Readers,
This story is under revision, it will be torn down, rewritten, and then put back up in a (hopefully) better version of itself.
My hope is to make this story:
More interesting to read
Flow better
Straighten up some facts that were not accurate
Make some things more concise and to the point
Draw other things out
Build up the story a bit and enrich it
Thank you for your continued support
-S