Request by a couple of Guests. I'd like to know what you people think about my writing. Does it need work? Like on scene descriptions? Introductions? What do you people think of my writing?
"Finally, those hooligans are gone" The store manager said, walking away from the enterance but not before placing the broom on the side of customer service.
"Tod! What was that racket about?"
"Just a couple of kids causing trouble" The manager says pointing to the damage around the store.
"I see that Alex but that was unprofessional! A lot of customers got annoyed with how you treated that situation"
"I know but how am I supposed to get those kids out"
"By doing it in a professional way. There was an older sibling, who'd probably put the others in check. But by the looks of things, I'd say the sibling you were looking for had white hair. I saw in the servailance, that he kept trying to get the girls to calm down" Tod said, walking back towards the office.
Alex looked quite confused, so he decided to follow his boss.
Upon opening entering the office, it looked well organized. There was barely any papers, scattered around. The environment around it, were clean of any dust, Well not all dust. As Alex sat down, he started to log into the security cameras footage from the incident.
"What are you doing?"
"I'm going to show you what happened"
As the two watched the video, Tod looked surprised, the white haired boy also struggled to get the girls, to stop. He saw Lincoln telling Luan to stop juggling the eggs to Lisa who was in the freezer. As Alex looked over the last fifteen minutes of the clip, he began to regret on how he acted, especially towards the Loud boy.
AN- So what do you people think? Do I need improvement in some areas? Where do you folks see where I need improvement? What do you guys think about my stories?