Hello! Recently, I've read ranma-saotome-cursed-fighter's review and have taken in his advice to try and edit my stories and chapters better. I don't expect to get better quickly in editing my chapters/stories, But I'll try to do as best as I can.
Also, I now have a word editor program. However, I can still make mistakes at times. But I'll try to correct/edit them myself to the best of my abilities. I'll try to slowly get better at editing each chapter as this story goes on and I'll try to go back to any older chapters to fix and tweak some things.
Anyway, hope you enjoy this chapter!
Name: Ranma Saotome
Sex: Male
Age: 9
Birthday: March 11
ID No. 37024
Money: 47 Yen
0 P
Gym Badge: None
Pokemon: 1. Blaze (Torchic)
Name: Blaze
Species: Chick Pokemon
Gender: Male
Height: 0.4 m (1'04")
Weight: 2.5 kg (5.5 lbs)
Abilities: Blaze, Speed Boost (Hidden)
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Moveset:
Moves: Growl, Scratch, Ember
TM/HM: None
Egg Moves: Low Kick
Tutor Moves: None
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Additional Info:
OT: Ranma Saotome
Ball: Pokeball
Harched in the Bayankala Mountain range, Qinghai Province, China.
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Additional Powers and Abilities:
None
Chapter 3: Jusenkyo, Valley of the Cursed Springs!
The stars shine brightly in the night sky as Ranma and Blaze came running up to Ranma's father, Genma, calling him. They soon arrive as Genma faces the two as he spoke, "Took you long enough boy! Now listen up! We'll soon arrive at the fabled ancient training ground, Jusenkyo. According to the...ahh brochure here." Genma said, struggling in reading the said brochure.
"Ya don't know how ta read Chinese, do you?", Ranma remarked at his father's inability to understand Chinese.
"Boy, Shut it! Anyway, we're leaving there first thing tomorrow morning. Don't slack off boy, including the chick" Genma said before scarfing down his meal.
"Like, I've ever slacked off like you," Ranma muttered under his breath.
"What was that boy?" Genma narrows at his son.
"Nothing", 'Not' Ranma thought at the end before eating his while feeding Blaze some. The odd chick creature chirped, as he continued eating some of Ranma's food. Enjoying himself eating food for the first time in this world. Ranma smiled, seeing him eat his food in content as he continued eating as well.
Soon after eating dinner, the two martial artists and chick excused themselves for the night as they would wake up first thing in the morning. Ranma laid on his back with Blaze resting on his chest to sleep for tonight.The sun starts rising as morning came, however. This time Ranma woke up early along with Blaze. Ranma was very excited to train Blaze since last night, the same can also be said for Blaze as they began training with each other.
Ranma showed Blaze how to use his legs more accurately in fighting as well as being able to jump high in the air. Blaze had improved quite well, being able to do much more solid and accurate hits and can jump at least a meter. This has made Ranma proud as his friend, despite only just being born yesterday, has improved fast and soon came up to his friend.
"Hey Blaze, wanna spar? Just you and me." Ranma said, taking a stance as he waited for Blaze's answer.
"Torchic!" Blaze cried as he took a stance in front of his friend. Both of them grinned, eager to start.
And so, they began sparring, punches and kicks thrown as both took from the ground and lightly in the air a bit. But, most importantly they were having fun and their bond rose as they continue to spar.
This lasted for about an hour and forty-two minutes. Until Genma woke up and told them to pack up, leaving for Jusenkyo.
Throughout the entire trip, Ranma and his father journey through the mountain range for about half an hour, with Blaze right by his side. It was clear that the two were pretty much close which didn't go unnoticed by Genma who grumbled as they continue traveling to the fabled ancient grounds near the mountain range.
The three came to a stop as they finally arrived at their destination; Jusenkyo as they are soon approached and greeted by a man dressed in a Mao suit, including a matching tunic, pants, and cap with a golden star in front.
"Nihao good sirs, welcome to Jusenkyo, home to valley of cursed springs. I guide of Jusenkyo here. Nice view, no?", the guide greeted them. Genma just looks on, eyeing the area around him. The vast amount of springs fill the entire area as long bamboo poles stick atop the very springs of the valley. Ranma and Blaze glance at Jusenkyo for a second, admiring the view before returning their attention to Guide, who was about to continue speaking. Until Genma cut him off.
"Well boy. We're here. What do think?" He asked him without giving a glance.
"Yeah, it's a good sight ta see," Ranma replied looking on with curiosity as Blaze nods his head in agreement. Genma smirked seeing the opportunity to train in the supposed ancient training grounds of Mount Kensei.
"Well get ready boy, cause we're going to start training," Genma said as he was going to train his son in becoming stronger so that he can carry on the Saotome family honor and legacy and marry one of his friend's daughters so that they can unite the schools to secure his retire... I mean keep the family legacy strong onward. However, the Jusenkyo Guide heard what the man said
"Sirs no! Is very bad idea training here. Over hundreds of cursed springs here, each with very tragic tale.", The Guide warned them.
"What do ya mean cursed springs?", Ranma asked, confused about what the guide was talking about. But, Genma, being ignorant, ignored the guide's warning.
"What the hell kind of nonsense are you blabbering about?" Genma asked, wondering as well what the guide was talking about.
"This place, valley of the cursed springs, houses many cursed spring, each with very tragic tale behind them, is not safe." The guide again warns them. Ranma is shocked, upon hearing this. Wondering if what the guide said was true or not. Genma on the other hand wasn't buying any of it and spoke.
"Cursed springs? Ha! There's no such thing!" Genma remarked as he leaps up high, landing on top of one bamboo pole, ignoring the guide's pleas.
"Sir! Please, is not safe! Come back down!" The guide cries out to the man. However, Genma ignores him.
"Boy, up here now!" Genma cried out to the boy. Continuing to ignore the guide's crying out to him to get down.
Ranma is unsure whether to follow his father or not. He wasn't sure if he should train here, considering what the guide told them. However, Genma was growing impatient as he shouted out to his son.
"Boy, now!" Genma shouted, waiting impatiently for him to join.
"Well... guess I don't have a choice, do I?" Ranma thought. He reluctantly leaped up, landing on a bamboo pole opposite to his father read to spar. Blaze just stood where he was as he watches the two spar.
"Sirs! Please get down now!" The guide cried out to them. But, it went unheard as they soon sparred. Leaping up, landing punches and kicks. Ranma seemed to get in some solid hits on Genma as one leaped kick sent the fat man launched into one of the springs. Ranma safely lands back to one of the poles, forming a cocky smirk.
"What's the matter, Pops? Is old age catching up at ya?" 'This is so sweet", Ranma said. His smirk was still plastered on his face. Ranma waited to see his father come out. But suddenly, a panda came launching out of the spring as it lands on a bamboo pole opposite to the boy. Ranma was now in utter shock and disbelief.
"Wa-what the hell is going on here?!" Ranma cried in shock, while Blaze who's been watching this was also shocked.
"Too bad, sir fell into Shonmaoniichuan, 'Spring of Drowned Panda', very tragic tale of panda that drowned 2000 year ago. Now, whoever fall in, take the body of panda. Too bad." The guide explained, holding up a sign that read 'Shonmaoniichuan' in Chinese.
"What?!", Before Ranma could fully comprehend this new information. However, while he was distracted, Genma -now a panda- delivered a kick to his son, catching him off guard, sending him launched into another spring, resulting in a big splash.
The moment Ranma fell into the spring, Blaze immediately ran off to the spring, worried for his friend. Upon arriving near the edge of the spring Blaze waited, hoping for his friend to be fine. Soon, bubbles form as something is seen rising out of the water.
Then, out of the water came a young girl with red hair tied in a ponytail. "You fell into Nyanniichuan, "Spring of Drowned Girl", very tragic legend of girl who drowned in spring 1500 years ago. Now you have body of girl." The guide informed Ranma. Ranma gulped before he -now a girl- began to open her pants, only to see her very own womanhood, confirming her fears, as she loses consciousness.
23 mins later
Ranma slowly opens his eyes groggily as he wakes up inside a hut for some reason. 'Whoa, what a nightmare. For a second I thought I did turn into a girl just now' Ranma thought. However, the moment 'he' reach his nether region, something wasn't right as he quickly checked underneath his pants only to see that his manhood was gone and in its place was now her womanhood. Upon, seeing this, Ranma did the one thing anybody would first react to in this situation.
"AAAAHHHHH!", he screams both in utter shock, disbelief, and most importantly, rage toward one person.
"GENMA!!", Ranma shouted, hellbent on giving one hell of a beating to a certain bald fat man.
Meanwhile
The guide, Genma, and Blaze -now human once more- were peacefully sat until they suddenly heard screaming and someone shouting Genma's name.
"GENMA!!"
Genma completely paled in fear, knowing what his son -now daughter- may do to him as he immediately tries to run away from his child's wrath, however. Just as he was to run to the door, Ranma blocks his way. Her eyes were now full of rage as she stares directly into Genma's soul as she spoke.
"You're dead, you fat bastard.", Was all she said in an ice-cold tone.
Then, all hell broke loose as the petite 9-year-old girl begins to beat the ever-loving shit out of her father. Ranging from punches and kicks being constantly directed towards every inch of her father's body. Meanwhile, both the guide and orange chick were stunned and just watched her beating her father to a pulp with amusement. They, obviously aren't going anywhere near that.
After one Genma beating later. The red-headed girl, her father, and the orange chick sat down as the guide explains to them about their curses.
"Hot water changes victim back to original form. However, cold water changes victim back to cursed form. Now, any questions", The Jusenkyo Guide asked as Ranma let out a sigh of relief. Knowing that her manhood wasn't completely gone. She then stood and raise her hand to ask her question
"Is there any cure at all?" 'Please, PLEASE LET THERE BE ONE!', Ranma thought frantically. Hoping there's a cure. The guide just looked at the young girl sadly and knew she may not like the answer at all. But, he knew he had to tell her and so let out a sad sigh.
"I sorry young one. But, there is no cure for Jusenkyo curses. Believe me, girl, many try and search for one. However, none find one. I'm very sorry.", The Guide sadly answered the now female boy.
The now cursed, yet young martial artist fell onto her knees as a single tear trickles down her right cheek. Remembering the seppuku pledge as she had one thought in her mind.
'Damn you, Pops.'
Name: Ranma Saotome
Sex: Male/Female
Age: 9
Birthday: March 11
ID No. 37024
Money: 47 Yen, 0 P
Gym Badge: None
Pokemon: 1. Blaze (Torchic)
Ranma's Team:
1. Blaze (Torchic, M)
Thanks for all the positive reviews and such. And now here's what I got:
We will soon meet a certain yellow bandana-wearing kid. And no, I won't say when.
Ranma will probably stay here quite a bit for a while.
Now for me to ask you guys some questions:
Should I give Ryoga his curse in this story or not? Leave your answers in your reviews or PM me.
Should I give Genma a Pokemon in the near future? Let me know.
Anyway, that's all I have to say for now. See ya later!
