tells him: "I'm gonna go down to the Quidditch pitch, get some practice for next year. Y'know for when the game's not cancelled for a stupid reason such as the Diewizard Tournament."
"Can I come with you," He asks.
Her eyebrows furrow together in confusion "Why? I'm sure you have more important, entertaining things to do."
He shakes his head quickly — he's got a Potion's essay that's due Monday — "No, I've got nothing."
"You'll be bored."
He shakes his head again "Not at all!"
She raises an eyebrow "You really wanna sit and watch me fly around an empty Quidditch pitch?"
"Sure!"
"But, why?"
"Because it's fun. I like watching you fly and I like spending time with you."
"Oh — oh. Okay," Aurelia stutters, taken aback by Neville's statement. She blushes as Neville grabs her hand and they start heading for the Quidditch pitch.
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THE QUIDDITCH PITCH isn't as empty as Aurelia had expected it to be. It's not full by any means but there's two more people here than she had been counting on. It's Viktor Krum and the Headmaster of Durmstrang; Viktor's practicing as well.
Aurelia internally screams. She's not his biggest fan by any means but he's still famous. Not to mention, he's an amazing Seeker. She can't practice now, there's no way she's going to fly in front of Viktor bloody Krum and make a fool of herself as she's nowhere near as good as he is.
Neville's eyes are wide as he glances between Aurelia and Krum "Is that . . .?"
She nods quickly "May — maybe we should —"
"What are you two doing here," The Headmaster of Durmstrang demands harshly, pointing at the two of them.
Neville gulps loudly as he hides slightly behind Aurelia and Aurelia clutches the broom she had grabbed from the locker room to her chest.
"This is our school," Aurelia says meekly and when the Headmaster's glare hardens, she adds: "Uh well, we were just coming down here to pratice."
The Headmaster sneers at them "Viktor does not have time for fans."
Viktor Krum lands on the ground gracefully and Aurelia almost swoons. Not because she finds Krum attractive or anything but because his landing had been so smooth, she wishes her landings could be that smooth.
"Vot is going on, Karkaroff? Are these fans?"
"You have no time for fans, Viktor. You must practice," Karkaroff says.
"There are only two, it von't take long," Krum says.
"We're not here for autographs, honest. I was just coming down here to practice flying and he was coming along to watch. We didn't know that anyone would be here," Aurelia says nervously, Karkaroff's an intimidating bloke and Viktor bloody Krum's standing right in front of her.
"You play Quidditch," Krum questions, looking her over.
Aurelia nods, picking at her Quidditch sweater nervously.
"Vot position do you play?"
"S — Seeker."
"Vould you like to practice vith me?"
Aurelia blinks "You want me to practice with you?"
Krum nods.
Uh, holy shit! — "Okay," Aurelia agrees.
"How long haff you been a Seeker?"
"A year now."
"You haff the perfect build for a Seeker. So you haff only been flying for a year now?"
"Oh, no! I've been flying since I was a wee thing. About three, my brother and I had little brooms we used to play on. I got my first real broom when I was seven."
"So you haff had lots of practice?"
"I guess," Aurelia replies, shrugging her shoulders.
Krum grins lightly, turning to Karkaroff "I vill practice vith her. It vill be more of a challenge than vith only myself."
Karkaroff gives Aurelia a look that can only be read as 'Her? A Challenge? Ha!' but he nods his head, saying: "If that is what you want, Viktor."
Krum nods. Aurelia glances at Neville, grinning widely; Viktor fucking Krum wants to practice with her. Wow. The two mount their brooms and Karkaroff releases the Snitch into the pitch and they take off.
Both her and Viktor seems to have their eyes on the Snitch as they race across the field. They stretch their hands out for the Snitch, Aurelia's graze the golden surface of the ball but she's not close enough to catch it. The Snitch suddenly shoots upwards, the action happens so suddenly Aurelia almost misses it and Krum misses it completely. Aurelia shoots upwards after the Snitch, it takes Krum a few seconds to realise the Snitch was no longer in front of him and then he's shooting after her. She reaches out her hand — almost, almost, almost — her slender fingers latch around the golden ball — got it! Her eyes widen in realisation, she beat Viktor bloody Krum! Holy shit!
"I — I got it," Aurelia announces.
She actually caught the Snitch before the professional, famous Quidditch player! Wow, so maybe she's better at this than she thought? She lands on the ground, the Snitch clutched tightly in her hand as she internally screams. Aurelia waves the golden ball in the air to show Neville, who grins brightly at her and lets out a little cheer of: "Whoo! That's my Sunflower Girl!"
Krum lands beside her, he holds out his hand to shake "Vell done . . . I never caught your name?"
"I'm Aurelia Black, what's yours," She says — you dumb bitch! "Oh — I — sorry, force of habit," Aurelia stammers, cheeks going red with embarrassment.
However, Krum grins brightly "I am Viktor Krum. It is nice to meet you."
It's probably not often, he's asked his name, he must like the normalcy of the gesture, she thinks. Either that or he's just going along with it to save her the embarrassment. "So, O-rah-lee-yah —"
Aurelia snickers loudly but then her eyes widen "Oh, I'm so sorry! It's just that — well, that's not how you pronounce my name."
"It is not," Viktor questions, thick eyebrows furrowing together in confusion.
She shakes her head "No. That's okay though, my name's real hard to pronounce. Even my parents pronounced it wrong at times and they're my parents! It's like 'Ah-rail-yah' or it can be also be pronounced like 'Ah-rail-lee-yah'. That's how my mum — uh, that's how Mae and Nev pronounces it but — uh, most of my friends call me, Blue," Aurelia prefers the way that Mae and Neville say her name; it sounds nicer.
"So I can call you, Blue, like the colour?"
Aurelia nods turning her brunette curls, blue. "Yep, exactly like the colour! Sorry for laughing at you like that. Another force of habit of mine, I find it real funny when people pronounce my name wrong, I laugh at everyone, if it helps."
It does!
Viktor sounds incredibly giddy as he says this but then Aurelia realises he hadn't opened his mouth to speak, he had only thought it. She blinks, clearing her mind to the best of the ability, she really needs to stop doing that. It had been getting out of control since her attack at the Quidditch World Cup, normally she had the hang of keeping out of people's thoughts, she had been trained to do so by her mom and Aunt Andy, but mostly her Aunt Andy, from a young age.
"Vell, Blue, care for another round," Viktor questions.
Aurelia looks to Neville, who nods as he lifts up a Herbology book. She turns back to Viktor, nodding "Sure thing!"
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"YOU ASKED VIKTOR Krum what his bloody name was," Ron exclaims flabbergasted.
Aurelia blushes "Leave me alone, Ronald!"
"Honestly, Blue, I think all these years of hanging out with Neville has made become just as bloody forgetful as he is," Ron says.
"Hey," Neville says, giving Ron a look as he blushes with embarrassment because Ron's right. Aurelia flips Ron off since Neville is too nice to make such a crude gesture.
"Did you at least get Krum's autograph," Ron demands ignoring Aurelias' long finger pointed directly in his face. In response to his question, Aurelia shakes her head, which earns an exasperated groan from him.
"I didn't have anything for him to sign! Plus I was way too busy getting my ass kicked by Viktor!"
"You won twice," Neville cuts in.
"Yeah, but, Viktor won the other seven times!"
"You still did amazing! Viktor Krum says so himself," Neville reminds, grinning at her with pride.
Aurelia blushes "I could've done better."
"Wait, so does this mean you're friends with Viktor Krum," Ron questions.
"Yeah, I guess it does," Aurelia replies with a grin, "Viktor, Nev, and I are goin' to get Butterbeer when the first trip to Hogsmeade comes around. Viktor's never had Butterbeer before, can you believe it?!"
Ron who had been about to sit down at the Gryffindor table misses the bench by an inch and falls right on his arse, spluttering: "What?!"
"I know! I was so surprised that he's never had —"
"No," Ron croaks out, "I — you're going to Hogsmeade with Viktor Krum?!"
"It's not a big deal — okay, it is! I'm friends with Viktor fuckin' Krum!"
Hermione rolls her eyes at the two of them, Fred and George plop down across from the lot of them, instantly changing the subject as Fred says: "I hope it's Angelina!"
"So do I! We'll know soon," Hermione says.
Aurelia glares at the Goblet of Fire, she doesn't want anyone to be chosen, she wants the bloody tournament to be cancelled. She piles some mashed potatoes, smoked ham, and peas onto her plate and digs in. The feast seems to pass by quicker than the last, much to Aurelia's dismay, and soon enough the plates are cleared and Professor Dumbledore's gotten to his feet.
"Well, I do believe the goblet is almost ready to make its decision, I estimate it requires another moment or too."
Aurelia groans, burying her face in her hands. Please just cancel it before it begins, that's the smartest decision you can make when it comes to this tournament.
"Now, when a champion's name is chosen, I would ask them please to come up to the top of the Hall, walk along the staff table, and go through into the next chamber where they will be receiving their first instructions," Professor Dumbledore explains then using his wand, he extinguishes the candles in the Great Hall save for the ones in the carved pumpkins and the flames of the Goblet of Fire.
"Any second now," Lee whispers from the seat across of Aurelia.
She glances at the goblet which suddenly turns red as the flames spit up a charred piece of parchment. Professor Dumbledore grabs it and announces: "The champion of Durmstrang will be Viktor Krum!"
The Great Hall bursts into applause.
"No surprise there," Ron cries out.
At this, Aurelia and Ginny share a look then roll their eyes. Viktor walks up to the staff table and follows it along until he reaches the side chamber and disappears through the door. The applause dies down soon afterward and then seconds later the goblet turns red again, shooting out the second champion's name.
"The champion for Beauxbatons is Fleur Delacour!"
The Great Hall bursts into applause yet again. The Hogwarts champion is next, Aurelia thinks, oh, shit, please don't be Cedric! Please don't be Ellie either. She knows it's rude of her to wish for this as Cedric and Ellie, more so Cedric, are so excited for this tournament but Aurelia really can't help it. The Goblet of Fire turns red for the third and last time. Please, please, please.
"The Hogwarts champion is Cedric Diggory!"
"Oh, no," Aurelia mutters worriedly, she frowns, she wants to cheer for Cedric because he deserves support but she's so bloody worried about him. At least it's not Ellie, he's reckless for a Slytherin, and he gets hurt easily, he rarely wins the duels he's in despite being decent at magic. Aurelia knows that Ellie wouldn't survive the tournament because he's make a reckless wrong move and die painfully. Cedric, at the very least, was smart and calculating, very level-headed and he put thought and patience into everything, he stood a good chance at coming out of the tournament alive.
Everyone at the Hufflepuff table jumps to their feet, including Aurelia because it would be terribly rude if she'd did, and start screaming and stamping, as Cedric makes his way past them, grinning broadly, as he heads toward the chamber behind the staff table. The cheering of the Hufflepuffs lasts longer than the cheering for the other schools but finally it dies down and Professor Dumbledore begins to speak:
"Well, we now have our three champions. I am sure I can count upon all of you, including the remaining students from Beauxbatons and Durmstrang, to give your champions every ounce of support you can muster. By cheering your champion on, you will contribute in a very real —" He stops speaking, distracted by the Goblet of Fire which has turned red again.
"Oh, no," Aurelia gasps, this can't be happening! There's only supposed to be three champions! Aurelia's filled with dread as a fourth name is spit up from the goblet. No. No. No. Professor Dumbledore reaches out and grabs it, there's a long pause as he stares at it.
It's Harry. Somehow it's got to be Harry. It's always Harry. Aurelia bites her nails nervously, waiting for the Headmaster to read the name but before he can the goblet turns red and spits up a fifth name. Professor Dumbledore reaches out and grabs that, without tearing his gaze from the other piece of parchment.
Whose names are those? One of them's got to be Harry's! Or perhaps, it was the twins and that's why the there's two of them. Wait, no, remember what happened to them this morning. Aurelia's mind is racing and her heart is hammering in her chest, this isn't supposed to be happening. There's never, ever been more than three champions picked before. Who could it be? More importantly — why the bloody fuck is this happening?!
There's a long, terrible pause before Professor Dumbledore clears his throat, announcing: "Harry Potter and . . . Aurelia Black!"
It feels like someone has stomped hard on her chest, knocking all the air from her lungs "Oh, fuck!"
A/N: My responses to your reviews/feedback:
AnnaLovesLongbottom5, Chapter 1: Not Very Malfoy-Like: No matter how many times I come back to the site and see you've written this story it never fails to amaze me, I think this is my favorite rewrite because she's actually named after a star this time, it fits her so well and the star is from the Taurus constellation which is my sign so like maybe I'm a little biased but we love the Sterope star system! Although I was hoping she would end up in Slytherin this time around but Hufflepuff does fit her well, I would just love to see her in Slytherin, I just think she'd be so powerful! Also love the fact that she really said 'oh the old Asterope can't come to the phone right now? why cus she's dead' at the end, wow love that for her! - { My Response: I've rewritten this story so many times I can't believe you still remember it, I mean, to be fair there's a lot of similarities with this version and the old one but with more depth ( at least I'm hoping you can see more depth compared to what you remember from the old one! ) and improved writing. Also I was today years old when I found out that Asterope is actually spelled with an 'S'! It took me a long time to find a star name that started with an 'A' as I didn't want to use Aquila or Andromeda and when I found 'Asterope' I felt like I hit the motherload because it meant 'sun-faced' star and that fit in with Aurelia and the whole 'golden one' meaning! I can't see her being in Slytherin, she has Slytherin traits but she doesn't value them so she wouldn't fit in well with the house in the long run, it's always been Hufflepuff for her, I've thought of AUs with her as a Slytherin but when fleshed out it doesn't feel right! }
AnnaLovesLongbottom5, Chapter 3: Sunflower Girl + Plant Boy: We love the mutual pining in this household, Aurelia & Neville own me, they're so cute! I love friends to lovers so much,,, I take it over enemies to lovers any day! I can't wait for them to get together! Just gotta say that Aurelia is a hypocrite,,, she's really out there teasing Seamus about Dean ( Deamus, baby, we love it ) but when Seamus does that to her she gets all pissy,,, like gurl? Calm down it ain't that deep! Still I love it, Aurelia's gotta work on herself and her and Seamus gotta admit they're SIMPS for the softest HP boys! - { My Response: You know what you are SO right about Aurelia being a hypocrite and I realised this when I went back and started rewriting this story and I was like 'yikes' and I was gonna take it out but like,,, it kind of makes her a more 3D character, in my opinion so I left it as something she'll need to realise about herself and change it,,, characters need flaws and honestly Aurelia has a lot of them but I didn't want to take this away from her, I'm glad you pointed it out, I hope you will see that change in her as the story continues and she learns not to be so hypocritical about things! }
AnnaLovesLongbottom5, Chapter 4: Ghosts of Almerry Castle: OKAY, I remember the whole Mae and Bellatrix thing from the old version and honestly I loved it so I hope that whole story arc is still the same! I love getting to see into her new home life and how it's different from the Malfoys, although we weren't given much information about her childhood with the Malfoys I can sort of see that she's more,,,, free with Mae and Ellie and honestly I love that for her! Hopefully you'll expand more on Aurelia's childhood with the Malfoys so we can see the differences between the two households and how it changes her as a character! I love Ellie, I remember that I really liked them in the old version but in this one I really like them, I hope you include them more in this version! - { My Response: Ellie doesn't play much of a role in the first part ( the gof part ) of this story because Aurelia has a lot on her plate, but I did add a little more Ellie into in because honestly he's my second fav character in this story and I do him dirty a lot so I decided to fix that, but he doesn't really play a bigger role until ootp and the hbp! And Aurelia's childhood with the Malfoys is touched upon here and there between the gof and the ootp but it's not really needed to be touched upon until the hbp, at least that's how I see it, it's definitely important to her character and I see what you mean when you say you want to see more of it, and you will, but it doesn't really feel right to touch upon it in detail until the hbp for reason you'll find out when it comes to the section of the book. As for Mae and Bellatrix, well guess you'll just have to read and find out, huh! }
AnnaLovesLongbottom5, Chapter 5: Dudley Gets Ton-Tongue Tied: Aurelia x Neville? Nah, sorry Ginny x Aurelia for the win! - { My Response: I see your Aurelia x Ginny over Aurelia x Neville but I'll raise you one better: Aurelia x Ginny x Neville! }
SaltedChips, Chapter 13: All Knowing Abigale: Aww haha Aurelia is not so smooth as she thinks. Honestly it's such a cute romance and I like the twist with Noelle will make Neville work more on persuing Aurelia I'm so happy when you said you had many chapters ready! - { My Response: Honestly Neville & Aurelia are the cutest couple I've written ( their ship name is TreeStar, in case you're into ship names, it took me four years to get this ship name for them and you can thank land before time for the help ) they have the softest and most wholesome relationship out of all the ocxcanon characters I've written! Noelle is,,, she's going to cause a lot of chaos, to put it simply and I'm SO excited for that even though it's not a good kind of chaos,,, but I'm proud of how I wrote it soooo, yeah,,, you'll see what I mean in upcoming chapters! Thank you so much for commenting, it means a lot! }
AnnaLovesLongbottom5, Chapter 4: Ghosts of Almerry Castle: I can't remember what happens with Noelle all I know is that it wasn't good but like I could be wrong,,,, although she's giving me major bad vibes,,, Aurelia,,, sweetie just stick with Neville or Ginny or literally anyone that's not Noelle,,, also speaking of crushes I hope the fact that Fred Weasley, the king himself, has a crush on Aurelia doesn't effect anything later on in the story because as much as I love Fred,,, I don't really want them to be a thing,,, like Fred, sweetie, don't push yourself in between Neville and Aurelia like that, they're having a MOMENT. Just no,,, nope,,, I hope it doesn't happen. But besides that I loved the chapter and I can't wait for the next one! - { My Response: to be fair, Ari and Neville weren't having a moment when Fred said 'move, bitch!' and yeeted himself in between them. Honestly nothing is EVER going to happen between Fred and Aurelia because I already have that plot with Noelle & Aurelia plus another two plots where Aurelia is sort of in a relationship with others ( one of them doesn't really count because reasons, you'll see why when it happens ) and her and Fred don't make sense which is weird because he's my second fav guy character but him and Aurelia never happen. It's just a simple fact that Fred has a crush on Aurelia and Aurelia's like 'does he?' whenever it's brought up. It's really just a play on the whole mary-sue trope where everyone loves the mary-sue character. I wanted to show that just because a lot of people have a crush on my character, doesn't mean anything to the story. I've never gotten that mary sue trope so I wanted to make fun of it,,, like who cares if a lot of people love your OC? Also it makes up for the fact literally no one has ever had a crush on me lmaooooo. So don't worry about Fred,,, it's just a little crush that's merely mentioned a few times. Besides Ginny stands a way better chance with Aurelia *wink, wink* then he does! Thanks for reading, I'm super glad that you liked the chapter! }
Guest, Chapter 1: Not Very Malfoy-Like: Writing is good but why is the prologue so long? - { My Response: A lot of my chapters are really long because I don't know when to stop, like I only really stop until it feels like it should end wherever it ends? The chapters get shorter later on in the story, they're never shorter than 2k words except for like one chapter ( but that chapter is an unedited one much later on in the book so the actual word count is subject to change once I edit it ) but not all my chapters are as long as the first one! I'm glad that you like my writing though, thanks! ! }