Retiring JacobApples

by JacobApples

Hi everyone, this my backing up all my stories and the words of all the people who helped get me through as well as make me a better writer. So this is the archive of those reviewers, the good, the kind, the heartwarming, the amusing, the ones who gave me honesty that made me better and the ones who make you question the intelligence of humanity. Thank you all.

1. Disorder of the Phoenix

odonnellzoo99 chapter 1 . Jun 8

Excellent start!

report review for chapter 1 . May 28

Muy Buen Comienzo!

Me Encanto

report review for abuseChuni Luni chapter 1 . May 16

whelp the fact that the other Harry apparently burned to death is...whelp different lol.

report review for abuseThe Punmaster chapter 1 . Apr 11

asdfghjdh the scene where Ted's like, "bc ur the perfect wife" that's so cute

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 1 . Feb 26

wow! a clever plot!

report review for abuseEllie chapter 1 . Feb 5

Awww, Hedwig, that was a great way to end the chapter.

report review for abuseartfully chapter 1 . Jan 16

great chapter

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Dec 11, 2019

Oof. Not a great chapter 1 but I will give chapter 2 a chance. Either way thanks for sharing.

report review for abuseSanja chapter 1 . Nov 23, 2019

Thank you for this story!

I enjoyed it a lot.

report review for abuseJohnyXD chapter 1 . Oct 27, 2019

If there's one being that I appreciate coming back from death using fanfic powers, it's Hedwig. No other character can even compare.

report review for abuseCrypt chapter 1 . Sep 22, 2019

I love time travelling Harry stories, and this is a very unique start.

My only gripe is that Fawkes reasoning for taking them is pretty lame.

report review for abusesubzeus chapter 1 . Sep 23, 2019

Despite the minor grammar errors, this is so far a unique and charming story, so on to chapter 2!

report review for abuseHamClad chapter 1 . Sep 9, 2019

Really interesting concept and well-executed

report review for abusemoonprincess97524 chapter 1 . Aug 30, 2019

I am so very glad that Fudge isn't being difficult about the time traveling.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Jun 25, 2019

My heart always breaks a bit, when Harry is reunited with Hedwig.

Great start, keep up the good work

report review for abuseKhatix chapter 1 . May 16, 2019

Hope Harry is smart enough to get the Ring and Diadem asap so Voldermort doesn't move them when he finds out Harry is from the future. As Lord Black getting the Cup should be easy.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 1 . Apr 10, 2019

That's was cool

report review for abuseZenJack chapter 1 . Mar 26, 2019

Almost didn't get past using road for rode and then for than.

Engaging story.

Allons-y!

report review for abuseImperfect-BlackAngel chapter 1 . Mar 12, 2019

Awesome story . Hope you complete it

report review for abuseDavid12leca chapter 1 . Feb 20, 2019

great start.

report review for abuseFencer22 chapter 1 . Dec 19, 2018

Ok I'm seeing the potential. Should be an interesting ride.

report review for abuseDezzi95 chapter 1 . Dec 16, 2018

You have me officially hooked on this already! :)

report review for abuseSomeGuyFawkes chapter 1 . Nov 27, 2018

A nice enjoyable story. Different enough and with a well characterized Harry and an interesting, reasonably coherent plot.

I'm a sucker for competent Harrys and what was almost a happy ending. (It can't be good when they end up in France. Sorry, but I don't make the rules...)

Had some good chuckles too and character conflicts that were much more nuanced than the usual fanfic fare. That there was no strawman bashing was much appreciated.

report review for abuseJosh Lowe chapter 1 . Nov 22, 2018

honestly one of the better honks pairings I've read! i love love loved it from beginning to end in one afternoon

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 1 . Nov 21, 2018

I've never read a Harry/Tonks pairing before, and I know this is only the first chapter but I am in love! this is a fantastic start! can't wait to read the following chapters.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 1 . Oct 17, 2018

OMG you have the best story lines ever! I am so glad I found your work! I am looking forward to seeing what comes next ! And your unfinished stories already have me excited about what comes next !

report review for abuseTheFoxDen chapter 1 . Sep 23, 2018

scratch that I read more... should try the soda chef for breakfast lol, they can't make tea either but George makes a good meal, anyways I definitely enjoyed the first chapter, can't wait to read the rest

report review for abuseTheFoxDen chapter 1 . Sep 23, 2018

I tried to pm you immediately after I read the first sentence but it wouldn't let me and I gotta ask. Feel free to pm me though...I live near that lake and was curious if that was the case for you or you just enjoy ilvermony being on Mt greylock. Just curious. Never saw a fanfiction written so close to my home before.

report review for abuseDarkLordWhatsit chapter 1 . Sep 19, 2018

I'm already in love with this story. And as for the bax spelling and grammar that you warned us about I didn't see one error. And that's something I'm very critical about since I hate reading something where I have to go over the same line 3 times just to decipher what it says

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 1 . Sep 6, 2018

beautifully layered yet grounded practically. thank you!

report review for abusethe-cari-moose chapter 1 . Jul 31, 2018

Ah this is awesome! I've been trying to find some more original Harry Potter fanfiction for ages. This is going to be great.

report review for abusejohnrlozada chapter 1 . Jul 23, 2018

Fawkes: "Yeah, shithead, I want you to change the future because I fucking said so. So here's time travel plot shoved down your throats because fuck you that's why."

The time travel plot is forced. Way too forced. You could have gone for a nice reason and a smoother transition and didn't just chuck them back by phoenix express. Whoosh.

I can't read this.

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 1 . Jul 17, 2018

Hedwig!

report review for abuseChronicler Sionnach chapter 1 . Jul 15, 2018

One thing immediately turned me off of this story. Nobody seems to care that they time traveled. They all just seem to accept it. "Oh yeah, I was eating dinner at 24, now I'm still 24 but dealing with umbridge in the middle of Hogwarts during what should be my sixth year. Yeah no, this is perfectly normal.

report review for abuseInArduisFidelis-RAMC chapter 1 . Jul 5, 2018

I am so happy I stumbled across this. Loving it so far.

report review for abuseEdocsiru chapter 1 . Jul 3, 2018

...those ages wtf? andromeda a pedophile? She a seventh year eloped with a first year? dude change those ages, ted was at least a fith year, if not outright the same age.

report review for abuseEdocsiru chapter 1 . Jul 3, 2018

...those ages wtf? andromeda a pedophile? She a seventh year eloped with a first year? dude change those ages, ted was at least a fith year, if not outright the same age.

report review for abuseSimianpower chapter 1 . Jun 26, 2018

I love this beginning! If the story lives up to its first chapter, it'll be damned good.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 1 . Jun 15, 2018

Oh my goodness this is great. It's so captivating. Great chapter!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Jun 11, 2018

Wow I loved

Amazing

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 1 . May 22, 2018

Interesting first chapter

report review for abuseSuper-Saiyan-3-Vegeta chapter 1 . May 20, 2018

first chapter and I'm hooked

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 1 . May 15, 2018

brillaint! love this already and TONKS/HP I adore :)

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 1 . May 15, 2018

An interesting and well-written start, but at first glance it seems like a very convoluted excuse to get Harry and Tonks together. People are accepting the death of teenage Harry Potter (and his apparent replacement with a 24-year-old version) with way too much ease. Everybody would be freaking out, especially the Ministry.

And where does this leave Ron and Hermione? Their best friend did just effectively burn to death right before their eyes.

report review for abuseBiblio388 chapter 1 . May 11, 2018

Wow, really good chapter. Great character interactions, which are my favorite part of a story.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 1 . May 9, 2018

This is a strange mix of tropes I hate (Weasley bashing, Lord Potter, plus some of Harry's sarcastic turns of phrase (Tommy, buzzard) rub me the wrong way), guilty pleasure tropes (Harry and Andromeda co-parenting Teddy, Harry growing up to be an awesome teacher), and things I like intellectually but not emotionally (Harry's complicated relationship with Dumbledore). This should be interesting to read.

Harry blowing up at Umbridge and outmaneuvering her at every turn was quite satisfying.

I'm anxiously waiting to see how you're going to handle Remus, Ron, Ginny, and Hermione. Quite worried about these, but I'm sure it won't be completely unbearable, so even if it does descend into bashing, I'll put up with it for the parts I enjoy.

It's possible I'm being a little too harsh considering something obviously has to be different for Fawkes to want to change things. So I'm just going to assume that any bashing is entirely justified due to the divergences from canon that made this an AU in the first place. Bam, problem solved.

report review for abusehalo4hire chapter 1 . Apr 30, 2018

First and foremost: that picture of tonks looks epic. White hair and crimson on black leather (?) Being my favored of color schemes. That said, for a dyslexic, the grammar in this chapter was pretty good. I'm no English major so I couldn't point out the flaws. If there were any I didn't see them and it was a smooth read. Could have use a bit more description in the faux fire railway but that's just me nitpicking. All in all: 9/10

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 1 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Interesting premiss, and i'm happy to see you avoid the most common 'return to the past' gimmicks like Master of Death, ritual or even the Veil of Death.

I'm looking forward to seeing where you are going with this story, and it should be different to see an older Harry living at Hogwarts.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 1 . Apr 27, 2018

I KNOW. I KNOW. It's good. It's really good.

report review for abuseOoOXylionOoO chapter 1 . Apr 25, 2018

Interesting first chapter.

report review for abuseTemporal Knight chapter 1 . Apr 19, 2018

An excellent first chapter! I can honestly say the only thing that I don't like about it is Fawkes talking but considering that everyone else in-story also looks at it and goes WTF?! it gets full pass lol.

Speaking of Fawkes, I find myself curious as to just what he hated so much about that future...

I like how Teddy truly considers Harry his father and Harry whole-heartedly agrees. While I generally tend to prefer the birth parents having a place considering that they didn't leave, they just died this situation is unusual enough that I fully understand and sympathize with them both.

Andi trying to set Harry up with his any who would have him is hilarious!

I greatly enjoyed Harry's handling of Umbridge. His continual jibes and goading while stopping just sort of full-on insult slinging was golden. Heck, he even managed to get Fudge to side with him against her which was priceless! And that comment about time travel itself not being illegal was perfect.

Still don't like Snape but at least he's not a complete hate sink for me for once surprisingly enough.

Also it must be said: YAY HEDWIG IS BACK!

report review for abuseMPPC chapter 1 . Apr 17, 2018

Hedwig. Probably the only reason Harry wont immediately pluck and fry the flaming chicken.

report review for abuseRavenwulfesm chapter 1 . Apr 15, 2018

Love the opening. Hedwig's return at the end brought tears to my eyes. Don't know how I feel about the original Harry burning up, it makes me sad. Will always love Fawks, even if older Harry is mad at him.

report review for abuseted98 chapter 1 . Apr 15, 2018

it was a masterpiece, honestly amazing

report review for abuseZavod chapter 1 . Apr 14, 2018

That's was a good story. A bit too emotion-focused for my personal tastes, but well written and a good premise. Thanks!

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 1 . Apr 11, 2018

Great start to your story!

report review for abuseironhair chapter 1 . Apr 7, 2018

Reading

report review for abuseNerdy Geekdom chapter 1 . Mar 28, 2018

Fantastic story! Really unique time travel and I always love a good Tonks story.

report review for abuseSweetPeaseblossom chapter 1 . Mar 25, 2018

Is this an AU?

report review for abuseboban094 chapter 1 . Mar 20, 2018

Great chapter. I hoped it would take a bit more to finish, bit it's still a great story.

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 1 . Mar 20, 2018

That last pansexual bit just ruined the whole story.

report review for abuse23capeta chapter 1 . Mar 14, 2018

Very good story so far, initially there are some scenes where characters say one thing and do another. These scenes seems little disconnected, like when harry tried to convince tonks to choose either lupin or him.

Other than that i like your story, it is very refreshing. Thank you and keep up doing great work.

report review for abuseTheSphynx chapter 1 . Mar 11, 2018

Love the prequel chapters. Hope you include some of Harry's adventures in Ilvermorny

report review for abuseNarjiro chapter 1 . Mar 8, 2018

don't stretch it out. most of the times it won't feel natural en i will bring down the quality of the fic

report review for abusemarcoskowla chapter 1 . Mar 6, 2018

I must be the only one that hate when a author kind of makes nicknames for the characters , Dromeda ... really ? Not Andy or something that rings better ? People don't go using a personal nickname in public or at last they dont show this kind of affection in public . At least in my country that is , maybe i am mystaken .

report review for abuseCapriSunnyD chapter 1 . Mar 5, 2018

I realize afterwards what I said came off really rude. Sorry! I just think you need to label this so that people know that romance will be a bigger part of the story. It started to frustrate me because going into this I thought the pairing would be in the background instead of one of the main focuses.

report review for abuseJinxter15 chapter 1 . Mar 5, 2018

I'm really loving your story. I've always been a big Harry/Tony's fan and your story is one of the best I've read.

report review for abuseTheMonitor1079 chapter 1 . Feb 28, 2018

Good update. I am glad you aired what was going on,between Tonks, Harry, and Remus. Looking forward to more.

report review for abuseTeamGreengrass chapter 1 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday! Just food for thought if you were to write a prequal/mini-story about their time in America I know I'm not the only one who would read it.

report review for abusePhoenixDK1984 chapter 1 . Feb 27, 2018

Andromeda does know that Lipton Tea is British, Founded by a Scotsman.

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 1 . Feb 25, 2018

It won't let me review Chapter 16.5 so here are my thoughts on your update.

Okay...I can see what you were trying to do but I still don't believe it works how you intended.

I would love for there to be a logical reason why a Minister can be elected by the Wizengamot when there are only 12 members sitting. That's not a legal election, especially if the Wizengamot can then come along and sack her two days later for doing exactly what she did to get into power!

"It's up to us to validate the law" yet even Andromeda points out that Kingsley and Amelia didn't do that with Harry. Once again, there's no legal reason for his arrest yet they went ahead with it just because. Now that Someone else is in power (Kings), they're going ahead with the duel and it comes across as a way of trying to please Andromeda more than anything else.

Now, on to the good parts. I really liked Teddy putting the law down to Ted on his insecurities. My issue with the original script was that you had Ted's emotional weakness come from nowhere for the reader so we didn't have a build up. That's now negated by Teddy telling his grandfather straight that Ted is needed and it's Harry who is in emotional trouble.

Harry's plan of being arrested as a bait was actually something that works with your Harry. My problem was always how rushed the arrest happened and the reasons why more than what he was planning. You could have had it happen slower, say have people talking about him potentially being arrested with Harry being calm and okay with it, setting up the reader to think he had something planned. This way the reader doesn't think Harry is being an idiot for going quietly.

Andromeda's snapping and challenging Umbridge was enjoyable and exactly what I would expect from a Black. Which then raises the question, what was Sirius doing while Harry was arrested? He's Lord Black and there was no sign of him trying to get Harry free.

I'm blase about Remus' fate. The writing has made it pretty clear that Remus is going to go back to being a waste of space unless he wakes up and smells the roses.

And in regards to your AN and PM note about insane actions or people reacting instantly without thinking. That was never my issue with the first part of Chapter 16. My issue was how you skimmed the entire setup to get Harry to face Riddle.

report review for 123 chapter 1 . Feb 24, 2018

love your story Harrt needs to take care of Voldie when he makes his move and throw up the dueces on Britain. Anyone who was apart of that should never be talked to again period.

report review for abuseAppoApples chapter 1 . Feb 24, 2018

FOR THE LOVE OF JKR HARRY IS IN A HOLDING CELL! Not Azkaban! Two dementors, that's it. Umbridge has a temporary job and those people died a while ago. Harry was blamed for it. I did foreshadow this chapter. Chill, please.

Love Your Author,

Jacob Apples

report review for abuseyashashva.150m chapter 1 . Feb 24, 2018

I think killing umbitch is the right way, this will destroy her fucking ass

report review for abuseSilentProwler chapter 1 . Feb 24, 2018

just jave him say an unbreakable vow that he fidnt kill himself or those others

report review for abuseimagelesssky chapter 1 . Feb 24, 2018

I've just started reading this story and I must say I absolutely love Dromeda!

report review for abuseThe Dark Lord Nedved chapter 1 . Feb 22, 2018

everybody is blase about Harry potter burning in flames in the middle of the great hall. then he becomes a teacher within minutes. ummm... unto the next chapter i guess!

report review for abuseLeicontis chapter 1 . Feb 19, 2018

I am always happy to see a fic that does something new and different, and this is certainly a unique take on a time travel story both in method and in setup. Looking forward to reading further!

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 1 . Feb 19, 2018

Odd and cute. Not any weirder than some otherd lol.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Feb 16, 2018

It was a good first chapter but i dont know how i feel about harry combusting XD.

I have just found this story and it looks good, im looking forward to reading more

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 1 . Feb 16, 2018

another great chap. loved it!

report review for abusedeadarm00 chapter 1 . Feb 15, 2018

You killed Harry Potter!? Damn sucks for the past harry to go out in flames after his shitty life. -.-

Fawkes is an evil bird. Still, that was funny. :P What a start to a story indirectly killing your past self in front of everyone. Nice story. Thanks for time & effort you put into this.

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 1 . Feb 12, 2018

See what I don't understand. Is why Hermione would even come close to blaming Harry for her failing marriage.

Ron, I totally get it, that's his character. He has multiple instances of getting mad at Harry due to his own insecurities and jealousy.

However, Hermione getting mad at him, let alone yelling at him in front of his son for moving away and living his own life? Like it's his job to play referee or mediator for those two?

I don't know about that. I know Hermione isn't perfect but that just seems like A bit of a jump. Especially if they were supposedly repairing their fractured friendship even if it was via letters.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Feb 12, 2018

So fawks just comes out of nowhere and goes, "yeah, I'm not liking this timeline. Time for a do over!"

It's kind of funny if you actually think about it. Personally, as long as they're all happy I wouldn't mind that timeline. I mean Harry and Ginny broke up, and Ron and Hermione got divorced. The world seems right to me. Lol

report review for abusehitesh90 chapter 1 . Feb 10, 2018

it's amazing

keep it up

report review for abusejkarr chapter 1 . Feb 9, 2018

this is a very nice chapter.

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 1 . Feb 6, 2018

Talking fawkes that's new

But have ready many much more weirder stories

Onto next

report review for abuseknives3131 chapter 1 . Feb 5, 2018

great story like the ship can't wait for more

report review for abuseDullReign82 chapter 1 . Feb 2, 2018

I love that Harry gets to reunite with Hedwig, and I always thought of her as more of a family then I did the Dursleys.

report review for abusePrincess Moonie of the Moon chapter 1 . Feb 2, 2018

i liked how your neutrslising the malfoys but realistic enough to be suspicous. i also love teddy being be a wolf

report review for abuseHikari Nova chapter 1 . Feb 1, 2018

VERY interesting take on a time travel fix it fic

report review for abusesamics chapter 1 . Feb 1, 2018

If you think this has bad grammar, spelling, I would really like to see what do you think qualifies as good. Seriously, this is much better than most stories I have read recently! Keep it up!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Jan 31, 2018

Liked this story before, refreshing; love it even more now, rewritten.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 1 . Jan 31, 2018

Really nice beggining ! I like this chapter and I hope that Nymphadora would choose Harry this time !

report review for abuseGuest chapter 1 . Jan 30, 2018

dud fracking awesome more pleae

report review for abusermiser1994 chapter 1 . Jan 30, 2018

yay stick it to the toad! also harry deserves to have hedwig back (aww)!

can't wait to read more!

report review for abusegginsc chapter 1 . Jan 29, 2018

I would kill that flying chicken! Also, why is Harry staying at Hogwarts? He is still a Potter. Why doesn't he access his inheritance? Surely the Potters owned property.

report review for abuse00 Non C. Anon 00 chapter 1 . Jan 28, 2018

This looks promising, and you hit two of my "I always enjoy" buttons. Honks and time-travel fics.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 1 . Jan 28, 2018

I like it.

report review for abuseKuroki Kitsune chapter 1 . Jan 28, 2018

A great start and I can't wait to see the Order's reaction... Or Moony's for that matter.

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 1 . Jan 28, 2018

Updating pretty quick eh?

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 1 . Jan 27, 2018

Yes! I was a total geek and wiggled in my seat as I read that this would be Harry/Tonks and can I say I admire the self-control you gave Harry. Because knowing it wouldn't kill Fawkes I so would have shot a spell at him for what just happened. Continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 1 . Jan 27, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseHortensia chapter 1 . Jan 27, 2018

Great start, I love it!

report review for abuseDJDeadpool chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Loved the original, Cant wait for the rest of this!

report review for abuseantiginnyharry chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

excellent beginning, can't wait to see how you bring Nymphadora into the story

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Awesome first chapter. Looking forward to see where you take this.

report review for abuseAutumngold chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Excellent beginning to your story! I'm so glad that Harry might be able to change the past to make a better future for Teddy, Andromeda and himself. Can't wait to see what will happen next!

report review for abuseEP chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

SYMPA

report review for abuseAdamH312 chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

This is an awesome so far and i cant wait to read more :)

report review for abuseObscureScryptic chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

I love it so far! And damn it Toad! And I'm curious of what Harry's 'friends' has to say about him being older. As well as his reaction to Sirius. Plus I'm looking forward to the Tonks and Remus situation.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

I am more Hermione-centric than Harry-centric, but I gave the first chapter a chance and I don't regret it one bit:-) Good plot and very well written, I look forward to read more of this.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Wow if I was Harry ir Andi I definitely would have plucked that chicken and froze it solid since fire can't hurt it. At least they should be able to save Sirius, Ted and Amelia Bones this time around. Though I have a feeling both Remus, Sirius and the old man are going to be a right pain in the arse. Interesting as well that Fudge seen the results of his employees torture if children and skedaddles out if their like his pants were on fire. Look forward to more.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

A truly wonderful story! Please continue! And yes to me it would be cool for Harry and Tonks to get together.

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Fantastic chapter, I think it's better then the first? Off to read the original again. Keep up the great work!

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

great start for a rewrite, can not wait to see more

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

Great first chapter and terrible that the trio was removed from their time. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 1 . Jan 26, 2018

OMG PLEASE KEEP UPDATING I LOVE IT

report review for abuseProf. Pendragon chapter 1 . Jan 25, 2018

I am so happy you are reworking this! The main concept is so interesting and I can't wait to see how you spin it this time.

report review for abuseMay chapter 1 . Jan 25, 2018

I love the concept! Great story, patiently awaiting new chapters.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 1 . Jan 25, 2018

good chapter please update again soon and thank you so much for bringing hedwig back

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 1 . Jan 25, 2018

Interesting concept. You've got enough characters to populate the past. Of course Umbridge has to go. And Hedwig is a bonus!

report review for abusezcnk chapter 1 . Jan 25, 2018

Interesting start. Looking forward to seeing how it develops, and how long it takes Andromeda to talk Harry into dating Dora.

chapter 2 . May 28

Fantástico!

Un Poco Agridulce. pero Fantástico

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 2 . Feb 26

Neville serves his tea hot!

#respect

report review for abuseEdTheBeast chapter 2 . Oct 24, 2019

Great thoughts and actions, though not sure what Hermione did to make Harry ; post war/marriage not still think of her as a friend!

report review for abusemoonprincess97524 chapter 2 . Aug 30, 2019

I love the reactions from both the house of snakes and griffins.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 2 . Apr 10, 2019

True Neville

report review for abuseGuest chapter 2 . Jan 2, 2019

Wtf, Slytherin were the ones that were cheating in canon, several of them were complete arseholes, kinda like what you've turned Harry into. I don't like your story and won't be continuing.

report review for abuseFencer22 chapter 2 . Dec 19, 2018

*cackles* that last line from Neville was perfect!

report review for abuseTenjo chapter 2 . Dec 19, 2018

This concept is unique. I have some reservations about how I'm guessing the Harry x Tonks thing plays out but it should still be interesting.. naturally I'll hold out hope that I've guessed wrong.

report review for abuseKriegerSangre chapter 2 . Dec 11, 2018

Filius Flitwick's name is spelled like FILIUS. Just thought you'd like to know.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 2 . Nov 21, 2018

I was hoping he'd have a good relationship with Hermione at least but I really like how bits and pieces of Harry's life after the war is coming out. Adult Harry as a parent is fantastic! I love Teddy and seriously can't wait to find out how Sirius reacts to Harry being an adult and a father.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 2 . Oct 22, 2018

Love the idea and how you executed him being a professor. The send-back was silly, but then again, is there really a good way to do it?

Very enjoyable so far.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 2 . Oct 17, 2018

I normally don't review every chapter of a completed fic but this chapter was magnificent! I love this story sooooo much !

report review for abuseHamilton chapter 2 . Sep 10, 2018

Interesting beginning of the story and Harry's new life. However, I think he should have been a bit more open/friendly/explanatory (whatever you want to call it) after class. Being professor Potter during lessons is fine and professional, but only telling them "you *were* my best friends; our friendship fell apart" is a bit much, given that to them just one day ago they were indeed best friends and they have no idea what might happen years from now.

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 2 . Sep 6, 2018

would love more detail here in this chapter but only if u have fun elaborating on the happenings...

report review for abusehdres chapter 2 . Aug 11, 2018

Interesting start. I like the spin you have put on the usual time travel stories with HP older than his classmates. You have also created believable relationships with Teddy and Andromeda without bashing anyone which is a nice change. Looking forward to seeing where you take this story.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 2 . Jul 31, 2018

Good

report review for abuseEEKtheCat chapter 2 . Jul 31, 2018

"Dude, the man is hot. Anyone can see that". Theo said."

(I'm sure I didn't get the quote exactly right, sorry for that)

Methinks that Theo Nott is more mature than the rest of his peers if he can see and speak the way he does. Most fifteen year olds wouldn't be like this, I imagine, or if they were they would pepper such a statement with a bit of humor just to avoid any ribbing from classmates, friends, etc. But that said, I like the Theo Nott you are writing (so far! For all I know he will turn out to be the worst one of them all! Kind of hoping No on that at he moment, I will say).

Enjoying this! I'm reading the "Including the Time Travel" version of your story with Harry & Andromeda raising Teddy FIRST, mainly because it's the first one you wrote but also because I like the way you're doing the time travel. I am interested to see if Fawkes will speak again. I mean, he's obviously shown that he can, so it will be cool what more he says. I mean, I guess I'm saying we hear more from him bc I would hate to have it shown that he can speak and then him just stay quiet for he rest of the story bc why expose such a thing about him and then not use it especially when it's so close to the original plot point? Fingers crossed!

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 2 . Jul 17, 2018

Such a line from Neville

report review for abuseMillie072 chapter 2 . Jul 12, 2018

Having ignored this story for some time as time travel is very easy to take or leave, I finally decided to read. Preconceptions were shot to hell. This is superb! Teddy is a sweetheart. and Harry is not too hard to take either. Harry's reaction to Hermione & Ron will likely cause all sorts of friction. Isn't Harry's talking back to Umbitch going to cause major problems or is he planning to get rid of her in the near future?

report review for abuseEdocsiru chapter 2 . Jul 3, 2018

... You should not put those ages BEFORE the time travel.

report review for abuseXxDragon King DragneelxX chapter 2 . Jun 17, 2018

Hahah you've got to love Nevil!

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 2 . Jun 15, 2018

Harry will change that. But I can't wait to see how it goes with Tonks and if harry came back that much older is andromeda older too. Great chapter!

report review for abuseFredrick Bismarck chapter 2 . Jun 8, 2018

I'm impressed. Time travel with an interesting situation where Harry becomes his own classmates professor and it's done in a believable way. I had my doubts with the fawks and the bird talking, but it's been a fun first two chapters. Teddy is adorable. Harry is good father. The reactions of the students and sighing admirers are so amusing. Excited to see Tonks' reaction.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 2 . May 22, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abuseRomily chapter 2 . May 21, 2018

I have a little trouble with Harry's age. He taught in america for 6 years, went to school there one year and was in GB for the 2nd war at least till Voldemorts defeat... so either i am missing something or Harry should be older than 24.

Besides the age irritation i really enjoy the story so far :)

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 2 . May 15, 2018

OK now this is becoming one of my favorite stories

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 2 . May 15, 2018

'Friendships fail and people move on?' Really? I like the story so far, but that is an exceptionally cold-blooded thing for Harry to say. That may be what happened from his perspective, but it's not what happened from theirs. They haven't lived through the next nine years like Harry did. Their best friend was basically just killed right before their eyes. I know we have to suspend disbelief for stories to work, but come on...

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 2 . May 9, 2018

Overall I'm pretty satisfied with the first class. I'm a bit sad that Harry's friendships broke down, but it was handled well enough that I'm sure there was a good explanation and it will continue to be handled well in the future.

Harry handling Umbridge continues to be great.

I feel like Teddy might be acting a little too young for 7, but then again, it's been a while since I had an extended interaction with a 7-year-old. And the way he plays off Harry is perfect.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 2 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

First lesson went quite well. I'm glad you are showing Harry's teaching methods, as well as the reactions from his peers and students. Makes it quite enjoyable to read :)

I'm not sure if it was intended, but that last sentence by Neville was really dark if you think about it. I mean, he was dropped from a window because his extended family wanted to 'scare' the magic out of him, not to mention all the shit that has been going on in Hogwarts. It hits the nail right on the head, but damn if that wouldn't sting if one of the teachers overheard :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 2 . Apr 27, 2018

Your story makes my day so I'll try to make your day with a short review.

I love your story.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 2 . Apr 26, 2018

One thing bothers me with this story. I think Ron and Hermione must have been horrible to Harry for him not even to try to be friendly with them. I can recall how I grew apart from old school friends. But even after more years than six, If I were forced into Harry's situation I would be friendlier to them than Harry has been to his former friends.

report review for abuseWarvillage chapter 2 . Apr 21, 2018

It was promising until the "Slytherin is the best house but is horribly mistreated" cliche reared its head, the only ones to treat Slytherin different in canon is Umbridge and Snape, and that is positive.

In canon the slytherins are the ones to constantly cheat, insult and try to harm people.

report review for abuseTemporal Knight chapter 2 . Apr 19, 2018

Another excellent chapter. I think my favorite part was the students reactions to Harry's lesson. The Slytherins all fawning over him - Nott even proclaiming him hot while Draco sulks was beyond hilarious!

I feel bad for Hermione though. She's kinda getting the short end of the stick. The girl doesn't have too many friends and for all intents and purposes her best friend basically just burned up in front of her and refuses to have much of anything to do with her now. I don't feel bad for Ron. He's always been a jerk and you actually probably have his reaction toned down from what a canon!Ron would do.

Teddy continues to be adorable. As proven by his interactions with Flitwick.

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 2 . Apr 11, 2018

I think Harry has a really great chance here! If Ron and Hermione can be left out, somehow, maybe things can get done with less risk? Just saying.

report review for abuseZasshu Fuhahahahaha chapter 2 . Apr 8, 2018

btw i was kinda disappointed i didn't see the student's, teacher's, or even the Weasley family's reaction to Tonks being the mother of his child even reacting to the three of them acting like a family would've been cute like the students go "aaawww" and be jealous or something.

report review for abuseZasshu Fuhahahahaha chapter 2 . Apr 7, 2018

well, although the time travel concept this time has it's unique quality than the usual it's still unfair for future Harry to suddenly cut ties with his friends who has no idea what happened and just lose their precious friend after a day.

report review for abusetyry95 chapter 2 . Apr 5, 2018

I'm liking this story a lot more than I thought I would! But I'm kinda worried about his treatment of Ron and Hermione. By their point of view, their best friend just burned alive and was replaced by a near-stranger that ignores them.

By Harry's point of view... Well, I'm not sure what happened in the future but he shouldn't realize that those life changing events never happened. I haven't read too far yet, but I hope this isn't a bashing story.

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 2 . Apr 4, 2018

I really like the reaction conversations, especially the last few lines. Well done. As an education professor I have always thought poorly of Hogwarts as a school and of the professors' behaviour, especially the Headmaster's. This is a good fic to point that out. Looking forward to reading more.

report review for abuseC Dumbledore chapter 2 . Mar 28, 2018

I've been reading HP fanfic for so long that I find it difficult to locate anything really original. I have read loads of time travel and - well, it seems like just about everything. This is refreshingly different and original (as far as I can tell). I also find it well written and despite your a.n. about errors, I see remarkably few. I'm looking forward to reading the rest.

report review for abusePedro52 chapter 2 . Mar 21, 2018

awesome

report review for abuseRandom number generator chapter 2 . Mar 13, 2018

Sorry, but bashing Harry (maybe unintentional) was horrible in this chapter.

report review for abuseAnne chapter 2 . Mar 11, 2018

This is a fascinating story! Thank you for sharing it with us.

report review for abuseFoy the Snooze Button chapter 2 . Mar 1, 2018

Thank you for bringing this awesome fic to us dude. Hooked I am and regretful I am not.

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 2 . Feb 23, 2018

Neville's last question is very telling. You are doing some insightful and new things with this and I'm enjoying it a lot so far. I completely understand the feeling of loss of being ripped from your home. I hope Harry takes a chance to talk to Fawkes to find out what he thought was so horrible that he had to steal them from the future. I can't imagine it was just missing Dumbledore.

report review for abuseThe Dark Lord Nedved chapter 2 . Feb 22, 2018

lol. Its just too fast.. too much .. too.. believing. A future time traveller ups and declares himself a teacher and boom, he's in.

Hogwarts really dangerous. Who is watching the boy when he is working? And why is Umbridge still there?

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 2 . Feb 19, 2018

Daaaamn neville with the burns~!

report review for abuseLBII chapter 2 . Feb 9, 2018

Nice story! Keep up the good work. Thank you for sharing your time, talents and imagination with us readers.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 2 . Feb 9, 2018

wonder what Hermione is thinking.

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 2 . Feb 6, 2018

Thank god adult Harry

And just not being chummy with students

report review for abusemikkelibob chapter 2 . Jan 31, 2018

Loved ch 1. I hit flow so fast I dropped my phone.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 2 . Jan 31, 2018

I really enjoy the lessons !

Ron has to be more mature, he's a kid now.

I love the way Harry cut off Umbridge tongue !

report review for abuseGuest chapter 2 . Jan 29, 2018

The obnoxious Gryff poor widdle Slytherin trope is old. Especially as in canon Severus was the onloy one who favored a house and the Slytherins got away with using the word mudblood all the time. Otherwise, good story.

report review for abuse00 Non C. Anon 00 chapter 2 . Jan 28, 2018

Good observation, Neville.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 2 . Jan 28, 2018

This is good !

Teddy is adorable

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

So good! These first two chapters have such a good flow and it's pretty awesome to get a glimpse in how the future turned out from the different things said or thought by Harry and Teddy. And the student reactions are nice to see too. Continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abuseCoolidge787 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

I'm really excited for this story, I've never been a huge remus fan. I'm wondering if your going to keep teddy's heritage a secret or not.

report review for abuseAutumngold chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Exceptional new chapter! I'm glad that Harry didn't allow the Gryffindors to walk all over him. I think it is funny that Ron is showing his whole house why he and Harry's friendship failed. Could he be more immature and petty? Thank you for your wonderful update! Very excited for your next chapter!

report review for abuseoutoforderx2 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

This is one of my favorite stories of all time, it is fresh feeling and doesn't get lost in the details. It provides enough information to push the story forward, neither too much nor too little. Thank you.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Nice chapter and good first lesson.

report review for abusexrysatsan chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

really good job up to here

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Great first class with the 5th years and I liked how the Snakes responded to Harry's teaching style. Teddy sure can state things with clarity, lol. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Ok, I went back and re-read the original story, and this one just blows it out of the water! It's so much better, but obviously the same story. Keep up the amazing work!

report review for abuseMattsbaby chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

This story has captured my attention and I am thoroughly enjoying it! Thank you

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Awesome chapter. Made quite an impression lol.

report review for abusePrincess Moonie chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

I'm really glad you're redoing this story, it was always one of my favourites. Please update soon, and please pair Nymph and Harry together. Also, I hope that you make Severus and Hrry good friends (somehow)

report review for abuseKi0 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Really nice story.

Especially like the angle you're taking with Harry's character and Teddy is just adorable.

Can't wait for the next chapter with hopefully Dora's introduction to her son.

report review for abuseTotalCombo chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

This is one of the best HP ff I've ever read. Thumbs up for that. I seriously beg of you to not abandone it. Take your time with the chapter but please finish this story. Grwat work!

report review for abuseRikudoNaruto1 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

great stuff :)

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Thank you so much for the update.

report review for abuseasingh123 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Hi... Great Story So Far...

I think this story has many angles that you can take this story towards...

Please continue...

Thanks

report review for abuserb2312 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

An interesting start.

really like the fact that no one has corrected the assuption that teddy is harry's biological son.

nice defence class. And I think the toad is actually envious of harry's teaching ability.

can not wait for dora to meet teddy.

report review for abuseDogmai chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

This has been pretty excellent so far. The writing has greatly improved since the last version.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

good chapter cant wait for tonks to come into the story

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Haha this us going to be fun. Since the Toad is High Inquisitor does that mean that Dumbledore isn't in the school at the moment? Lol I had to laugh at both Ron and Hermione expecting side benefits for supposedly being best mates with an adult BWL, and laughed even harder when they left with egg all over their faces. Somehow I have a very strange feeling that this year is going to be chaotic and yet very very interesting. More please

report review for abuseIronLad chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

I loved the chapter. I really liked Neville's zinger at the end.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Thank you for posting! Can't wait for more! Hopefully another chapter this weekend :P

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

It'll be interesting when Harry and Teddy meet Dora.

report review for abuseDJDeadpool chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

Loving this! Cant wait for more!

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

DUDE! awesome

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 2 . Jan 27, 2018

I'm really enjoying this story so far. I hope you keep up the good work!

Esmereilda chapter 3 . Jun 29

remus ur an idiot XD

report review for chapter 3 . May 29

Maravilloso!

Muy Tierno!

report review for .9081323 chapter 3 . Oct 31, 2019

Great story looking forward to more

report review for abusenoylj chapter 3 . Oct 26, 2019

To me, you can't basj Bumbles, Snape, Molly, or Lupin more than they deserve. Minnie could also take a bit of bashing

report review for abuseCaptiosus chapter 3 . Oct 7, 2019

I saw what you did there in Ollivanders.

report review for abuseNarutosBrat chapter 3 . Aug 12, 2019

To be so smart, Remus sure is being an idiot. Seriously, it's not exactly hard to figure out. Much like Harry, Teddy's parents died when he was a baby, so he was never given the chance to get to know them. Teddy's grandmother was still around, so he was able to hear stories about his mother. Neither Andromeda or Harry knew Harry all that well, or for all that long, so they couldn't really tell him much about Remus. Obviously, he's going to be a bit estranged from his biological parents, but his father more so.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 3 . Jun 25, 2019

I do have a question, if they didn't want Remus there, who did inform him that Teddy was his son?

great chapter, keep up the good work

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 3 . May 21, 2019

im not a big fan of Remus they made him more personable in the movie but in the books, not so much

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 3 . Apr 10, 2019

Harry is the best god father I'm happy Sirius is alive

report review for abuseSmokeing chapter 3 . Mar 1, 2019

Excellent chapter thank you

report review for abuseDavid12leca chapter 3 . Feb 20, 2019

beautiful and i was listining to jeff buckleys hallelujah at the same time this chapter nearly wrecked me.

report review for abuseLucretius chapter 3 . Feb 15, 2019

And this is where I leave this fic. I can stand the very matter-of-fact writing style, but everybody seems to be acting like an OC. Even Teddy is heavily infantilised and don't get me started on Remus and Andromeda. Harry seems to be a cruel sshoIe who first rejects his old friends based on a flimsy excuse and then steals a kid for himself without any regards to his parents wishes. You would think being an orphan and not knowing his parents growing up would made him sensitive in such an action but it seems the author is not interested in writing a remotely realistic story.

report review for abuseTenjo chapter 3 . Dec 19, 2018

The dialogue between the different factions (teachers, Slytherins, Gryffindors.. particularly the Slytherins) after Harry and Teddy left was hilarious. Crabbe actually said something.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 3 . Nov 21, 2018

ooooh Remus is pissed. but why tell him at all? doesn't it just hurt Teddy in the long run? I loved this chapter though. "don't tell them I robbed the bank!" hahahaha!

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 3 . Oct 17, 2018

This is sooooo addicting!

report review for abuseScathing reviewer chapter 3 . Sep 22, 2018

Poor Lupin. Having his son stolen from him before he even got to know him. Then to be yelled at when things go wrong. Harry was the only one in control of what was going on in that scene, Lupin's response was totally natural.

I find it hard to believe that Harry hasn't talked up Lupin all of teddy's life, that Teddy isn't the least bit excited about meeting him. Why would he even think that Lupin will take him away from Harry? He's seven, it wouldn't occur to him that it could even happen.

I get where you are going with this, so I understand why you wrote it this way, but from a strangers standpoint Remus is blameless and Potter and Andromeda should have shown better care to remus, dora and teddy.

report review for abuseDarkLordWhatsit chapter 3 . Sep 19, 2018

thank you so much for sticking with the book version where harry fixes his wand. I hated that he didn't in the movie. It was so stupid

report review for abuseEfloresco chapter 3 . Jul 10, 2018

That's wildly ooc for remus but whatever

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 3 . Jun 15, 2018

Okay, but Remus isn't insane to be upset it is his son. Great chapter!

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 3 . May 22, 2018

Pretty excellent chapter. Remus is an idiot who skips out on there kid

report review for abusezeek17 chapter 3 . May 18, 2018

Second name is NOT father's name. Sure, kid can have his father's name as second one.. but he can just as well have any other name.

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 3 . May 15, 2018

Nice confrontation; it's hard to be Remus in that scenario.

report review for abuseBiblio388 chapter 3 . May 11, 2018

Fu*k, this one hit a lot harder than I thought it would. Not being a parent, I can't say what I would actually do in a similar situation, but I like to think I would always put my child's wellbeing above my own comfort.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 3 . May 9, 2018

The little note about the magical toothbrush is exactly the kind of thing that makes Harry Potter feel magical. Good job.

A nap and getting picked up at age 7? I guess neither is totally unheard of, but he's definitely getting old for both of those. Everyone I know was done with naps by the time we were 5. (School is a thing.)

Remus is unfortunately messed up in an entirely canon way. To be clear, that's a compliment to your writing. I really feel for the man.

On an unrelated note, I hope we get at least a little bit of Andromeda and Ted's relationship now that she's lived so many years without him.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 3 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Looks like sparks flew after that meeting... Not the one with Narcissa, that one went quite well :p

There is something about how Remus is acting that makes me squint though... He always seemed so passive in canon (not contacting Harry, or even talking with him for a long time after finally being introduced, as well as his general temperament that we see in canon), so i'm having a bit of a hard time believing he would react so strongly after finding out he has a son from the future which he learned about less than a day ago. Shock would be a more believable reaction than outright anger, but it's your characters, or... Rowling's characters that you borrow :p

Teddy's reaction though, i can more easily believe. He has grown up loved and protected by Harry his whole life, so i think it's natural that he would be afraid of losing that with his parents being alive again.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseTemporal Knight chapter 3 . Apr 19, 2018

Huh, you actually managed to make me like Narcissa. Go figure...

However...I am against Harry changing Teddy's name officially without talking to Tonks and Remus. Remus I get, he DID try to run before the kid was even born and he has a history of vanishing when things get bad so I don't really fault that. Still though, that's the sort of thing that deserves a shouting match and a blunt refusal to change your mind instead of just up and doing it and bringing it up after the fact. Both options aren't necessarily 'good' but at least the former makes you seem like you're giving the parents a chance to voice their opinions.

Gotta say, the Goblins blunt reaction to "Hey you have a Horcrux problem" being, "Okay. Where is it cause it needs to die with vengeance." was awesome.

And Teddy continues to shine in every appearance...

I like how Dora actually takes the time to let Teddy be and not instantly fuss about him and running to him but lets him be the one to make the decision then proceeds to quietly go and make sure he was okay after running away from the shouting. Really shows the difference between her and Remus and how she CAN be mature if she wants to be.

Goddammit Albus...never can stop meddling can you...

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 3 . Apr 13, 2018

Remus is an asshole, but what do you expect from the loser who never checked on Harry and would have abandoned Tonks and Teddy.

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 3 . Apr 4, 2018

More a comment from last chapter, but fits here as well. I really like that you did not have Harry immediately fall back in to being his teen-aged self. Even if he had been in his old body, a 24 year old mind (or older in other stories) will not look at 15 year olds the same way as another 15 year old. Nor will he interact with other adults in the same way a teen does. A person has a very different perspective of the world as an adult than as a teen, even if their heart/core personality is the same. You show that in this chapter.

report review for abuseFoy the Snooze Button chapter 3 . Mar 1, 2018

"I don't want to go live with Remus, please, Dad, please, please don't give me away."

This part really got to me dude.

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 3 . Feb 23, 2018

Nice job setting it up so there will be no paradox. Teddy will be the only child of Tonks and Remus in this time.

report review for abuseThe Dark Lord Nedved chapter 3 . Feb 22, 2018

Hi.

Okay, the writing is very direct with much subtlety, which is fine. However, the conversations are really... out of universe-ish. I mean, nobody will tell the living that they died at x date doing y heroics. It's just.. I don't understand it. Things to make people go crazy.

Remus' and Teddy's meeting could have been written a bit better. It came across like :

"Hey that boy is my son. I want him now."

"No he's my son. Fuck you."

Hahahah seriously? And if Tonks and Remus are together, that means neither of them can get to be the parent.

Thinking of it more, lets say Teddy wants Nym to be mom, fine. Then he has to accept Remus as dad. Which is biologically correct. However, Harry is his father, and therefore, Nymphadora has to relinquish mom status, for now. Correct?

report review for abuseSindhuja chapter 3 . Feb 20, 2018

Remus Lupins reaction seems very out of character... he isn't even involved with tonks yet... canon Remus would have rather not be raising a son. he was insecure. but surely not so thoughtless as to scare a 7 yr old

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 3 . Feb 19, 2018

Life changing and emotional.

report review for abuseJiggly Joe chapter 3 . Feb 11, 2018

So far all of the interactions have been reasonable, and at least a bit understandable. Doesn't really feel like bashing so you're fine there.

I feel like Remus would have been actually far more willing to accept Harry as Teddy's father than to take responsiblity for him, because of the exact same cowardice and guilt that had him trying to abandon Tonks and Teddy in the first place. Since you've referenced that already, meaning that is what happened in Harry's timeline, the whole explosion Remus had here seems rather out of character. It probably would have made more sense to have R

report review for abuseJKArcanus chapter 3 . Feb 11, 2018

This is great so far. Especially interesting to see the parental reactions...even with each other, esp since Remus and Dora were more like acquaintes at this point, much less already in a relationship.

report review for abusedarickb chapter 3 . Feb 9, 2018

Really excellent story so far! Keep up the great work. Cheers!

report review for abusejkarr chapter 3 . Feb 9, 2018

it is nice that Dora wants to meet her son

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 3 . Feb 6, 2018

Felt that you were a bit too hard on remus

Onto nsxt

report review for abuseDullReign82 chapter 3 . Feb 2, 2018

I am enjoying this story immensely.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 3 . Jan 31, 2018

I can understand Remus' anger but as Andromeda said: Harry is Teddy's father now because he cared about him. The child is not Remus yet now.

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 3 . Jan 28, 2018

I absolutely LOVE this story

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 3 . Jan 28, 2018

Intense. I like it :)

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

This story continues to be 500% better then the original, dishing out feels and quality story left and right. Keep up the stellar work!

report review for abuseTheKingInExile chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

I read the original some time ago and when I heard that there would be a rewrite I was intrigued and after reading the first chapter, then the second and now the third I applaud you for the good work so far and I am awaiting the next update with excitement.

report review for abusePrincess Moonie of the Moon chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

loved it

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

I can sorta see Remus point as he is the birth father. But I also see Dumbledores hand in this otherwise Remus wouldn't have been there at all. He walked away from Tonks when she was pregnant and never gave a thought to his child when he went to the Battle...he knew Harry since he was born yet Harry could count on one hand how many times he seen Remus...yet Remus is butt hurt about Harry bringing up his son...yeah Dumbledores hand is written all over this, Remus worshipped the bloody gut so rather than logically think things through he would just rake whatever he said at face value. Dumbledore wants no attachments to his Saviour so getting Teddy away from Harry will be the first thing he tried to do.

report review for abuseTheUnfortunateHero chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

This story is going to make me cry I just know it. I love everything so far, keep up the good work!

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

dude awesome chapter...though would ut be posseble to have the old o e back up, i like to compare rewrites but in any casy, great stpry so far and well written!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

A difficult choice for Harry but a correct choice for Teddy. Interesting dynamics for the group. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

good chapter rip remus a new one he did abandon harry too

report review for abusesquidsk chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

Amazing story! Looking forward to the next chapter.

report review for abuseEP chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

EXCELLENT

BONNE CONTINUATION

MERCI POUR LA LECTURE

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

Awesome chapter. Wow Remus way to over react and be a bitch lol.

report review for abusezcnk chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

Good chapter, I like the way you're developing this so far. Pretty thoroughly wrecks the Tonks/Remus pairing, and sets up for Harry/Tonks nicely. You also did a good job of showing Teddy being afraid of losing Harry without anyone coming out and saying it until Dora pointed it out.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

Fantastic intro to various new characters here and the emotions running about.

report review for abuseQuietlyFreya chapter 3 . Jan 27, 2018

Sorry, I don't have all that much to say, just wanted to say that I'm loving it and keep it up. Thanks for the feels.

odonnellzoo99 chapter 4 . Jun 8

This has a very promising start. The first four chapters have been great. That was one of the best Order meetings I've ever read.

report review for chapter 4 . May 29

Encantador.

De Verdad Maravilloso

report review for abuseMeadhbh31415 chapter 4 . May 2

Yes! It is not bashing, it's just desserts :-)

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 4 . Feb 26

this was so emotional!

last one and this one!

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 4 . Apr 10, 2019

Good he gave it to dumbles

report review for abuseOlly chapter 4 . Feb 22, 2019

You do raise a very interesting point. What was Dumbledore's plan exactly ? After Harry died who was supposed to kill Voldemort ? Because like you said, "he got back up" so if Harry hadn't come back from the dead who was going to defeat him ? Neville ?

report review for abuseKriegerSangre chapter 4 . Jan 29, 2019

Good story, but your grammatical errors are horrifying. Half of what you wrote makes no sense. Makes me think you were like 14 or 15 when you wrote this.

report review for abuseDezzi95 chapter 4 . Dec 16, 2018

Damnnnnnnnn! Go Harry! lol

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 4 . Nov 21, 2018

Yes! SmackDown! Harry 1 Dumbledore 0 *ding ding ding* round two! loved this.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 4 . Oct 17, 2018

Go Harry!poor old fool lol Dumbledore won't know what hit him!

report review for abuseBad Wolf chapter 4 . Aug 29, 2018

I have to admit... I'm having a hard time reading this story. It's not because of the typos or lost words... those are far fewer than I would have expected honestly. No, the reason I'm having a hard time reading this is because it is SO. WELL. WRITTEN. My gods, reading this feels like I've been pulled into a genuine alternate reality that I am living out. I could feel the magic radiating off Harry as he threatened Dumbledore. You might say... it's spell binding. Sorry for the bad pun, but it's accurate.

report review for abusejaythekoala chapter 4 . Jun 27, 2018

I know you've said, in both this story and Easier than Falling Asleep (I haven't read your other stories) that it's not your intention to bash characters. I'm sorry, but that's exactly how it comes across, with Albus, Ron and Hermione, and Remus in this story. I don't mind the idea of showing characters' flaws and causing rifts in relationships for dramatic effect, but you're too heavy-handed about it, setting them up as blankly antagonistic in almost every scene, and it's always Harry who's shown to be in the right while the other is being blatantly stupid or unreasonable. That's classic bashing, and a real turn-off to me at least.

Even though you've hinted that relationships will improve down the line, I'm not particularly inclined to push through to that point. I will say in your favour that your plot ideas and writing style are perfectly decent otherwise, and I'm not surprised your stories have the following they do. There are enough fans out there who hate Dumbledore, etc. or don't mind bashing that would certainly find this fic to their liking. It's just not for me.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 4 . Jun 15, 2018

Wow, Remus needs to get himself together before attempting a relationship with his son. Great chapter!

report review for abuseRangle chapter 4 . May 31, 2018

Harry better knows his place as a disposable tool for the wise and powerful Dumbledore. After all, Harry's life is a cheap price to pay for the prosperity and peace of the Wizarding world.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 4 . May 22, 2018

Pretty excellent chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 4 . May 15, 2018

another brilliant chapter

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 4 . May 9, 2018

That was a great example of a canon-justified argument between reasonable adults who respect each other and are on the same side, but have major disagreements. It was (emotionally) a little painful to read, but well done.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 4 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Impressive tirade by Harry. It always surprises me when 'back from the future' have characters who believe they know better than those who have experienced the future firsthand. Then again... I guess some of the characters might be so inclined for different reasons.

I'm not sure, but i might be inclined to hoping that Harry and Dumbledore don't mend their relationship. What Dumbledore did was the worst betrayal of trust, and i don't think he deserves forgiveness unless he can genuinely show that he has changed his ways.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 4 . Apr 27, 2018

Harry's gonna pull the stick from Snape's ass and shove it in Dumbledore's if he meddles with Teddy.

report review for abuseTemporal Knight chapter 4 . Apr 19, 2018

Damn. About time somebody shut Dumbledore down hard! And he didn't even do it for himself but for his son which was fantastic. I also loved how he set Snape on his heels by the simple expedient of mentioning Dumbles' planned ultimate fate for Harry.

Loved the teases of eventual Dora/Harry here by the way. And again it really is to her credit with how she's taking things and willing to go with the flow letting him and Teddy set what they are comfortable with around her.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 4 . Apr 17, 2018

Great chapter, although the effect was a bit lost as one of the final lines says 'rooting in a cell' instead of 'rotting' as I believe you intended :)

report review for abusenoylj chapter 4 . Mar 31, 2018

Harry and Albus never had a relationship other that master and weapon

report review for abusebadknight chapter 4 . Mar 25, 2018

Rooting must be rotting

report review for abusePlanemo chapter 4 . Mar 18, 2018

Will Goku defeat Freza and save planet Namek? Tune in next time for all this and more on Dragon Ball Z...wait, wrong fandom.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 4 . Feb 19, 2018

Fantastic work.

report review for abuseJKArcanus chapter 4 . Feb 11, 2018

Wow...intense confrontation with Albus! Well executed.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 4 . Jan 31, 2018

I think Harry is right to reveal the truth because Albus need to reconsider his plans and not interfere with other lifes. Severus made all he can for saving Harry, so I thinks he'll follow Harry path now and not Dumbledore after hearing the truth.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

The new leader of the order?

I like the story~!

I like seeing professor Potter.

report review for abuseAutumngold chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Thank you for your incredible new chapters! I'm glad that Harry stood up to Remus in defense of his son. Teddy deserves better than a man who tried to run away when he found his wife was pregnant. Hopefully Dumbledore will keep to his promise and stop meddling in Harry's life. Absolutely marvelous updates! Can't wait to see what will happen next!

report review for abuseEP chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

EXCELLENT

Bonne continuation

Merci pour la lecture

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

awesome but isn't this a rewrite I could swear I've read this before good work tho

report review for abuseDogmai chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Excellent update. I'm really excited for harry/tonks, It has the potential to be one of the best fics for the pairing as it manages to avoid age gap issue.

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

And that's what happens when another wizard, just as powerful as the Merlin esq one you have, having done the same things, challenges the old one saying that he fucked up bigtime, now sit down. Loved it! Keep up the fantastic work!

report review for abuseHortensia chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Good chapters, but do you mean the updates will slow down now?

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Thank you so much for the updates.

report review for abuseKuroki Kitsune chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Stop writing such an intriguing story... I've spent part of my work shift sneaking into the 'bathroom' to read...

report review for abusemrpietan chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Aside from some grammatical errors, this was good. I'll mark it to follow

report review for abuseCharles Ceaser chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Awesome chapter. Please update soon.

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

I rather like the interactions and how Harry finally tells the story of his death. I wonder what effect this will have on the order later on. More so I wonder about Molly and his old friend's reactions to the fact he was not married before getting pulled back.

report review for abusenickp41 chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

loving this story, Remus is well written and never deserved Tonksie, Albus always like his secrets and never will change, he will always want to be the leader of the light.

and Snape will always be Snape, he's a bad tempered legend.

keep it up and well done..

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Great interaction between Harry and Tonks. The scene between Albus and Harry was wonderful. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseFlame Wolfe chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

I love this story! :)

report review for abusePrincess Moonie chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

With this story, I want Dumbledore and Harry to be against one another. Mainly for Dumbledore to try and be his controlling self and try to have everything planned his way and for Harry to constantly call him out on it. I still really want Harry andSeverus to become friends :) And please dont kill Sirius :(

So excited for the Harry / Dora pairing :)

report review for abusecariangelus chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

I liked the first story, it was fast but good, I don't like the harrytonks, what will happen with Remus, why can't Remus have love. And is harry going to get sirius free

report review for abuseGuest chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Absolutely loving the speed of releases. Keep up the good work!

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

good chapter as usual when things get tough remus runs and hides

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

Dumbles will probably try to use Teddy in some way. Wouldn't surprise me at all.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

I can actually see Harry and Severus having if not a close friendship than at least an amicable one but there is no way in hell I can see Harry and Albus even being on good terms. There is way to much betrayal and manipulation on Dumbledore side then and as shown by Remus being where he had no business being in this time as well. Albus might Work with Harry but if Harry is smart he will never trust the Son if a bitch because he will stab him in the back.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 4 . Jan 28, 2018

How about a Harry that lets the order know that they will look after the kids and give them an idea not the whole thing but an idea of what is going on and what to look out for. to keep safe. Awaiting more.

chapter 5 . May 29

Perfecto.

Maravilloso

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 5 . Apr 10, 2019

Yes Dora and Harry

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 5 . Nov 21, 2018

the entire kitchen scene is adorable and I love it. I'm going to be telling you how much I love every chapter honestly. and it's true. 5 chapters in and I'm fully in love with this fic

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 5 . Oct 17, 2018

Matchmaking 101

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 5 . Sep 6, 2018

oooh... I am unclear as to whether Dora and HP got together in the chapter one version of the present but why did they not? as for any grammatical misses, it doesn't matter because we have the brains to fill in any gaps and u are better than any lack in anything!

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 5 . Jun 15, 2018

Well, Remus might have some competition not only for his son but his supposed future wife. Great chapter!

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 5 . May 22, 2018

Pretty great chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 5 . May 15, 2018

another lovely chapter, really enjoying the story

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 5 . May 15, 2018

Last two chapters have been great...it's just hard to swallow the psychological reactions to the old Harry dying and a new one appearing out of thin air. Everybody seems so blase; even with magic, it seems like they should all be freaking out.

report review for abuseBiblio388 chapter 5 . May 11, 2018

Excellent interpersonal interactions. Especially between the future family. Very heart-warming.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 5 . May 9, 2018

I liked the poetic way you described the Cruciatus Curse.

I hope Voldemort does something with the knowledge that the Order has a time traveler on their side who supposedly won the war. Like moving his Horcruxes.

The focus on how normal it is for people to be attracted to Harry and for Andromeda to tease him about his love life is helping sell me on the possibility of a relationship with Dora.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 5 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Hmm... So merely Harry's presence is sowing division in Voldemort's ranks. I wonder if we'll see other's have a change of heart as the story progresses, but i can understand if they lack the motivation needed for the final push :)

Also, i'm wondering why Dumbledore didn't try to push through mercy while everyone else talked openly about killing Voldemort's supporters. He is shown to be in favor of non-lethal tactics in the books, as seen in the battle in the department of Mysteries. Perhaps he understands that he isn't the boss anymore, or perhaps he figured that mercy didn't work the 'last time', and so is open for trying something different?

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 5 . Apr 27, 2018

The ending of this chapter's phrased like it's written on a piece of paper and you just cut it at some point when you judged it long enough. Rest of the chapter's lovely though.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 5 . Apr 17, 2018

I really love the easy banter between Harry and Andromeda, it sells the time travel and changes in Harry so well.

report review for abuseMeaningless Us3rname chapter 5 . Feb 27, 2018

As much as I dislike Lucius, I can't help but feel pleased his obvious love for his wife.

report review for abuseHigashiyama Sayuri's Devout chapter 5 . Feb 22, 2018

Stop it with the blushing, 25 year old men don't blush.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 5 . Feb 19, 2018

Rather cute though emotional.

report review for abusedeadarm00 chapter 5 . Feb 15, 2018

I'm loving Tonks flustered reactions to Harry! xD

report review for abusejkarr chapter 5 . Feb 9, 2018

this is a very nice chapter

report review for abuseNanettez chapter 5 . Feb 2, 2018

'1 gram moonstone and asphodel pedals'

You must mean petals rather than pedals. Unfortunately that is the way people are pronouncing words with and internal T the last few years.

I have not had a problem with other things so you are managing the fact that you are dyslexic very well.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

Lol! Harry is wonderful Andre knows how to cook

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

Rather cute family moment at the end.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

good chapter but i thought you posted a different chapter 5 before

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

Update soon!

report review for abusestvwilling chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

The Disorder of the Phoenix - Love it :)

report review for abuse0rangew0lf chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

Love this story. Can't wait for the next chapter

report review for abusehogwartsfan1 chapter 5 . Jan 29, 2018

looking forward to your next chapter

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Dora is too adorable OMG

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Fantastic story, i went to bed and i actually dreamt about this world of yours, and I can't pay a higher compliment than that. REALLY looking forward for the next one.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

I already love this story so much and it's only been 5 chapters! The humor is great comic relief and just all together so good! Please keep updating!

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

I love the plot for this story and can't wait to see where you take it.

report review for abuseHysper chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

I really like that story. But I was wondering if you have it all written or are you writing it at that insane pace. If it's latter I hope you won't burn out with your idea. Anyway it's really fantastic piece of fan fiction and I'm glad I found it. Thank you and keep up your good work.

report review for abuseTotalCombo chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Again, I loved the last two chapters. I think this story has great potential. Also your update rate(?) is positively insane. Yet the chapters don't seem to be rushed. Love it! Keep up the good work and this will probably end up as the best fanfiction I've ever read.

report review for abuseWillowstar23 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Aww this is cute, I like it.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Haha Hestia I think hit just the right note. It's a pity that Lucius can't get a note to either Harry or Sirius to get Narcissa out if that house. Obviously Lucius still lives his wife very much and right now Sirius and Harry are going to be the only ones that can save her and possibly in the long run Lucius as well. This might very well be the turning point in the Malfoys life. Dumbledore was way to quiet and pretty much gave up control at this meeting...I still don't trust him at all. More please!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

I was rather surprised by Cissa's outspokenness towards Tom but not the results. It's great that not only is Harry telling them of the past/future, the Order is actually planning to counter with extreme prejudiced. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseantiginnyharry chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

very enjoyable story, keep it going

report review for abusekeyblademeister88 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

Thank you for the quick updates

I need more of this in my life

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 5 . Jan 28, 2018

This is one of the best stories I'm following right now. I love it. Keep up the spectacular work.

chapter 6 . May 29

Perfecto!

Me Fascinó

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 6 . Feb 26

did I tell you I love Andromeda and Harry interactions?

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 6 . Apr 10, 2019

Not the brightest candle loved that line

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 6 . Apr 9, 2019

You had me cracking up laughing in this chapter.

You are a very good writer, so to heck with your dyslexia. Yes, I've seen mistakes but who cares? The story is great!

report review for abuseAPotterPersona chapter 6 . Feb 1, 2019

"She's not the brightest candle wick is she?"

Spectacular x'D

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 6 . Nov 21, 2018

hahahahaha I'm dead. actually dead and writing this as a ghost. "she stunned herself" hahahaha

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 6 . Oct 17, 2018

I keep wondering if Harry will offer safety for the Malfoys? Just an idea that got stuck in my mind. I know that this is complete so I will just have to find out lol.

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 6 . Jul 17, 2018

Love your Harry

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 6 . Jun 15, 2018

Hopefully it will help and allow for stronger citizens once removed from Hogwarts. Great chapter!

report review for abuseElspeth7 chapter 6 . Jun 12, 2018

I would love to attend your Professor Harry's DADA class. You make them sound so interesting (and original too).

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 6 . May 22, 2018

Pretty great chapter.

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 6 . May 15, 2018

Loved the smackdown of Umbridge. Narcissa's anger at Voldemort came as a bit of a surprise; it's kind of a shock that he let her live.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 6 . May 9, 2018

The conversation with Amelia Bones was a lot of back-and-forth dialogue. I'm not a huge fan of such an uninterrupted format.

I wonder if Umbridge is going to be permanently on the back foot. It seems unlikely, unless Harry can pull something off that would get her kicked out for good. I do like how he's using force of personality and political capital to just bowl over her objections, but it would seem unrealistic if she never tries to one-up him.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 6 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

I continue to enjoy your in depth explanation of Harry's lessons. They also work well as filler when not much else of note happens in the story, but pretend i didn't say that :p

Also, i'm glad Harry got Bones on board with his plan. Shame that she had to die in canon, but she was probably blocked from doing her job properly by Fudge anyways :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 6 . Apr 26, 2018

I am enjoying this very much! Thank you! I searched for finished tales and there was this one. Lucky me.

report review for abusePyryp chapter 6 . Apr 23, 2018

I think the way Harry is constantly using future knowledge for shock and awe is starting to detract from the story.

report review for abuseKagey98 chapter 6 . Apr 11, 2018

Just I case I forget to leave one later, thank you for the story! It's a page Turner!

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 6 . Apr 11, 2018

I just LOVE the way Harry deals with that BITCH!

report review for abuseZasshu Fuhahahahaha chapter 6 . Apr 7, 2018

im not a big fan of your lightning theory fanfic but i gotta admit this fic is great. no over the top bash, no drama queens, i like it there's a lot of light hearted moments too.

report review for abusehdres chapter 6 . Mar 26, 2018

Interesting premise very well written. I am enjoying it immensely. Thank you

report review for abuseGacsam chapter 6 . Mar 2, 2018

I was hoping Dumbles would get up slightly, then sit back down because even he can't be bothered with Umbridge

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 6 . Feb 19, 2018

Homework is scary but really a fine teacher he is.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 6 . Feb 9, 2018

it is nice that the toad got hit with her own stuner

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

I can't see chapter #7.

report review for abusegginsc chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Great story! I love the mature Harry. I have never liked Remus. The only useful thing he did was teach Harry the patronus charm. His self-pitying ways disgust me.

report review for abuseArion Spartan chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

I seem to be having a problem, will not show me chapter 7. Any advice on how to fix this is very welcome.

report review for abuseSeanHicks4 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Interesting take on a time travel fic. One of the more original ways around the being in 2 places at once issue, I'm used to seeing the future memories in the younger body or the two staying separate. Looking forward to seeing some more. Especially since I see but can't access 7 chapters at the moment.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

YAY! Teddy is just adorable id be with them oohing!

report review for abuseAutumngold chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Thank you for your excellent updates! I love that that Harry was able to prove to his students that Umbridge is a fool. Hopefully soon they will be writing to their parents about her horrible actions. Now I just hope that Harry's actions will save Amelia's life. Wonderful new chapters!

report review for abusegrim001us chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Just wanted to tell you that you are doing a incredible job on this fic, It's well written and the chapter's are coming out at a amazing pace. I'm thoroughly enjoying this and I can't wait to see where it's going

report review for chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

I SIRIUSLY LOVE THIS STORY! I ship Harry and Tonks so hard!

report review for abuseBadAttitude chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

great, i love it, please keep posting

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuseboban094 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Hey, did you just pull down the 7th chapter? I read it about 30 min. ago, and now I cannot open it, but it still says in the story that there are 7 chapters.

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Great chapter once again. I appreciate the time you are spending on this story. But take care of yourself too. We are grateful for anything you write-go outside and get some fresh air! Thanks for the story.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

good chapter i enjoyed the daily updates but also realize that it wouldnt last forever just please keep updating the story at any pace you can

report review for abuseThatCrazyBrit94 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

I would like you to please post longer chapters so instead or two a day of with 1000 words maybe once a day with 3000 words?

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Awesome story, looking forward to more!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Good chapter and fun class time. I liked the interaction between Bones and Harry. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseCPHIL chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Hey Love this Story

but we Need more Teddy and tonks scenes

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Thanks for updating! I think it would be great to continue to include the Honks storyline :)

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

great work harry seems really awesome teacher

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseConcrete63 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Great idea thank you for the story I am really enjoying reading it.

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Ha this is good. You did a lot of updates. I'm hoping you update again soon.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Even though i loved the fact that you update frequently, as long as you don't abandon this story, I'd be happy with even a chapter per month, or even every other month. The premise is just too unique and good for me, I've never read one where Harry is so dedicated to both Teddy and Andy, while also being a time-travel fic.

Looking forward for the next one, and hope that whatever it is that is making you depressed, gets better, someone with your hand for writing deserves better. Best of luck.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Thank you so much for the updates, very well done.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Teddy hit the nail on the head...the whole class Harry taught was on Mirror shields and he can do one wandlessly so why would she even attempt to throw a stunner at him? Though what really does surprise me is the fact that she was out as long as she was since it was her spell and we all know that her magic is probably weaker than diluted Booze in a cheap bar lol. I'm glad Amelia will be safe even if she's doing it only for Susan's sake.

report review for abusenibashmangang chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Keep up!

report review for abuseSakura Lisel chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Harry should have called out Amelia on her INSULT to him when she called HIM a 'child'. Especially since he's NOT a 'child' anymore since he replaced the kid version of himself in the time stream. *lol* At his current age, how much older is SHE compared to HIM right now, that she still has the nerve to call him a 'child'? *lol*

report review for abuse00 Non C. Anon 00 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

What Harry has done up until now is good. He's approaching this from a don't put your eggs in one basket and bottom-up perspective, which I think is the absolute BEST and MOST EFFECTIVE method he could build upon here. He is arming those who will be in danger, making sure that the normies can at least defend themselves from the basics should the fighting spill into the streets. While that probably only translates into an optimistic 1-in-3(but more likely 1-in-7 or 8) people that won't drop useless to the ground... it's a lot more than they had last time.

More importantly, however, he's getting people to actually THINK. Neville is a prime example of this in chapter two, when he notes that the other adults in their lives haven't ever put the kids interests first. The transfer of other students to his class could be interpreted as this as well, though the majority probably just want to be in the "cool professor"'s class. Seeing more of this would be absolutely heart-warming to me, because that is the truest, most dangerous kind of human being: one who can think. You need only look at Jordan B. Peterson(A professor at the University of Toronto in Canada) and the political reaction to him for proof of this.

His talk with Ron and Hermione was went about as I expected it to. Ron is angry(and understandably so) and I could see Ron holding onto his grudge for a while, then apologize and try to act like nothing happened(book four with the goblet incident). I don't see that working however, with the more grown-up Harry. Their friendship is shot, and the most I can see is an eventual politeness between them once Ron has grown up a bit.

Hermione though... She seemed more thoughtful. I can see her stewing for a few days, not wanting to admit that her best friend is gone, before she goes to him. They'll probably talk things over and come to an understanding. Point is, they'll probably be be on polite terms far sooner(and more authentically) than Harry and Ron will. A sort of mentor-mentee relationship might even emerge from it... if you were to take it that way...

As for Harry's next moves... Hmm... You've created a very unusual situation in terms of Voldemort and the wizarding world recognizing that Harry is from the future. Normally the idea would be to not change too much, so that Voldemort remains predictable and the foreknowledge of what happened during the war remains relevant. However... I'm not certain how much that applies anymore. It certainly applies in some degree... but Harry is among for - I assume - a quick and brutal victory. It's hard to say what his next move should be, tactically(other than the elimination of Horcruxes). Might be cool to lodge a request to get the sword back so that he has it to deal with the Horcruxes.

I think a scene with Harry and Tonks might be in order, having her asking about what Teddy's life has been like up to now(maybe somewhere that others won't overhear?). It might work as a nice jumping off point from which to lunch their romance. Though, a slow build-up would probably be better than "lets have sex because you're my baby's-daddy/mama."

Annnyywwaaayyyy... that's a long enough essay for now, I think. I'm curious to see how the story and (more interesting to me) the characters develop. Update when you can.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 6 . Jan 29, 2018

Too bad they can't get rid of Umbitch.

odonnellzoo99 chapter 7 . Jun 8

Still thinking this is very good.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 7 . Apr 10, 2019

Poor Harry and Andy I'm glad ted is there for both of them

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 7 . Nov 21, 2018

This chapter hurt. I could feel the sorrow and pain and what-if's. What a great look into their minds and how they feel about returning.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 7 . Oct 22, 2018

Love your story. Can't help but wonder how it would have turned out if Harry and Andromeda had occasionally scratched the other's itch back in the future, now that Ted is there. Could have been interesting.

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 7 . Sep 6, 2018

whoaaa... beautiful chapter. okay so in the first present, tonks dies... I got it. you're definitely not lacking literary talent, author!

report review for abusehdres chapter 7 . Aug 11, 2018

Tried to leave you a review on the last chapter to tell you how much I am enjoying this story but it wouldn't post. I particularly like the classes and the interactions with Umbridge.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 7 . Jun 15, 2018

Poor Harry, but at least he didn't have to make this trip on his own, he has Teddy and Andromeda to help him. Great chapter!

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 7 . May 22, 2018

Excellent chapter.

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 7 . May 15, 2018

Poor Andy and HP, love the story

report review for abuseBiblio388 chapter 7 . May 11, 2018

Short but potent. Solid glimpse of the cost.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 7 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

So we see the cost of going back in time.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 7 . Apr 17, 2018

Good to show the costs to Harry, without things devolving into general angst. Solid chapter.

report review for abuseCavelenare chapter 7 . Apr 2, 2018

Really loving this story so far! Glad I found this after a dry spell of reading horribly written stories one after the other.

report review for abuseSindhuja chapter 7 . Feb 20, 2018

very insightful!

report review for abuseHobbyfarmer chapter 7 . Feb 20, 2018

I am impressed with this story. your character creation is excellent.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 7 . Feb 19, 2018

Black farmer, a mad farmer capable of making famine his bitch and growing wheat in the darkest of caces on bare stone. Truly a fearsome profession.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 7 . Feb 9, 2018

it is nice that Andromeda has Ted to be there for her

report review for abuseJunie chapter 7 . Jan 31, 2018

Such a great story can not wait to see what happens next

report review for abuseGuest chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

more very good love this

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

You really should be proud of yourself, this story is just lovely. I really like how you've brought in the perspectives of both Narcissa and Ted in a way that only adds to the overall story. Continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abuseEp chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Excellent Bonne continuation

Merci pour la lecture .

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Harry suffering from PTSD makes sense. Nobody just bounces back from experiencing the horrors of his life.

report review for abuseBeth5572 chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

I would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too. Keep up your great work of art.

Thank you and Please,

Terri

report review for abuseGuest chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Another great chapter with lots more insight. You bring up the dark side of a previous life-the mind still remembers the horrors. Night terrors, PSTD. Your handling of these problems is factual without drawing out the sympathy. Harry just has to deal with it. Thanks for another great chapter.

report review for abusePlanemo chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Wasnt just this one, couple other of my alerts gave the 15 minute page but they seem to have fixed themselves

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Thank you so much for the update. Wise man that Ted Tonks.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abusemrpietan chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

Well done. And I look forward to reading more

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 7 . Jan 30, 2018

good chapter cant wait for tonks in the next one

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Fantastic couple of chapters, keep up the stellar work!

report review for abuseLinda chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Really really love this story,and hope to read more soon.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Looks like Andromeda will be the mother figure Harry never had.

report review for abuseSeanHicks4 chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

A bit disappointed in the size of it when I finally got the chapter to load, still looking good though.

report review for abusechibi-Clar chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

AWWW

I LOVE the Ted and Andromeda scene :)

Thanks for the update! Totally loving the story and Professor Harry ~!

report review for abuseCharles Ceaser chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Awesome chapter. Please update soon.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Wonderful Chapter!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Thanks for sharing this chapter!

report review for abuse0rangew0lf chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

Sweet moment

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 7 . Jan 29, 2018

meh I don't mind the short chapter i read it the same time as the last one, so I loved the last chapter and this one was great to give us more of an insight on harry, great work as always, you are becoming one of my favorite authors here

noylj chapter 8 . Oct 26, 2019

A choice between a heroic hunk or a man almost as old as your dad? Hard choice?

So, Andromeda is now about seven years older then Ted remembers her

report review for abuseFyrebird85 chapter 8 . Aug 29, 2019

I love Harry and Hedwig flying together! And the visual I got of him changing back was awesome.

report review for abuseCarolWim chapter 8 . Aug 1, 2019

What a great story. Great job and masterfully done. Thank you so much.

report review for abuseSoupercan chapter 8 . Jun 30, 2019

Remus is being a bloody idiot. The only time he's not complaining that Harry made Teddy think he's a monster is when he's busy complaining that he's a monster!

He's so wrapped up in his own self-loathing that he's ruining everything just the way he expects it to be.

Which, well, is regrettably accurate for a guy who's badly depressed.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 8 . Apr 10, 2019

Great chapter I loved the Hedwig part

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 8 . Apr 9, 2019

I feel bad for Remus and I always liked him but yes, he isn't truly thinking about Teddy, he is only feeling sorry for himself.

report review for abuseSeriouslySirius4ever chapter 8 . Mar 5, 2019

I actually love Remus as a character but he is his own worst enemy, he really does need to get over himself and see that he is more than just a werewolf. He holds back from everyone for fear of being hurt and rejected. I don't see someone like Tonks, young, bubbly, enthusiastic, putting up with remus' self pity for long.

You are doing a great job with the character development. None of your characters are too ooc.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 8 . Nov 21, 2018

I'm so mad at Remus! he never wanted kids, takes off every time something changes and blames it on him being a werewolf and it not being safe. why be angry at Harry for "stealing" the son Remus never wanted to have in the first place? gah! poor Dora, to have to deal with everything and try to wrap her head around being a mother to a child she didn't know if she wanted or would even have. I don't envy her

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 8 . Oct 17, 2018

I liked Remus in the books but hated him in the movies.

report review for abuseHeksy chapter 8 . Oct 12, 2018

Remus is an idiot.

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 8 . Sep 6, 2018

I have mental health issues... but it's okay. I have faith.

report review for abuseEEKtheCat chapter 8 . Jul 31, 2018

Your writing is great! Really am loving this story. I'm not gonna be one of those people that writes to you trying to point out grammatical errors bc I would hate reading those reviews too and I don't think it matters when the substance is there and it IS and it's great and I'm enjoying it:

AND... If I were feeling alone and depressed and found out that something I was doing was helping people who also felt alone and depressed, as I do often, too, I think I would feel a little bit better, and I hope that your readers are giving you feedback that makes you realize that you are making us happy, and that you matter very much to us! Thank you for writing! If it weren't for talented writers like yourself my life would be very empty indeed.

report review for abusedarickb chapter 8 . Jul 27, 2018

Not at all cheesy. I love this chapter because it is so well done and captures the emotions of these moments. Really great work! Cheers!

report review for abuseMillie072 chapter 8 . Jul 12, 2018

Remus is a lovable person, but he's also a moral coward. Not contacting Harry while he was growing up, saying little to nothing about his relationship with the elder Potters during his teaching year, and being ready to run out on Tonks when he first found out she was pregnant are not the traits of a oral person. How he ever managed to actually marry Tonks is a mystery. Risking himself physically meant nothing, but committing emotionally? Strongest thing he ever did was make Harry Teddy's godfather. "Disorder" is getting better with each chapter.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 8 . Jun 15, 2018

Poor Dora, and Remus is really down in the dumps. Hopefully, Sirius can give him a quick kick in the butt and get him moving. Great chapter!

report review for abuseElspeth7 chapter 8 . Jun 12, 2018

I'm so relieved that Remus wasn't made to be the villain. Damaged, yes. Weak, maybe. But not the bad guy.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 8 . May 22, 2018

Excellent chapter .

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 8 . May 15, 2018

HP has some serious PTSD issue but that isnt surprising, I never liked Remus so no loss

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 8 . May 15, 2018

This was a great chapter, and I think your characterization of Remus is perfect. It's a bit unforgiving, but this is definitely the way things could (or probably should) have turned out in canon. Remus needed someone to save him, someone who was full of life and optimism, because he was unwilling to do it for himself. That only worked in canon because JKR forced it to happen. In a more realistic scenario, he would have felt unworthy of Tonks and constantly sabotaged their relationship with his self-loathing and stubbornness. Tonks would have been deeply unhappy with him.

Great job.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 8 . May 9, 2018

I think you handled Remus and Dora very reasonably here.

It sounds like Teddy is a werewolf. I hope I'm misreading that, because it's a real pet peeve of mine, but eh, I'll deal with it if it's true.

report review for abusesmudge914 chapter 8 . May 4, 2018

Your remus is a real sad sack. I agree with you however.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 8 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

I can't remember if there were indications that Remus and Dora were in a relationship all the way back in OotP. There had to have been a connection for it to grow during the last two books, but i feel it would make more sense if they started becoming romantically evolved after the death of Sirius. This, however, is your story, so you are allowed to change it to better suit the narrative.

Personally, i think there is some truth to Remus words when he says he is too old. Perhaps not in body, but the mind ages by adversity. When Remus finished Hogwarts he had been a werewolf longer than he had not, and that was before the potion that makes the transformation easier to bare. What i'm trying to say is that many of the HP characters are broken people, but i don't think Dora would ever be enough to fix Remus.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 8 . Apr 27, 2018

Good story. I don't object to Remus's self-loathing as I do to Harry's seeming indifference to Hermione and Ron. (as I mentioned in an earlier review.) But all in all a good story.

report review for abusePyryp chapter 8 . Apr 23, 2018

I think your characterization is solid but something about the dialogue feels off every now and then. I realize saying this is not very helpful since I can't point out what it is exactly. You already write better than me so I can't identify it further than saying there's something.

report review for abuseMPPC chapter 8 . Apr 17, 2018

This really worked - the character and relationship changes are making sense. Thanks

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 8 . Apr 17, 2018

Never was a fan of Remus and how he behaved in the books. That Harry & Hedwig flying scene was awesome.

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 8 . Apr 13, 2018

I completely agree. Remus never wanted to be a father because of his fear. He tried to run and I don't know if he would have stayed if he'd survived. The only reason Tonks was with him is because he never expected her to change for him but that was because he never expected her to be there or to stay, not because he was non judgmental. He just had such low self esteem that he had no expectations. Probably why he never checked on Harry because he really believed he could only make things worse which is a total cop out.

report review for abuseAriadne Venegas chapter 8 . Mar 25, 2018

Ithink is good but I think That Harry needs a talk wiith his former teenager friends. They will suffer, they needs to know things to avoid, like marrying each other, change for the better, and Hermione was there for Harry during that hunting and all that horrible timeand was tortured I think she deserves better because that awesome woman is in there, even if she was lost for the war and trying to forget everything with Ron who didn't was for her.

I know they will not understand or be friends now but he needs to talk to her at least.

report review for abuseChi Vayne chapter 8 . Mar 21, 2018

There is a lot of fanfiction that is very kind to Remus. But in canon he completely ignored Harry until he got a job teaching at Hogwarts. Very strange for someone who was such close friends with his parents.

report review for abuseAnagennisi chapter 8 . Mar 18, 2018

"... Hedwig landed on his shoulder proudly, giving his students the most arrogant self-satisfied look any avian had ever accomplished.

When it came to friends, no one could ever replace your familiar..."

YOU'RE GOD-****ED RIGHT! Hedwig being a beast. That right there is known as a flawless victory.

report review for abuseMeaningless Us3rname chapter 8 . Feb 27, 2018

I agree that Remus is a flawed character. What bothers me most is how much I can actually see him just running away. If the was never happened or if both he and Dora survived, there is no doubt in my mind that he would have abandoned them

report review for abuseHobbyfarmer chapter 8 . Feb 20, 2018

A lot of people like Remus. I particularly do not. I think it is because JKR never gave a good reason for him not to see Harry or introduce himself in third year. You did a good job with the break up

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 8 . Feb 19, 2018

Wise words. As one who suffers i must agree with them. All the people may wish to help but do i really want them to? Do i want the pity i see in tgeir eyes? Do i want to change and am i willing to struggle constantly for it? Always important questions

report review for abusejkarr chapter 8 . Feb 9, 2018

Remus is an big jerk

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 8 . Feb 6, 2018

Wanted to let you know that it's a great story

Felt like you devoted great time to it

Plz update soon

Sorry for short reviews as I am currently on phone

report review for abuseteachergirl chapter 8 . Feb 3, 2018

I always thought that Remus was a good teacher but a horrible man. He didn't fight for Harry at all. He literally ran away. When he had the opportunity to be Harry's DADA teacher, he still did nothing to develop the relationship. He did in the movie but not in the book. Then in book seven, he did the same thing when Dora got pregnant; he ran away. I never liked Remus and Dora together. It made no sense to me how this beautiful, fun loving, young woman would tie to herself to an old geezer like Remus. It's not the age difference but the attitude that makes Remus too old for her.

report review for abuseNanettez chapter 8 . Feb 2, 2018

It sounds as if Teddy is a werewolf. I will probably find out soon.

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 8 . Feb 1, 2018

Did you add chapters 6&7 after you posted this? Maybe I somehow skipped them. But they seemed new anyway loving this story

report review for abuseIrishNewton chapter 8 . Feb 1, 2018

Love your story! Can't wait for more!

report review for abuseflyster chapter 8 . Feb 1, 2018

For now, i'll follow, because i love the pairing, and you are doing several things right, BUT:

You are making harry TOO perfect; too perfect of a teacher, father and man (as in, to the ladies).

Having night terrors, it's not a fault, it's an affliction.

So far, short of making Harry a little depressed, and plagued by his demons, Harry Potter is perfect.

Perfection is boring, don't ya think?

report review for abuseIgnotus Uchiha chapter 8 . Feb 1, 2018

Great story. I'm already enjoying it better then the first one. Though the paring probably has a lot to do with it... :) Loving the quick updates the most to be honest. Looking forward to the next one !

report review for abuseKingPlotBunny chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

chapter was good I feel the Nymph and Remus scene was pretty realistic I mean this is the guy who ran at the first sign of a pregnancy and only wanted to help Harry so he didn't have to be a father coming face to face with the future Teddy before he's even gotten his ass in gear with even having a relationship with Tonks would probably end any chance I would suggest maybe trying to bring in Tonks's trademark humor into this a bit she's one of the funniest characters in the series though that might be later down the road after everyone has mellowed a bit this is one of the best time travel fics I've read normally i'm not a fan of them but this one has caught my attention

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

For this story you absolutely made the right decision regarding Remus and Dora. He has to find his own path to a relationship with both Harry and Teddy, but only if he's willing to work his issues out first and come to them without his negativity and self-hatred still attached. And honestly, there's no way Dora would completely be happy in a relationship with someone her mother, who she loves and respects, wants to throttle and kick out a window.

I'm also genuinely loving the view the students have of Harry. His straight focus on wanting them to be better students, and in the end survive, wonderfully ignores all the lines and boundaries that the other teachers have both consciously and unconsciously tripped into regarding their students.

Really enjoying where you've gone with the story so far, continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abuseGuest chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I think i just found a new favorite fanfiction.

Loving the fresh take on timetravel and cute little teddy.

Hope remus gets finished with his whining or just stops appearing

Hope to see updates fast!

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I like the Dora and Harry matching.

report review for abuseAutumnSouls chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Well, this is quite wonderful. Really, I feel like I've read most good fics, but then this one came out of nowhere and it's fantastic. I love how you've characterized Harry, Teddy, and Andy. Harry & Teddy are so damn adorable. I can totally understand why girls act the way the way they do here. Hopefully it'll stay good. As of now, the Harry/Tonks romance hasn't exactly started yet, but hopefully you can pull it off. What you have so far is great.

report review for abuseFulminanz chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Now that were some nice first 8 chapters. I'm really looking forward to finishing this fic. Outstanding writing!

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

I'm not surprised Remus took that route; after all, he was completely OK with abandoning Tonks when she was pregnant 'for her sake', and it was a stern talking from Harry that made him stay.

report review for abuseMcGonagall25 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I have read a bit of this story and I just can't get into it. Remus isn't that bad at all and they really loved each other. Plus I can't see Harry with Tonks and Remus did love Teddy. He was just worried that he would be a werewolf. Remus isn't as bad as you make him out to be. He would have been a good father. Good luck with your story.

report review for abuseAutumngold chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Thank you for your fabulous new chapters! I find it so sad that Remus is sad that his son doesn't acknowledge him, but at the same time acknowledges he never wanted him. I hope that Tonks doesn't take her anger at Remus out on Harry. Hopefully, in some way, Fawkes will be punished for the pain Harry and Teddy have went through. Wonderful updates! Can't wait to see what will happen next!

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

To be honest I can see Remus doing this shit due to many reasons among which he has no positive self image and most likely did not want a child if the way he was ready to run off with Harry so soon after Teddy was born was any indication. Sure one could say he is a good man but to me I see nothing but a coward.

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

This is great. I found this fic by chance and I sure am enjoying it! Update please.

report review for abusegginsc chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Good riddance to Remus' relationship with Dora! She deserves better than that self-pitying git!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Another great chapter. What a tapestry you've woven. This story is the first one I look for every day. The characters are well written, believable, with humanity. Keep up the great work please.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

great work harry would be good for dora and visversa

report review for abuseAnton2805 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Hello, can I translate your fanfic on Russian language?

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Thank you so much for the update.

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I personally think your Remus interpretation is spot on, just enough self loathing and pride, and you get what happens here. I think it's all and greatly possible he would self destruct with little to no reason if presented with a scenario like this. Keep up the excellent work!

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

So Harry's right. Voldy won't wait. Also he should let sirius in on what going on. So that once the Lestranges' are dead and that should be soon as well, to reclaim the items of Bellatrix. Then get that one from the vault. Awaiting more.

report review for abuseMari Wollsch chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

super great, hope you will update soon xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

LOVE the direction you are heading! I hope harry doesn't get hurt trying to get the horcruxes! Thanks for updating :)

report review for abuseGuest chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Solid! Keep going I want to see how this plays out now lol...

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I think Dora and Remus' break up is better for them because Remus flew a firts time when she was pregnant and he doesn't really want to have a child.

Remus is not a bad person but he has his own problems to struggle and he can't be a family man.

So it's safer for Dora if she leaves him and maybe she can be attract to Harry later

report review for abuseNauze chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

My only complaint is that the chapter isn't longer, but with this update rate, I really don't care. Great chapter, but I'm expecting more outbursts from Harry, and i want to see a confrontation with Remus and Harry. Also, if possible, some fluff with Teddy and Dora. See you next time.

report review for abusejslee102 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I never understood Remus' character. It seems crazy that they even had this conversation. I thought didn't even date until 6th year. I remember Molly commiserating with her at the beginning of the book. Of course, she will get together with Harry and he will on Harry as well.

report review for abuseAuspicious Orangutan chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

I may not be in a completly sober state of mind, but this story is really enjoyable. Love the characters and plot! Noticed a few small spelling errors and maybe one or two grammer flubs through out story. Overall a great story in my book.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait to read more!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Remus's pity party was never a wonderful think. Thanks for sharing!

report review for chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

SO MUCH LOVE! I love this story and i love you for writing this story!

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

It'll be interesting to see if Remus realizes he made a mistake and tries to reconnect with Dora. I'm curious to see how Sirius will handle Remus.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Remus already turned his back on Dora when she was pregnant and only went back to her because of some harsh words from Harry. I don't understand why he is so belligerent against Harry and accusing him of stealing his son. He just told Dora he does not want children and doesn't want a child with her so why is he even fighting the fact that Harry blood adopted Teddy? For him supposedly being the most intelligent if the Mauraders in par with Lily he definitely isn't showing that intelligence now. He is acting like a spoiled little boy that doesn't want the toy but doesn't want anyone else to have the toy either.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

good chapter cant wait for the next one

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 8 . Jan 31, 2018

Your take on Remus is very similar to my own, with him so down on his own curse that he would never want children. He was too scared to ever visit Harry as a child and he's a coward now.

Chuni Luni chapter 9 . May 16

oooo I like this version with Teddy!

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 9 . Feb 26

i adore Teddy!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . Feb 14

I don't agree that Lily would be disgusted by Harry's decision.

Under the circumstances, there were no other options for the Malfoys.

However, Harry could have given them a bit more comforts than they have but boredom doesn't hurt and they can always ask Dobby, politely, to convey their request for books and better lighting. Dobby might even consider it if they ask politely enough.

It would definitely serve them right for Harry to grant them muggle books...about magic and science fiction.

report review for abuseEdTheBeast chapter 9 . Oct 24, 2019

Excellent changes to the story line! But I agree with Harry, get rid of the Horcruxes first!

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 9 . Apr 10, 2019

Awesome chapter

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 9 . Nov 21, 2018

I love Wolf Teddy! I'm writing a Harmony raises Teddy fic and doing a similar thing. Teddy's a wolf but with a twist. love it!

report review for abuseHarriverse chapter 9 . Nov 16, 2018

Remus dropping Dora, practically expected, especiallysince he is a werewolf.

As for surprising us, you are doing it constantly! Intelligent characters, great plot, interesting premis! And no Ron and Hermione to hold an intelligent and mature Harry back? Priceless.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . Oct 22, 2018

Incredibly natural progression so far. Very well done. It's interesting to see your Narcissa and Lucius actually loving each other - I believe that's the first time I've seen that.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 9 . Oct 17, 2018

OMG baby wolfie! I'm so excited for this story!

report review for abusePadfoot'smyMan chapter 9 . Sep 7, 2018

Ew! The mental image of Lucius and Narcissa. As with James and Lily, it is like walking in on your parents. Even if they are young.

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 9 . Sep 6, 2018

beautifully innotated. I think it's shudder not shutter but not criticising.

report review for abuseStayBlessed chapter 9 . Jul 18, 2018

So hard on Remus, yet soft on Lucius. Only thing I disliked about this fic. I'm sure Lucius has done plenty of messed up things. He did not deserve happiness, in my opinion.

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 9 . Jul 18, 2018

Cute!

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 9 . Jun 15, 2018

I'm not overly surprised, there had been a few clues here and there to get to that conclusion. Great chapter!

report review for abuseMaster of Energy chapter 9 . Jun 1, 2018

teddy as a wolf pup in harrys arms? that takes cuteness to a whole new level

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 9 . May 22, 2018

I'm glad they broke up great chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 9 . May 15, 2018

heh looking forward to HP & Dora

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 9 . May 15, 2018

Wow...Malfoy trying to physically remove the Dark Mark is impressive. Does that actually work though, or is the mark purely physical?

report review for abuseBiblio388 chapter 9 . May 11, 2018

Interesting way to handle the Malfoys. Curious where that may lead. Really like the scenes in the woods.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 9 . May 9, 2018

Why on Earth would Neville jump to the conclusion that Harry killed his parents?

So Regulus is still alive? That's an interesting choice. It's an odd combination of contrived setup for a fix-fic and contrived extra suffering on top of canon.

Harry thinks Dumbledore will torture the Malfoys? I'd have to disagree, but it's not completely far-fetched.

Ooh, Narcissa is smart. I didn't even notice that Harry gave away that Severus is a spy.

I'm still not a fan of werewolf Teddy, but this worked out nicely. For one thing, he isn't technically a werewolf, and for good reason, too.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 9 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Happy with how you handled the Malfoy's... Really, Lucius should know better after having released Slytherin's monster on Hogwarts only three years earlier :p

Interesting that you had a curse be the reason for the Malfoy's only having a single child though... I figured having only one child wasn't so unusual among half and purebloods and that the Weasley's were the exception to the rule. Then again... Massive inbreeding could lead to birth defects, so perhaps Draco was the only one that looked human enough to keep? (Shivers)

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 9 . Apr 17, 2018

It is a little hard for me to connect a Lucius Malfoy who seems to have even a shred of humanity to the character from the books, but I do like the development.

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 9 . Apr 13, 2018

Awesome, I was worried, but it's a blessing instead of a curse.

report review for abuseironhair chapter 9 . Apr 7, 2018

Wow! You really have written a very good story, the characters and each scene is livable in the sense that I can actually imagine it happening and making sense in this story universe.

Thank you.

report review for abusebadknight chapter 9 . Mar 10, 2018

Shuttered- supposed to be shuddered :D

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . Feb 22, 2018

Wonderful story so far. Like the relationship that has been build between Andy, Harry and Terry. Almost wants me to see Harry paired with Andy.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 9 . Feb 19, 2018

That was nice.

report review for abuseArgentRoseSableWolf chapter 9 . Feb 17, 2018

So Lucius gets off scot-free from all his crimes just because he loves his family? The man who set a weapon of mass destruction loose on the students of Hogwarts? I'm having a hard time seeing that as anything other than total BS.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 9 . Feb 9, 2018

It is nice that Teddy is going to be okay

report review for abuseJediRaptor chapter 9 . Feb 6, 2018

Wow, this is really, really good! Can't wait for the next installment!

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 9 . Feb 6, 2018

Nice going

Still think bit too hard in remus

Dora could have fallen to Harry some other wat

report review for abuseAnimeA55Kicker chapter 9 . Feb 5, 2018

I like the fic. It feels fresh.

report review for abuseChAzZeR75 chapter 9 . Feb 5, 2018

I didn't know what to expect when I clicked this. All I know is that I love it! Keep up the great work!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . Feb 4, 2018

I didn't think that I would like this very much but I decided to give it a read anyway but holy fuck am I excited for this next chapter! This is so interesting I love the concept I've never herd/though/ red anything like this before! It's so good please update soon!

report review for abuseOscarDragon chapter 9 . Feb 3, 2018

This is a good story, it goes a bit too fast but otherwise it's good.

report review for abusemrpietan chapter 9 . Feb 3, 2018

Good chapter

report review for abuseB53 chapter 9 . Feb 3, 2018

I love the story so far. Keep up the good work.

report review for abuseteachergirl chapter 9 . Feb 3, 2018

I'm enjoying your story very much. Will you be writing more interactions between Harry and Ron and Hermione? I'd like to see Ron and Hermione come to some understanding that the Harry they knew is truly gone. It seems like right now they think that Harry is the same person. But Harry has lived a life they can't understand. Ron and Hermione need to move on. They keep calling him Harry and not Professor. Harry needs to push back harder!

report review for abuseDouggernaut chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Cool story! Will follow.

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

some interesting twists...

eagerly awaiting to see how things will go from here :)

report review for abuseThe Dark Dragen chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Nice work mate, can't wait to see what you have planned next...

report review for abuseEP chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

EXCELLENT

report review for abuseGuest chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Excellent chapter. My favorite kind-explaining the steps Harry is taking to change the course of the war. Logical steps, executed perfectly. Compassion shown to Neville was awesome, I'm glad you explained the logistics. Augusta will have to change her approach to everything. Neville getting two weeks off school to spend with them is such a kind thing to do.

The Malfoy situation probably took Harry by surprise but was handled well. No escape, no shelter or funding for Riddle, Dobby as prison guard. A possible new baby, male or otherwise? Draco under the protection of his godfather (with the parents aware that Snape is on the right side). Harry will fix the portrait screaming thing (Mrs. Black as an ally?), and has already disabled much of Kreacher's ability to sabotage the good guys.

Gringotts, the disabled Horcrux ready to go back to Hogwarts, Teddy's adoption papers. Hmm. Harry must have worked something out with them. "Issue with with bankers" is such a Harry way to describe an unbelievable situation. Of course you did foreshadow this in the last conversation with Tonks and Remus. Again, great writing and such attention to detail. Thanks for spending your free time on this.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Dobby as a prison guard for Malfoys? That's just perfect.

It'll be ironic if Narcissa ends up pregnant because Harry imprisoned them.

report review for abusejslee102 chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

The Malfoy thing was just precious. Really enjoying the story.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Thank you so much for the update.

report review for abuseChloe457 chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

The promise of more Malfoy involvement in the plot! YAAAAAS

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

great work can't wait to see what happens next

report review for abuseObscureScryptic chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Lucius and Naecissa...I don't neeed it and I don't want that mental image...however Draco being a sibiling sounds intriguing. Overall good story :)

report review for abuseCharles Ceaser chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Awesome chapter. Please update soon.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

death Eater Lucius is an arrogant tosses but this Lucius is almost human. He obviously lives his family very much, enough to almost cut his arm off and risk scarring to rid himself if the Dark Lords leash. Granted they aren't in luxury like at their manor but they now have a chance for more children...as long as they stay down in the dungeons probably for the full pregnancy. Keeping Draco safe will be the problem and keeping the Malfoy wealth out if Voldemort's hands. I can so see Dumbledore using Lucius and or Draco as bait for reel in Voldemort irregardless of the fact that it's pretty much a death sentence, because really does it really matter they are only Slytherins and are of no real consequence after all. Love the chapter.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Great chapter, looking forward to more!

report review for abuseCaddi chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Yay, thanks for updating!

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

Thanks for updating! I love the ending part about the spirit wolf. So sweet! Can't wait for more!

report review for abusesamics chapter 9 . Feb 2, 2018

The first 8 chapters have been almost perfect, this one had some issues though. Like missing words, misspelled words and broken grammar in a few places. Perhaps go over it once again.

report review for abusegeetac chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

This was nice

report review for abusesobrat chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

not updating fast enough? your the fastest ive seen in awhile.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

good chapter please update again soon

report review for abuseProf. Pendragon chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Excellent chapter and nice use of Teddy's condition as positive. Thank you for adding to your story!

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Awesome update. The Malfoy's curse was a good touch. Keep up the good work!

report review for abuseAutumnSouls chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Another great chapter. Nevilles reactions were great and realistic. I'll be looking forward to more.

report review for abusegginsc chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

I am so glad Teddy isn't like a werewolf like Remus or Greyback! It is great that he is aware and can transform at will.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Good chapter and a bit surprising that the Malfoys have skipped out on Tom. Nice family ending and thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Well, Moldy ain't gonna be happy when he finds out about the cup, LOL.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 9 . Feb 1, 2018

dude! great story so far, though i understand the why with the malfoys but i hope that they become somewhat close

WildlingMama2012 chapter 10 . Jul 31

I kind of don't like you lol you are a great writer and I'm not ashamed to admit that I've had more than a few tears. thank you for sharing your story

report review for abuseSenseo chapter 10 . Nov 21, 2019

Really cool story but he was massively unfair and too strict to those first year students. Giving them that preach should have been enough for them to understand the seriousness of what could have gone wrong. Maybe a few days of detentions too.

They're eleven years old for heaven's sake. Taking a hundred points and giving 3 WEEKS of detentions? What the hell? As an eleven year old first year missing 3 weeks of evenings is devestating. Missing all of that time with their new friends/learning/having fun and playing as 11 year olds.

Now I realise this was probably written without much thougt behind it but I felt the need to point it out. Either way this story is really good.

report review for abuseNarutosBrat chapter 10 . Aug 12, 2019

Honestly, I think after hearing everything that Petunia and Dudley will change for the better. Vernon, I think his fate will end up being exactly the same.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 10 . Apr 10, 2019

Harry and Sirius. Father and son. That was heart warming made me cry

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 10 . Apr 9, 2019

It was great! I loved that you told what happened to them, lol! And honestly, I do hope for Petunia's and Dudley's sake that things do change for the better.

report review for abusebrady meece chapter 10 . Jan 21, 2019

now thats a shouthing match i would pay to see Vernon and Sirius

report review for abuseArtisticRae chapter 10 . Dec 16, 2018

I'm not really clear why he gave them money to buy a new house. i can see why he would warn them that without him living there anymore the wards would fall and that they are going to need to relocate, but it's not really on him to provide them alternative housing.

report review for abuselksjdhf chapter 10 . Dec 12, 2018

I'm about to die. My dying words? 'Hey, you.' 'Yes?' 'I'm bouta die, yknow.' 'What?' 'Anyway, you should read the Disorder of the Pheonix, it's a great fanfiction.' 'Wait, ma'am?'*beeeeeeeeeeep* 'NOOOOOOO. I DONT KNOW WHAT WENSITE IT WA OOOOOON.' *comes back* ' , by jacobapples' *beeeeeeeeeeep*

'Oh, okay. Hey, someone died over here.'

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 10 . Nov 21, 2018

I'm so glad Sirius gave the Dursley's a piece of his mind! they needed that tongue lashing!

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 10 . Oct 17, 2018

That was cathartic and a proper good bye.

report review for abusetammgrogan chapter 10 . Sep 20, 2018

Hello, I wanted to let you know how much I am REALLY enjoying this Amazing story. I have laughed and fryer while reading it. It really is a great story. Thank you so much for sharing it with all of us. Take care. Tammgrogan

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 10 . Sep 6, 2018

my fav fav fav chapter thus far. bookmark! and u are wonderfully persistent.

report review for abuseMillie072 chapter 10 . Jul 12, 2018

The Dursleys were let off far too easily; with the personality Harry has, it wasn't unexpected. There are hopes Petunia & Dudley can turn their lives around, but Vernon is beyond hope. Excellent chapter.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 10 . Jun 15, 2018

The obstacle course sounds really cool. I'm glad Harry was able to get some closure with the dursleys. Great chapter!

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 10 . May 22, 2018

Pretty fantastic chapter

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 10 . May 15, 2018

Fantastic chapter with the Dursleys; Harry's little speech was devastating. It might even have gotten through to Petunia and Dudley.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 10 . May 9, 2018

"No-maj" sounds so dorky. (I mean, objectively "Muggle" probably does too, but I'm used to it.) But hey, props for having Harry adopt an American speech pattern.

Wow, you've actually captured the comedy Rowling was going for with the Dursleys. There was a certain understated humor to Harry and Dudley calmly eating while the other just screamed at each other. It really fit with canon. (And it's nice that this is after Dudley started to realize Harry had some redeeming qualities.)

It's sort of funny that Vernon does have a point about the chores being helpful.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 10 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

I think telling the Dursley's what to expect is too kind for them, but i guess it fits Harry's character so there is that. The canon goodbye seems almost forced in comparison (at least the one in the movie), and i actually wish Harry would have screamed at them, proving that he isn't as two-dimensional as Dumbledore made him... Proving that there is some part of him that still remains whole.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 10 . Apr 27, 2018

That visit is shocking af. Great chapter.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 10 . Apr 27, 2018

I love the visit to the Dursleys, and that Harry gives them a way to escape Privet Drive and the coming war.

report review for abusePyryp chapter 10 . Apr 23, 2018

The Dursleys visit did nothing for the story and wasn't very interesting.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 10 . Apr 17, 2018

That was pretty intense. I think Harry could have been a bit kinder to Dudley, given that I'm not sure anybody could have been a good person with how his parents acted, but it's not like Harry was mean to him either, so well played. The bit at the end with Sirius was perfect.

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 10 . Apr 13, 2018

I'm glad he got to tell them what they are. It probably won't change much, but maybe Dudley gets a clue. He seemed to be starting to after the dementors and maybe hearing his future will make a difference.

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 10 . Apr 11, 2018

I think the Dursley's deserved much more than just a little visit! A little hex, maybe?

report review for abuseironhair chapter 10 . Apr 7, 2018

Nice dinner, thank you for writing and sharing your work with us.

report review for abusejmsdragn chapter 10 . Mar 28, 2018

I know the story is marked finished, that being said you need to go over it and beta it. You constantly have sentences with missing words, or you spelled a word wrong, the one you constantly miss spell is rot or rotting, you keep using root or rooting.

That being said I am enjoying reading this.

report review for abuseAnne chapter 10 . Mar 11, 2018

It was excellent.

report review for abuseMeaningless Us3rname chapter 10 . Feb 27, 2018

Narcissia as a screamer just cracks me up. Especially because she would probably say it is unladylike

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 10 . Feb 19, 2018

That was very good. I gotta say giving the characters free reign makes more sense than forcing their personalities into archetypes and prenade forced actions.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 10 . Feb 9, 2018

this is a nice update

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 10 . Feb 8, 2018

Wow,wow,wow. Just please, after this chapter, do whatever you can to appease your muse into keeping Sirius alive. Awesome chapter, continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 10 . Feb 8, 2018

some unexpected twists...

hopefully Harry will finally start to heal...

looking forward to reading more :)

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I hope Harry can save Sirius that time.

report review for abusebookworm737 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I really like what you have posted so far!

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Thank you for updating! I liked how you handled Harry's emotions at the end of the chapter.

report review for abuseKasumiKeiko chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

This is a great fic, keep it up.

report review for abuselilly-flower15 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Great chapter update soon

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

nice very nice

report review for abusegginsc chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I don't think I would have bothered saving their lives.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusegalbatorix1 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I think it was an exilent choice to bring in the Dursleys. I think you should put Dudley back in to the story later when the war is over. He's not a bad bloke.

report review for abuseGreen Lammergeier chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I'm not much of a reviewer, but I wanted to say that I'm really enjoying this story. I especially like your Remus, a character whose negative qualities I've always thought outweighed the positive ones. I look forward to the next installment.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Excellent chapter, can't wait to read more!

report review for abusejdrussom66 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I Liked the visit to the dursleys

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

This story is awesome. I love it. Please keep writing.

report review for abuseEmeraldGuardian7 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Just found this story and I have to say I am loving it! The only thing I've sort of not liked was how he treated Ron and Hermione. I totally understand that they aren't really friends in the future any more and they shouldn't have to be friends now, but as far they know, they were the best of friends just the day before. I think Harry handled them properly in class but after the fact, he seemed a bit too cold for me. As an adult, I think he should have had the empathy to at least explain to them better that their friendship hadnt survived into the future and that things wouldn't be the same anymore. He should have at least been mature enough as to not have been so dismissive. They deserved that much I think. Anyway, like I said, that was the only thing that bugged me, but it wasn't even that big of a deal.

I'm really excited to see more of Tonks. I hope you add her in more soon. Anyway, keep up the great work and please update again soon!

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Thank you for the update, the visit to the Dursleys were perfect, in my eyes a necessity for the flow of the story I didn't knew it needed before you submitted it. Very well done.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

It's a good thing because Harry ha spoken freely and openy with Dursley: he said all he needed to say and that he could'nt said the first time. It's a good thing too that Sirius was with him and I hope Sirius will be more mature this time.

report review for abusejslee102 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

That was quite a reunion with the dursleys. I am disappointed in Dudley's future as I felt he was coming around. I know it is an AU, but he should have been at his own boarding school by that point, shouldnt he?

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Wonderful chapter! Very poignant.

report review for abusexrysatsan chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

LOVE IT!

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

good chapter please update again soon

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I'm sure that Harry has had his retribution for the Dursleys. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseTarix chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Nice story,but would love more Harry and Tonks.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Good choice, closed a few doors. I'm glad Harry expressed how much he needs Sirius.

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Please update more. The main thing is, I'm sorta disappointed with your treatment of the Dursleys. I would have wanted to torture the shit out of them. But oh well. The story's still good. I'm waiting for more.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Nice chapter, hope Dudley and Petunia changes for the best. Vernon can go fuck himself. quite unexpected emotional scene with Sirius, but i enjoyed that.

Looking forward to the next one.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I absolutely LOVE what you did with the dursley confrontation. It was a real breath of fresh air having a mature harry just giving them a verbal dressing down. So many time travel fics have an older harry still acting like , but you manage to really nail the characterization of a mature and responsible harry. Keep up the good work, eagerly awaiting the next chapter

report review for abuseAnimeA55Kicker chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Harry and Sirius bro-ing it out this chapter. Nice.

And Harry dealt with the Dursleys in the most mature and badass way possible. Well done. Though you have gone a bit off canon for Dudley who does get his act together in the end right?

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I think the visit was goid for Harry. It closed that chapter in his life. Revenge feels good while doing it but in the long run it does nothing but causes things to ferment and this after realizing that you ended up falling down to their level. This way he may never forgive, he most definitely will never forget but by giving them money to move away it's now up to them to leave and protect themselves, he can now be shot of them. The whole problem is that their protection should never have fallen to Harry. If Dumbledore had followed the Potters will the Dursley would never have needed protection because know one would know of them. But then if Dumbledore hadn't if did all the manipulating and screwing people over for his personal Greater Goid there would be a lot more magical people and creatures alive eh? More please!

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

I think Petunia and Vernon should have been chucked into Azkaban for what they did to Harry. Looking forward to seeing some Harry and Dora time.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 10 . Feb 7, 2018

Awaiting more.

Specky Clarke chapter 11 . Jun 22

I am enjoying this story. You should use ROTTING instead of ROOTING.

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 11 . Feb 26

I love the way you described Tonks

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 11 . Apr 10, 2019

Voldmort is a monster

report review for abuseMystiYew chapter 11 . Feb 13, 2019

In the future, its probably better to just put newspaper titles in bold, especially if they're long. It's just a tad obnoxious if it's a whole paragraph in capitals.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 11 . Jan 1, 2019

I noticed this several times so far but the word is rotting not rooting. Rooting means to dig in the dirt while rotting means to decay.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 11 . Nov 21, 2018

what an adorable afternoon "date" scene. loved every second of it and the last scene with Voldemort was brilliant!

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 11 . Oct 17, 2018

Dun dun dun evil music in the background .

report review for abusePadfoot'smyMan chapter 11 . Sep 7, 2018

Why did you have to kill Griselda Marchbanks? I liked her character during the O.W.L.s. Exam.

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 11 . Sep 6, 2018

I didn't read CC... my liaison with JKR stops with the HP series. it's Surrey not Surry for the last paragraph of the previous chapter which inspired me the most.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 11 . Jun 15, 2018

Well, that will be a little hard to frame. Especially as it sounds like he spent that time with Amelia, head of the magical law enforcement, kingsley, an auror, and Tonks, another auror. Great chapter!

report review for abuseSomeoneWithTasteDoA chapter 11 . May 28, 2018

Good god, it's ROTTING not ROOTING.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 11 . May 22, 2018

Pretty great chapter.

10/10

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 11 . May 15, 2018

Nice chapter, but why is he having a relaxing weekend when he should be chasing down all the horcruxes? He's already said how urgent it is to capture them.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 11 . May 9, 2018

I completely agree with your assessment of Cursed Child.

Harry's never really struck me as a suit person, but I guess people change as the grow up.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 11 . Apr 28, 2018

Hi.

Looks like things are progressing nicely between Harry and Dora. Makes me wonder if Dora will insist on going to other museums for future dates just so she can draw some inspiration from the art displayed there :p

Also, how did Voldemort know that Harry would be away over the weekend? It's actually quite smart to try and frame him, but this would be the first weekend he spends away from Hogwarts. So the question that needs to be asked is who does he get the information from?

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 11 . Apr 17, 2018

Speaking of Luna, Harry hasn't done anything yet to address her bullying issue. Don't even recall him talking to Flitwick about it. So... fix that :) Luna is too awesome to be bullied.

report review for abusemooneysfate chapter 11 . Apr 15, 2018

really loving this story, thank you for writing it and sharing it! :)

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 11 . Apr 4, 2018

A lot of interaction described rather than displayed. I would have liked to have seen some of the conversations between Harry and DOra, and some of the antics a the card table. Don't skip over rebuilding of the relationships.

Still enjoying the story.

report review for abusehpfan111 chapter 11 . Apr 3, 2018

Even though the story seems to be good along with a completely new idea, it is a bit slow-paced... definitely not for the action or thrill lovers

report review for abuseimagelesssky chapter 11 . Feb 24, 2018

"wonderful little hurricane of energy and personalitya great way to describe Nymphadora

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 11 . Feb 23, 2018

I really like that Harry defends Nymphadora's name to her and refuses to call her Tonks.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 11 . Feb 19, 2018

Ah voldie at his old tricks.

report review for abuseBlackravens5 chapter 11 . Feb 11, 2018

I LOVE THIS STORY, it just gets better and better.

report review for abuseTheViperJono chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Excellent story. You've got me hooked!

Please don't keep me in suspense.

When is the next chapter being posted?

report review for abusejkarr chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

it is nice that Harry and Dora had fun

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Lol what the mysterious time traveller that spent his weekends with two Aurors and the head of the DMLE lol. I'm rather sad he killed if Griselda but it would throw the education dept in a panic. I guess if you want to believe a toad that wants to bring torture back into the schools to align with the government over the children who are finally learning something then to each their own. Somehow I have a feeling that it's all going to come back and bite both the Toad and Voldemort in the arse if they continue pushing Harry.

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

oh my... things will not be easy...

hopefully Harry will be ok :)

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

this is a great story and well written minus a few grammar errors. look forward to reading more

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

tonks and harry are so cute together great work

report review for abusegginsc chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Of course the wizards will blame Harry. They always do. I would leave their stupid arses to rot!

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

really nice date and lovely!

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Thank you so much for the update.

report review for abusexrysatsan chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Love it

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Oh yes, nice update.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Thanks for updating! I love how you are writing about harry and Dora noticing each other's emotions and being conscious of the way they act! (For example when does is thinking about the way Harry treats her, and how she knows not to push him to tell stories but to instead let them spill out naturally). It makes the pairing special and real!

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Good chapter, I enjoyed the humor. Harry is just too cool.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Harry and Tonks as a couple is a plus!

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

i liked the harry/tonks bit

report review for abuseCharles Ceaser chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Awesome chapter. Please update soon.

report review for abuseEmeraldGuardian7 chapter 11 . Feb 9, 2018

Another good chapter, even if very short. I really enjoyed the Harry and Tonks bonding time, it hope for a lot more of that future. I still think they need more development before they get in a relationship though. It was a good start. While the ending was good, I do hope you won't go through the whole drama of the entire Wizarding World turning on him. I feel like that happens all the time in stories as well as in canon and it gets a bit old. I'm sure you'll handle it well though. Keep up the great work and please update again soon.

report review for chapter 11 . Feb 8, 2018

at the end. Developers need to improve this app

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 11 . Feb 8, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for chapter 11 . Feb 8, 2018

and another useless author who writes a powerful Harry Potter story but Handicaps him so that he winds up a wuss and at the the author pulls a JKR to let Harry win. trash bin for this story

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 11 . Feb 8, 2018

Nice bit of fluff for Harry and Nym. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 11 . Feb 8, 2018

Awaiting more.

abhinavvemuri123 chapter 12 . Jul 10

Ha! I am a Hyderabadi Chai is heaven

report review for abuseodonnellzoo99 chapter 12 . Jun 8

With this much time left, what is AD's pride going to cause him to do to make both Harry and Snape want to string him up by his beard? I'm still really enjoying this.

report review for abusenoylj chapter 12 . Oct 27, 2019

Albus has to die if wizarding UK is ever to improve

report review for abuseAnanya chapter 12 . Sep 6, 2019

Yesssss!

So glad to finally see a ffn author whose at least actually been to my country

Loooove the story lins

report review for abuseM2J MandalorianJedi chapter 12 . Jun 27, 2019

Your Harry and Severus remind me of Goku and Frieza in Dragon Ball Super. They hate each other, but are also capable of working in perfect synch with each other when necessary.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 12 . Apr 10, 2019

Yes!

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 12 . Nov 21, 2018

I'm loving the flow of the story and your pacing. your writing style is an absolute pleasure to read

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 12 . Oct 17, 2018

Ooh excellent chapter ! I love how you portrayed the dynamic between Harry, Severus and Dumbledore.

report review for abuseVampireking40 chapter 12 . Sep 19, 2018

I would say Harry should have whispered to Snape that if you survive this War I will take you to the snake.

report review for abusePadfoot'smyMan chapter 12 . Sep 7, 2018

Can you please kill that twit Umbitch. You've killed off minor characters that I like, why can't you kill off an evil bitch?

report review for abuseGuest chapter 12 . Aug 7, 2018

I like your powerful Harry, your parent oriented sirius and your mentor/partner oriented severus. Even though I dislike your view on Albus, Remus, the Weaslies and Hermione, I have to say that this is a hell of a story

report review for abuseSimianpower chapter 12 . Jun 26, 2018

Why the hell do you insist on ruining your stories by telling your readers in the middle how they'll end? What kind of idiot does that? Not once, but over and over. Are you the type of person who reads the last chapter of each book first so that you are never surprised? Goddamn it! I was enjoying this story until your fucking author's note.

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 12 . Jun 15, 2018

I kinda wish Harry had let Dumbledore become cursed by the ring, but you can't just kill annoying people. Great chapter!

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 12 . May 23, 2018

Pretty awesome chapter

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 12 . May 9, 2018

Again with the continuous back-and-forth dialogue without any breaks. Bleh.

We know Albus can break through the wards at the Gaunt shack because he's done it before. I don't have a problem with Harry being really good at that kind of magic, but being way better feels like a bit of a stretch.

report review for abuseamsev chapter 12 . May 3, 2018

I don't want to spoiler this awesome story, but I have to say the following, and it also arises from my thoughts about canon, but, Albus is a dink and Remus is a derp. Thank you so much for writing thiwsw story!

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 12 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Makes sense that Harry is too different to connect with Ron and Hermione. I do wonder if they will end up getting together, but i feel that neither of them have the propper mindset to work well together for any longer periods of time.

I'm also glad for the distance Harry is keeping to Dumbledore, as well as his apparent like-mindedness with Severus. Both have been used a lot by the Headmaster, so i can certainly see how that would make them see eye to eye :)

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 12 . Apr 13, 2018

Thanks for the note. Why do people want death in their fiction? Don't they get enough in their lives?

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 12 . Mar 29, 2018

I just wanted to tell you that I really like your story and if people are complaining about errors, I cannot see why. Maybe a beta went over this story before I found it though.

Anyway, I just saw your A/N on the next chapter and wanted to say ignore them, this story is very good.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 12 . Feb 20, 2018

How amusing. I think ill be more interested in events post voldie death me thinks.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 12 . Feb 17, 2018

Somehow Harry might mistakenly still like Dumbledore but if Harry ever finds out that he is responsible for Teddy being kidnaped or even scratched Dumbledore will go down even faster than Voldemort. I still think that Ron and Hermione aren't missing the teenaged friend so much as Hermione see a fount if knowledge and wants to know it all and Ron is Ron being a side kick to the famous Harry Potter whether he is fourteen or twenty four Ron and what's important to him comes first. Remus never showed yo in Harry's life until Harry was thirteen years old before he was fourteen he left again not to be seen till he was what sixteen and then he left his pregnant wife to run around and protect Harry...and now he is upset with Harry because he won't walk away from the son he has raised for the last decade?

report review for abusehogwartsfan1 chapter 12 . Feb 14, 2018

I really enjoy your story. I wait patiently for your next chapter.

report review for abuseDreous44 chapter 12 . Feb 13, 2018

Great story so far. Looking forward to the update.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Good chapter and interesting that both Nym and Ron/Hermione have a better understanding of the new Harry. Fun ending with Snape and Harry's attitude towards Albus.

report review for abuseRed's Melancholy chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

I wasn't to sure on this story at first but I quickly came to like it! Great job! Can't wait for the next update

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Great chapter!

report review for abusemakkak chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Great story so far, thx for writing :)

report review for abuseEP chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

EXCELLENT

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Very well written story and the plot is unique and superb... Love it totally... Eagerly waiting for your next update

Yours devoted fan

report review for abusexrysatsan chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Love this fanfiction! Great job! 3

report review for abuselonewolf420 chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Really like the story so far. Only complaint is poor moony but sadly most if not all of it is definitely in his character. But he really did grow up and pull his head out his ass before he died, even if we only got two small clips of this in his interview on Potter watch, and when he was brought back with the stone. So I really hope that not only does he redeem himself, but I truly hope he at least gets the godfather or favorite uncle roll.

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

interesting twists...

can't wait for your next chapter :)

report review for abuseThe Last Rising Of The Phoenix chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Excellent!

report review for abusestevefocus chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

This is a really great story, can't wait for the next update.

report review for abusegginsc chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

Good job! I love Harry being so mature. I still would kill Fawkes!

report review for abuseEMReader81 chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

I do have to say that for sheer ingenuity and thinking outside the box Harry and Severus on the same team make a deadly, for the other side, combo. And wow at the sulking of Albus with his 'he's not so great definitely not better than me' pout regarding Harry. Another lovely chapter, continued good luck and energy with your writing

report review for abusesamics chapter 12 . Feb 12, 2018

I wish more recent stories were as well written as this one. Seriously, the plot and writing are both going strong, apart from a few writing mistakes occasionally.

And greetings from India!

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Nice Update

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Great chapter, thanks for the quick update. keep am coming

report review for abusejkarr chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

it is nice that Harry is willing and able to keep his family safe

report review for abuseCatGirl04 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

If Albus does anything to get Teddy hurt, Harry will kill him.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

can't wait to see how he beats voldy and how him and nym get together great work

report review for abuseBMS chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Found this just a bit ago and couldn't stop reading.

Excellent Story, that Fawkes' motive seems to be wholly for selfish reasons is a nice twist. I especially like the family dynamic between Harry, Teddy and Andromeda.

Looking forward to more

report review for abuseGreen Lammergeier chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Great chapter. I especially enjoyed the conversation with Ron and Hermione. I'm glad you avoided the facile bashing reasons that are so typical and went with a much more adult and believable reason for their falling out.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseM chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

This story is wonderful. The plot is very interesting and original (which is significant, considering how many time travel fics there are!), and the characters feel real. However, please, I beg you, please, get a beta or an editor, to look over spelling/grammar and random missing words. Please...

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Harry has the tendency to be a dick which for most people is a bit extreme. But this is a very well written story

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Good chapter I rather like the bond that Tonks and her son are developing same with the one between Harry and Tonks. Also I rather like how Sererus and Harry get each other.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuseNanettez chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

"This coming summer, you hit him with the killing curse to save Draco's life"

Albus got cursed the summer after fifth year but it was the next summer(after sixth year) that Snape killed him.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

good chapter i hope you can at least get harry on speaking terms with Hermione

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

It'll be interesting to see how the last battle with Tom plays out.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 12 . Feb 11, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

odonnellzoo99 chapter 13 . Jun 8

That seems fast, but we'll chalk it up to Harry being much more interested than he was letting on, so when she broke down his walls he was a goner.

report review for abuseMeadhbh31415 chapter 13 . May 2

Well, finally!

I hope you are still reading the reviews. Thank you for this story.

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 13 . Feb 26

fluff fluff fluff

report review for abuseGuest chapter 13 . Jun 25, 2019

I really like this Andromeda. She is a fun character to read.

keep up the great work

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 13 . Apr 10, 2019

Andy is Awesome

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 13 . Nov 21, 2018

oh man I know exactly how Harry feels about Andromeda pushing for more grandkids. I have 1 child and my mom is always after me to "hurry up and have more."

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 13 . Oct 17, 2018

Sweeeet!

report review for abuseBroweyesandhair chapter 13 . Jun 15, 2018

Aw this was so sweet! Great chapter!

report review for abuseCarolWim chapter 13 . Jun 1, 2018

Great story so far.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 13 . May 23, 2018

Pretty awesome and cute chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 13 . May 15, 2018

i like fluff, fluff is warm like puppies plus they are adorable together and Andy is a hoot

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 13 . May 9, 2018

Again, I THINK 7 is a bit too old if you want Teddy not to be washing himself yet. Although I guess he's capable of it, he just refused to finish up, so I'll just put it down to Harry spoiling him a little.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 13 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Nice character bonding chapter :) Not sure about magic monopoly, but i'd definitely cheat at the regular one... One game would take days if i didn't :p

We also get to see Harry and Dora's relationship moving ahead... The bathing scene was cute, and i like the dynamic so far :)

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 13 . Apr 17, 2018

Andromeda is hilarious!

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 13 . Apr 4, 2018

Nice showing the growing closer, both the good and the bad. Thanks.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 13 . Mar 1, 2018

I know you wanted harry and tons to get together but it shouldn't have happened at the expense of Remus. You have completely destroyed the character by colouring him with your bias.

report review for abuseClearhorse chapter 13 . Feb 26, 2018

Finally!now the build up of the relation peaks!

report review for abuseSilentProwler chapter 13 . Feb 23, 2018

bah, who needs perfection? I think this story is very well constructed. Its drastically better then anything I could write and I dont even have dyslexia to deal with! And yes, I love the story so far, and hope to see it to its completion

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 13 . Feb 22, 2018

Very nice fic. Happy to have discovered it.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 13 . Feb 20, 2018

Cuuuuuuuuute~~!

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 13 . Feb 18, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abusePlot Bunnies chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

Just yes. So much yes to this story.

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

My only problem with this story is the general fact I love longer chapters!

This story really surprised me and I'm glad I found. You're focusing a lot on the characters and making everyone/everything both realistic as well as enjoyable to read. I've laughed and smiled a lot reading this so thanks.

report review for abuseDylantheRabbit chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

From one unreasonably busy, depressive, amateur writer with completion issues to another I just wanted to tell you how awesome this story is.

A truly fantastic piece of story telling.

DtR xx.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

Love it!

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

I really enjoy this story :) even if I wanna strangle Harry 1/2 the time

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

It was a wonderful chapter! My son always hated to get his hair washed too.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

A rather quiet Halloween for Harry so far.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 13 . Feb 17, 2018

And no Halloween problems! In fact, acknowledged relationships, which is a fantastic thing! Keep up the amazing work!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

I read lots of HP fanfic. This is one of the best. Carry on.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseBMS chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

lol

Nice one

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

Fun chapter and the bathroom scene was hilarious. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

good chapter finally some HONKS! cant wait for the next chapter

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

great work needed that chapter they grow closer all the time but harry is sorta hard headed huh

report review for abusejkarr chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

it is nice that Dora is getting picked on her mom

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

Sirius would've said "Finally", also, LOL.

report review for abusemoomoogoat chapter 13 . Feb 16, 2018

Plot over pairing. I understand you want him with Tonks, but you are forcing it.

SiriusOrionBitch chapter 14 . Jun 4

2nd time I've read this story and I'd like to put a midway comment in on how much I love it! Great characterisation throughout and a well paced 'realistic' story! Well done!

report review for abuseAnneScriblerianAO3 chapter 14 . Feb 7

Great chapter! I think your take on Remus is fair and realistic. He would be so damaged from losing all of his friends and being treated as a pariah for so long. No way he was be all sunshinerainbows at this point

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 14 . Jan 20

Lucy got off easy, pity Cissy loves him.

report review for abuseJ flood chapter 14 . Dec 20, 2019

the ending of this chapter made me laugh well done

report review for abuseM2J MandalorianJedi chapter 14 . Jun 27, 2019

It never gets old seeing Narcissa's reaction to hearing about Harry's 2nd Year. In one fic, she was even seriously considerign divorcing him over it. While I don't see that happening in this fic, I can imagine for a while that Lucius might be wishing for Azkaban.

report review for abusehalo4hire chapter 14 . May 3, 2019

I loved the end bit with the pissed off black

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 14 . Apr 10, 2019

Awesome Harry

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 14 . Nov 21, 2018

I really liked the conversation between Harry and Remus it definitely shed some light on their growing dynamic.

report review for abuseHarriverse chapter 14 . Nov 16, 2018

I like the dynamics between all your characters. After 14 years of fanfiction, I have only the expectation of a good story-the more creative, the better. The thought of Lucius loving, and being afraid, of his wife, is hilarious. I did think he would be more political and cooperative with Harry.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 14 . Oct 17, 2018

Go Cissy!

report review for abuseSixFtWookie chapter 14 . Oct 4, 2018

Its about time Lucy's running away turned from sex vacation to something closer to prison. Looking forward to more class room scenes, they're great.

report review for abuseBaberKhan chapter 14 . Sep 27, 2018

The whole drama is totally unfair when it comes to Remus. Harry's almost doing to Remus and Teddy what he blames Dumbledore for doing to him. And nobody even sees the cruelty of it!

report review for abusetamkikitam chapter 14 . Sep 6, 2018

June m?

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report review for abuserowenasheir chapter 14 . Aug 11, 2018

he he and narcissa was the baby so she had Andy and Bella as examples!

report review for abuseEEKtheCat chapter 14 . Jul 31, 2018

I LOVE how you have the Malfoys living in a complete and total "Fuck It, We're In Prison, So Let's Fuck" Prison! Waiting for that pregnancy btw... PLEASE LET IT BE A GIRL THAT IS AWESOME AND FEISTY AND NOT A STICK UP HER BUTT LIKE HER FATHER?! Please?!

Really digging this story! I look forward to reading ALL of your projects, really! So glad I found your collection! :-)

report review for abuseSimianpower chapter 14 . Jun 26, 2018

This is all fluffy-happy-relationshipy... but I feel like you're forgetting that there actually is a war to be fought. This is all about reconciliations and comeuppances, and that's almost all there is to the story so far. It's good. But it needs more. It needs to at least acknowledge that bad shit is going down and nobody's doing much about it.

report review for abuseslytherinsal chapter 14 . Jun 24, 2018

I love the idea of lucius being totally whipped by Cissy

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 14 . May 23, 2018

Fantastic chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 14 . May 15, 2018

heh I always like Cissy, great as always

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 14 . May 15, 2018

Very nice chapter; it's good to see Remus pull his head ever-so-slightly out of his ass. He really is in a tough position, having lost something he never had, and yet knowing his biological son exists.

It's nice to see what's up with the Malfoys, although it seems like Lucius is getting off way too easy, no pun intended.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 14 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Well, i'd say a slap is a good beginning to the punishment Lucius deserves... I wonder if Narcissa will request separate beds after this :p

I'm also glad the situation with Remus is on the fix. As Sirius would say, he is a good person who have had bad things happen to him a lot. Teddy was probably Rowling's apology for how bad she treated him in the books, so i'm happy he's getting a new chance here :)

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 14 . Apr 27, 2018

Heavenly for 9 hours.

report review for abusePyryp chapter 14 . Apr 23, 2018

Excessive fluff is starting to get to me. It feels like I'm reading a slice of life fic, rather than something with a narrative structure working towards a goal. Now if that is your intent I suppose I can't fault you for it.

report review for abuseSeriouslySirius4ever chapter 14 . Apr 18, 2018

This is a great story and I'm glad Remus is coming around, I always liked his character, though I was never really fond of the rl/nt pairing. I loved the scene with Narcissa at the end of the chapter.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 14 . Apr 17, 2018

A lot happened this chapter. Very well written!

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 14 . Apr 13, 2018

Lol, Lucius was soooo stupid to set that thing loose on the school his son, the child of NARCISSA BLACK was attending. Like Darwin awards level of stupid.

report review for abuseScabbers1957 chapter 14 . Apr 11, 2018

Ol Lucius, right about now, might just be considering a full on snogfest with a Dementor is preferable to staying locked up with a pissed off Narcissa.

:))

report review for abuseCavelenare chapter 14 . Apr 2, 2018

Still enjoying this! You do have a number of spelling mistakes/wrong word usage. A beta reader would probably help you catch those.

report review for abusenoylj chapter 14 . Apr 1, 2018

Lucy and the wife of a murdering rapist should at least have a few well selected books to read and a TV that only plays the Hallmark channel.

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 14 . Mar 30, 2018

Good chapter, a LOT got accomplished in this chapter. I am glad that Remus and Harry have come to an understanding.

I also loved the end bit where Lucius got into a bit of trouble.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 14 . Mar 28, 2018

Dementors had nothing on Narcissa eh?

Well perhaps it isn't azkaban, but Lucius is locked in that room with his very angry and scary wife for the next little bit. BWAHAHAHA

report review for abuseC Dumbledore chapter 14 . Mar 28, 2018

Again, I am thoroughly enjoying this. I especially like Harry's more mature interactions with the rest of the characters. My favorite is probably the handling of Dumbledore. This Harry seems to still understand Dumbledore's role and to even like and respect him - but not trust and not allow to control the situation. Well done.

report review for abusethechickenlittle chapter 14 . Mar 27, 2018

this is so much fun to read and i can't wait to read the rest! !

report review for abuseBookmeister999 chapter 14 . Mar 24, 2018

Go Narcissa! Please give Lucius the scolding of a lifetime. :)

report review for abuseChi Vayne chapter 14 . Mar 21, 2018

Nice to see Harry set Lucius straight. Lucius didn't change his beliefs after all, just tried to save himself and his family.

report review for abuseAnne chapter 14 . Mar 12, 2018

This continues to be a great story. Very well written with wonderful characters.

report review for abusequaff chapter 14 . Mar 11, 2018

This is a truly enjoyable read. Ty.

report review for abusebadknight chapter 14 . Mar 11, 2018

LMAO! Love the Black Sisters!

report review for abuseimagelesssky chapter 14 . Feb 26, 2018

"energetic menace to societybecause chocolate knows" and Harry taking Lucius down a few pegs

report review for abusejeffs87 chapter 14 . Feb 24, 2018

Loved that last bit with Narcussa getting pissed off about the Chamber.

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 14 . Feb 22, 2018

Nice. Hope to read one with Harry Narcissa pairing as well.

report review for abuseLazyAgain chapter 14 . Feb 21, 2018

Forgot to mention Remus. He is the one person that I think could die and Harry not implode. Factually he should die, in some heroic way. Maybe saving Harry so then Harry can go on to save everyone. Why? Because he needs a noble death to forgive himself and for Little Teddy to forgive him. Right now in his first life he died on Teddy while not being a good husband to his Mum. He also had been terrible to the person he sees as Dad. Then the second time around he was nasty to him, to the person he sees as Daddy and broke his Mommy's heart.

Even when he grows it will just build bigger rifts between Teddy and his biological father. But if he died a noble death saving his Mommy or daddy he can also look back fondly. See his father in his first life as dying for him and for a better world. The second time around dying for him, someone he loves and a better time around.

That is the best Remus can hope for and I think for the type of person he is would be happy in that death.

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 14 . Feb 20, 2018

Ive always been rather sad about bellatrix. Her actress was kinda hot. Though her descriptions in the books made her hotter. Crazier than a pissed off honey badger but still hot.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 14 . Feb 19, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abuseMike chapter 14 . Feb 19, 2018

I really like the story so far. There's not enough good Harry/Tonks or Harry/Fleur stories. Your storyline is interesting and your character development is great compared to most of the stories on this site. The only complaint I have is your sentence structure needs work. There are words and punctuation missing in places, and I find myself sometimes reading a sentence three or four times to make sense of it. Other than that I really like the story and i can't wait to read more.

report review for abusefaymay chapter 14 . Feb 19, 2018

I'm so hooked... loved it! thanks...

report review for abuseWaka Metalbelly chapter 14 . Feb 19, 2018

To quote the great Freddie Mercury, I want it all and I want it now.

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 14 . Feb 19, 2018

Loving this fic. Harry is believable and kind, and Teddy is the greatest little kid. I'm also enjoying the slow burn romance, aside from subdued Nym being a little OOC, but she does have a good reason to be. I am amazed that Riddle wouldn't go check on his horcruxes right after hearing about a time-travelling enemy. And what did possess Fawkes to interfere this way? Great read, loved this last chapter.

report review for abuseIrishNewton chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Great chapter can't wait for the next one!

report review for abuseSmokeing chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Very good story thank you for writing it

report review for abuseHP the third chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Awesome chapter!

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Not your best chapter. There are plenty of smaller words missing in sentences which the reader is forced to mentally put in for them to make sense. More than you usually do.

My other issue with the chapter is the emotions expressed here. You started off with Harry seemingly being on the very of total love for Dora even though there's not been a journey to get there. The two had their date and now seem to be almost ready for moving in together. The Remus scene needed a bit of polish but worked although I wasn't a fan of the ending with Harry bringing Remus back to Grimmauld so soon after Remus' treatment of Dora.

However, the dream Sirius had and his breakdown with Amelia was very nicely done and opens up a relationship between them. You've got Amelia being her own woman with a personality very rarely seen with people writing her. I also liked you showing that Narcissa is willing to play ball with Harry while Lucius continues to have his Pure-blood stick up his arse.

report review for abuseastr01 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

A Harry/Tonks fic AND it's actually good? What's not to like!

I am loving the fic so far, keep up the good work!

report review for abuseCormonde chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Man I never review stories but I just read all of this in one go and you know how to write a story that grabs someone's attention. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for more of this

report review for abusermiser1994 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

yay remus harry made up! nice touch with sirius' dream too .

report review for abuseLoTSh chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

This story is wonderful! It's so great to have such an original twist to the 'Harry goes back in time' plot. The writing is clear and captivating, the characters are realistic. I can't wait to see the next chapter! Hope you are well.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

You did a wonderful job carrying the story forward. Did you get Nevell a new wand yet? I can't remember if you had or not. That would make a huge difference in his practical application of spellwork.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseIceman113 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

An enthralling story with several twists I have not seen before. A couple of spelling errors that are probably auto correct or strange spell names but they are easily rectified. Among my favourite stories on this site only despite only being discovered today. Keep it up as I await the next installment with bated breath.

report review for abuseFire Dolphin chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

So I just found this story and I love it! I'm enjoying reading about a more self assured Harry. I'm hoping to see more bonding moments between Sirius, Harry and Teddy.

report review for abusechc91776 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Enjoyed this chapter.. i like the longer chapters they feel more full.

report review for abuseThe-Funeral-Pyre chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

I always enjoy reading this, and finding it has been updated is always a pleasure.

I'm glad that he's decided to work things out a bit with Remus, and I genuinely hope it works out well.

Anyways, thanks for sharing and I greatly look forward to more!

report review for abuseDr1zzy chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Like the way he handled malfoy

report review for abusestevefocus chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Brilliant couple of chapters. Looking forward to the next update.

report review for abuseBundlejumper chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

... yes.

I don't know if I can give you any other reaction. This is both good and great, and I look forward to the next chapter whenever that drops. Not sure if I can give you any actual useful critique.

Some of the interaction between the characters seem a smitch weak, but I attribute that to your writing style more than direction, it never takes anything away from the story just leaves me scratching my head on occassion.

Still great though.

Love the pairing, always have always will. Teddy is amazingly written, as is the relationship between Andromeda and Harry.

Ehhh... I can't think of anything else. So... yeah... keep writing and stay awesome? Something like that.

-BundleJumper

report review for abusedavid davidson chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

I think you've got the characters down quite well. like Remus' flighty nature and his tilt between anger and acceptance at being told painful news and then having a peaceful moment to get his thoughts in order, and reply in a mature way. it's a difficult situation to convey feelings in, i think.

in terms of character development, that's pretty damn good too. the moment when i read tonks' thought of "not in love with harry, but loved him for what he'd done for her child, mother and everyone" i just thought "this guy knows exactly what he's talking about." people don't up and fall in love with other people, but to see the peace and joy someone brings to your family through their own free will? i'd imagine you'd love them for that.

also, if you hadn't mentioned you were dyslexic at the start of this 'fic (which i appreciated) i'd have just assumed you don't have a beta or something. you do very well for your situation.

all in all, this is a great read, and i'm looking forward to your next chapter releases.

thanks for writing.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

this is a nice update

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

dude i am happy that you gave us more interactions with remus...he cant always be a coward...lol anyways great chapter!

report review for abusejslee102 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Great chapter. The Malfoy pieces are hilarious

report review for abuseVukk chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Love the end of the chapter there, especially how the Malfoys love each other so much...

report review for abusepadfootl0ve chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

I love this fic so much

report review for abuseGuest chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

I am loving how you are expanding everyone's character and growing them more than Canon. Keep up the great story.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Good chapter and I'm pleased that Remus at least listened to Harry about Teddy. I thought Remus' reaction to his thoughts of Teddy being a Werewolf were hilarious. Fun ending and thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Yo. ..it's going good. So, Remus is getting redeemed? Uh, can't say I like him too much now. He ain't winning any popularity contests for sure. I liked the touch of Sirius seeing ghosts and having nightmares. You just can't do shit and suffer in a prison known for it's deranged inhabitants and get off Scott free!

Keep up the good work!

report review for abusemythrica chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

yes. This is a lot of fun and I truly enjoy all of it. Must admit the paper rat had me rolling on the floor, while the museum morphs had me giggling. It is interesting to see how Albus is reacting to marginalization by Harry's action.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Beat down time Lucy!

Excellent chapter, Very emotionally charged and full of drama. Sirius's breakdown was heart wrenching. The scene between Harry and Remus (I'm a cowardly, selfish, self- loathing, useless whipped cur) was well done and fit the story. Although personally, I think Teddy is better off w/o the family abandoning S.O.B. in his life.

Looking forward to more.

report review for abusesfu chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

If you write seven year old, you always add hyphens. F.e. seven-year-old. fourty-year-old etc.

Dromeda kill him. - Dromeda 'would' kill him.

have the title of father - have the title of 'a' father

up with two year old with - up with 'a' two-year-old with

report review for abuseep chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

excellent

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

loved the update. nice to see lupin come to his senses. obviously lucius never told narcissa all his plots and secrets. will b interesting to see where u take these characters

report review for abuseBookFan96 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

I bet Lucius is starting to rethink his idea of going to Harry for help. Or at least wishing for separate cells. If Dobby really wants revenge on Lucius, he should start telling Narcissa details of second year and all of Lucius's dirty secrets

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

very well written love the length a lot seemed to start to be resolved at least personally can't wait to see how voldy gets finished though great work

report review for abuseGwendolyn Montrose chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Oh I can just imagine the storm an angry Narcissa Malfoy can unleash on her husband. I nearly cried because I had to hold back the laughter! The chapter was absolutely fantastic.

report review for abuseHome of the Brave chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Great chapter, thanks for the update. I liked the way you confronted Remus in this chapter. I don't think anyone has truly confronted Dora as far as leaving Teddy to go and fight at Hogwarts have they? Yes, Remus attempted to leave her while pregnant and was pretty much reluctant from start to finish of the relationship. But no one has really confronted Dora on the fact that she willingly left her newborn child to go and fight. JK Rowling made it sound romantic that she was willing fight and die next to Remus, but from where I stand. She knew her chances of survival. That says to me that she would rather die with Remus than raise her child. I think that should be addressed at some point.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Man, i love your writting. Add to that the setting and premise, and update rate, it makes this one of my favourite ongoing story. I was glad that you were able to settle somewhat Harry and Remus, both being sttuborn and hot-headed as they are, was a good discussion. I'm wondering when Harry will go after the rest of the Horcruxes, and if he'll ever tell Dumbledore about them and such. Also, how he'll do the cup this time. Looking forward to the next one.

report review for abusesamics chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

2 chapters in as many days, I approve! I like the attention you're paying to character development; but I'd also like to see a little progress on the Voldemort aspect of the story in the next few chapters. Don't get me wrong, I'm enjoying the story as it is, but an update about what Voldemort or Harry is planning on the war aspect of the story would be nice.

A few missing and misspelled words, but otherwise excellent!

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Wonderful chapter. I love it. A good mix of Love/Friendship and Family.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Thanks for the chapter! Update soon!

report review for abuseK1SFD chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Another excellent chapter! Feels a little short, but not really that bad. Glad the 'Remus drama' is settled (or settling at least), and adding the talk with the Malfoys help progress the story a little more. Like I said at the beginning- all in all and excellent chapter! More, more! Lol

K1SFD

report review for abusebookworm737 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

That was 9 hours well spent!

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

That was so nasty and mean Harry but oh so deserved by Lucius lmao! I do admit I like Remus but this Remus not so much he mirrors all the really emo, negatives vibes from canon and Dumbledore is just pushing Ingersol all the buttons to make it worse. More please

report review for abusefree-to-fly-2010 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

sometimes i wish their was a like button for individual chapters it would make reviewing better. so this is my "like".

report review for abusegginsc chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

HA! HA! HA! A slap is the least of what Malfoy deserves.

report review for abuselordamnesia chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

This was a powerhouse of a chapter. Nice feelings with Nymphadora, Resolutions with Remus, Sirius and Amelia having a Serious conversation, finding out that Hangover Cures and the devil, and getting Lucius in trouble with Narcissa! Absolutely one of your strongest chapters yet, it moved everything forward a lot while only covering a few hours. Great job, keep up the excellent work!

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Well, I doubt Narcissa is going to get 'physical' with Lucy anytime soon...unless Lucy wants an arse-kicking...

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 14 . Feb 18, 2018

Excellent chapter, can't wait to read more!

petalssunwards chapter 15 . Feb 26

I love how Harry interacted with Theo and that cave scene, I loved the twist!

report review for abuseJekke604 chapter 15 . Feb 4

I gotta say after reading about 50 000 words from this story I can confirm that you being dyslectic doesn't hinder this at all.

Thx for the story and keep up the good work.

Grts Jekke604

report review for abusemoonprincess97524 chapter 15 . Aug 31, 2019

I must say that if you hadn't told me about your dyslexia I wouldn't have known as most mistakes to me seem like you are in a hurry when typing and or don't dubble check for spelling mistakes which everyone does, you should know that the human brain doesn't read the whole word as it is and as long as the first and last letter are in the correct place that the brain will automatically read the word correctly, colleges have done studies proving this. I really love this wonderful story.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 15 . Apr 10, 2019

Alright they caught the traitor

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 15 . Nov 21, 2018

this chapter was fantastic! I kinda want Harry to take in all the kids... Dad!Potter is the best Potter imho.

report review for abuseBoricuaBookworm chapter 15 . Nov 21, 2018

I do not believe you are dyslexic. That or you have a really good editor you writing is impeccable and I love this story.

report review for abusehdres chapter 15 . Aug 11, 2018

I am really enjoying this story. I always like to see Sirius cleared whilst still alive. Your writing is fluid and the character development is excellent. I keep turning to the next chapter to find out what happens next. Thank you for an amazing read.

report review for abuseEEKtheCat chapter 15 . Jul 31, 2018

You've got me on the edge of my seat with the Regulus Black part... Oooooh, can't wait!

And it almost made me teary, imagining Alan "The Snape" Rickman dead panning (a la Metatron from Dogma), "I'll go get the Veritaserum." At the end of that brilliant exchange of dialogue. You should write movies! They would be great to watch!

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 15 . Jul 18, 2018

Love this story

report review for abuseArei-The Peridot Dragon chapter 15 . Jun 6, 2018

Great story! Still need/want a beta ?

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 15 . May 23, 2018

Awesome chapter

report review for abusezeek17 chapter 15 . May 18, 2018

Small advice - when you write newspaper headlines, use bold style. Use most informative, most eye-catching headliner as main one, write it in caps. Rest of them, while in bold, write with normal letters. That would look way better.

In regards to your dyslexia, it's really not that much of issue. Believe me, there's a whole lot fics with grammar way worse. Does not mean you should stop looking for beta, but it's really not that much of big deal; at least not at this site.

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 15 . May 15, 2018

brilliant , Peter heh

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 15 . May 10, 2018

Huh. I wonder how Voldemort knew enough to capture Regulus but the locket ended up in the same place as canon.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 15 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

So... Is Narcissa going to complain about her privacy being intruded upon now that Nott Sr. is sharing a cell with the Malfoy's? Also, shouldn't it be about time to know if Narcissa and Lucius will be parents a second time?

Other than that, i guess it was nice that Harry caught Peter... He's a slippery one, so hopefully he won't escape this time :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 15 . Apr 11, 2018

I hope THIS will wake up that fool Fudge!

report review for abuseAnne chapter 15 . Mar 12, 2018

Honestly, your typos don't bother me because it is easy to see what word you meant to use.

report review for abusegefan1 chapter 15 . Feb 27, 2018

Please do not end this story, I would like to see what happens with Harry this time after Voldemort is gone

report review for abusejamnaz79 chapter 15 . Feb 25, 2018

Good story so far. Very enjoyable.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 15 . Feb 25, 2018

Did you just remove CH:16 ?

report review for abusesamics chapter 15 . Feb 25, 2018

The 16th chapter really seemed a bit forced, I was reading it when you probably took it down. Fudge's resignation, Umbridge's election and the arrest confrontation came out of nowhere. Shouldn't Harry have been aware of the reelection, being the Lord Potter? And his behaviour in the confrontation didn't match up with the personality you've created for him.

Anyway, looking forward to the edited version, whenever it goes up.

report review for abuseAppoApples chapter 15 . Feb 25, 2018

I had to take down chapter 16 because it wouldn't let me update, for those of you who reviewed Harry did not go to Azkaban. I am not a Dimbat, Harry would have gone bizzerk if they dragged him there.

report review for abusePouyan chapter 15 . Feb 25, 2018

I had a typo in my previous review in chapter 16 correct text is:

"If I wanted to read a broken man story I read one"

Good luck

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 15 . Feb 24, 2018

Hard to believe they would elect Umbridge for anything, Harry forgetting he has a wand seems super forced to just make him suffer for a little while.

report review for abuseKoru413 chapter 15 . Feb 24, 2018

I really like this idea. Usually Harry wants to go back in time to fix things, so being forced back is a great twist.

Love the interaction with Andromeda and Teddy, too.

report review for abuseReasonc chapter 15 . Feb 24, 2018

I like it so far

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 15 . Feb 23, 2018

I'm glad we got a hint in this chapter for why Fawkes brought Harry back in time, but we still haven't learned what was so bad that Fawkes felt it was worth taking a chance on Voldemort not being killed. I'm glad that Harry is being seen as an adult who will actually help children who need it. And hooray! Sirius is free! The fact that the wards that had been bragged about earlier actually worked to catch Pettigrew is good to see. I am enjoying this story a lot. You have come up with some nice, uniqueish elements and it flows well.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 15 . Feb 23, 2018

As far as the review portion it does not detract from the story. Keep it up I like how you are keeping the story moving forward

report review for abusemilpld chapter 15 . Feb 23, 2018

Eeh~ I like your grammar, and I have always liked time-travel fics. My only bone to pick is that you plan for Harry to legitimately be as strong as Voldemort and that NOTHING is going wrong for Harry.

report review for abuseAlex2909 chapter 15 . Feb 23, 2018

love this story

report review for abuseguest chapter 15 . Feb 22, 2018

WooHoo! I love the end of that chapter. Fills me with hope.

report review for abusesetokayba2n chapter 15 . Feb 22, 2018

Good fic, it's a surprise that Umbridge is not using Cornelius to just fire Harry.

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 15 . Feb 22, 2018

Fantastic story so far. The plot and character development has been very nice.

Liked your writing style, the fluff, everything.

Keep writing.

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

Great story so far

report review for abuseLazy2login chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

Harry and Andromeda are kindred spirits. Ted and Dora are kindred spirits. However they are different people. Harry's corners have been sharpened by Andromeda and her edges have been rounded off by Harry. Dora is more like Ted but she has been sharpened by her mother. All in all I think this Harry and Dora mesh even better then Ted and Andromeda. We know how well they work together so this Harry and Dora should do even better.

From the direction this story is taking I have a feeling Andromeda is going to be the one to beat this Voldemort. I don't think that would be the best way for this story to go. I think it would be most cathartic for Andromeda to kill to save Ted. Not Voldemort but since both Cissa and Bella are out of it she can unleash what everyone who knows her says she has inside. I think Harry beating Voldemort in a real fight and not have luck save him would be cathartic for him. As Andromeda said to Ted , Harry hadn't even scratched the surface of his ability yet. Unleashing that potential on Voldemort to save little Teddy and Dora would heal a great many of his wounds. Just like Andromeda being able to save Ted and her daughter making it out alive would heal hers.

With a Mommy , a Daddy, a Grandmama, Grandpapa and Grandfather alive for little Teddy would allow the boy to grow to top them all.

Great story though, very rich in character and detail. You wrote in an AN you don't know how to write romance.. Wrong. Friendship that builds into more naturally in a emotional fluid way is romance. The way Dora has built her feelings for Harry and his for her is romantic. Don't sell yourself so short next time.

report review for abuseAres Peverell-Slytherin chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

this is a great story and I can't wait for tHe next chapter!

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

You have been doing a fantastic job so far! Keep up the great work

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

As someone who is Dyspraxic and has other issues, I know how hard it can be when writing stuff for other people.

This is a far better put together chapter. I get what you mean about Harry feeling like he already knows Dora through his years with Andi - I never really thought about that part of it - and I've always been a fan of young Harry with Tonks. When you edit chapter 14, you'll need to add some more of it being those seven years that has Harry able to fall in love so quickly.

As for this one. The conversation with Theo was good and highlighted the struggles canon Harry had with people in authority. I really hope Regulus doesn't hurt Sirius in his madness to not be put back into his prison and the conversation between Dora and Kingsley (both parts) was enjoyable to read. I always forget that Kingsley was in Hogwarts.

report review for abuseAnitajane chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

Welcome to the dyslexia club, I have been a member got 60 years! I enjoyed your story

and would be delighted to read more of it. I do understand the phobia that goes with dyslexia and the embarisment that goes with it but most of us are highly intelligent. I think you are better than me as I have stopped writing because of the criticisms of my spelling. I wish you well and if you want a dyslexic pen pal feel free to write to me but do not feel obligated.

report review for abusealpha chapter 15 . Feb 21, 2018

You are a wonderful writer!

report review for abuseSindhuja chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

great! your dialogues have all the feels!

report review for abuselonewolf420 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Awesome story so far. Can't wait for the next update. Can't wait to see the fallout of this last chapter most especially that last paragraph, and newspaper article.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

Glad to see Harry got both Nott Senior and Peter.

report review for abusewawo20 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Love the story and Harry's character and how you handled the relationships with time travel

report review for abuseT51b Moridin chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Woot. Well done good sir.

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

some very interesting twists...

eagerly awaiting to read more :)

report review for abusejdrussom66 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Still surprised that there hasn't been a younger/ older joke about Harry dating tonks.

report review for abuseThe Last Rising Of The Phoenix chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Excellent work! Ending it now would be a shame when theres still so much potential. Update soon

report review for abuseBadAttitude chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

good job like always

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

You are doing a fine job and have an imaginative streak with original twists and turns. I look forward to every update you can provide.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Excellent chapter.

I especially like that Harry is willing to help Theo. It makes perfect sense given how adults failed him growing up.

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Once again a wonderful chapter. I love it, this story is awesome. Please keep up with the good work and update as soon as possible.

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

I rather like this chapter. It is good to see that rat face got what's coming to him and it is good to see that Harry is earning his student's trust enough for them to seek him out for help.

report review for abusedeckman1234 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

One of the better stories I have read in a while.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Thank you so much for great updates.

report review for abusePrincess Moonie of the Moon chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Absolutely love this stoyr, always one of my favs! Cant wait to read more and keep up the good work! :D

report review for abuseCharles Ceaser chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Awesome chapter. Please update soon.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Superb chapter.. Did harry put nott in same cell with malfoys...Malfoys F*** days r over or will they toucher Nott with their screams..;)...

Eagerly waiting for next update...

report review for abusejslee102 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

oh, poor narcissa. I don't know I would feel about happy times knowing that Not was hearing everything.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Awesome chapter! Please save Reggie!

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

great chapter ! I really like to see Regulus alive but I hope Harry will help him to save himself from Voldemort.

report review for abuseEp chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Excellent

Bonne continuation et merci pour la lecture

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Mate don't worry about your dyslexia. I personally think it is cool.

report review for abuseDreous44 chapter 15 . Feb 20, 2018

Great updates.

report review for abuseKine X chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

You can always paste your fic somewhere that allows text to speech and then listen to it for mistakes.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Yey, nice.

report review for abuseIsebas chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Wow I am loving this story. I read the whole thing through and can't wait for more. While it sucks for Harry, Andromeda and Teddy to be sent back in time I really like the premise. I like how Harry was able to take over as Defense Professor. Perhaps he can break the curse on the position again.

I also like that Harry and Tonks are together. It is by far, my favorite pairing with Harry/Fleur and Harry/Hermione being close contenders. I like how Tonks has accepted her place as Teddy's mum but I wouldn't have minded seeing a section where she struggles with accepting that she has a son from the future and that he wants her to be his mother. Can't wait to see what Harry has in store for Umbridge and Voldemort.

Isebas

report review for abuseSinfulKiss chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Thanks for not ending it so soon. I want to see more of Harry's life as a professor and with Dora. Also wouldn't mind Harry weeding out the Death Eaters.

report review for abuseProf. Pendragon chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

I am loving the story and following it closely. I really liked the way you dealt with Pettigrew. I am also likely the relationship between Tonks and Harry. Great story all the way around. Thank you for writing and I patiently await your next installment.

report review for abusepadfootl0ve chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

So, I am beyond in love with this story and I want to read more but I also don't want it to end

report review for abusejkarr chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

this is a well written story. it is nice that Harry was able to help Theo out like he was.

report review for abuseThe-Funeral-Pyre chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Awesome. This certainly is progressing nicely. It's amazing what a little common sense and foreknowledge will get you.

Personally, the Harry/Tonks pairing is one of my favourites. There's just so much possibility, there. It's always made sense to me as I can see Harry needing someone older and more experienced, not to mention playful and able to look on the brighter side of things. Tonks is also an established Auror and thus can take care of herself for the most part.

Tonks on the other hand usually needs someone who can keep up with her, and who can appreciate who she is as a person and a woman and not just as a morphable sex toy. To me, they balance each other.

I'm a little shocked that Regulus is around as anything other than a shambling magical zombie that's been sitting in a body of water for who knows how long. I'll be curious to see how that is resolved- does Voldemort thus know that he switched out the Locket and betrayed him? It seems that way, as otherwise why would he have punished Regulus at all?

Anyways, I'm loving the story thoroughly. Thanks for sharing it with us. Looking forward to more!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Great chapter and I really liked how well Harry dealt with Theo. Fun ending and the end of Wormtail I'd hope. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseFire Dolphin chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Love this chapter! It's too funny to see all the chaos that harry is causing!

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

great story.

to be honest Remus was always worthless to me in canon. his only true redemption happened after being chased away by Harry to return to his wife's side to die. you might have your own plan for him but really, I hope he doesn't appear much in the story.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Moldyshorts is not gonna be pleased about Pettigrew, LOL.

report review for abusebooklover 0711 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

amazing chapter, loved De story

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

great chapter and for someone with dislexia, it is really well written, i would be saying the same even without it, although there are some small mistakes, but nothing to bad

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

great work love how ya caught him great work

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Oooooh, SNAP! And Fudgie-poo and Umbitch are proved wrong, in MASSIVELY public fashion!

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

I love this story though I don't understand why I'm not getting alerts to my emails with the last three or four updates I've found it by searching the recently updated pages lol. Lol will Lucius ever learn that he is long gone from being in control so really needs to lose that arrogant Lordship mentality! Who else will come to Professor Potter for help I seriously doubt that Theo will be the last. Umbridge is going to go to far granted I would like to see her dead but Firenze or better yet Bane would be much better option, just make sure she doesn't get freed until she is complete,Evelyn insane with no chance of being healed...then of course someone would have to check the Hogwarts rooms and her house as an investigation which would uncover so much wouldn't it...yeah I can't stand her she's are par with Dumbledore and Ron lmao.

report review for abusegeetac chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

I love the story and chapters very much! You doing rather well for a dyslexic.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusekeyblademeister88 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

it was nice of him to help theo

for a second there i figured it was a trojan horse like plot to kidnap teddy

but then i figured harry would have wards to prevent teddy from apparating from his room without his or andromedas magic.

and sure enough theo brings it up lol

i'm loving this

look forward to more

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseTheFishKing chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

poor Narcissa, cant have fun time with lucy anymore.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseDr1zzy chapter 15 . Feb 19, 2018

Good ch

odonnellzoo99 chapter 16 . Jun 9

You made the killingmurder fallacy again. I still really enjoy this story, but calling all killing "murder" isn't just an ethics debate, it's a also a vocabulary problem.

report review for abuseBarbedCaress chapter 16 . Mar 19

Wow!

Loved this chapter.

Always wanted to read a fanfic where the sides are basicly the Black Sisters against everyone.

:)

This gave a nice tiny taste of what that fic could be like.

THANKS!

:D

report review for abuseThe Wandmaker chapter 16 . Oct 8, 2019

Best chapter ever!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Sep 22, 2019

The story has many seeds for interesting plots but none are properly nurtured and thus die before they have begun to bloom.

Harry feels OOC even for the suggested events in the future they left. I get people don't like certain characters so it's easy enough to brush off him not wanting to reach out to Hermione or Ron or help Luna or Neville, but there was still potential in other aspects. More interesting would've been having him try to reach out to them, struggling with the differences and their relationship becoming strained for a while, then end on a note that they'll get back to what they should have been eventually. Having him blow them off as he did reeks of the writer not liking those characters, but it doesn't completely ruin the story.

Chapter 16 completely ruins it. Bringing back Regulus is completely pointless and already damaged the story pretty severely, but Umbridge as Minster and Harry being arrested destroy it.

Umbridge suddenly being Minister comes out of nowhere with no buildup. Not only does it not make sense, but it makes the entire world of the story feel idiotic. We're never shown or even told what's going on with her beyond she is still somehow at Hogwarts despite no longer being the Defense professor. Harry being arrested comes out of nowhere and makes everyone else feel even dumber. It makes every character undeserving of help and too stupid to exist. Characters that are meant to be 'good' like Albus, Amelia or Kingsley seem either pathetic, stupid or evil by their apparent inaction. Instead of having them warn him to go on the run or having Harry notice something is weird or suspecting something and being caught off guard it just makes him and everyone around him seem like brainless idiots.

It doesn't come off like a well laid plot. It comes off like the writer wanted some drama so pulled some bullshit out of their ass and clumped it together for a twist that is unappealing and ridiculous rather than dramatic and enthralling.

Even worse, it's all quickly 'made right' by saying Umbridge was only temporary, as if she was Vice president. Instead of something dramatic what's left is drivel. Then to top it off, the apparent charges he was arrested for are straight up stupid and nonsensical even for magical standards.

There's a glimmer of interest when Harry blows off Amelia, but obviously this isn't the type of story where Harry would go off on people and leave them to die while he and his family head back to the US, so it won't become anything and doesn't matter. Andromeda's duel again had hints of being interesting, but due to everything around it being so ridiculous, it doesn't have the emotional impact it should. Then when Voldemort shows up instead of a grand duel to show how skilled Harry is both to the reader and the wizarding world, it's presented in a few lines and Voldemort runs without anyone really seeing it.

The next chapter brushes aside so much and again feels flat as we're told things and not shown them. It would resonate more if we were shown Tonks spurning Harry to check in on Remus before their talk. Instead of seeing it so the reader can share in the emotion that leads to their talk we're lumped into the middle of a situation we're told about so it all feels sudden and unimportant.

I was hoping for something a bit like Teddy's Excellent Adventure except maybe a bit more serious and prolonged, but found this to be lacking in comparison so far and chapter 16 really just about kills it.

report review for abuseImaginativeFury chapter 16 . Aug 16, 2019

what fucking lame development with that whole Umbridge as minister. Good god, could you not think of something else much more realistic?

report review for abuseAnnoyed chapter 16 . Jun 22, 2019

This was ridiculous and you know full well why.

report review for abuseSonia25 chapter 16 . Apr 29, 2019

Now this chapter ruined every fucking thing till now this ff was great but I don't know when u becomes fish enough to write such chapter Amelia knowing the danger following fallows order instead of killing her pathetic simple pathetic and harry letting himself being arrested , can the writing get any more worst?

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 16 . Apr 10, 2019

Aw he called her mum

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 16 . Apr 9, 2019

"Waxed the floor," she said incontinently. :D. I absolutely love this story but you need to have someone help you change that last word as I am sure you don't mean what it means.

report review for abusehuntjd1 chapter 16 . Jan 18, 2019

I find myself disappointed. Basically half of Harry's allies betrayed him this chapter. yes it was betrayal because they did not consult with him first. But even more disappointing was you giving Umbitch even temporarily that much power. I have always found it hard to swallow that someone of her disposition could gain even modecome support from others despite her claimed pure blood status. Personally I think other pure bloods should challenge her to prove she is not part toad. I am sorry at best she is a lackey and even puppet ministers are not made from such unpopular lackey's. Otherwise I have quite thoroughly enjoyed this story so far.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 16 . Nov 21, 2018

yes yes yes yes!Go Dromeda! loved this so much!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Oct 22, 2018

I dunno why you guys are being so crazy about Regulus having his dark mark there still. Snape stays there quite often.

Loving the story.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Aug 29, 2018

I think that this is a great story! Thanks for sharing.

report review for abuseEfloresco chapter 16 . Jul 11, 2018

"she said incontinently"

What?

report review for abuseSimianpower chapter 16 . Jun 26, 2018

Looks like someone forgot that Regulus has the Dark Mark, and is now inside the Grimmauld wards. So much for security.

report review for abuseA chapter 16 . May 30, 2018

Thank you for writing

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 16 . May 23, 2018

Crazy chapter

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 16 . May 15, 2018

Nice chapter; I know you took a lot of shit for it, but I think that was really only because making Umbridge minister seemed to be manufactured for drama. An undersecretary isn't a vice-president, and it's just a touch implausible that a Voldemort who had been back for several months already controlled half the wizengamot.

Still, it's not really a big deal. Suspension of disbelief is enough to overcome it, and this story's strengths are great dialogue and great characterization anyway.

report review for abusedragonbabel chapter 16 . May 13, 2018

Nope, this is retarded. This is probably the worst writing I have read in a long time. This chapter was so insanely stupid I gave up when you interrupted it with your childish author notes.

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 16 . May 10, 2018

Oh no, Regulus still has the Dark Mark! And he's in Grimmauld Place! Ahhh!

What? I feel like I'm just as flabbergasted by Umbridge being Minister as Harry is. He should have listened to Amelia.

Ouch. Poor Ted. And a great time for it, too, since I totally wasn't expecting it.

For the record, I think this twist was a good thing and well-handled.

As sympathetic as I am to Harry, unfortunately I think Amelia and Kingsley did the right thing given their positions. (Ignoring that this was all a scheme of Harry's.)

report review for abuseYOUNEEDTOGOAWAYFROMME chapter 16 . May 4, 2018

I hope Umbridge dies. This story is amazing- Harry thrown into this world with a changed personality... The Tonks-Potter family is great too, how you write them. And the Harry-Umbridge scenes before she was Minister were great... I wish they weren't over. I think you should have had more detail about how Umbridge was defeated when Andromeda was on the attack, though.

report review for abuseJVTazz chapter 16 . May 3, 2018

My only bone of contention here is that per canon only Azkaban is guarded by Dementors. Admittedly there is never any mention of who guards the ministry holding cells, but it's a bit of a stretch knowing the area of a effect of the dementors and that the ministry would allow them onsite

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 16 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Quite good chapter. I did wonder first how Harry was so easily arrested, as well as why he went so willingly.

I still think it's a bit strange that an interim minister would hold so much power as to command Aurors to use lethal force from the get-go and it would all be 'legal' though... Have they never heard of a grace period or checks and balances? I also find it strange how Umbridge could be elected Minister without the input or even a message going out to those who hold Wizengamot seats, but it all worked out in the end :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Apr 27, 2018

Love this story. Looking firward to finishing it tomorrow. Dint listen to the haters.

report review for abuseossifrage chapter 16 . Apr 27, 2018

Darn, I missed the whole 16.5 bit. Thanks.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 16 . Apr 17, 2018

That was a pretty solid chapter. Good job flipping it around at the end as a victory. I think there could have been a tiny bit more foreshadowing about Harry's plan, might have caused less audience dissatisfaction if Harry had a hidden smirk when he was arrested or some such :)

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 16 . Apr 13, 2018

Lol, with her face. I love this story!

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 16 . Apr 11, 2018

Voldiepants is a disgusting COWARD! Meh.

report review for abuseCalebros chapter 16 . Apr 9, 2018

This wasn't a good chapter. It just came out of the blue.

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 16 . Apr 4, 2018

You do something I have seen in other fics ... you seem to equate all killing with murder. Though you made mention of defense in an earlier chapter, in this you say the wand was not made for murder. Killing Voldy in this case would not have been murder. Killing the DE prisoners was, but this would have been self defence.

Just a growing peeve of mine.

Enjoying the story. Thanks for not dragging out the imprisonment.

report review for abuseC Dumbledore chapter 16 . Mar 28, 2018

Have you noticed that "plot failure" reviews always come from people who have never published a page? Good plot needs conflict and a few scary moments. Good job.

report review for abuseDezzal chapter 16 . Mar 3, 2018

Harry allowing himself to be arrested when he knows that he is hunted by the dark lord is the very epitome of stupidity, so either your harry is that stupid meaning I don't want to keep reading or your forcing the plot to bend in ways you are not able to write. Either way makes me stop reading which sucks cause it want that bad up to here.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 16 . Feb 28, 2018

Really? Harry forgot his previous experience with the wizardling government and expects a fair trial? What could stop Umbridge to repeat Fudge's trick with Barty Crouch Jr. and give him Dementor's kiss (and then claim that he resisted arrest).

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 16 . Feb 28, 2018

Should've just made 16.5 a separate chapter OR put a not to go back and read it

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 16 . Feb 28, 2018

OK, didn't read the addition to this chapter before my last review. But it's still a bit goofy. It would've made less sens for them to break up after this. Which is why I said that there was a better way to convey that they were still together without having to clarify that the end of the chapter. That legit did sound like a break up conversation. And it would not have been even remotely believable after her Patronuss changed due to them coming back to the past.

report review for abuseGodOfPixies chapter 16 . Feb 28, 2018

Sorry about all the hate for the original version of this chapter; I'm repeatedly depressed by how toxic the fanfiction community can be. I withheld judgement the first time around even though I didn't care for the chapter since you'd written a great story so far. I do like the extended version though; it's much more cathartic.

Future advice to avoid idiotic rants: don't leave a chapter on a negative cliffhanger. I'm not saying you should avoid bad things happening to your characters, but I've seen authors quit writing fics because of toxic reviews too many times when people get butthurt that their favorite character gets in a bad situation. I'd hate to see that happen to you. The problem with serialised writing is that people have the opportunity to make assumptions and get worked up because they can't just read the next chapter like a normal book and get past the suspense, so it just builds and explodes. Let the bad things happen in the beginning of a chapter and at least end the chapter with some sort of resolution.

Ending the chapter with Harry's arrest would have been better if you wanted a suspenseful cliffhanger that wouldn't make people (too) angry. It was the last bit about Harry shivering helplessly in a cell that riled people up since nobody likes to wait in limbo with their hero lying broken on the floor. Ending with his arrest would have been more neutral and less contentious. The dementor scene would have been a better start to the next chapter to let people see how badly he reacted, followed by his allies' actions to resolve the issue and ending with him getting free and having his duel with Voldemort, reassuring the readers that Harry wasn't broken for good. Trite, I know, but the emotional response is still real.

Thanks for writing!

report review for abuseThatCrazyBrit94 chapter 16 . Feb 28, 2018

This chapter hurt me to read due to 5he html brackets so I skipped it

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 16 . Feb 27, 2018

Loved Andromeda in this chapter. Especially liked when she strapped on the dagger that Ted had never seen. Good plot twist as well. Thanks for the up date and I look forward to more.

report review for abuseNyxium Niphendill chapter 16 . Feb 27, 2018

... I find my self wishing this was one of those million word long fic ... so please keep up the good work

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Feb 26, 2018

I'm confused. What's up with the end of the chapter with Nymph and Remus? I thought she was with Harry now. WTF?

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 16 . Feb 26, 2018

Excellent story so far

report review for abuseClearhorse chapter 16 . Feb 26, 2018

Gash!come on update!

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 16 . Feb 26, 2018

Great chapter! Thanks for updating

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Awesome chapter. I don't know why people are bitching I figured something was coming when he hid the wand.

report review for abuseflashversespeedster chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

love this story, great job cannot wait for more

report review for abuseBookFan96 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Nym better not take Remus back! And go Dromeda! Totally better than feeding Umbridge to the centaurs.

report review for abuseIlovemybooks14 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Great story!

I really wasn't expecting the whole "Minister Umbridge" thing, you're a really great writer. I am really looking forward to the next update!

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

interesting twists...

eagerly awaiting to read more :)

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusesetokayba2n chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Sometimes it's a surprise that Harry don't say... "Save yourself" and decides to go away. Of course, first he could visit Dumbledore office and throw a couple of Avada Kedavra to Fawkes, to see if a phoenix can be reborn after being killed again and again and again.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Wonderful chapter..it was so good that I was shocked when I reached the last line..I thought u wrote just a 100 words chapter...but good things ends soon...waiting eagerly for next update...

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

A nice update. Won't the ministry cell show the time Harry left, won't it cause problems as he was sprung out before the duel got over?

report review for abusezero02 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

well that took a sharp turn to left field, i did not expect azkaban

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

dude i love the fact that you had him in prison, don't know why everyone was upset, it can not be all sunshine and roses, you did keep teddy out of harms way so that was good. I am happy tgat you gace us part 2 quickly so i just read them together, anyway, great job!

report review for abuseEmrys Akayuki chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Wow. People really like to overreact to clifhangers don't they? I thought it was fine, although I am glad you updated so soon :P

report review for abuseMyrek chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

I do enjoy the ride.

report review for abuseBig Bopper chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Ignore the whiners - this is a great story, and I'm really enjoying it. You've got a real gift, and I appreciate you sharing it!

report review for abusePurpleeater54 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Yeah this chapter felt like a lot of really contrived crap. What elected government allows a minister to resign and name a replacement like that? This was just contrived drama for the sake of drama. Come up with a better plan than that. You know this chapter was bs. Harry just sitting there and taking it was even worse. Everyone character just sits by and lets this happen. Come on. You need to do better than pulling that kind of crap.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

good chapter

report review for abuseNicoleBearThomas chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

I was not mad at you I like this story though I am thankful for the update cliffhanger the last chapter was. I kinda saw it coming as you said you did foreshadow anyways thank you for sharing and I am sorry so many reacted that way

report review for abusegginsc chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Drat! I should have known killing Voldy would not be that easy.

report review for abuseSlverFox chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Refreshing approach regards to the time travel. The change to Harry's behaviour is also well thought out and the interaction between Harry and Dromeda is hilarious at times and shows the depth of trust.

Nym needs to make up her mind on who she really wants to be with instead of leading Harry on and running back to Remus once she sees him injured when Harry is also recovering from dementors. She's too easily affected and becomes defensive by a mere mention of Remus' name even when he chased her away and is outright irresponsible. Him leaving Harry as a baby without asking about him when he's the so called best friend of James and him leaving Nym in the actual timeline and chasing her away in this. It all points to him being irresponsible and running away to wallow in his self inflicted pity.

report review for abusesamics chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Argh, ffnet app messing the formatting yet again, apologies for the missing quotation marks and words.

report review for abusesamics chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

You have to understand that reading on is different from reading a book. When reading a book, no matter how inexplicable a chapter becomes, the reader has immediate access to the next chapter. Whereas here people have to wait for about a week to understand "what the hell just happened?" I don't think the reaction would have been nearly as severe if there was some hint in ch 16 that Harry was planning something next level. Not saying that you have to give away the plot, but something like during the arrest confrontation "Harry thought 'I could use...Just that much. It doesn't give the plot away, but keeps the characterization consistent. No matter what turn around you're planning, if there isn't a hint of it happening in the coming chapters, people will jump to 'this is going too canon with Umbridge getting too much power, and other adults not doing anything at all.' And they didn't, did they? I quite agreed with what Andromeda said in the wizengamot, Amelia didn't even prevent dementors being brought into ministry to guard a prisoner she knows is innocent.

Well, that's just my thinking anyway. I like how it progressed.

report review for abuseFulminanz chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Keep pre-plotting, keep foreshadowing! I love it. If people want predictable, braindead """plots""" they ought to go and read some cookie cutter OP!Harry fic.

You took a refreshing new approach to timetravel and to how it affects Harry. I follow this fic religiously and with good reason, I think. Keep up the great work.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Wonderful chapter!

report review for abuseGensuru chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

So...Fudge has ample reason to resign and his secretary is actually permitted to step into office. Under obviously suspicious circumstances. And she has full authority to issue not only arrests but to reassign Dementors of all things into the Ministry building itself.

Bones does nothing when a prisoner who came willingly and has not yet been sentenced to anything gets exposed to said Dementors. In fact, nobody does anything even though the solution is, in universe even, as simple as challenging Umbridge to a duel over this.

Dumbledore has the prophecy to tell him that Harry is the only solution to Voldemort. And does nothing.

Harry knows that Umbridge is willing to torture children, send Dementors to assassinate children, is willing to use the unforgivable torture curse on children, willingly participated in Nazi style Genocide against Muggleborn under Voldemort's rule and he didn't account for her sending Dementors to his cell?

In fact, Harry's "improvised" plan was to lure Voldemort to him. Allow me to rephrase this. Harry's plan was to lure Voldemort to him by getting stuffed into a prison cell. He counted on the aurors being incompetent enough to not search him for a backup wand or literally ANY magical item a prisoner should not have. He hoped, somehow, that Umbridge would not send dementors to his cell or have his prison food poisoned. He trusted that when Voldemort came to attack his vulernable primary target he would not do so with overwhelming force and just, say, cast Fiendfire into the cell block. Let alone that Voldie would use this timeframe to attack OTHER targets. Which he DID if Remus is any indication.

And let me get this straight. Enough people supported this crap that Umbridge wasn't booted out of the Ministry within seconds via a duel or worse, Ministry aurors support this treatment of Harry, there is no visible outrage of ANYONE not connected to the protagonist's family and even Bones is so utterly ineffective she just goes along with this charade because it's the "law" even though it is obvious even to her that what Umbridge is doing is bullcrap. And the same people just let Andromeda wipe the floor with Umbridge? So, wizards and witches do not care of the state blatantly goes tyranny and arrests people it simply does not like and exposes them to Dementors without a trial. Wizards and witches likewise do not care of private citizens walk up to government leaders and bypass legal procedures simply by challenging the legal officials to a duel and beating them to a bloody pulp. Even the one witch in charge of law enforcement does not seem to get excited about either of these situations. The law exists, at best, as a suggestion for eveyone not willing to just do whatever they want, that is the impression given by this chapter.

Am I just missing something here? Because i do not get this. It does not fit at all with the previous chapters of this story. Was this written by someone else? I don't get this and I would very much like to understand.

report review for abusenoxenrom chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

The story started good and now yor Harry is a hussy that doest seem able t do jackshit.

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

The Umbridge stuff still feels weak. A secretary should not be elevated to Minister in any situation, if anything I'd imagine it would be the head of the DMLE. Dementors in a ministry holding cell feels a bit excessive but also seems like something Umbridge would do.

Both duels were pretty decent though it does seem odd for the prideful Lord Voldemort to take a silent loss. Using Remus as bait seems like a hilarious decision on Voldemort's part seeing as Harry has shown no public affection for the man.

all in all, 16.5 was a pleasant/necessary addition to the chapter and I'm excited to see how you continue this story

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Lol a simple blood test would have proved Harry is Harry but then that would be logical. I find it hilarious that they have no problem letting a malnourished skinny untrained teenager not even an adult fight a Dark Lord that has more training in all kinds of magic fir decades but balk at magic that transfers that untrained and abused teen into a lethal man that has no problem protecting his family and his family only. I guess they prefer someone they can slander and control to one that slanders them and forces them to see exactly how screwed they are lol. It will be interesting to see what repercussion there will be from today's actions. My question is why doesn't Harry, Ted, Andi, Teddy and Tonks just pack up their vaults and go back to the states. Granted they won't be able to live in their home but why not just walk away, they don't believe them, they are actively trying to kill Harry kidnap or badly hurt a little boy and all because they an old man won't do the right thing for everyone just for himself lol. I can understand the position Amelia and Kingsley were in and I actually agree with what they did...they did not want another Sirius incident but the dementors were a bit much considering he was in a Ministry cell.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

Nice, as always, fantastic chapter. Looking forward for the next one.

report review for abuseKingPlotBunny chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

ok I can understand Harry getting arrested Umbridge is that stupid to try still don't know why he didn't pull a runner like Dumbledore did i mean Teddy and Andi are safe at Hogwarts and this would free him up to strike at Voldemort a bit but even him sitting in jail just biding his time planning an escape just in case the Ministry tried to incarcerate him permanently would have been believable after all this is a powerful Harry that survived one war already but for him to just give up...seems kind of the opposite of how you've painted him so far I mean you've shown yes he has issues he hasn't worked out but he never gave into them so for Harry to just curl up in Azkaban giving up is just...weird

report review for abusePouyan chapter 16 . Feb 25, 2018

I am sorry but this chapter and your character bipolar behaviour killed this story for me.

If I wanted to read a book man story I read one , this one supposed to be mature Harry who has healed up enough to raise a child and one that could fight Dark Lord not one to give up and trust ministry to give him fair trial.

So unfollow, unfavorite.

report review for abuseSlytherin's Pimp chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Ain't that a bitch...

report review for abusemoomoogoat chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

This is beyond forced. Your first 8 chapters are very well done it's apparent you thought them out and outlined well. But recently? This chapter especially makes no sense. No conflict is better than a contrived one.

report review for abusehp-fan chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Until now, I really liked this story, still do but Harry would never NEVER leave without a fight if he was anything you described in the earlier chapters.

I mean I get it, you need to build some tension towards the finale, but it's so forced that it's hard to swallow.

Just wanted to leave some (hopefully) helpful criticism for your story because I can see how much time you put in this and a least give you some feedback.

report review for abuseCatGirl04 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Leave Harry with Teddy and Andromeda, these people are not worth it. They have no spine.

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

its like a drug. i need more

report review for abuseBMS chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

If I was Harry I'd Take Teddy and Andi and leave thee bastards to burn.

They aren't worth saving.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abuseDisturbedhrt chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

And in one chapter I regret following and favourited this story won't be reading any more of it just wasted the morning

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

This is a great story. Please tell me he gets out soon.

report review for abuseGotts chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Seriously this chapter is just stupid, I seriously don't know why you wrote this but it's stupid.

report review for abusestevefocus chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Good chapter, wish it was not so short though. Looking forward to the next update.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Why you do this... hurry! Haha. This and 'The life he leads' are about the only stories I get excited to read when I see the updates! Keep up the great work!

-Josh

report review for abuseZ-Breezy chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

No Mercy, don't forgive this betrayal.

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Nice twist

report review for abuseArgentRoseSableWolf chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Your story is in serious danger of jumping the shark here. If, after all this, Harry is still willing to fight for Wizarding Britain, and ally himself with people like Dumbledore and Amelia Bones who are throwing him to the wolves, you will lose all credibility. It's time for Harry to realize that the gloves need to come off, you can't trust traitors at your back, and mercy has no place on the battlefield. I'm having a hard time believing he still adheres to Dumbledore's ideals after seeing what a hash they made of the war in his time. I'm continuing to read for the moment, but this story is rapidly reaching the point of no return.

report review for abuseDzerx chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Idiots. Honestly hope Harry gets revenge by refusing to fight Voldemort for them, it'd serve them right. Why would be be put in Azkaban anyhow? Wouldn't the Ministry have holding cells?

report review for abuseJBS2294 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Loved the story so far but this chapter kind of ruined it. Wouldn't Amelia have been placed as minister as the basically second in command of the ministry? Also how could a ton of politicians be killed and know one hear about it?

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseJared51 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

I can't wait for the next chapter

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

While this is an impactful chapter, I think it's been wastefully used. It makes no sense for /everyone/ who would have voted against Umbridge to either be killed or not there for the voting nor does it make sense for the Minister of Magic to be able to arrest someone without cause and the HEAD OF THE AURORS being unable to do anything about it.

While this entire thing could have happened given enough political control and actual events (up to some type of Martial Law being put into place), it comes across as you wanting to get them to this point just to put Harry through some crap and potentially break up the Tonks.

I honestly don't see how you can recover what's been an enjoyable story without making this entire chapter meaningless. If you keep Harry in prison any longer or have his trial a joke then you're coming across as wanting to pile shit on Harry for no reason, if you have the trial fair and he gets off then this entire plot point was only there to torture the heroes for a bit.

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

You are a cruel, cruel author. Dumbledore's unwillingness to actually DO something strikes again.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

the toad has to be done in.

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

yeah no, just have Harry finally say fuck it and start taking down anyone who gets in his way.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

r u for real here

report review for abuseGuest chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

You write completely out of control.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

What a horrible event. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Right, THAT'S IT! I want to go on a murderous rampage in the Ministry of Magic right now...

report review for abuseTheFishKing chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

wow shes fing stupid to try and pull this.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

I seriously hope Umbitch gets toasted.

report review for abuseZorobak chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

Assassinating Umbridge is the right thing to do.

report review for abusemilpld chapter 16 . Feb 24, 2018

This chapter is so weird. Harry's reaction of 'I think you're committing a mistake, but sure, take me away' weird. I find more likely for him to take over Magical Britain rather than just let be taken.

Melamber69 chapter 17 . May 13

Normally if I comment I wait for the end, but as this was posted on your B-day (2 years ago but still lol) I am enjoying this story very much. I love that Harry stayed his adult age, most fics have him revert to the younger body. Tonks is a very under used love interest, so I am enjoying that as well. Over all, I think this is a well done and refreshing work.

report review for abuseDiaspared chapter 17 . Jun 22, 2019

I mean this in the nicest way possible, but you executed this drama injection in the most hamfisted way possible.

report review for abuseKhatix chapter 17 . May 16, 2019

I think Teddy/Gabrielle would be a great pairing. I do wonder what a Metamorphmagus/Vela would be like with both traits. Perhaps instead of the Harpy form they could turn into a huge bird form (the size of a large dog, perhaps a Phoenix Raptor white in color)like Teddy can as a wolf.

report review for abuseSonia25 chapter 17 . Apr 29, 2019

Why would the author even listen to calories if harry fought them then voldmert wins , doesn't they know who dalores is and Amelia is the head of snow he can definitely order the auror to leave harry or harry can even kill dalores for the greater good but this is simply pathetic writing

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 17 . Apr 10, 2019

So does this mean Dora and Harry are a no go?

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 17 . Apr 9, 2019

Aww, you wrote this last year and I don't know what day this chapter was published but Happy Birthday! (My grandson turns 20 this month. : D )

report review for abuseTenjo chapter 17 . Dec 19, 2018

I have to admit that I don't understand Teds reaction. He seems like one of if not the most rational character, but his reaction to Andromeda saying she wishes they were still in the future is irrational. He thinks her not wanting to deal with a world that reminds her of suffering and death (including his) that does everything it can to ruin the lives they built in an effort to heal from those deaths.. somehow means she doesn't love him? It doesn't make sense to me. Rather, the more she loves him the more she would have to lose by staying in this timeline.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 17 . Nov 21, 2018

how shocking that Feild trip must have been for them.

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 17 . Oct 17, 2018

Wonderful chapter !

report review for abuseSixFtWookie chapter 17 . Oct 4, 2018

Smartest field trip in fanon so far.

report review for abusetammgrogan chapter 17 . Sep 20, 2018

Happy Belated Birthday I was hoping that you would kill Moony off. I have always thought of him as a Dirty old Man! In the books he helped baby sit Dora.

report review for abuseDarkLordWhatsit chapter 17 . Sep 19, 2018

happy extremely belated birthday lol

report review for abuseBad Wolf chapter 17 . Aug 30, 2018

You wanted our thoughts... so here are my thoughts. I think you've written this story so well that I want to live in this world instead of the real world.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 17 . May 23, 2018

Pretty great chapter somber ending

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 17 . May 10, 2018

I find it kind of hilarious that I didn't even realize Charlie was in the country (I don't think he is at this point in canon), and then he suddenly speaks up to solve a dragon-related problem. You occasionally have an issue with not introducing what characters are in a scene. It usually isn't a problem, but sometimes it's confusing when people just start talking without the narration saying who is there.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 17 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Happy late birthday :)

A bit heavier this chapter... The fight with Dora was unpleasant, but perhaps needed.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 17 . Apr 27, 2018

Darn! I was hoping Tonks and Remus would get back together permanently. I still am not "feeling" Tonks and Potter.

I always felt that Harry was too hard and misunderstood Remus's motivation in wanting to come with Harry and help him. I think he wanted to help the kids, not run from a pregnant wife. Yes, Remus was having a kid, but I always believed Remus felt that the best thing he could do for his future child was to help save the world.

Harry reacted as he did, in my opinion, because he had been in such an unloving family and had an instant and emotionally driven response. But I believe it was a mistaken judgement on Harry's part. Not to mention that had they had Remus with them, the kids might not have made some of the mistakes they made. It IS a possibility.

report review for abuseossifrage chapter 17 . Apr 26, 2018

I think there's a bit of a chapter missing before this. What duel? I didn't see any RL with NT? What?

report review for abuseMPPC chapter 17 . Apr 17, 2018

The Wizarding World is usually painted in glowing pictures; its good to see the consequences and know the students are also.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 17 . Apr 17, 2018

Really glad Harry talked to Dora. That was an intense conversation. Heh, setting up Teddy and Gabby, that would be adorable!

report review for abuseironhair chapter 17 . Apr 7, 2018

Hmmmm, canon dora, not sure I liked that though.

report review for abuseCavelenare chapter 17 . Apr 2, 2018

I'm super happy about this bump between TOnks and Harry. I do feel they are drifting together cause of Dromeda and Teddy. Its really a natural progression for them to be rocky. I was actually upset aa bit when they were cuddling and kissing. Hahahaha

report review for abusesfjoellen chapter 17 . Mar 11, 2018

a belated happy bday to you. I like your characters, the dialogue is good. there are semi-frequent spelling errors but overall it's a good fic. thanks for the story!

report review for abuseCapriSunnyD chapter 17 . Mar 5, 2018

With all of the shit you got going on, you still have to include this ridiculous relationship drama. I'm done with it. Good luck on the rest of your story.

report review for abuseHericus C chapter 17 . Mar 5, 2018

Happy belated Birthday. This is a very different time-travel fic that shows other adults in the books in a different light, as Harry is an adult himself. More than agree with you about Dumbledore. I would like to see a bit more into Harry mind-set as to future plans or feeling about those that are alive now that died in the previous timeline, like Fred, or even some interaction with Luna.

report review for abuseimagelesssky chapter 17 . Mar 5, 2018

happy (belated) birthday!

report review for abuseramsay chapter 17 . Mar 2, 2018

A good story i like the dynamics of harry dromeda and teddy usual time travel fics just don't seem to get that people change and trying to have a 20 year old interact with their teen age friend just won't work hope to see more of this

report review for abuseAlex2909 chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

wonder if the break up is forever or if they get back together

report review for abuseDr1zzy chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

Great ch I really like the way harry handled nym

report review for abuseWodenfang chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

Happy birthday! Also Harry was brutal on nym there , he's a straight shooter that's for sure. I hope in later chapters you put in a full moon run with all the animagus and werewolf with some bonding.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

Happy birthday to you ! I really like your story and what you made about Regulus. I hope Nymphadora can really forget Remus and think only about Harry.

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

interesting...

report review for abusemrpietan chapter 17 . Mar 1, 2018

Happy birthday. Good story

report review for abusealphq chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy birthday to you first of all!

And next, harry's words to tonks about remus wasn't well thought out. It looks like the words of a jealous person..even if u deny it.

Other than that, it was short and easy make up lol. I thought there would be some grovelling tbh.

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abuseeddyforty chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

im bloody confussed here, how did you go from Harry being in prison to this? no explaination or anything else, like a flash back

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Great chapter! Like always! And Happy Birthday!

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

When Harry and Nym talked, I was worried that her stubborness will push her towards Remus.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuselonewolf420 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I am definitely a fan of this story so far. Really wish poor Remus could get a little more happiness dora doesn't have to be the one to give it. Hell have him come in contact with a newly attacked victim of greyback and help her threw it all or something. Could have broken someone else out with him or something.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I really hope Harry and Nym stay together. I can understand how Nym can be pulled in two directions . Knowing that she and Remus got together at one point in the past/future would pull her in that area again but I can see her being pulled in Harry's direction now he is older, gorgeous and a strong powerful wizard. It pretty much comes down to whether she stays with Remus because he would lean on her and suck her into his negativity or she can go with Harry and be who she truly is and develope into a strong witch. Yes Harry is her futures son father but I think she if not now will come to live Harry a great deal whereas with Remus it's more if a kicked puppy and a should do it because I've done it once and had a son with him. It's time for Nym to grow and and decide whether she will go with the enbers if a future/past relationship that gave her a son but so many problems and her death or a bright flare of blinding light that while allows her to regain her son also gives her a strong powerful wizard and a live that will enhance her and let her grow to her full potential. As I said before most versions of Remus at least the strong fun living intelligent characterization I love to read but your version if Remus is rather childish, is easily lead by the nose and manipulated and is very wishy washy lol.

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Another good chapter. I think the good guys have realized that Harry is not playing. And I was glad he explained to Nym what his expectations are. Good concept, letting the students see the outcomes of war before they enter it.

report review for abuseptolemy101 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

he should dump dora, cannot see this working for them

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

i would love this story if it were the same but harry instead dates fleur

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

honestly, it does not feel like Harry and Dora are going to last as a couple. I know, relationships have their ups and downs, blah blah but think about what you had Harry say in this chapter.

He came across as uncaring and cold to the woman he is dating, a younger version of the woman who birthed his child. Harry's interest lies completely with making sure Teddy is safe and happy but Dora has no real connection to match that (understandably). But really the entire relationship between Harry and Dora feels forced.

hell in this chapter Fleur and Harry had a more realistic interaction even if it was just friendly.

That isn't to say Remus/Dora is any better. That entire relationship was toxic to the extreme and its only redeeming factor was the birth of Teddy.

The real issue is that Dora still acts like a teenager. It's not some "When you reach a certain age you stop making stupid decisions" thing but more of an experience thing. Dora has not lived through the war like she did in the last timeline, not that it would be the same as the inclusion of her mother, Harry and Teddy changes that significantly. She's young, hormonal, even if she is a Auror.

Which is why regrettably I don't see Harry/Dora lasting. Harry has more important things to worry about than the indecision of a woman who in another timeline birthed his son. He's gone through the trials, the hell, and the healing process. They're at completely different points in their life even if they are closer in age.

Honestly? If you're determined to continue with this story idea, which I hope you are, I would recommend rewritting it from the beginning. Give Harry a more realistic interaction with her (slower would have been better), cutting out Remus from Teddy's life (Because while Harry would remain silent, Andromeda would have poisoned Teddy against him entirely. Especially if she had Harry as a present example of what a good father should be).

Really, Ted Tonks pointed it out best several chapters ago. He's basically a stranger in his own marriage because of how close Harry, Andromeda, and Teddy became to heal. Their abrupt arrival in the past gave them the opportunity to reconnect with those long dead (Dora, Ted, Sirius) but that sort of reconnection would not be quick or easy.

And really you should have focused more on that trio. Ted and Andromeda's reconnection was very well done in your story but Teddy would be desperate to reconnect with his mother. but also terrified that she wouldn't love him. Sirius and Harry likewise would have to deal with their new dynamic, further complicated by how little Harry cares for Remus who he correctly views as a coward for abandoning his own child.

Really, I hope you continue this story. Even if you do ignore my review, I just had to put this all out there. Good luck.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I think you just taught me something about relationships I wouldn't have found out in years otherwise...

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot. When is Harry going to take on Voldemort?

report review for abuseReidus chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday!

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday. I really enjoyed this chapter.

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Rather interesting chapter.

report review for abuseDzerx chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Looking forward to Andromeda giving Tonka a good talking to. I honestly never got why Tonks apparently fell in love with Remus when she seems the spirited fun loving type. Remus on the other hand is solem, depressing and overall worthless as a person. The two have nothing in common.

I mean, Remus ignored Harry until his 3rd school year and even then only spoke to Harry when required. If it weren't for Sirius coming to catch Pettigrew i doubt Remus would have revealed himself as a friend of Harry's parents.

They man is way boring, even my grandfather is more fun than his character. He's also gloomy which contradicts the personality of Tonks character. From what it appears, JK simply put them together to give Harry some responsibility in the form of Teddy.

Hopefully the three way drama won't go on long.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

...Nym is kind of an idiot.

still love this story but wow. Harry could do better.

report review for abuseThe Bob chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I always thought Remus was a sack of Crap. He Was just a filler Character

report review for abuseLaMan99 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

happy birthday and I like that you kept dora and harry together, while showing a real relationship

report review for abuseElim Garak chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

"I don't need anyone to fill in my holes" - umm, phrasing?

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Nice chapter, looking forward to more! Glad you didn't break up harry and nym.

report review for abusegeetac chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I like that Harry confronted Tonks and talked about them what's going to be happening with them. He doesn't want Tonks to string him along and also Remus.

report review for abuseShepard131 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

great chapter. can't wait for the next one.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

great chapter, though i was hoping for a little more drama with remus and have andromeda loose her shit at him and tonks, but great work none the less

report review for abusepadfootl0ve chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I liked this. And I like that the whole thing between Nym, Remus, and Harry is starting to be resopved

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I think it was good for Harry to confront Nymphadora and point out what the draw of Remus was to her. There's nothing wrong with being needed (and as they fall in love, Harry will also need Nymphadora in some ways), but some women really want to be essential. Pointing out that she could be that for Remus, but that it would have definite downsides was giving her information and letting her make her decision. I'm also glad that the snake is taken care of. Regulus got to hit Voldie where it would really hurt. Glad the ministry is getting a little cleaned out.

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

The Order meeting was well done in showing just how petulant Dumbledore could be. I think Harry and Andi were too okay with being around Amelia and Kingsley considering they went along with something they knew was illegal even if Harry had planned for it.

The school trip to St Mungo's is something I've not seen before and I like it. It's a solid way of showing the kids that not everything can be solved with magic (or daddy's money).

I'm not keen on the entire Harry-Tonks-Remus thing in this chapter. It has/had the potential to be a tense situation with Dora maybe not realising what was going on, Remus trying to get her back even if it might potentially be to spite Harry, and then Dora realising what she was doing was wrong. As it stands, the entire thing feels flat.

The actions by Remus make sense from how you've been writing him. It's a bit of a jump to see Dora opening up the affection after her blazing argument with Remus but it's believable considering how emotional Dora can be. Even Dora's "you're jealous" remark works as it makes the reader think she's someone who can't face the truth of her own emotions or actions. What doesn't work (for me) is when Harry calls her on everything. Him telling her that he doesn't need her is good but I came away from the scene not knowing if Dora even understands what happened.

This is a very strange Dora Tonks to read. She seems emotionally fragile and a woman who seems to be willing to stay in shitty relationships far beyond their sell-by-date. As of right now, I wouldn't be bothered if she and Harry didn't make it as a couple even though I prefer that pairing.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

it is nice that the older kids got to see that Magic can not fix all

report review for abuseTheSphynx chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Devoured this story in 2 hours. Love it. Hope you keep going. Bash Dumbledore as much as possible.

report review for abuseJoshua2590 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Great going as always... Happy birthday to you...

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

good chapter

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

There was probably a better way to convey that conversation between them. That sounded like a break up conversation which honestly didn't make sense for a second. He was in jail for a week(Wrongfully imprisoned), and she went back to Remus after everything? I was like, "Really!? I've heard of people getting back in relationships that are not good for them, but Jesus. What did harry do that warranted this shit?"

Then there's the issue of people talking down to him. Dumbledore is an old cunt but Remus really has no footing period.

report review for abuseDeltablacknaruto chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday, and a good chapter. Nym needed a good kick in the pants to get her head straight. Well done. And great idea with the field trip.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

first:For 16 1/2

(already reviewed 1st part before you added the 1/2)

Loved Andi's attitude and response to Harry's arrest, though I would have liked to see more detail and / or her spend more time taking Umbitch apart slowly. A little more detail in the fight between Harry and Voldemort would have been nice too.

It wasn't the original Cliffhanger I minded.

I know Harry expected it and didn't we all, he even had a plan for it but Amelia / Shack showed that they'd put the government (even knowing its corrupt) before doing what's right. There reasoning really is simply a different version of Dumbledore's "trust me Harry I know what's best for you". He's a grown man, who's been forced to come back and fight a war he'd already won AGAIN and knows what needs to be done but they still help put him in a position where the corrupt elements / DE would have easier access to him (Vodie did get in and lets not forget the Dementors in the area THEY said would be safe for him until the trial) AND w/o a wand. (as far as they knew) Especially given their knowledge of what happened to Sirius when he'd been arrested this shows either they're too indoctrinated to buck the system, have no real concern for Harry's well being or THEY'RE COMPLETELY STUPID. They're no better then Percy Weasley or anyone else that kept there head down and continued to work for the ministry after Voldie took over in cannon. You don't fix a corrupt / dictatorial government by becoming part of the system. So I stand by my original review response of Harry should take Teddy, Andi & Nym and LEAVE BRITAIN TO BURN.

I know what you were going for and even expected it at some point given the level of corruption / Voldie's involvement in the MoM but Amelia and Shack's presence was a mistake. (IMHO) Adding them completely ruins their standing as allies never mind friends. It shows he can't trust those around him as he can't be sure how they'll respond when having to make a hard choice, as well as completely invalidates the idea that there is any difference between the two sides of the conflict. Especially, given that what came after was still bad enough that not only did he leave but Fawkes thought it was necessary that he kidnap Harry & co. to try and fix it. Unless Fawkes was just being selfish. In Which case, it AGAIN PROVES HE CAN'T TRUST ANYONE but Andi and Teddy and should leave.

For 17: Good one over all.

So Harry's reason for staying makes sense (even if it feels like an afterthought stuck in to avoid dealing w/ Amelia & Shacks action in the last chapter. To me anyway) but he still needs to distance himself as much as possible from Dumbles and the Fried Chicken Club, their attitude and responses in the 1st half of the chapter prove that. They're more concerned that he isn't staying for them then what happened. Dumbledore especially is showing his true colors, given Harry's childhood and w/ the way Dumble's set him up to be a pig at a slaughter the first time around Harry trusting him (at all really) around Teddy is unbelievable. We all know that if he thought it was necessary he'd sacrifice Teddy on the alter of "The Greater Good" in a heart beat. He did it to Harry. Harry needs to make some plans to keep Teddy safe if anything happens to him, not be trusting in defenses already partially breached. Since they know the street why not just burn down the whole block? The Fidelis wouldn't protect against a Fiendfyre inferno and I don't see Voldie caring about the muggles. Even if he didn't get Harry odds are he'd get some of the Order. An attack of some kind is to be expected. So Harry going "only the street is compromised" is downright silly and out of character for the story. He is a War Veteran, of THIS very war in fact. Why is he behaving like cannon Harry before the war? A safe house maybe in France maybe elsewhere, under its own Fidelis w/ either him or Andi as secret keeper that no one else knows about is simple common sense given the situation. He isn't showing much concern for Teddy's well being in this chapter.

The talk between Harry / Tonks was well done and realistic given her strong feelings for Remus before Harry came back the idea they'd completely disappear so quickly really isn't likely. Harry clearing the air like that was a good thing. Too bad Remus didn't get killed when Voldie had him but that would ruin the drama I suppose.

All that said I am enjoying the story greatly so far and look forward to more.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Still love the story. I'm just a little concerned that you might be picking Harry and Tonks into a relationship. You don't have to do that. With the Remus thing...I think you need to have her have a talk with her mother or father. Just to give her a reality check. Her behavior is unacceptable in a relationship. That's what made me think you were pushing them together for other reasons.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

good chapter could of done without the whole remus/tonks relapse but understand the reason you had it tonks needed to know where harry's line in the sand was and know what was appropriate and what wasnt

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy birthday. When is the next chapter coming out? I really appreciate it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseGodOfPixies chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Loved the chapter; the image of a sulky, jealous Dumbledore is quite funny and much better than mindless bashing. The only problem I had was the tone of Harry and Tonk's interactions. I think it was well done and I can see that being an issue (though it did seem to come out of nowhere; there wasn't much build up with how you skipped forward so fast). I won't complain about Tonks having lingering feelings for Remus, but I don't feel that Harry's actions were really very well thought out.

His words were perfect. I think you really nailed the emotional tone there. But I don't think that the physical actions matched it well; I don't feel that he should have given her so much physical affection and kisses immediately; it makes him feel possessive and maybe a bit manipulative, which doesn't fit with what he had just said to Tonks. I think it would have been better to have let Harry finish his piece and maybe give her a hug or a single sweet (not passionate) kiss as to show he's not trying to push her away, and then have him give her space. It feels a little rushed and wrapped up too quickly.

Thanks for writing!

report review for abuseThe Last Rising Of The Phoenix chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Good update. Would have been nice to see some individual reaction or more information about different patients, but still good. Update soon

report review for abuseKi0 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I don't think I've ever read a Harry/Tonks relationship treating her lingering relationship with Lupin in such depth so just for that you get some Brownie Points.

I'm a bit concerned about Tonks feelings but I think that's because she is herself quite confused. I feel like she will do some soul searching in the next chapters and eventually have a good talk with her mom and Remus. Maybe her father could provide some objective insight on this?

I would like to see more coupley scenes between Harry and tonks to help build or rebuild their relationship

Regarding the more serious aspect of the plot, it still keeps the same quality you consistently provided until now so keep it up, you truly are a great author.

Anyway Happy Birthday to you

report review for abuseSage Rikudo chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Lovely chapter, though I was expecting Harry to wipe the floor with the aurors, this works too. Seeing Andromeda's scary side is good too. I honestly laughed at that part.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

good work harry had a rough couple of days wonder how he'll get voldy though

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

hi I would like to see Andromeda "talk" with her daughter. Yes she maybe did those things with Remus subconsciously and Harry talking with her was good but she need another aspect I think. Great story so far.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Always nice to read this fic. Quick question though, did anyone else of note died during the attack in Hogsmead, besides Rosemerta? Will this "Will they, won't they" situation with Harry and Tonks end now, or you'll continue to throw shit in their way? Not that I'm complaining, simply curious. Looking forward for the next one, as always. OH, BTW, Loved the little recap, quite succinct. See Ya

report review for abuseUchiha Rai chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

After last chapter I was wondering what was going to happen after Tonks pretty blatantly expressed interest in Remus again and you certainly didn't disappoint, seeing Harry call her out on it was the highlight of the chapter for me.

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Not sure about this chapter. I really felt the lingering attraction between Nym and Remus. It would have been better if Nym went with Remus and Harry probably could have been with Fleur or Vance. Later on you could have brought them back together. Just feel that the break between Nym and Remus isn't a complete one and it would lead to more troubles down the road. Unless that is your intention all along.

Keep writing.

report review for abuseLordSinnoh chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Great Chapter. I am loving what you are doing. There is something that has been bothering me about this story that I couldn't put my finger on that I only now realised because I started reading Harry Potter and the Lightning Theory and it is more pronounced.

Ironically, every single scene is important. As in every single scene you write about either moves the plot or is a deep soul searching conversation. Well almost every single one in this scene. While this might seem like a good thing, in the long run, the lack of fluff hurts your story. Simply because we only see characters jump from one important point in their life to another.

Per example, this chapter is very important for Harry and Tonks' relationship, the problem is that we have only has 1 or 2 scenes with only those two ever since the date. This means that unless you are already invested in the pairing due to personal reasons, we have no reasons to be invested or believe they make a good couple.

An even more blatant example is Regulus. The man just spent 15 years in his own personal hell, but all we get is a couple of throaway lines about how he was feeling bad but is now doing much better. I mean what is the point of bringing him in if you aren't doing anything with him. I would love to see his attempts to reconnect with his brother. Or him finding out that his cousin also betrayed Voldemort. Or the interesting dynamics of a former Death Eater living with the head of the DMLE. And that is without even talking about more scenes of Harry teaching or befriending his old teachers (give Hagrid some love). So much potential there.

Fluff is good when used well because it lets the story breathe ans can allow you to further develop characters through dialogue instead of exposition. Not everything needs to be life-changing or about Teddy to deserve some attention.

report review for abuseConcrete63 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy birthday! thank you for writing I am really enjoying reading this story.

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

I thought Nym's reaction to Harry's pushing her a little unconvincing. Maybe she still needs to find out herself what is it that she really wants. Great chapter.

report review for abuseKingPlotBunny chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

hmm honestly I never thought you failed plot wise with the original ch 16 I just couldn't figure out Harry's plan (if he had one) which isn't a bad thing honestly I think what threw most readers for a loop was the last paragraph still a good fake out job and a good way of reconciling it as for Dumbledore considering the fact he is always in control in canon I don't know how he would react to having it yanked away he cant deny Harry with his knowledge is more fit to lead i think he would feel lost and have no clue what to do with someone else being in charged and i think you captured that perfectly the part with Nymphadora felt a bit melodramatic but i think it fit since as you pointed out she has a thing with fixing people which is the only logical reason she married a man almost twice her age with clear self-loathing issues in canon but i'm glad it wasn't dragged out i feel like we're nearing the end here with all the horcruxes gone of course now comes the problem of killing an extremely powerful dark lord with a legion of followers which wont be easy despite what Rowling's half baked excuse for a "duel" in canon was

report review for abuseOphatic chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Great story and great chapter. I do agree with AraelStannis about the relationship part. You dont have to force a Tonks x Harry relationship if you feel like its not working out. You are a good enough writer that I will keep reading the story either way. Keep up the good work!

report review for abuseAraelStannis chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Hmm, what Tonks did is kind of a deal breaker for me. When your boyfriend is injured, you don't spend your time with someone else after a short visit to your boyfriend. You give a short visit to the other person and make sure your significant other is okay. Even if they say they're okay, spending time with them while they're vulnerable and recovering is what you do if you care about them. It feels like Harry is Tonks' silver medal after Remus refused to try a relationship with her and now that Remus is in a better place, he has Tonks' attention again. Trying to force a relationship to work just for the sake of a child is terrible idea, but it feels like Harry is giving Tonks a lot of leeway just Teddy. It's much more cruel to put the child through a lukewarm marriage than to just remain friends and show him healthier relationships.

Welp, you've successfully made me invested in the characters enough for me to actually rant about their relationships. Keep up the good work, I hope to see everything resolve even if you decide for Tonks and Remus to end up together. They seem to have so much more interest and chemistry together than Tonks and Harry for now.

report review for abuseknives3131 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

happy birthday

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Good chapter and nice talk between Harry and Tonks. I liked the ending with the field trip. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseIceman113 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday. I am still finding your story to be a great read and have reread it from the start before this new chapter. Sorry about the spelling comment in my last review, I missed the AN where you mentioned your dyslexia. Keep it up!

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

$A very Happy Birthday to U! $O! Great writer...

Super chapter again and loved the new view of taken students for field trip...

Tonks should be shot died for leaving Harry... Hope Harry finds better girl than her and tonks burns in jealous along with her brooding man...

Teddy deserve better study mom than two timing Tonks...

Since its Harry/tonks fic...I know my wish won't come true and Harry will end up with b***h Tonks...

report review for abuseSlverFox chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Thanks for the update and happy birthday!

It's good to see Harry finally making his stance clear in the relationship with Nym but she still seems to be too defensive of Remus. Hopefully she will know where to draw the line now where Harry and Remus is concern.

Remus is also being a jerk with his actions of leading Nym on even knowing full well that she is now dating Harry, so much for supposedly used to see Harry as his Nephew. He didn't even care to check up on Harry. Shows self centered he is.

Looking forward to the next update!

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Wonderful chapter. Please keep on updating.

report review for abusehotkillerz chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Sooo are harry/tonks the end game or are we going to she her back with the shit bag thats called remus lupin?

report review for abuse4-and-6-forever chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday!

I found this story recently and I love it!

You write really well.

report review for abuseTiry0909 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Love the story but im, as alot here confused about the relationship between Harry And Tonks after this chapter.

report review for abuseasdfmovie chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday :) Love the chapter even if im confused what happend between tonks and Harry d:

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Nym needs to get her priorities figured out.

report review for abuseCP chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Are tonks and Harry still Dating?

i really hope so remus doesnt really deserve tonks but after this chapter i dont know if tonks deserves Harry D:

report review for abuselisicarmela chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Me gusta gracias por una buena historia besos y feliz cumpleaños

report review for abuseThe-Funeral-Pyre chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Happy Birthday! Honestly, you've got it backwards and gave us a gift in the form of an update to your story.

Not much that I can say that I haven't said before; I love your story and the direction it is heading in. You've definitely made me loathe Remus just a little bit. All I can really do is say thank you for continually sharing your story with us all.

Hope you have a great birthday!

report review for abuseNovorico chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

This was a great chapter and I fully agree with Harry putting his foot down without making a huge fight about it.

Also, Happy Birthday.

report review for abuseSampdoria chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

THank you for the update

report review for abusemaxblade33 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Confusion. Did herry and dora break up or did she chose harry

report review for abuseGuest chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

well... like they say Love is blind.

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

Also Happy Birthday, here's to many more

report review for abuseKal824 chapter 17 . Feb 28, 2018

After how Remus treated her previously it seems a bit pathetic for Tonks to still have feeling for him. Interesting to see Nagini taken out of play so quickly

petalssunwards chapter 18 . Feb 26

this was absolutely lovely

report review for abusenoylj chapter 18 . Oct 27, 2019

Remus is not a nice man. He is distant and always trying to co trol himself—and he never really cared about Harry.

No adult ever put Harry's eeds above their sants. Not sure if anyone ever did. Always thought Gabrielle might be the only one who could

report review for abuseCarolWim chapter 18 . Aug 1, 2019

Okay love expert, good chapter

report review for abuseSonia25 chapter 18 . Apr 29, 2019

I wanted to read your other ff after I finish but after reading the fool idiotic writing with chapter I don't think I can tolerate to read such pathetic writing from a pathetic writter like u and neither I an gonna waste anymore time reading this pathetic ff

report review for abuseAiyaKnight chapter 18 . Apr 22, 2019

girl plays 2 guys and harry wants to have none of it and she walks in and tells him she loves him and its like nothing happened... yea sure ok.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 18 . Apr 10, 2019

Cool

report review for abusepeggy77 chapter 18 . Apr 9, 2019

Real, true love is nothing like so many stories lead people to believe anyway. It's refreshing to see love between people that have flaws and misunderstandings. (My husband and I celebrated our 35th anniversary this year in February and no, it hasn't been all roses but that's life l. Roses do have thorns, too.)

report review for abuseTenjo chapter 18 . Dec 19, 2018

Can't tell if I followed that correctly. Did she say sorry for leaving him or for making him think she wanted to be with Remus? Because they kissed after that, but as far as I can tell it could have just been a very peaceful break up.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 18 . Nov 21, 2018

I love how real their conversations feel.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 18 . Oct 22, 2018

That felt a little quick, considering where they were before. The moving in wasn't terribly out of place, but love? And after what just happened? I guess it's not impossible.

report review for abuseantim1santhrope chapter 18 . Jun 4, 2018

so I'm in chapter 18, I'm really enjoying your story so far, very unique

I really only have 2 issues

1. the I'm Harry Potter from the future, was believed too easily and by literally everybody, and I just don't see that being realistic

2. the fight(argument) scene chapter 17 was terrible... not that they had it, it's reasonable to write characters that have doubts and issues... but the way it was written just didn't work for me ...I have never seen a person in a relationship be told they aren't needed and it work... harry also hit below the belt as well... I get you're making an independent Harry, and didn't want him to come across as weak, but I don't think professing feelings would do so

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 18 . May 23, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 18 . May 15, 2018

Yay, love the two together, my realtionships suck truely, so happy to see something work out for someone :)

report review for abusehalo4hire chapter 18 . May 1, 2018

73-74% of the way through and I have to ask...where's the disorder? Where's the chaos? The humor, the discord, the umbrige turned into a pink oompa loompa wearing purple polkadot trousers? The title said disorder, but I see no disorder, just reshuffling.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 18 . May 1, 2018

Wtf was the point of adding that random love triangle this and last chapter? While I love your story there really wasn't any point in putting that on. Also she should've realized how much in pain Harry was when the fucking dementors were there.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 18 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

Glad things are looking up for Harry and Dora :) Was a bit worried after last chapter, but you proved that my faith in you wasn't misplaced :p

Also, will Dora have to share Harry with Hedwig now, or do they get separate days? :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseCavelenare chapter 18 . Apr 2, 2018

Uh. What just happened? I love you? Really? ...lol

report review for abusemartinora chapter 18 . Mar 7, 2018

OMG!

I read this entire thing in one go. I desperately await an update. It is just AMAZING! THanks!

report review for abuseflashversespeedster chapter 18 . Mar 7, 2018

yes love this chapter cant wait for more

report review for abusecrazyman5005 chapter 18 . Mar 5, 2018

great read so far looking forward to more

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 18 . Mar 4, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 18 . Mar 4, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

love this

report review for abuseTigerWolf chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Really enjoyed reading your story, it's a really good time travel fic. I love Harry's personality, and his family connections. Teddy is spot on for a kid his age. And the magic descriptions are really excellent. The romance feels a bit forced, after all they been on one date, kissed a few times, hardly any time has passed, and then all of a sudden they are saying, "I love you." But really, all in all, great fic.

report review for abuseMeaningless Us3rname chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

You don't really have to worry about being mean to Remus. In cannon he's both a looser and an asshole so your version of him is actually much better than that. I mean what kind of dick runs away from your pregnant girlfriend in the middle of a war when she and the baby could be murdered anytime soon

report review for abuseGuest chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

So many confuse the Remus Lupin of the movies with the Remus Lupin of the books. JKR was not kind to Remus. He was totally uninvolved in Harry's life in the books unlike the films when he has long talks with Harry about his parents. And don't even get me started about his leaving Dora while she was pregnant. He's a horrible person.

report review for abuseVinya21 chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Your portrayal of emotions is top notch. After reading this, other fanfiction seem flat in case of emotions and go for soul mate kind of story without explicitly using the words.

There is no higher praise I can give you on this.

Great update.

Thanks for writing.

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Nice chapter.

report review for abuseOscarDragon chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Harry can not be secret keeper to his own place, I think J.K. Rowling said that a person can not become their own secret keeper, the secret keeper can only visit the place a few hours a day, or else James or Lily would be the secret keeper. The Fidelius Charm is powerful magic and some magic must have a flaw and the people who lives in the Fidelius Charm must absolutely trust the secret keeper with their lifes. I do love this story and will be sad when it ends.

report review for abuserobert32514 chapter 18 . Mar 3, 2018

Hope for more.

report review for abuseDr1zzy chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Thx for the update

report review for abuseserenityselena chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

interesting talks...

looking forward to reading more :)

report review for abuseGuest chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Voldemort was a trap? Terrible writing. How do yo I figure out how he fights from five seconds? And when has Harry been such a hot head that he yells FIGHT ME IM CAPS LOCK HARRY

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Well done with the parent/child talk. It cleared some things up for Nymphadora. Made her think on some things, too. Great chapter.

Josh

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuseEp chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Excellent

Bonne continuation et merci pour la lecture

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Hmm, v. interesting Ch; T.B.H, I'm not surprised he's quitting Britain, after how he was treated...

report review for abuseGuest CP chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Really loved the interaction between Tonks and her parents. and also the Little Scene from Harry/Dora lovely chapter :)

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Uh... wasn't expecting them to patch so soon. I was looking forward to a big fight and all. But that's just me thinking, it's a good update.

report review for abuseBadAttitude chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

great work bro, keep doing it

report review for abusejkarr chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

this is a nice update. it is nice that Tonks is willing to go with Harry and teddy

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Nice chapter. You know I never got the trope with Ginny Weasley (before I get into this I would like to say that making her not a virgin by the time she and Harry got into a relationship is completely reasonable it doesn't imply anything more than she had sex once before).

But there seems to be this running theme in fanfiction where if her and Harry are not on good terms it's either because she is a giant skank of her own volition, or because she wanted to further her career in Quidditch, or cheated with someone specific because she was unhappy etc.

I don't really like her as a character so I never really bothered me all that much. But I never really got why it's so prevalent. I mean yeah, JK made it a point to claim she was dating a bunch of dudes before she got to Harry in an effort to be able to talk to him like a human being, but people seem to take that to its most extreme.

I mean I guess it's because she doesn't really have much in the way of her own actual character. She's a character in the same way that James Potter is. where as the latter serves as a way to give Harry Potter a face and a last name, the former serves as a way to give him a girlfriend and Connect Ron, Hermione and himself in a familial relationship. My opinion of course.

Well I got off on a tangent, But it was mainly because the notion of her not being a virgin when her and Harry got into a relationship made me think of all of this. However in regard to the chapter, The talk with her parents was a long time coming. And much appreciated. It actually makes sense that she would be defending her past feelings for Remus rather than actually defending him.

I would say that it really doesn't make sense for Tonks to sacrifice her happiness to prove a point about her earlier choices but people are very stupid. That's a very human thing to do. Honestly, you're right in saying that your characterization of Remus lupin has taken on a life of its own. And the person that he is, it is not worth it.

report review for abuseAuspicious Orangutan chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Another great chapter for an awesome story!

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Good chapter

report review for abuseBMS chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Good one.

I liked the sit down w/ Andi at the start. The desire to feel needed is often why someone stays w/ a person they shouldn't.

report review for abusewawo20 chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

I agree. Relationship are not clean and perfect. They take work and show conflict

report review for abuseellainaparker chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

good story

report review for abuseGuest chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

That was exactly what I wanted from Andromeda and the a touch of Ted was perfect! And the rest of the chapter was excellent too. Thank you. You made my day. :)

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

that was a great chapter

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

that was some serious talk good for them feels like they moved a milestone great work

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

I couldn't stop grinning... Ha! Love is a pain but a soothing pain when v love right person and unbearable pain when that person leaves us...

Nice Harry/Nym again good for her...

Waiting for next update...

report review for abuseSlverFox chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

It's nice to see Dromeda and Ted finally knocking some sense into Nym with regards to her actions towards Remus and Harry. Seeing some progress as they get more comfortable with each other. Nice to see that you will not be rushing their relationship. Hopefully somewhere down the road you will not make Teddy disappear since Nym and Remus did not get together. Would be interesting to see how you negate your way through this as I seriously do not want to see Nym getting with Remus. It's a weird pairing even in Canon.

Keep up the good work!

report review for abuseangeloneofakind chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

I like how you have done with the romance aspect of the story. I can relate a lot to the problems a relationship have. It has it ups and downs, but as long as you love your partner it will work out. And of course communication is a very good key to the whole.

report review for abuseNauze chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Nice fluff chapter, wasn't really expecting him moving to France, but it makes sense, a bit. You could make Gabby and Teddy have a playdate or something like that. Looking forward to the next one.

report review for abuseEmrys Akayuki chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

That tangent came out of nowhere. Still a good chapter though. Although if you were going for slow burn saying 'I love you' before they're even boyfriend / girlfriend kinda throws it out the window. Maybe. Idk.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

If this was a regular romance if a young father and a young women then yeah maybe it should go a bit smoother. But this is Harry Potter who can't do normal. He is out of his timeline with his son who really wasn't his son till he came to this timeline lol. He is trying to have a relationship with the mother is said son but in this timeline isn't the mother yet even though the boy is seven years old. The father is in this time line and because of a meddling old man is butt hurt because Harry has his son who he has admitted doesn't really want but doesn't think it's fair that Harry has his son. So no I don't expect things to go smoothly lol. Tonks is immature not so much in the same way as Sirius but in the same way. But she had a childhood full of love where she could take her time growing up with parents that had no problem showing their love. Harry had no childhood he had abuse, slavery and pain. When he hit Hogwarts he was lauded when he did something the Headmaster approved of but was left to wade through the mud, slander and more abuse if he slipped his collar being held by the Headmaster. Even after serving the final battle he still had everyone expecting him to tow the line and do what he's told. He left with a women who came to live him like a son and he lives her like his mother he raised his godson as his sone and he became a man to be proud of . Now a roast chicken has brought him back to a country and an old man that wants to control him just he did as a child and Garry is not walking the line. So no this relationship won't be smooth they have to pretty much deal with three timelines and mesh it into their relationship... I say three because you have Harry's original childhood for the years he has already lived and the future timeline he also has already lived then you have Tonks timeline she is living now but it isn't the same as the timeline she lived in Harry's past...have I confused you all yet? So nope it's nots going to be a smooth ride but then this is Harry Potter when does he ever get a smooth ride. While yes I like a goid Harry/Fleur pairing I prefer a Harry with Tonks she brings out the Harry he could have been while Harry helps Tonks mature a bit...sorta sometimes maybe...he'll she a Black and related to Sirius need I say more lol.

report review for abuseTarix chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Nice chapter, but the love part came out of nowhere.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Wonderful bit of support from Nym to Harry and his desire to move. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Very good chapter.

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Great chapter, looking forward to more!

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Great chapter.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Great chapter! I can't wait to see what it is like when they go to France!

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

Good chapter, but Nym did need to make up her mind. Dromeda was right about what she was doing with Remus.

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 18 . Mar 2, 2018

good chap

Misrable33 chapter 19 . Apr 10, 2019

So sweet the little owl Emma

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 19 . Nov 21, 2018

Emma sounds adorable! I keeps waiting for the other foot to drop with the Weasley's, I wonder how things will continue with them?

report review for abuseantim1santhrope chapter 19 . Jun 4, 2018

so I was hoping that chapter 18 would alleviate the issues i had with 17... it did the opposite, I just don't see how you had them go from all that mess in the last chapter to... from the beginning of 18 where you pretty much made Harry out to be a perfect man, and later in the chapter, now they love each other and both are willing or wants to move in together out of country... I love the story as a whole but I'll just not buying the relationship because it's not realistic to me...

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 19 . May 23, 2018

Excellent chapter!

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 19 . May 15, 2018

The only good Voldy is a dead Voly, love the story; feel sorry for ron and hermione

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 19 . May 10, 2018

I hope Draco doesn't join the Death Eaters just because he has nothing else.

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 19 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

I quite liked this happy chapter offsetting the more somber chapter 17. I also enjoyed the symbolism of Hagrid giving another owl as a gift :)

As for the decision to move to France... I think it quite reasonable. An argument could be made for Canada or some other English-speaking country, but i can understand that Harry still plans to teach in the future, which limits where they can go quite a bit.

With that said, Teddy did seem to gravitate towards Bill and Fleur's daughter in the epilogue of DH... I wonder if the universe will try to set him up with another veela now that they are moving :p

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 19 . Apr 17, 2018

I know the fic is finished, so suggestions mean nothing, but I want to see more Luna!

report review for abuseQuicksilver2011 chapter 19 . Apr 8, 2018

This isn't so much a review as saying congratulations and an admission that you are going to school about a mile east of where I live.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 19 . Mar 22, 2018

his old friends should still be in his life

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 19 . Mar 10, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abuseGuest chapter 19 . Mar 9, 2018

Another great chapter! Did Dumbledore ever realize how different Harry really is compared to himself. Have you thought of doing a sequel focusing on Teddy? Maybe his time in France. Entering the school and stuff?

report review for abuseGula chapter 19 . Mar 9, 2018

I kind want to see a sequel already to be honest. Teddy as a teenager and another small one for Harry and Tonka?

Great story, love every moment of it.

report review for abusemiss nique chapter 19 . Mar 9, 2018

I really love this story I'm looking forward to the next chapter and what happens next. Please add more about Tonks and Harry's relationship

report review for abuseMCH chapter 19 . Mar 9, 2018

Nice chapter as you start to bring things slowly to the end game. Like your Harry, yes he got more knowledge but he not infallible and he can make mistakes. It's been a well written story and enjoyable.

I once read a story about a woman in a mans world who overcame great odds and succeeded and won eventually the Great Game of Politics. When asked why she did what she did she replied she wanted to live, to keep her family name alive and to keep her son alive. The reply that came back to her was that is the most powerful reason to play the Great Game she was playing for her family not only the power but for her son. There is nothing more powerful ( in the story I read) than a mother love for her child, so never come between a parent and their child. Dumbledore was right Voldemort never understood the power of love.

Hope you sort out Draco and he does get somewhere safe as you slowly bring this story to a close.

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

I really like the last two chapters. You've been covering the emotional parts of this story really well and I especially like how focused Harry and the Tonks' are on making a new life/future for themselves. It's so easy for time-travel stories to let their Harrys become completely focused on stopping Riddle to the point you don't really have a sense there's anything else planned.

I also like how you're forcing the Weasleys and Hermione to realise that this really is a different Harry and that they can't expect him to be their best friend.

I don't think you need to stretch this story out. If you have a clear path to Riddle's death and the epilogue done then I'd say start wrapping this up. It's not really advisable to start throwing in new, almost random stuff towards the end of a story.

report review for abuseMfoto chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Great chapter and congrats getting into uni

report review for abuseGarm88 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

She's gonna teach Emma all sorts of bad habits.

report review for abuseWolfgang8624 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Aww, now I really want to see a bit of fluff where Hedwig basically adopts Emma as her own chick and teaches him her ways of handling humans.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abusemartinora chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

NOOOO!

Does that mean that this story is soon coming to an end? Because that is a bit sad. I wish I could stay in this world just a bit longer.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

report review for abusesetokayba2n chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

May I suggest Dumbledore making Harry angry because one of his plans "for the greater good"?

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Molly should be happy he is only going to France last time they drove him all the way to America. The Weasley and everyone may not remember their actions after the last battle and how after he saved them al they basically threw him away but Harry and Andromeda do and I don't blame them at all in making sure that even though they got dragged back in time against their will they will still have a happy life. What's the big deal living in France with his wife? He lived in Egypt for how many years and with apparition and floo travel he can be anywhere in Britain in minutes lol. At least Fleur is accepted in her country as a person rather than a dark creature that should be caged or put down as she would be in bigoted Britain. You would think Bill would prefer his wife to be happy and safe lol.

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Great chapter! I will be sad when we are at the end though.

report review for abuseKnowPein chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

did hedwig die here too?

report review for abuseBadAttitude chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

some more fluff with Harry and tonks, the description of the house in france, great work, great fic

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Have Harry reconcile with Hermione and Ron and friendships with them as he has with forge and Gred. Allow for a relationship with me and mrs Weasley. keep Harry out of Bill and Fleur's decision on where to live. No reason to believe that Dumbledore thinks that Harry will survive his confrontation with Voldy. So sure Dumbledore verbally will let Harry go to France. But after his win. Dumbledore and the Wizengamot have issues with him leaving. You could have a confrontation there. Some suggestions as you asked. Awaiting more.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

this is a very nice chapter. I think this story is very well written and am looking forward to the next chapter.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Superb chapter..

Waiting eagerly for the battle chapter...

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Good chapter.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Good one.

I like Teddy 's response to Molly best though, he's not one to take attacks on his family is he.

Congrats on getting into the Masters' Program

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

More please! :-D

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Nice chapter and quite a happy Yule for most. I liked that Draco scene and his deep thoughts of family. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Nice chapter.

In my opinion try not to fall in love with your work, no matter how fantastic it is. So great that you have the end planned.

Very pleased that you will be having happy ending. I think all stories should have good endings, for bad endings we have real life. :)

Keep writing.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Continue the storyline about Harry in France and Honks!

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

more honks and maybe pair teddy and gabrielle together

report review for abuseDr1zzy chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

I would like to see harry change the wiz world a little

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

great work ya don't need a super long story for it to be great this one is great

report review for abuseLostDragon49 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

I cannot help but believe that with Albus's jealousy over being replaced as the leader in the Order that he is planning some "great" plan to resume his former status. A good embarrassing smack down by Harry and Andromeda would make for a great chapter or two.

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Fluff with the Delacours? What?

report review for abuserazorbackmike chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

I must say that is is one of the better written Honks stories I've read. However you decide to end it and the path the story takes to get there will most certainly hold up to the standard of excellence you've maintained.

report review for abuseHome of the Brave chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Since you're asking, I'd like to see a lot more of Hagrid. One of my favorite characters. Thanks for the update.

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

good chap

report review for abuseSoreno Sanguinem chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Awesome story so far. As to the note on Ch.19, if you want something to do then maybe an arc or chapter explaining why Teddy hasn't disappeared if Tonks and Remus aren't gonna get together (to be honest I haven't figured that out yet).

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Congrats on your program acceptance!

I have enjoyed the story so far and I just want Harry to find happiness

report review for abusethe epicslime chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Hi still enjoying reading it but I spotted 2 mistakes 1: a shield of sparkling blue light which seemed to be single to Harry . It should be a signal to harry and the second you misspelled detention when Snape was talking about the students keep with the good story yeah ?

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 19 . Mar 8, 2018

Need more Luna. She always makes things interesting.

odonnellzoo99 chapter 20 . Jun 9

AD being the only one on staff that didn't know that Harry was leaving was hysterical and his temper tantrum was also well written. Snape trying to be the voice of reason is mind bending.

I enjoyed the NYC date scene.

report review for abusemoonprincess97524 chapter 20 . Aug 31, 2019

I love this date.

report review for abuseBlazeStryker chapter 20 . Jun 19, 2019

Okay, Jonah must have been, in some way, related to Crookshanks.

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 20 . Apr 10, 2019

Really Awesome I like how she told the guy off

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 20 . Nov 21, 2018

adore their dates and watching them grow as a couple.

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 20 . May 23, 2018

Pretty crazy chapter

report review for abuseDarksnider05 chapter 20 . May 17, 2018

Lost me at the "I am American" bit that made no sense.

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 20 . May 15, 2018

Beh who cares, never liked the pairing with Ginny. HP in this verse is way better then cannon, I did not like curse child or the epiloge and actually wiped the memory from ym mind

report review for abusePrince Pondincherry chapter 20 . May 10, 2018

I like how you have Albus being unable to separate his manipulative, anti-Voldemort motives from his grandfatherly, loving motives for wanting a closer relationship with Harry, even in his own head.

Breaking the Elder Wand was a great character and symbolic moment, but it would have been extremely useful against Voldemort, so I have to say I disagree with Harry's decision there.

report review for abuseDemon97 chapter 20 . Apr 28, 2018

Love the story by the way.

report review for abuseDemon97 chapter 20 . Apr 28, 2018

If for whatever reason you decide to repost or redo this story again I think setting the prequel under it's own title would be a good idea, putting it in the middle of the end kinda threw me off.

report review for abuseDoctorTortoise chapter 20 . Mar 11, 2018

This chapter is fantastic. Honestly makes me wish for a standalone post-war fic about Harry, Andromeda, and Teddy

report review for abusePhilosophize chapter 20 . Mar 11, 2018

This has been a great story so far.

If you'd like to write a sequel in France, don't feel that you have to live there to do it justice. You can get a lot of information from videos on YouTube. It's not perfect, but it's enough - especially the many videos created by expats, including British expats, living in France.

Remember that Harry and crew will be living in magical France, not muggle France. Those videos will give you enough to write about excursions into muggle France (like cafes, museums) and anything you get wrong can be attributed to differences between the muggle and magical sides.

What matters is the story. If you don't have a real story in mind - challenges for Harry to overcome and which allow him to develop in interesting ways - then it doesn't matter how accurate a few random scenes in French society are. People will overlook small errors for a great story; they won't read closely enough to even notice the errors if the story doesn't hold them.

report review for abuseRon chapter 20 . Mar 11, 2018

Please continue with the Prequel. Thanks for writing.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Nice chapter. Would definitely like to read more about this..

report review for abuseFenozzel12 chapter 20 . Mar 11, 2018

Despite being told to skip the chapter I read and actually enjoyed it... Its nice to see what happened to Harry after Hogwarts. I would like to see a few more prequels but that's just my opinion. Can't wait for your next chapter.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusethe epicslime chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I could probably host you for a week if you want ?

report review for abuseTheMonitor1079 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Definitely necessary. Loved this addition. Thank you for the update.

report review for abusegamemonger56 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

This was necessary.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I liked this chapter and it's nice to get an idea of the difficult times after the battle. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseAngelRanma chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

great story like the prequel very touching, lease continue i would like to read more about them becoming a family, i get tired of reading dark and angist filled stories this is a nice change up

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Loved this look into how the story started

report review for abusechc91776 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Diggin it so yes more indeed

report review for abuseblacksaiyan1103 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Honestly you've developed a backstory that's worth exploring. Follow up on this chapter!

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Beautiful job. I wouldn't mind reading more about these three. And I'd like to understand the Phoenix...

report review for abusezombiehunter1982 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Ah what all stories need, a background to what had happened to make him the way he is. I'm looking forward to the next chapter

report review for abuseHikari Nova chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

interesting personally I think it would be better for the prequel chapters be more of a optional prequel story to this one :)

report review for abuseDouggernaut chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I might read something about a prequel. I din't mind this chapter anyhow.

report review for abusewawo20 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

That is a hard to write chapter. Well done. I don't care where the pre-quel or sequel goes. I live your background and take on harry, andromeda, and teddy.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

it is nice that Harry went and looked after Andy and Teddy.

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

good chap

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

More please! :-D

report review for abuseBMS chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

This is nice but as much as I like seeing how things got started w/ Harry, Andi (She was in some rough shape at the start) and Teddy it doesn't seem to fit into the rest of the story at this point.

If I may make a suggestion:

Post this and the other 2 parts as a short prequel story. Then those who want like myself can read it but it wont interfere w/ the flow of the main story.

report review for abuseemrldapplejuice chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I love this whole story and especially chapter 20. I'd love to read more flashbacks and what made them grow so close and leave the country.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Teddy was a lifesaver for Harry; probably for Andromeda too. I feel that she could follow her daughter and husband, if not for Teddy to take care of.

report review for abusenikkiRiddle chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I loved this chapter and would really like you to continue a prequel. I am, unfortunately, just as uniformed of France as you and I'm not sure if a sequel is really needed but I really want to see an epilogue. I absolutely adored your writing this chapter

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I really enjoyed getting a look at what things were like at the beginning. Finding Andy like this would have quickly made Harry know that she and Teddy were his first priority. Everyone else had someone else to help, but they had no one but Harry. I would like to see more of what led Harry and Andy to move to America. We got hints in the story, so if you don't want to write it, I understand, but I enjoyed the prequel.

report review for abuseFantasyLover74 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

Wonderful teary eyed chapter

report review for abusekeyblademeister88 chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

What a great chapter

More please

Or if you dont mind writing the flashbacks in another story to go along this one

report review for abuseReluctantSidekick chapter 20 . Mar 10, 2018

I really love the backstory, please post more

Dezzal chapter 21 . Jun 12

This was a very bad chapter. I don't know why you decided this would fit in but in my opinion this is ranked as worst chapter yet. I hope the next few don't follow this example

report review for abuseodonnellzoo99 chapter 21 . Jun 9

While that is not even close to the most disturbing sexual reference in a HP fix that I've read, I not sure why you felt the need to give us that visual. I'm assuming that you found it funny.

report review for abusepetalssunwards chapter 21 . Feb 26

okay I admit Andromeda is scary!

report review for abusehainbane chapter 21 . Jan 22

I sure hope Harry was in the back door while she shifted. Because another image is way to creepy.

report review for abuseFyrebird85 chapter 21 . Aug 29, 2019

Group hug! Your Teddy is the best!

report review for abuseNarutosBrat chapter 21 . Aug 14, 2019

I'm not going to lie, as soon as she said she shifted, I kind of figured she either gagged him with an enlarged clitoris, or a penis.

report review for abuseFred Bitune chapter 21 . Jul 18, 2019

Huh, did you just skip over the whole relationship building? Chapter 20 ends with their first real date and a non-sexual sleepover and 21 starts with Tonks talking about their sexlife over the past months with Shack? Gotta say, weird way to write a romance if you skip 95% of the romance. And I so loved the story up to now...

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 21 . Apr 10, 2019

Absolutely brilliant

report review for abuseSmokeing chapter 21 . Mar 2, 2019

Very good enjoy this chapter very much

report review for abusehuntjd1 chapter 21 . Jan 19, 2019

Nice ending to Riddle. I am confused about why Teddy was out in Hogsmeade though. Earlier after after Teddy's first visit to Diagon Alley You had Harry make some sort of at least mental comment about how they wouldn't be able to take him out in public like that again until Voldemort was dealt with. I don't understand why Andromeda would risk taking him to Hogsmeade its less secure than Diagon Alley.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 21 . Nov 22, 2018

I love this so so much!

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 21 . Oct 17, 2018

A fitting end and I love how it was the 2 of them against moldie voldie in the end.

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 21 . Jul 18, 2018

Yay! *clapping!*

report review for abuseEfloresco chapter 21 . Jul 12, 2018

Cool story. Entertaining and with a neat plot. Some of your authors notes actually helped me deal with something in my life too which is nice.

Thanks for writing!

report review for abuseslytherinsal chapter 21 . Jun 24, 2018

definitely insanitary to roast marshmallows over a body made of 90% malice and venom but funny

report review for abuseCarolWim chapter 21 . Jun 1, 2018

Thank you. Fantastic story, well written, I loved it

report review for abusemyafroatemydog chapter 21 . May 30, 2018

Awesome chapter

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 21 . May 15, 2018

heh marshmellows :)

report review for abuseEl Ssspeaker chapter 21 . May 9, 2018

Thank you for sharing this piece of art

report review for abuseKuroHinata chapter 21 . Apr 30, 2018

what the fucking hell! you are teenagers. make sure to break his heart as he break your perfect world. good thing he is not suicidal. he gave you his love. you return your hate.

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 21 . Apr 27, 2018

At the beginning I wondered at Harry's response to Hermione and Ron, but I see that he was very hurt by them. Still, when he came back they had not done and said those things yet. But altogether an interesting tale.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 21 . Apr 17, 2018

Well, can't say the Weasley's reactions were that surprising. I've never been a huge fan of Ron or Molly, and Ginny tends to take after them when she's angry. Hermione sure disappointed me, but given what she did to her parents, I'm really not sure how to classify her thoughts on family.

report review for abuseironhair chapter 21 . Apr 7, 2018

This prequel was very well written

report review for abusemissemeraldslytherin chapter 21 . Mar 27, 2018

I hate Ginny so much right now, but I kinda understand her too.

report review for abuseCapecodmercury chapter 21 . Mar 27, 2018

I saw you put Ilvermorny in the Berkshires, but was really surprised to see you name Lanesborough, since it is such a small town. Is the lake Pontoosuc? Or some unnamed lake in the shadow of Greylock.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 21 . Mar 12, 2018

While I already knew what happened from the first chapter, reading this made me want to punch Ron. What a selfish bastard.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Well this is crap.

Basically you've maid Harry the villain of the break up for being an adult and doing right by his godson.

report review for abusebryank97 chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

This is one hell of a story, I just found it and it is great. I can't wait for the next chapter

report review for abuseMagnusss chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Ginny is so disgusting, just as Weasleys generally are.

report review for abusegginsc chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

If she really love him she would have gone to America with him. She chose her life, let her live with it. Ron was never a good friend, and Hermione is stupid. None of Harry's so called friends tried to understand it from his point of view. Harry was abandoned, he could never abandon his godson.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

the prequel is uninteresting. the information can be gleamed from the rest of the chapters, thus they are unneeded.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I want more flashbacks. Have you considered instead of a sequel doing a prequel?

report review for abuseJedilogray chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I love your writing style. I for one would enjoy your prequels. You capture the emotions amazinly. I think you have done an excellent job portraying the emotions of harry, ron, and ginny very well in the prequels. And the rest of the story as well.

Thank you.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Wow, quite emotional and wonderful to read. It really brings forth how well Harry deals with adversity. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusealpha chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I feel ur stoey has completely changed into something else. I was looking forward to the nect chapter.

But u seemcto have twisted or lost the plot after haary and nym got back together.

It was nice while it lasted. Not gonna read any more though

report review for abuseThatoneguy chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Definitely enjoyed the prequels, showed how everyone both past and present either changed or stayed the same. I can piece together how much Harry had to grow up with the responsibilities he took on. Wouldn't be upset if you posted another chapter about how Harry tried to reconnect with everyone after a couple of years like you stated in the main story.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

this is a bad story.

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Poor Harry. Your Weasleys love him, but it's a selfish love that wants Harry there for their comfort and benefit. I hate that they didn't even give him a chance to explain.

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I'll say one thing that just kind of threw me off. Molly's reaction. Her calling him a fool even if she was hurt seemed a little left field. I know the point was to convey that they are devastated that he would leave. However, one of them needs to understand the circumstances. Even if they can fault him for not telling them.

Other than that, I found it funny that Ron does not understand the irony of calling Harry selfish.

I'm super petty so, if it were me I'd have him actually show them these memories.

1. To twist of the knife in deeper.

2. So Ron could get the hell out of his hurt feelings over that first true friend comment

3. To show them exactly why he is not hesitating to go to France after he's dealt with all of this. Regardless of their feelings.

The final thing I liked about the chapter is the future that has been explained. Ron is sitting there talking all that garbage, but the only failure in the end is him. Hermione he is the best thing that could have possibly happened to him. And he ended up failing that marriage kind of like how he claimed that Harry was going to fail at life. I hope beyond hope that Harry brings this up when they ultimately end up severing their friendship entirely(in regard to the third part of the flashback).

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

good work it is kinda cool to see what happened

report review for abuseZ-Breezy chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

This Harry allows others to walk over him like his canon counter part.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Which Harry did Ginny love..I'm surprised she even stayed with him after the Goblins took everything from him. Granted Harry kept secrets about Andi and how bad she is but the Weasleys were way to fast to drop Harry. Even Minerva and Flitwick thought Harry was doing the right thing. This explains quite a bit and also shows why Harry is the man he is today and why he is refusing to bow down to what everyone expects him to be. Interesting.

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

i like your little flasbacks,

report review for abuseDisturbedhrt chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I always thought Ron should of been in Slytherin and Ginny's attitude is understandable she is a teenage girl. Maybe a prequel that shows the weasleys at the time before Harry went in to the past might help

report review for abuseIceKnight13 chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Is the point of the prequel to show how much Harry grew up during his years in America? I guess that the Weasleys are kind of assholes but it feels like Harry was a bit of a pushover when he told them. Is it due to fatigue or simply the fact that he can't voice that he had wished for his godfather to be there when he was growing up?

Don't get me wrong I like seeing this part of the story, it's just hard to connect them together.

report review for abusestevefocus chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Honestly, I think you should of left the prequel out as way too much angst in the last two chapters.

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I would love for you to make the prequel another story! When reading fanfics, the general summary has to appeal to a reader, but the most important part of the story that keeps me reading, is how the author writes and develops characters, and you are fantastic at that! I would love to see how else you explore the prequel! Please keep writing!

report review for abusejosht1987 chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

Bit over the top with the reactions, but, still good writing. Keep going or don't, I'll still read it. Lol.

report review for abuseSlytherin's Pimp chapter 21 . Mar 11, 2018

I never liked Ron. Actually I dislike him more than Voldy and Umbridge

Lorde Shadowz chapter 22 . Feb 14

Beautiful! I loved the romance, teacher!Harry, time travel, and Umbitch bashing. A truly wonderful read.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 22 . May 8, 2019

" I have never fallen in love. So I don't personally know what it feels like to fall in love which makes it difficult to write"

That explains so much to me! The story is absolutely amazing but the romance I feel like is not even needed, I would maybe have let Tonks and Remus be the pair they were meant to be and Harry the absolute amazing father of your story! All the rest is great and I can't stop reading! Well done big thumbs up!

report review for abuseMisrable33 chapter 22 . Apr 10, 2019

Aw so sweet

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 22 . Nov 22, 2018

awe! that's adorable!

report review for abuseAust Sakura Kyzor chapter 22 . Sep 20, 2018

I was gonna wait until the end but I had to interrupt my reading to say that Andromeda is 100% correct about Draco's sister. It would be true even if she was her twin like it is with my sister. Good job

report review for abuseslytherinsal chapter 22 . Jun 24, 2018

Being in love is about knowing someone else as well as you know yourself. It's about being a best friend with someone who knows all your secrets, it's about having someone who will hold a bowl for you and rub your back while you sit on the loo throwing up and exploding into the pan, and still kisses you tenderly when you have cleaned your teeth. It's about walking into darkness together and holding hands to drag each other out. It's about being together so that when ill health means there is no more fantastic sex, you can smille and say, and mean it, that sex is jam on the bread, and bread is the main staple.

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 22 . May 15, 2018

heh love that ending

report review for abusea reader fan chapter 22 . Apr 27, 2018

Thank you, I liked the prequel.

report review for abuseRaikaguken chapter 22 . Apr 19, 2018

maybe change the prequel locations to before chapter 1?

just would make more sense to me, great story btw really love it.

report review for abuseSeriouslySirius4ever chapter 22 . Apr 18, 2018

The prequel is good, it's interesting to get some background, but I do think if you ever edit this, those chapteds should go at the start. Usually, when you read a book, the author doesn't tell the sstory and then, out of the blue, go back to past events, there is usally some sort of bridge that leads to the retelling of a past event, otherwise the story doesn't flow. Anyway, I did enjoy reading the prequel, it was nice to know about things that were only hinted at in other parts of the story.

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 22 . Apr 13, 2018

So I read it even though I could miss it and you're right. I understand the characters better now. Harry, as always, is amazing.

report review for abusenoylj chapter 22 . Apr 1, 2018

I hate flash backs. Put it at the beginning or forget it.

report review for abuseAriadne Venegas chapter 22 . Mar 26, 2018

His only crime was not talk with Ginny about him taking full responsability of Ted and the sate of Andromeda with noone, also that he decide that changing scenary was better for him and his new family and asking before the letters arrved if Ginny wanted to go with him.

But he was a child so I think he deserved to make a big mistake.

But really things with Ron and Hermione wasn't as bad as he mde them out to the past them.

I really hope that at least he can have a friendship with Hermione who can still be fed up with Britain and go to Australia or any other place with her family also she and her family went to France for vacation a lot.

I hope you can make an epilogue part two were Ron and Hermione didn't marry and they are both friends and friends with Harry as adults.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 22 . Mar 16, 2018

I htink its a good thing to read this prequel because we have now more details about Harry past in America and the reason of his behavior with Hermione and Ron

report review for abuseHobbyfarmer chapter 22 . Mar 14, 2018

Excellent prequel I would love it expanded. Great job

report review for abuseGuest chapter 22 . Mar 13, 2018

One thing that puzzles me about the "prologue" is the Apparition across the Atlantic Ocean.

It was my understanding that Apparating across large bodies of water was exceedingly difficult.

With, I think it was Dover to Calais and that one spot between Scotland and Northern Ireland being the limits of what Wizards can do.

Further travel than that would require portkeys.

So folks casually apparating across the Atlantic seems very strange to me.

As for other comments.

Just that Ron once again proves that Harry made a mistake befriending him in the first place, as far as I'm concerned.

Yes, Harry should've spoken up, but it's canon doormat Harry. So the odds of him doing so are low as he's well aware that he's been conditioned to cave to satisfy others, irrespective of the harm it does him and his.

Which is a small step forward I guess.

And it's just one of many reasons why I don't buy the Dumbledore is a good guy that JKR insists on.

I see more similarities to Saruman of Many Colours than Gandalf the Grey/White.

And no amount of "good intentions" can justify the various crap he pulled in all the books.

It just doesn't add up.

It's like 2 plus 2 plus 2 and rather than getting 6 or 222 you end up with 1942.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 22 . Mar 13, 2018

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abuseJeno85 chapter 22 . Mar 13, 2018

I love this story, I cannot wait for the next chapter.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 22 . Mar 13, 2018

Super all three chapter...specially the break down of Andy...it was so realistic.. I cried along with her..very well written...

I am said such a super story is coming to its end...

Waiting for next update

report review for abuseWodenfang chapter 22 . Mar 13, 2018

I think The prequels are great to see how Harry got through the aftermath of the war and to see why hes so distent to the weasleys.

report review for abuseWijibo chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

I liked this. It helps me understand the characters much better.

report review for abusehghpbbfangirl chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

I really enjoyed the prequels. Thank you

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

Nice enging of the prequel. I enjoyed it.

report review for abusecomodo50 chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

Nice story, looking forward for more :)

report review for abuseSeprith Li Castia chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

I just read this story over the course of about thirty hours, stopping only to go to work in-between. I expected to finish and post a long review about how much I liked your story, but thought such-and-such part was too rushed or how I thought such-and-such could have been done better. I was going to try to be helpful, constructive, and try not to waste your time. Because I liked your story.

Then I got to these last three chapters (the Prequel arc). Then I read the beginning of this chapter... and all my energy just left me. I am too tired to be a critic today, so instead I will just be a fan.

I just cried. Not metaphorically or theoretically; I am not speaking with any vagueness or hints of exaggeration. I just cried. Openly. Reading the Weasley's letters and thinking "yeah, I understand," they were well written and all that, but then I read George's letter. I did not cry because I am a fan of those characters (I am not), but I cried because George is clearly in grief and he was the only one to accept Harry's choice. That was a powerful moment; one of the best I have ever read, fan-fiction or no.

Like I said, I am too tired to be a critic today. You have drained all my energy of the notion. But I wanted to tell you this is a good story and this Prequel arc is what raised it from "good" to great in my mind.

report review for abuseAono Tsukune chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

Prequels were brilliant, I'd read a whole story of that now!

report review for abuseAnne chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

This story has been completely awesome.

report review for abuseJD4320 chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

loved the prequels. would of actually liked more details from the later years before fawkes kidnap of harry and comp. but still good. keep it up, been a great story so far.

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

Interesting,

report review for abuseFallow54 chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

xxxx Kudos xxxx : )

report review for abusewawo20 chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

Enjoyed the prequel a lot

report review for abuseLarenars chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

A really awesome story, the prequel bits we're good as well

report review for abusesfjoellen chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

thanks for the story, i am very much enjoying it

report review for abuseAres Peverell-Slytherin chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

That was great can't wait for the next chapter!

It definitely made more sense.

Thank you...

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 22 . Mar 12, 2018

This was a good prequel.

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusejkarr chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

it is nice that you are writing this back story

report review for abuseGabbiGrl chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I love the prequels! Do you have any plans in elaborating on some of the points you put at the end of the prequel, and continue those into a story?

report review for abusepadfootl0ve chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

Thanks for the prequel. I loved it

report review for abuseBMS chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

A nice chapter.

The part in America was good, especially when he thought the "dog" ate Teddy.

Still think it would have been better to post the last three chapters as a separate short story.

report review for abuseyoto chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

bon chapitre

report review for abuseSlverFox chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

The scene with Teddy as a wolf pup is hilarious. 'He ate Teddy!' Lol.

Nicely done.

report review for abuseHighStory chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

This prequel stuff is actually really interesting, its cool to see how this Harry became himself

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

It was not as clear in the regular chapters just what bad shape Andromeda was after the death of Ted and Tonks. It was a shame that the Weasleys didn't want to listen to Harry about just how much he was needed by both Teddy and Andromeda. At least he managed to retain a relationship with some of the family. I can actually see Molly refusing to forgive him because Ginny was most important to her.

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

how very sad, and so infuriating that they got to a good place before Fawkes' intervention

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I have really enjoyed these chapters with the prequel. I would have enjoyed them at the start of this fic and am now going to reread the previous chapters. Thanks so much for the background!

report review for abuseAlonso chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I have absolutely loved these last couple chapters. Your story itself is brilliant! Keep up the incredible writing

report review for abuseKeiron20 chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I really loved the prequels

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

good chapters

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I actually liked the three chapters if the Prequel. It gives more meat to just why Harry left Britain but also why he pretty much hates Fawkes for bringing him back. I would hate Fawkes to if he brought me back to redo one of the most painful aspects of Harry's life. Though on the other hand Fawkes bringing the three of them back will allow both Harry and Andi the chance to regain something they desperately missed as in Andi's case and something both Harry and Teddy need as well. While they may not save everyone they hopefully can save Ted, Tonks, and Fred. Though I do agree with them moving to France come September because tentative friendship or not you can only handle so much clingy opinionated Weasley females lol.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

Yeah, Fawkes will have some explaining to do.

report review for abuseDaSalvatore chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

Not entirely sure what the point of the prequel chapters is considering you're about to wrap the story up. All the information in the chapters has been/could have been given in the story (and practically everything was) and, while showing rather than telling the scenes is interesting, it completely breaks the flow of the story. You would have been better off potting these chapters at the beginning of the story (if they were already written) or in a new story to flesh out the details more.

report review for abuseNoble Korhedron chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

I.M.O, you should have put this as a separate story, or else started with it...

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

good work can't wait to see what happens from here on

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 22 . Mar 11, 2018

Very nice. Thanks for including this.

Violet Chloe Snow chapter 23 . Jul 20

How in the hell did Hermione end up with Krum of all people? I mean it's not as bad as Ron, but still.

report review for abuseEsmereilda chapter 23 . Jul 1

yay fluff

report review for abuseodonnellzoo99 chapter 23 . Jun 9

I really like the idea of this story, but I enjoyed reading Easier than Falling Asleep as a whole a bit better. Now I am going to see what happens in the What We Lost version.

report review for abuseNinamaria429 chapter 23 . May 13

This was amazing! I loved it so much!

report review for abuseValhyre chapter 23 . Apr 15

hey, that was pretty fucking good. the whole thing.

report review for abuseCaliban03 chapter 23 . Mar 31

I loved it

Thank you for your story :)

report review for abusegtbmel chapter 23 . Mar 30

Love the last line. Your story has classic status with me. Once read, it can be later re-read and enjoyed again. Thank you. Hope you are healthy and safe.

report review for abuseJManM chapter 23 . Mar 15

Definitely a cleaner narrative than Laughing all the way, but I think your newer work has stronger scene writing and better chemistry with the leads. I liked fatherhood themes in both stories. Keep up the good work.

report review for abuseChiDead chapter 23 . Oct 26, 2019

A beautiful story.

report review for abuseFyrefenix chapter 23 . Sep 9, 2019

I've really enjoyed reading this story. I wasn't sure how the premise would work but you made it happen. Well done! This Harry is one that I really like.

report review for abuseadamantiumsleep chapter 23 . Sep 6, 2019

Cool Nymphadora/Harry story.

Harrys Attitude was nice and refreshing compared to the usual stories.

I never appreciated the world travelling Harry stories, since original canon lives from this constructed reality bubble and I really enjoy that.

Apart from that, Harry is acting really dumb not immediately siezing the horcruxes. Voldemort would conclude that he did not defeat harry in the next 7years, and make sure any knowledge advantage must be mitigated by moving the horcruxes. The world knew of Harrys time travel from day one.

Also proving parentage via DNA cannot be confused with cousins or whatever. It was needed for the story, but other reasons could me made up instead.

report review for abuseNarutosBrat chapter 23 . Aug 14, 2019

I think I got a couple of cavities from the sweetness of that epilogue, but I'm not mad at all.

report review for abuseit's just another primate chapter 23 . Aug 8, 2019

Man this has been a fantastic read all over again. Thank you for putting you time and heart into this. It was great :)

report review for abusescotty26 chapter 23 . Jun 27, 2019

Wow what a story..I honestly felt the "action" scene was..i don't even have words but i also get it. Lovely story. I honestly felt like i was watching one of those drama that dont stop until there is a commercial..u know?

report review for abuseBlack-Warlock chapter 23 . Jun 25, 2019

Great story, wonderfull to read it.

report review for abuseJIB27 chapter 23 . Mar 5, 2019

This story was very good. Thankyou

report review for abuselegunter11 chapter 23 . Feb 27, 2019

Thanks for writing this story. It was well done. I look forward to reading another of your stories.

report review for abuseyomunot chapter 23 . Dec 28, 2018

This was good shit, read the prequel before i finished the previous chapter. Was thinking that perhaps you should reshuffle the chapters so that the prequels are the first ones, or maybe mention it in the summary.

report review for abuseGoldenEyedFury chapter 23 . Nov 22, 2018

this was really cute, I love seeing all the children and grandchildren and how much the family grew

report review for abuseRevDorothyL chapter 23 . Oct 31, 2018

Very heart-warming!

I especially liked the sort of throwaway idea in this chapter of Draco with triplet daughters of his own - beware those Black-descended sisters, if you raise their ire! Andromeda's showing against Tom Riddle in Hogsmeade should've demonstrated that beyond question! :) Mwah-ha-ha-ha.

report review for abuseAzure Lightning Emerald Cloud chapter 23 . Oct 4, 2018

This was a very nice story, one of the few I've read that actually held Remus Lupin to account for his ghastly decisions, while also being ultimately kind hearted. Also, I'm a sucker for a tonks/harry romance, which I think you pulled off quite well.

report review for abuseCitan chapter 23 . Sep 14, 2018

Thanks for this. Really enjoyed this story. If i didn't start at 3am, i would have finished it in one sitting. Feeling satisfied with the epilogue. I'll read the i'm guessing depressing prequel later and your 2 other complete fics.

report review for abuseBlazeb79 chapter 23 . Aug 25, 2018

I really liked the story. But I can see why people said you needed more harry/Tonks time. More of them falling in love. As they are super cute. But all in all this was a great story.

report review for abuseTalhulla chapter 23 . Aug 22, 2018

I love you story.

It was amazing and original

I never read a Tonks/Harry story that i like, so when a stat reading yours i didn't know if i would like it.

But it realy great.

You are just make some mistake in the french part

I'm a french reader, so if you want i can tell you where. Just send a mp.

I will follow your next story.

report review for abuseserialkeller chapter 23 . Aug 19, 2018

Pretty good story, thanks for writing :D

report review for abuseEEKtheCat chapter 23 . Aug 1, 2018

I have REALLY ENJOYED this fanfic! Thank you so much for writing it!

You tell us you don't know anything about love and how to write it, tell us how young you are, apologies for "disappointing" readers... None of these are things you should be concerning yourself with because you have truly accomplished something here! I mean it! You are truly a great writer and I can't wait to read more of your work, truly!

Best to you and I am headed to start on another of your stories now, and best know that this one has made my very finicky (and it really is) favorites list. The list is the stories I love so much I want to revisit, and I know I'll love coming back to this one at some point.

XOXO

EEKthe Cat!

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 23 . Jul 18, 2018

Awwwwwwwww, what a beautiful ending,well done!

report review for abuseMeteoricshipyards chapter 23 . Jul 3, 2018

Very nice story. I guess I've read too many silly time travel fics, but when I read the summary I wasn't expecting much. But it was a good story. A very well described broken Harry and Andromeda. I do like happy endings, so thank you.

Keep up the good work. I'm off to read more of your stories.

Tom A.

report review for abuseadafrog chapter 23 . Jul 1, 2018

Great story. Thanks.

report review for abusesucinquee chapter 23 . Jun 25, 2018

Hi. Absolutely loved this story.

Great and very smooth read. I mean I know a lot of fanfic is written by amateurs and that's fine and fun and all, but that's why it's such a special treat to find fics like this, that on top of everything else are just totally effortless to read. All the action and characters and also spelling and grammar and wording and things are just well done in a way that I don't wake up out of the story all the time because I'm trying to figure out what the author wanted to write, if you know what I mean?

Anyways, really lovely.

I also loved how although it was het, you head those small, statistically and from my life experience very realistic shades of non-het seamlessly sawn in.

Loved the pan-harry- comment.

And sev-regulus was really nice. They probably shy away from the limelight a lot, but if you ever fancy a one-shot or more, i'd love to hear some of their story, be it past or future.

Uh, lastly, I'll take a break before now, I guess, because the age difference between Harry and dromeda as well as me thinking of them as mother and son just doesn't fit well. I might not stay true to this though because I just love your writing, and well,I have read a lot of snarry and tomarry, and sometimes there was no time travel to delete the age differences so I can probably talk myself into ignoring this new one as well.

Thanks for writing. I love loved teddy, Harry, the focus of this, and lots and lots of other bits and pieces that would have me writing this till tomorrow;)

report review for abuseAnnie Magus chapter 23 . Jun 16, 2018

Great story! For all your blathering about dyslexia, the grammar/spelling/punctuation was at least better than average for fanfiction (which is admittedly not much of a standard.) We can call the few remaining errors "typos". Your characters were interesting and different (and those differences were well supported by the plot.) Thank you.

Did I miss a resolution for the blind dragon? I like that you at least cared about that poor thing.

report review for abusefrumpkin chapter 23 . Jun 1, 2018

this story was a wonderful journey start to finish, you truly have a gift for writing

report review for abuseSpazzman29 chapter 23 . May 26, 2018

I hate all the canon pairings but since they are canon I can't complain to you about using them. I do however hate all non canon pairings you used with the exception of Harry and Tonks and I suppose Sirius and Hestia (no feelings towards that pairing at all). I'm glad that all the pairings I hate are literally just a footnote I can completely ignore and shall do so.

report review for abuseMazzyStarShip chapter 23 . May 15, 2018

Thanks for writing.

report review for abuseSarahTaylorTam chapter 23 . May 12, 2018

this was good I always thought dromeda got a particularly raw deal and I always like harry\tonks keep up the good work

report review for abuseBlackRevenant chapter 23 . May 10, 2018

Eh.

I have mixed feelings about this work. Well written and execution of idea and plot. The things I dislike are NOT a reflection of your talent as an author but rather my own thoughts and feelings as a person.

Im a harsh person, I'm not a nice person either. And I enjoyed very much the... edge Harry had. But I think personally his edge dulled a bit depending on who he interacted with. He was too goddamn nice to people like Dumbledore and Snape.

But again my own personal bias. Overall I'm glad I read it, but I'm unsure if I could read anymore of your works.

Thanks for the experience.

Rev

report review for abuseatymer chapter 23 . May 10, 2018

I thought this exciting and the characterizations well done.

I loved this Harry, broken and patched back together so many times, yet always enduring and resolute going forward.

report review for abuseThunderSphinx chapter 23 . May 5, 2018

How come Lily Evans-Potter didn't get a child named after her in your story? :(

James and Sirius did, why not Lily Flower?

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 23 . Apr 29, 2018

Hi.

So the blowup between Harry and Dumbledore was expected, and although not much magic was cast you didn't disappoint :) That Harry just up and summons the wand was a nice touch, even if it's probably impossible to repeat with another wand :p

Also, i'm actually glad that their first night together went as it did. It's a nice contrast to how Harry was before, what with his mention of one-night-stands and all that.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 23 . Apr 27, 2018

Jonah. Goddamit author your just made me spit water at my monitor.

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 23 . Apr 12, 2018

You did a fine job with Harry in this story; I like him, he is such a great father! And Ron, yes, he is rather insecure, but I still don't like it when some authors portray him nasty or even evil!

report review for abuseSon Of Fellblood chapter 23 . Mar 28, 2018

How can anyone make Harry out to be the bad guy? He made some mistakss, yeah, but if your best friend is shot and killed in the street you don't drive down that street every day! Jesus.

report review for abusedad chapter 23 . Mar 27, 2018

FANTASTIC!

report review for abuseDreous44 chapter 23 . Mar 19, 2018

Great update.

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 23 . Mar 18, 2018

I do not like Ron, Ginny ir Molly so Harry would pretty much have to be a reincarnated Voldemort with a touch of manipulating a Dumbledore to ever be the bad guy compared to those three lmao. After Dumbledores play in the DADA room there has got to be no reason anymore as to why Harry left in the future or why he is leaving now! Dumbasadoir pretty much just admitted that the wizarding world sees nothing wrong with putting an abused untrained teenager against fully trained and ritualed terrorist that must be close to seventy years old and then plan to use him as a symbol of how awesome wizarding Britain is. Meanwhile the supposedly most powerful wizard in the world with the unbeatable Death Stick is the one leading the train and sitting back letting the teenager save the world. I rather enjoyed this chapter. This Harry is smart and logical and stands up for himself and his family...no one will be tossing him in the path of Voldemort to take one for the team while the Purebloids and Dumbledore reap the benefits lol. And that just pretty much sucks for the old man doesn't it? To my way of thinking I think Fawkes brought Harry back so that both Harry, Teddy and Andromeda could have the rest of their family. I think they were brought back also because this Harry is the powerhouse needed to bring Britain to its knees and make them. Open their eyes so that they can see just what a chaotic hell their government and pure blood rhetoric has brought them to. I don't think Fawkes brought him back so much to singlehansdedly fix it but to open their eyes so that they can fix it themselves. Fawkes seen Britain sinking into a cesspool and he brought back the only person with the strength to actually stand toe to toe with Dumbledore and the Ministry and tell them to buck up or just lay down and roll over lol.

report review for abuseLittle Rookie chapter 23 . Mar 18, 2018

I wanted to say I'm enjoying your story, I don't remember if you ever got around to explaining the white hair of Tonks or I just missed it. If I have a choice I would like to see Tonks adjusting "certain parts" to get Harry to react, also even if you don't describe the physical acts you should still describe feelings or sensations. Thanks for the story.

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 23 . Mar 17, 2018

Albus you unutterable moron.

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 23 . Mar 16, 2018

This chapter was really cute for Harry and Nymphadora, I really like it. Harry was sweet wither her and she's really funny.

report review for abuseAlterbliss chapter 23 . Mar 15, 2018

Absolutely loving this!

More when you can.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 23 . Mar 15, 2018

Awesome chapter.

report review for abusecomodo50 chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Regarding emotions of Ron, remember that many fics say he has a teaspoon range of emotions heh.

Also, do wonder why Harry said Accio verbally and not non-verbal? And how Dumbles will act now? Will he try harder? Go to the Wizengamot and try to put a law that, with requirements, only means him?

Hm.

report review for abusephoenix-rob chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Love how Harry absconds across the pond with Tonks just to go dancing.

About time someone put Albus in his place and spared a thought for how dangerous a position that Snape is in being a double spy.

Elder wand - who needs it - this might just be the thing to protect Severus.

report review for abusePentel123 chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Enjoying this story so far. It is a fun take on an older Harry Potter in the world of his past.

report review for abuseyoto chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

bon chapitre

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Wonderful chapter!

report review for abusenikkiRiddle chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Great chapter, the romance seems fine

report review for abusedogsby chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Awesome Chapter, thank you. Would love to read more about the reactions, of the Students, when hearing about their future Deaths. It would be cute and quirky, if Luna gave them each a version of their deaths, lol.

report review for abuseA Week Of Sundays chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

What a wonderful fic! I've binge-read 23 chapters, and each one has been an absolute pleasure!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 23 . Mar 14, 2018

Fun chapter and the outburst from Albus was hilarious. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusedoctor of supreme awesomeness chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

you are doing a bang up job! keep up the great work

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Nice chapter.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

good chapter

report review for abusejkarr chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

this is a very nice update. It is nice that Harry got ride of the elder wand

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abuseFateBurn chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Good chapter

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

good chap

report review for abuseTigerWolf chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

I loved the public debate in the class room. it was so spot on. I really hope to see more of that in the future chapters

report review for abuseBMS chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Old Albus throws a better fit then a five year old when he doesn't get his way. Of course Harry was right the old man and his generation should have dealt w/ the problem rather then passing it off to children. The Date was well done and very romantic.

More Please.

report review for abuseSelenity84 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

I loved how you made Harry stand up against Dumbledore. I really hated how he had too much power and control over his life in the books.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Beautifully written again...albus needed to be pegged down and he himself went and got it from harry...

Wonder what voldy'S reaction going to be?

report review for abuseshugokage chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

A truly impressive story thanks!

report review for abuseAlex2909 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

I guess the blowout finally arrived

report review for abuseKiSwordsman chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Absolute catharsis, thank you. I'm confused with Hermione's perspective. If Harry is fixing things before they can become broken, how is he leaving them to deal with a broken future?

Given the fact that she was at the party that revealed Harry was moving to France she would already know about this anyway right?

How is it that so many people do not grasp the concept of him wanting to leave? Somebody, at least somebody outside of his closest loved ones have to understand that if he wants to go, then it's his choice not theirs. He owes them nothing.

Where as Hermione is a 16-year-old girl, Albus Dumbledore has an actual century on her. There's really no reason for him to be acting like a petulant child about this. I mean maybe it could be chalked up to hurt feelings, but Jesus.

report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Thanks for the chapter.

P.S. I don't see Harry as a 'bad guy' in that situation. It was a horrible mess, and Harry was torn between the wish to help Andromeda and to protect her secrets.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

I like the romance section of the story. Please pm me when you are posting the next chapter. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Awaiting more.

report review for abusesunsethill chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

I think taking the Elder Wand out of the picture was a very good idea. I'm glad that Harry encouraged Severus to get out while the getting is good. Harry making up for Nym's clumsiness on the dance floor was funny and cute.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

Good slap down of Albus.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 23 . Mar 13, 2018

awesome chapter he really went all out great work

dadaprof13 chapter 24 . Dec 20, 2018

I'm sorry I've read this story three times And always stop here. you should have done the prequel before you did the time travel at the beginning of the story. other than that I love this story

report review for abuseHarriverse chapter 24 . Nov 17, 2018

I think this is a reasonable start to a very fine story.

report review for abuseenvirosue chapter 24 . Jul 18, 2018

Yow, well done

report review for abusestylo1 chapter 24 . May 25, 2018

it was not what i was expecting, i prefered more action but thats just me. i also dont believe voldemort would be this stupid, the moment he learnt harry was a rime traveler he should have gone and picked up his horcruxes.

myafroatemydog; giving a comment every chapter is not needed, nor wanted unless the comment adds something 10 times good chapter could be done with good story and even that leaves out why. it just gets in the way of the actual comments

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 24 . Apr 30, 2018

Hi.

I understand that Dora is primarily female, but what if she was pregnant then shifted to male because of Harry pleasuring her? Wouldn't that have all sorts of bad consequences for the unborn baby? Or would she then change into a hermaphrodite instead of pure male?

Anyways... The battle was a bit anticlimactic, but i guess that's to be expected when Voldemort is double-teamed by someone competent.

I'm also happy Harry seems to be able to let go of the past now that it is finally over. I think it's well deserved :)

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 24 . Apr 27, 2018

Great story. Could've been longer though. I stick with the belief that 200-300k words for a fanfic is the perfect length (although that's probably because I read shit abnormally fast, i.e. I finished LotR and Silmarillion in two days) because I always feel unsatisfied with the shorter stories. However, aside from complaints on length, this stuff is great.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 24 . Apr 17, 2018

I like that you didn't drag out the fight. Short and sweet!

report review for abusesuziq968 chapter 24 . Apr 13, 2018

This was great! Go Andromeda and I finally forgive Fawkes.

report review for abusediagonalpumpkin chapter 24 . Apr 13, 2018

I've really enjoyed this story. Obviously it isn't down yet and I can't wait to get to the next chapter, but I just wanted to say that I thought it was great that you threw in the author's note confirming that Harry finished despite Nym's change. It happened that way in my head but I'm glad that it is official story canonI personally don't see enough stances of that sort made in fan fiction and I was really happy to see it here. Thanks for writing and sharing with us. Keep up the excellent work.

report review for abusenintschibintschi chapter 24 . Apr 7, 2018

wonderful story I got addicted thanks for sharing

nintschi

report review for abuseGuest chapter 24 . Mar 24, 2018

So did you skip a chapter because there's no connection between the end of the previous chapter and this one? It seems as if you gave up and just ended the story.

report review for abuseTherio chapter 24 . Mar 24, 2018

Excellent chapter from an excellent story. I really enjoyed reading this story and being on this journey that you, the author, took us on. It may not have seemed like it at first. but Fawkes really did have Harry's best interest in mind when he pulled the three back into the past.

report review for abuseyoto chapter 24 . Mar 22, 2018

bon chapitre

report review for abuseMfoto chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Wonderful

report review for abuseiStyx chapter 24 . Mar 23, 2018

This scene with shifting genders during oral sex was really repulsive and disgusting. I honestly regret reading this shit.

report review for abusecomodo50 chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Woooot.

So one last chapter then?

It was a nice story to follow :)

report review for abuseAlex2909 chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

pretty awkward situation Tonks described in the beginning

report review for abuseKuroki Kitsune chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Nooooo it's over?! But but... The where am I to get my fix of awesomeness now? I would totally roast marshmallows over Voldemort's burning corpse...though, to be fair, I probably wouldn't eat them.

report review for abusePenny is wise chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Awesome chapter. Fun way to see Voldy bite the bullet.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Nicely done...loved it..it was funny and sweet...roasting marshmallow on died boby is so yaks! But may be its blacks tradition to do so...hahaaa...Kingsley in funny way was very gunny and good going Harry ..you will never get bored with kinky nym...

report review for abuseshugokage chapter 24 . Mar 21, 2018

Awesome job on this chapter and nice ending for Tom!

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Excellent chapter

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Nice chapter. Look forward to the epilouge.

report review for abusepoppabear11420 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

This one is going into my favorites

report review for abuseboxofpotter chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Great story! Can't wait for the epilogue

report review for abuseGuest chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Great story!

report review for abuseCreepySnake chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Great story!

I'll admit that I wanted more of Harry and his little family in France, maybe some snippets of them with Fluer's side of the family and the school.

The only gripe I have in this story is that the romance felt very rushed. I admit that it was done very well for how short it was, but I expected Harry to be telling the truth when he said he was no good with dating. That's the only thing that I may have felt off, well other than a tad but excessive Dumbledore bashing, but you have the Authors right to that.

Luckily I picked this story right when you updated the last chapter, so I didn't have to cry manly tears while waiting for a chapter. Can't wait for the Epilogue already.

P.S I hope Harry didn't choke.

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Good chap

report review for abusesomethingcool11 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Woah, didn't realise the story was over

report review for abuseThe-Funeral-Pyre chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

I think it was great. It felt like it matched the rest of the story very well, and it was believable in how you set things up for all of this. I'm always a fan of Voldemort being laid low by one of the simpler/more basic spells. It's something kind of poetic that this 'larger than life' villain is brought down by something so small, kind of like the story of David and Goliath, or even Canon where Harry pretty much only uses th stunning and disarming spells.

I've loved this story and the premise since chapter 1, and I'm glad to have been a part of this journey. Thank you very much for writing and sharing it with us- putting yourself and your work out there like this isn't easy, but you've successfully done so and put together a great piece of work. I'm definitely looking forward to any more you may write!

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Great chapter and nice fight scene. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Excellent story!

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Thanks for a great story. I will read anything you write. Also thanks for clearing up the question from Kingsley. I hope the process of this story was cathartic for you in dealing with personal struggles. Keep writing!

report review for abusejkarr chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

nice chapter. to bad Harry did not get to kick the head master in the ass

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

I loved this chapter!

report review for abuseGuest chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Thanks for writing this wonderful story, champ.

report review for abuseCommando678 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Don't forget to mark the story as complete

report review for abuseDahajo chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

You have a great talent, l really loved your story. Hope you keep going.

report review for abusemelkun chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Nice end. :)

I missed some things present in the first 'disorder', in fact I didn't see much disorder in this version. But as story is superior. It was well planned and consise. I was skeptic about HarryxNym (I liked how things happened in the first version), but it worked and was really cute.

I will be waiting patiently(?) for the epiloge.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Thanks for the story.

report review for abuseYaw6113 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Please write the epilogue already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot. Sorry if I am annoying you with my reviews it's just that I really like your stories a lot. Please write a scene where Harry and Tonks are having sex.

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

That was a very abrupt ending

report review for abuseTheSandyToadfish chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Pretty cheesy ending. Quick too, I wasn't expecting to end so fast.

That said, I really liked this story.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Good one.

Loved the Humor and the Happy ending (Not to mention the Marshmallow scene) but the Voldie's ending did seem rather anti-climatic. Almost like an after thought really.

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

it was rushed for sure seemed like just want it to end but good work

report review for abusehooplah chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

I've gotta say it weirdly bothers me that Harry likes musicals...

Kingsly's seen was hilarious though. That's a funny concept.

And yeah it was a bit rushed but tbh this whole story has been moving at an absolute breakneck pace so it's not really out of sync with the rest of it.

report review for abuseBlood. chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Just nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! why, *retch* just NO! GOD DAMNIT!

report review for abuseConcrete63 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Thank you I have really enjoyed reading your story I especially enjoyed Harry dealing with Voldermort as if he was some sort of nuisance and I loved Andromada's battle it was wonderful.

report review for abusebigbee702 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Loved it.

Keep it up.

report review for abuseDault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

good chapter

report review for abuseCoolFanfictionLover chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

wow i so wanted this ending

i love this andi

hehe cooking marshmallow on dorky lords pyre was insanity at its best

hehe sirius and andi are surely cousins

hehe still in victory mood

loved it

please do write more stories

loved it

hehe still imagining darco reactions.

bye sumi

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Somehow I would not want Andi fighting against me and then Harry joining her...it was very anticlimactic but I don't think the story was ever over killing Voldemort rather more about Harry dealing with and straightening out the. Cesspool that Britain had become that allowed Voldemort to grow. When plans were made for Harry and company to move to France that summer I knew Voldemort's end was nigh because Harry as much as he would want to would leave them with that monster alive...but he won't have any problems leaving Britain to straighten out the mess they created that bore Voldemort in the first place. The interesting part will be just what Dumbasadoir is going to do now!

In the other hand the conversation between Nym and Shack was awesome. This big dark mountain of a man with a voice to die for, Minister for the country sitting gossiping about Nym sex life iver tea and biscuits. So out if this works but so very believable as well. It added just a bit of whimsy to the chapter.

report review for abusePhoenixDK1984 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Before the epilogue we need some info about the Malfoys :-P Draco's reaction

report review for abusephoenix-rob chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

love it. Story could be finished here... but I want to know how Harry and Dora's relationship progresses. AND what punishment Harry is going to dole out to the children he turned back from the battle. Also Draco needs to process the fact he is going to be a big brother.

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

It's a fine ending to a fun story. Thanks!

report review for abuseellainaparker chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

yay

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Wonderful. Cant wait to read the epilogue.

report review for abusezubhanwc3 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

ah, while I get why you did what you did, I wish you spent a chapter or so properly expanding on this fight. it happened out of nowhere, and a bunch of the plot points that you hinted at became obsolete. it was almost as if you got bored of your story and just rushed the ending, which is what I presume you did

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Great chapter. It'll be kind sad to see this one end.

report review for abuseHome of the Brave chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

I liked the final battle. Tom doesn't strike me as someone who actually trained. He relies more on his abundance of magic, fear and over-whelming numbers. I think a nice picture for the Daily Prophet and also a message to the rest of the world would have been that group roasting marshmallows on his body. Was that the final chapter and epilogue?

report review for abuseMadhatter1981 chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Prologues come before the start of a story, epilogues come at the end of them.

report review for abuseEp chapter 24 . Mar 20, 2018

Excellent

Bonne continuation et merci pour la lecture

Cathy-Ann chapter 25 . Nov 7, 2019

Were I Harry I would find a place for Mrs Tonks and Teddy and then declare war on the goblins and use Fiendfyre to level the bank building and burn the bank down into the ground and use the green curse that looks like a killing curse on all the goblins.

Then burn my way into my three vault, shrink the contents and accio them into a storage container and take it with me.

Then using parseltoungue curse the goblins and have all the dragons eat them as though they were a delicacy.

report review for abuseTenjo chapter 25 . Oct 27, 2019

You'd think people would be more mature after a war, but it seems they only got worse. How in the bloody hell could they blame this on Harry? The only one who has ANY right to judge him is Ginny, as she was the one he promised himself to. She can dislike what he did and can be honest about that fact, but she should at least understand WHY. Only, she has no idea why and thinks he's selfish for not adhering to her own selfishness.

report review for abuseAJ Granger chapter 25 . Jul 29, 2019

Frankly, I don't buy that Ginny Weasley ever loved Harry Potter. She never knew him. Harry is a very private person and he only shows people a little of what they want to see (other than his saving people/caring for people thing). Of course, he was going to help with Teddy. The only way he wasn't going to care for him nearly full time was if Andromeda was doing the full time parenting and he only needed to be the involved godfather. If Ginny knew Harry, she should have guessed that Teddy would be important to him. I have no sympathy for her at all.

report review for abuseThunderSphinx chapter 25 . May 5, 2018

Those fucking asshole goblins. Please tell me Harry got his family stuff back, RIGHT!?

And ugh. Suck it up Ginny. Don't blame the child or the grandmother for what a relative did. Shame on you. Grow up. You deserve to be alone. At least poor Harry has Teddy and Andy, even if Andy isn't much company.

Yay, Harry is coming to America. :)

report review for abuseKuroHinata chapter 25 . May 4, 2018

No update? Or just edited ch26?

report review for abuseGuest chapter 25 . Apr 24, 2018

Hi sorry for not logging in but I do have a question. This has been one of the best stories in recent times on , will you post the 19year epilogue you spoke previously of?

Thank you,

Roguestudent

report review for abusedoraemax chapter 25 . Apr 24, 2018

His greatest power is still his ability to love and forgive. Albus got off too lightly. huhuhu

report review for abusemagicanimegurl chapter 25 . Apr 23, 2018

This is sweet yet with enough action too. Its sad one moment, and angry another. Happy then solemn. Its very well written. I would like to how more of the chars are doing. Like Reg... otherwise, love it. Write on!

report review for abuseRaikaguken chapter 25 . Apr 20, 2018

an epilogue would be nice yes, but only if you want to write it and have the time.

report review for abuseDave210 chapter 25 . Apr 18, 2018

(whole story review) Very good story. Unique take on HP time travel. Tonks is a great character and this story uses her very well. Teddy's character is done very good as well. My only complaint is that Harry forgave Dumbledore in the end. That doesn't mesh well with the character that Harry is here.

report review for abuseNemhain2009 chapter 25 . Apr 18, 2018

Great story!

report review for abuseKEB chapter 25 . Apr 18, 2018

Great Story! I read it over 2 days. Thanks for the effort!

report review for abuseMPPC chapter 25 . Apr 17, 2018

Great way to spend the day. Thanks so much for writing and sharing.

report review for abuseBearmauls chapter 25 . Apr 17, 2018

Hmm. Honestly, I think I preferred the previous chapter. I just can't see Albus truly caring about Harry that way, given his actions. Not without being some kind of insane. It really took me out of the chapter, trying to twist my brain into a shape that could accept that situation.

The rest of it was nice.

report review for abusewilliam488 chapter 25 . Apr 17, 2018

great story. thankyou.

report review for abuseFire Tempest chapter 25 . Apr 16, 2018

Fabulous story, thank you for sharing.

report review for abusemooneysfate chapter 25 . Apr 16, 2018

wonderful story! :)

report review for abusenpetrenko chapter 25 . Apr 14, 2018

Excellent story.

report review for abuseWeisseHex chapter 25 . Apr 12, 2018

Great story!

report review for abuseKisendi chapter 25 . Apr 11, 2018

First off: Thank You. Thank You for writing this story and more importantly Thanm You for sharing it. I loved it. Yes, it has several typos, missing words but i don't that if the story itself is good. There were several parts where i wasn't sure where this story really goes but I am sure that this is one of the best Honks fic I have read in a long while. I read whole story in 3 night reading sessions and boy i want moreGreat work and once again, Thank You!

report review for abuseScabbers1957 chapter 25 . Apr 11, 2018

This was an awesome story, very well done.

:))

report review for abusesolunvar chapter 25 . Apr 11, 2018

Towards the end it got kind of sappy, but I don't feel that that detracted from the overall story. I liked your portrayal of the characters and the simple humanity in their actions and thoughts. Thanks for writingsharing!

report review for abuseVonPelt chapter 25 . Apr 11, 2018

The overall story was good, but the Malfoy-Hermione-Ron group plot fells very forced and OOC. The Dumbledore forgiveness and "I still love you" parts were utter shit. The whole Lupin arc felt like unnecessary drama and in the end kinda went nowhere. The Tonks family fluff on the other hand was great.

report review for abuseRose1414 chapter 25 . Apr 9, 2018

I would like the 19 years later Epilogue!

report review for abuseaprilliarsv chapter 25 . Apr 8, 2018

Really great story, part of me wants to say the end seemed rushed but everything was actually leading up to that... my only slight issue was the prequel, not bad for n any sense but it did seem to come out of no where and I felt it would have been better off after the battle... Overall a very good story...

report review for abuseZasshu Fuhahahahaha chapter 25 . Apr 8, 2018

just finished it. while not perfect and the battle is anticlimactic it's still good but i like the first half better than the rest.

report review for abuseironhair chapter 25 . Apr 7, 2018

Can't say it enough, thanks for writing.

Going to check all your other written work now :)

report review for abusetyry95 chapter 25 . Apr 6, 2018

I'm so glad I found this story. It was fantastic!

report review for abuseProfessorPedant chapter 25 . Apr 4, 2018

Enjoyable. Thank you.

report review for abuseLilyann chapter 25 . Apr 4, 2018

Love this story. The idea is so creative I don't think I've ever read anything like it. Normally time travel stories go way back into the past I like that you only went a few years and did t creat paradoxes. Hope you decide to do an epilogue for 19 years later.

report review for abuseChillingbear chapter 25 . Apr 2, 2018

10/10 great stuff!

report review for abuseTalonwalker chapter 25 . Apr 2, 2018

Great story, I enjoyed reading it, thanks

report review for abusecarick of hunter moon chapter 25 . Mar 31, 2018

All told this is a well written and well thought out take on the plot hook that is a re-do / time travel story arc a good read that hold the reader intrest from start to finsh. Thank you for all your hard work and posting this

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report review for abuseKairan1979 chapter 25 . Mar 31, 2018

Nice ending of the story.

report review for abusedolph25 chapter 25 . Mar 30, 2018

Thanks! Great story

report review for abuseJiminie Cricket chapter 25 . Mar 30, 2018

I loved it, it was beautiful. It warms the heart to read about how far a parent would go for their children.

report review for abuseLBII chapter 25 . Mar 30, 2018

Very good story!

report review for abuseDeathmvp chapter 25 . Mar 29, 2018

Great work on this story. I loved how you did it and it was a enjoyment to read it. It does seem strange that you marked it complete but plain to add another chapter to it though.

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 25 . Mar 29, 2018

Wonderful fiction.. I feel kind of sad it has ended so soon but happy that finally a good story which ended well...

Albus and harry talking really made me cry..very touching...

Too true Andy's words..when siblings r born they r the worst nuisance but when they take a place in your heart and start being protective of them...

Waiting for your 19 years finial chapter...hope harry have more then 3 kids..it will be funny...

report review for abuseBioHazard82 chapter 25 . Mar 28, 2018

Great story!

report review for abuseZombiePilot chapter 25 . Mar 28, 2018

Loved your story!

report review for abuseEnjoyfanfiction chapter 25 . Mar 28, 2018

I really enjoyed this story. I was happy and sad and depressed along with Harry. Great job.

report review for abusegreenphoinix chapter 25 . Mar 28, 2018

great work. Wish you luck with any future endeavours

report review for abuseMari Wollsch chapter 25 . Mar 28, 2018

great xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

report review for abuseFallow54 chapter 25 . Mar 27, 2018

xxxx KUDOS xxxx : )

report review for abuseTork01 chapter 25 . Mar 27, 2018

I had so much work to do today, but instead binge-read this entire story. Well done! I particularly like how you portrayed Andromeda. Nicely done indeed.

report review for abusefish525 chapter 25 . Mar 27, 2018

I loved this story, very rich characters and great balance between actions and thought.

I would love to read the 19 years later, when you write it .

report review for abuseErielaw chapter 25 . Mar 27, 2018

The AU aspects of this story were well done, giving a fresh feel to the story. Thanks!

report review for abuseAllison Illuminated chapter 25 . Mar 26, 2018

I liked this story a lot, especially the dumbledore arc. Thank you

report review for abuseAriadne Venegas chapter 25 . Mar 26, 2018

I would really want to know what happen with Ted and Gabrielle, Hermione and Neville and Luna. I hope Ron will marry lavender because they were good together while it last.

I want to see Some of them making friends with Harry as adults. So a ten years or 15 years epilogue would be awesome

I really like it!

Also the Harry could keep up with Dora in bed even with changing sex in the middle of it. She could have been so hurt if he wouldn't. But we Know Harry is a big heart and also he was horny! And that person was still Nym! So if he loved her he lover completelly

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 25 . Mar 26, 2018

great work hate that this is ending great fic

report review for abuseMeazm chapter 25 . Mar 26, 2018

This is good and beautiful! Update for epilogue!

report review for abuseShadowtribe chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Really enjoyed this and would love to see the epilogue.

report review for abusecomodo50 chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

If you put the story as completed, why saying more chapters?

In any case, IMO, the story is good as this, with this ending, an "epilogue" so to speak, of (x) yeas later, is not neccesary methinks.

report review for abuseJustABird chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

No disappointement here, I actually think you managed to put a good end to your fic, a contrario of some other good fics who keep going until the taste and excitement fade down. (usuelly IMO because there is to much going on)

You said it yourself, Voldemort was not the goal of the story, Harry had after all already defeated him once.

All in all, I think you managed a good ending for a great fic and I'm eager to read your future work.

I'm already into "Easier than falling asleep", mainly because I actually find it quite difficult to find great Harry/Luna pairing's fics who aren't multiship (wich I have some trouble with).

That and the chapters already out had me engrossed.

Thanks for publishing, for taking the time to share your universe and mind with us.

I hope my review wasn't to hard to read but I sometime forget that English is not my first language, and that I do not in any case master it...

Have a good day/night/evening/morning

report review for abusemayawene chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Thanks for this fic

report review for abuseEawen chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Just wanted to say that your story is NOT a disappointement. Far from it. I truly enjoy it, especially Harry/Andromeda/Teddy interactions which were a joy to read. It is true that some aspects of it are a bit weak (romance, most notably, especially Harry/Tonks relationship building) but overall, it was a great read and I hope you'll continue to write and try to improve yourself. You have a great potential as a writer and I look forward for more from you!

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Thanks for the chapter!

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Great chapter, can't wait for more!

report review for abuseMeg chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

I just found your story yesterday and I've been reading like mad to catch up. I couldn't put it down! I usually ready Hermione-centric stories, but I'm so glad I gave this a chance! It is an amazing story! Definitely going on my favorites list.

report review for abuseWodenfang chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Why make the next chapter such a big jump?

report review for abusephoenix-rob chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Perhaps an epilogue with Teddy and his sibling/s, Draco's sibling (seeing as the Malfoys are now 'friendly' with their cousins (Teddy etc) and if Teddy is still sweet on Bill and Fleurs daughter.

Is Harry still teaching at Beaubaton What is Nym doing now she is a mother ?still an aurora or changed to a cmopletely new direction.

report review for abuseEp chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Merci pour la lecture

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Harry forgives to easily but Dumbledore I think will not forget the remorse or the guilt for a very long time. I wonder if anyone else realized the significance if Luna saying that Fawkes told them to fly TOWARDS Hogsmeade not to actually FLY to Hogsmeade. Tonks seems to like getting Pregnant before the actual marriage or even the proposal eh? Shame on Harry for not remembering the contraceptive charm.

report review for abuseThe-Funeral-Pyre chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Eh, minor suggestions incoming: Albus' quietly passing at a very old age, having lived long enough for forgiveness and maybe a spot of redemption, and Fawkes moving on to live with Harry. Possibly MoD shenanigans, as it would be a good way to segue into possible sequels/crossovers in the future (as I generally like the immortal, ever-growing more powerful, Harry.) Maybe Harry reconnecting with the prior students of Hogwarts after they have had time to mature and 'grow up' some more.

report review for abuseJeramy-Toombs chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Yes! 19 year epilogue please

report review for abuseHobbyfarmer chapter 25 . Mar 25, 2018

Excellent story. Thank You

report review for abusealec-potter chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Nice and sweet chapter.

Keep writing.

report review for abusenikkiRiddle chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

I can't believe it's over. It was an amazing piece and I loved the way you developed the plot throughout.

report review for abuseTreant Balewood chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Was a fun ride, looking forward to the epilogue. Thanks for Writing! Ima go check out your HarryXLuna story now.

report review for abuseYaw613 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

I really liked it and appreciated it a lot. Thank you very much. Please write the epilogue already. Sorry if I am annoying you with my reviews it's just that I really like your stories,

report review for abuseStayBlessed chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

You're too soft on characters for me. After everything Lucius has done, and did, he didn't deserve such a happy ending, in my opinion. I don't care how much he loves his family. Same with Dumbledore really, but at least he had good intentions. In the end, while I enjoyed the story for the most part, it was too unrealistically positive.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Great ending chapter. I have to wonder why the story shows complete but the AN said 19 years later? Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Awaiting more

report review for abuseGuest chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Yes on the nineteen year later epilogue, and this has been a pretty good story.

report review for abuseBookmeister999 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Yes a however many years later Epilogue would be fabulous. Thank you!

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

so sweet!

report review for abusebigbee702 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Ahhh Dammmm

Finally a fic wich is short ,full of GOOD romance and my favourite character

report review for abuseimgonnadie chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Excellent chatper

report review for abuseArgentRoseSableWolf chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Sorry, but this story really does not appeal. I can't get past the lunacy of the idea that, just because Narcissa loves him, Lucius is entitled to a free pass on all his crimes. He funded Voldemort's movement, he was guilty of who knows how many murders during the first rise, he set a weapon of mass destruction on a school full of children! But because Harry cared about her in his original world, Lucius' sins get ignored. That may actually be a bigger travesty than canon was, and I have the same problem here that I did there, too much consequence-free redemption. Blanket forgiveness for crimes that aren't even acknowledged, and repentance offered for, is not noble, it's obscene.

report review for abuseHome of the Brave chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Harry and Albus' conversation choked me up. Shame on you doing that to a grown man. Great chapter, thanks for the update.

report review for abuseArnie1701 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Definitely a 19 years later!

report review for abuseArwengeld chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

It was a really nice story and I really like it ! It was very good to see an happy end like this an nobody hurt or dead.

I you made the epilogue 19 years laters can you say to us the lifes of Harry, Nym, Teddy, their other children and what the other do:

- Do Ron and Hermione marry or they find another mates ?

- What Neville, Luna, Théo and Draco are doing now ?

- Has Severus create a apothecary and a new life for him with a family ?

- Has Harry return in America ?

- Has Teddy engaged with Gabrielle or not ?

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Great chapter!

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

great story

report review for abusehey chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

I like this end. A little fluffy but really nice.

report review for abuseboban094 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Great story. Congratulations on finishing it. I hope you will focus on finishing your other stories now.

report review for abuseBMS chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Very Nice wrap up.

Except for the first part w/ Albus and Harry. That was down right sappy. So sugary my teeth ached.

report review for abuseshugokage chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Definitely an interesting ending and great chapter to this story!

report review for abusejkarr chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

this is a nice ending.

report review for abuseduskrider chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Fantastic ending. Honestly I do wonder how things will go in the Epilogue.

report review for abuseClavyus chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Sweet. Great story.

report review for abuseaurora301 chapter 25 . Mar 24, 2018

Wonderful story. Thank you! I especially loved the birth of Belladora. I wish you a swift recovery of your surgery.

noice chapter 26 . Jul 10

nice

report review for abuseodonnellzoo99 chapter 26 . Jun 9

Thanks explanation on the blue dress that Tonks wore to NYC.

report review for abuseLAB1 chapter 26 . Apr 2

I really enjoyed this story! I think Harry made the right choice with Teddy. To be raised by a grieving grandmother would have been too much for both of them. Harry helped heal them both and in doing so became the adult he was meant to be! Thank you for not drawing out the Voldemort fight scene. Loved your version. Quick and done! Not drawn out an over strung. I was worried about Teddy, but Fawks pulled through. And you were right to put the prequel at the end. It wouldn't have made sense without bonding with the characters first!

report review for abuseFyrefenix chapter 26 . Sep 9, 2019

I've also enjoyed the prequel. It does explain some of Harry's character-building experiences and is quite realistic. People deal with their grief in different ways and at different paces. These experiences could only help to make Harry stronger.

report review for abusemauralee chapter 26 . Aug 21, 2019

Excellent story! Thanks for sharing. :)

report review for abuseGuest chapter 26 . Feb 10, 2019

good story

report review for chapter 26 . Nov 28, 2018

THIS FIC WAS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! I loved reading it, mostly cuz i'm a sucker for Harry and Teddy fluff and anything time travel, but truly this was a fun read. Thank you so much for writing it :)

report review for abusebkerrmom1 chapter 26 . Oct 18, 2018

A most excellent story !

report review for abusewolfecub1 chapter 26 . May 31, 2018

I do hope that you continue the prequel. It sounds brilliant!

I loved the entire story; you had me in tears at some points, laughing on the floor in others. Thank you for sharing your gift of writing with us!

report review for abuseA Frozen Shadow chapter 26 . May 22, 2018

This was brilliant, a truly enjoyable read with my only complaint being that I wanted another 50 more chapters but I guess I'll live with it. Gonna start Easier Than Falling Asleep soon but if it's anything like this I'll be more than happy, thanks ;)

report review for abusetcl7189 chapter 26 . May 21, 2018

Great read... Loved the plot and the whole direction of the story.

report review for abuseTinaMaki chapter 26 . May 19, 2018

So so so good.

report review for abuseThe Shadows Mistress chapter 26 . May 15, 2018

nice enjoyed this as well thanks!

report review for abuseSamwise O'Keefe chapter 26 . May 14, 2018

well written and heartfelt x

report review for abuseGuest chapter 26 . May 12, 2018

Wow this is sooo amazing I absolutely love it! I have read it several times already, it is worth reading several times. This is amazing I so much! Keep writing! I would love more that would be so amaze. I love this view of harry, and I agree that we did not get enough info on Teddy Lupin in the original books. Thank you for creating this masterpiece!

report review for abuseChronic-Insomnia chapter 26 . May 11, 2018

Adorable. Lots of fluff and competence shown. Sewing up those character arcs. Killer chapter for what's supposed to be filler.

report review for abuseDaemon Sadi chapter 26 . May 10, 2018

thanks for the story! :)

report review for abusemab70 chapter 26 . May 8, 2018

Really amazing story!

I very much enjoyed reading this!

Your characters were so substantial they felt like real people. And you write with real emotional impact!

Thank you for sharing your wonderful talent!

report review for abuseHelenPotter91 chapter 26 . May 6, 2018

I loved your story! It was amazing! Such a fresh take on the time travel aspect...I love that you kept Harry his older age and even loved the HP/NT pairing! So good xox

report review for abusemrpietan chapter 26 . May 5, 2018

Interesting

I look forward to reading more

report review for abuseGuest chapter 26 . May 5, 2018

Wow! This is amazing! I can't imagine how much work went into this! I really like the plot and can actually relate to Harry, though the plot is a little hard to follow. I love that Harry and Dora get together, and I never even thought about how Teddy would affect Harry's life. This is sooo good! I love it! Keep writing!

report review for abusehlyarts chapter 26 . May 5, 2018

Wow, this was great.

Read the whole thing in one go.

report review for abuseClaireR89 chapter 26 . May 4, 2018

I was trying to figure out how this was updated but then I realized you rearranged the chapters.

Unless there is a 27th chapter?

report review for abuseAJishere chapter 26 . May 4, 2018

I'm confused? I swear I've read this chapter before so what was the update? Btw you have great stories I've read most of them and have definitely enjoyed the, so thank you.

report review for abuseVeysha chapter 26 . May 4, 2018

I must say, this was a pretty good story.

I loved the premise and what you made of it, how Harry and Andromeda are so broken and not magically healed again just because they've travelled into the past. Teddy was also incredibly cute and I found him rather well-written for a child and not too adult (like children in Harry Potter stories often are - not that it usually bothers me, but having it somewhat realistic was nice too), but also super cute!

In general, I liked the turn the war took with the two of them coming back, and the idea of having no paradox, no two Harry's and whatnot was refreshing too!

Sadly I have to admit that I wasn't a big fan of the romance (though I don't mind Harry/Tonks as a pairing), but it was alright, even if I felt they were falling in love somewhat too quickly. (It went from "We're not really together yet though kinda dating but then there is Remus" to "I've chosen Harry over Remus now we're deeply in love and tell us this many times" a bit too fast for my liking... But then again, perhaps I've missed a timeskip somewhere. I admit I wasn't totally sure how fast things were happening at all time.)

The "Prequel" was interesting, though I feel it was kind of misplaced in the middle of the story. I would have put it into a separate story and mentioned it somewhere at the end or something. I can understand why not everyone was interested in it and it took away a lot of the flow of the actual story as after reading the prequel I had forgotten part of what had actually been happening in the present again. (Though I made a break with reading just before the start of the prequel for a bit, so that might be another reason).

Also, the end was a little bit too mushy for my tastes, but I freely admit that I'm not a big fan of marriages, sudden pregnancies (I don't mind planned ones like with Narcissa, but Tonks and Rosemarie... meh) so this whole part was... not exactly my favourite (also, while there was this "guest list" at the beginning, the plethora of names in the epilogue confused the hell out of me, how his the kid of whom and stuff), but at least there was a big and nice happy end and that's all that matters, isn't it? :)

One big question though: How comes Luna married Rolf Scamander? I remember Harry thinking about Luna Longbottom in his original timeline (despite that one having been closer to canon that this) but now she married Rolf again? That was somewhat disappointing.

(Also, that Neville was completely missing in the Epilogue was also feeling weird... Did you forget about him? He could've at least come with Hannah, and Draco was explicitly mentioned, as were all the other kids of that "Let's try and save the situation by ourselves" group from before...)

The last minor complain I have is how you managed to misspell "Johanna" in your epilogue... I know sometime it's hard to keep track of your spelling and despite stumbling over some mistakes and a few confusing words (I assume English isn't your native tongue?) and knowing how it's pretty difficult to keep track of all spelling errors, especially without a Beta, I would have liked not to read "Johonna" three times consecutively in the last chapter. It was a bit off-putting.

My suggestion would be leaving the chapter for a it after writing it and coming back a few days alter. Though I know from experience that it will never erase all errors. It's just, that apologising for errors in an authors note always makes me personally a bit wary. It feels like taking the easy way out "I don't care that I make mistakes I apologised for them after all, now deal with it."

I assume this is not how you mean it of course, I just wanted to mention that it might be perceived like that by some people.

But anyway, I hope this did not come off as too much of a rant, as really, I liked the premise and most of the story a lot, and I feel that you, as a writer, don't have to feel so insecure about what you're writing. It does have a good quality in general and your characters and plot(s) are very interesting. Perhaps not perfect, but nothing really is, as your Harry remarked so helpfully. ;)

I just feel like you don't have to apologise or worry too much in your Author's Notes. Of course there will always be reviewers who might not like what you are writing or how the story is progressing, but there are also many who do. Don't try to please everyone, just write stuff the way you like it. Usually people who share your interests will love it just like it is. :)

report review for abusefraewyn chapter 26 . May 3, 2018

Loooooved it!

report review for abuseDreous44 chapter 26 . May 1, 2018

Great story!

report review for abusebryank97 chapter 26 . May 1, 2018

second time i read it and it still is a wonderful piece, you should be proud of you self

report review for abuseKuroHinata chapter 26 . Apr 30, 2018

jumping! congrats! ah! too sleepy to express my gratitude for a 'normal' thinking Harry after the war! common sense flourished

report review for abusehakon2feb chapter 26 . Apr 30, 2018

Hi.

Really liked this story through and through. You did very well, and i'm happy i took the time to read this story :)

You might look forward to my reviews of 'Easier than Falling Asleep' soon, but i'll be taking a short break from your stories for now.

Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

report review for abuseGuest chapter 26 . Apr 29, 2018

Wowwww termine de leer me gusto mucho tu historia me encanto el prologo mostrando la parte que harry se hace cargo de teddy y dromeda.

Enserio pense que voldy mataba a dromeda en la batalla final pero no.

Gracias por escribir y compartir

report review for abusecameron1812 chapter 26 . Apr 29, 2018

Lovely story. Thank you so much for sharing it.

report review for abuseSohni Slytherin chapter 26 . Apr 29, 2018

it was quite good and I loved it. thanks for sharing...

report review for abuseEzmerelda chapter 26 . Apr 28, 2018

I really enjoyed this story! But I must confess that I skipped all the prequel chapters and skimmed over the wedding, but that's no reflection on your ability as a writer, rather a reflection of my own idiosyncrasies. There were typos and incorrect words (probably spell check errors), but the story was interesting and as far as I can tell, you stayed true to the world you created. So thanks for writing! -"-

report review for abuseguhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 26 . Apr 28, 2018

Excellent story, sad to see it end, but love the ending!

report review for abuseMeazm chapter 26 . Apr 28, 2018

Simply beautiful!

report review for abusekirasakuy chapter 26 . Apr 28, 2018

This is one of the best fanfiction on Harry Potter that I read.

Very good job.

report review for abusegreasy snivellus chapter 26 . Apr 27, 2018

I love how the children of Fred and George don't even warrant a name just a fucking swarm. Great story my friend. You made my night and the following day (I started 11pm finished at around 7? Hahaha)

report review for abuseEmeraldMoonChaser chapter 26 . Apr 27, 2018

The story is awesome. There are a few mistakes in French like jusqu'à ce que la mort nous sépare instead of what you wrote. (I'm French and it is vetu difficult to write)

report review for abuseGuest chapter 26 . Apr 27, 2018

Damn this story for being so awesome that i had tp stay up until nearly 4 am to finish reading it. Harry/tonks is my favorite pairing, and i think that this is easily one of the best stories of that pairing.

report review for abuseHytekrednek chapter 26 . Apr 27, 2018

I have to say that i am glad that I found your stories. Looking forward to more of them Keep up the great work. While you have a minor learning problem I find that your mistakes while few were never of the "What is he/she talking about" variety. I could read and follow your progress with ease. Keep it up and I hope you had a good month of April.

report review for 7 chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Thank you for the fun story. Have a great day!

report review for abuseaprilliarsv chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Amazing story! I'll be sure to follow your other stories!

report review for abusebuterflypuss chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

great epilogue

report review for abusejadely31 chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Thanks for winding this up and letting us know how it all came together. Keep writing!

report review for abuseellainaparker chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

im reading that one too its good

report review for abusedaithi4377 chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

I enjoyed this story it was different with a unique twist. I liked the fact that the ending had nothing to do with Fawkes showing up ir any other impossibilities but rather showed us that After a bit of a rocky start Harry got the one thing he wanted the most a large loving family and no dark Lords or old manipulative old men interfering in his life.

report review for abusemadscrapper chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

I've really enjoyed following this story. And I'm always a sucker for a happy ending! Loved the ending.

report review for abusejkarr chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

this is a nice ending

report review for abuseCleanWar chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

J'taime is usually used for I love you in a romantic sense. J'adore is mostly used for expressing affectionate feelings to family members.

But who cares about that french language! Great story! Really enjoyed it!

report review for abuseNecrogod chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Thanks for the story!

report review for abuseRonin Kenshin chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

great work like the end good stuff

report review for abusecrankypants16 chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

love the fluff! thank you so much for this story

report review for abuseJM0RIARTY chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

aww this is a sweet story. Thank you for writing it 3

JM

report review for abuseBMS chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Nice, Fluffy Finish.

report review for abusemwinter1 chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Cool ending.

report review for abusealecpotter chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Nice chapter. Always good to have happy endings and more importantly well written endings.

Keep writing and best of luck for your future endeavours.

report review for abuseObsessedWithHPFanFic chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Great ending and a happy ending for Harry and those around him. Thanks for sharing!

report review for abusegeekymom chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Great story!

report review for abuseRoostertheking chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Beautiful ending... And thank you for ending it...most of well written fics r never ended..so it fills my heart with happiness that u have ended this fic so beautifully...

report review for abuseCoolFanfictionLover chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

wow for once harry got his happy ending

loved it

report review for abuseShadeslayerX chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Who cares about spelling mistakes when the story is so captivating? :D

Better epilogue than 'stalker-girl gets her superstar and names a child after a bully and an incompetent child abuser'

I may be a fan of Harmony pairings and non-pornographic HP/Gabrielle D but this Hp/dora tonks is very good. Off to see your other works

report review for abuseHome of the Brave chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

I'm satisfied, great story , great ending. Just one thing that confused me. 'Regulus and Severus Snape', are they married or did you just forget to write in Black?

report review for abuseBurning Moonlight chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

I understood squat of the marriage vows that were in French but meh, I believed it was good enough without the epilogue.

report review for abuseSoreno Sanguinem chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

This story was amazing from start to finish. I normally HATE time travel fics, but I'm definitely glad that I gave yours a chance. I'm glad that I've read the story, but sad because I finished it; if I could Obliviate myself and read it again I would. If all of your stories are as amazing as this, then you truly have a gift.

report review for abuseshugokage chapter 26 . Apr 26, 2018

Definitely an interesting scene and chapter!