HELLO PEOPLES! I FINALLY HAVE MORE FREE TIME FROM WORK AND CAN WORK ON THE STORY JUST A TAD BIT MORE FREQUENT NOW!
With that said my chapters will still likely be short mainly one or two scenes at a time because I don't want to commit to a super long chapter and have it be somewhat bad but not be able to fix it. Super long chapter for example 7-10 scenes. I'd rather have 1-3 scenes be bad and then save the others by changing up my style than have all of them be bad or mediocre at best. Does that make sense?
Also in response to some special peoples
ECOOLASICE!
Honestly, bro The concept of Genji's thoughts and how they're portrayed hadn't even occurred to me and the fact that parenthesis are typically used for excluding from the story went over my head. With that said I think using single quotation marks might be misinterpreted for people who tend to read kinda fast so maybe writing in italics on top of single quotation marks might help.
'Something like this really' What do ya think?
AND OF COURSE, I APPRECIATE ALL THE FEEDBACK IM GETTING OF PEOPLE SAYING THEY LIKE THE STORY BUT I HAVE A REQUEST
I NEED Y'ALL TO RIP INTO MY STORYTELLING. For the most part, I still don't appreciate criticism with no explanations as to why one may dislike something I still need it to make this story at least pretty OK. So "Would you all please shit on my story?"
BUT MY MONOLOGUE HAS COME TO AN END AND FOR NOW, THE SHOW MUST GO ON
IT'S TIME TO D-D-D-D-D-D-D-D-DUEL!
P.S I have my computer up and running now, so my the whole -start end -shit is over I now have HORIZONTAL LINES, and I WILL be abusing them
Louise and I left the main dining hall after and were now in the courtyard. I had noticed that despite being a school there were many students outside of classes but Louise explained that classes were postponed for the sake of bonding with one's newly summoned familiars. It made enough sense to satisfy me.
"Well then. Should we grab a seat?" I asked Louise but felt something nudge my leg and I turned around to see a... charmeleon? I backed away from it and noticed another girl petting the creature.
"What is that thing?" I asked, somewhat taken back.
"Is this the first time you've seen a salamander?" The girl replied
"No, but typically salamanders are much less... threatening." I said
"There's no need to feel threatened. Under the contract, familiars faithfully obey every order the master gives, and I wouldn't want Flame to hurt anyone" She finished smirking at Louise
"Well, then Zerbst you've introduced yourself so you're welcome to crawl yourself back into whatever hole you just left." Louise snapped back at the girl.
The Girl responded in laughter "This coming from the girl frantically running around school grounds last night. The only logical explanation was that this knight couldn't resume playing your little ruse and left. You covered up your lie well with that explosion."
"That's not tr-"
"I can assure you Louise has done well summoning me." I cut Louise off speaking as respectfully as I could muster.
"Louise is my master and I am her familiar much akin to you and your salamander. Although I do believe my abilities are a bit more... useful." I ended
The girl was taken back a bit by my statement but spoke again nonetheless.
"Well then. Louise as far as I'm concerned you're still just a zero." the girl began walking away with the salamander following closely behind.
Louise was equal parts surprised and confused
"So now I'm your master, what happened to us being equals?" she asked
"We are equals but in front of the students who aren't as kind, I have no issue with playing the role of an obedient familiar. As I have said before I will assist you however I can and that includes dealing with those around you in a proper manner."
"So you're just going to pretend to be a faithful familiar?" Louise asked
"Assuming you don't give me an outrageous order, Yes I will." I finished
Our conversation ended with Louise confused but happy. She even snickered a bit.
Louise sat at a table and asked that I bring some tea and I did as requested. Many students looked at the two of us, gazing for a moment before turning away. When I sat at the opposite end of the table I spoke to her.
"You know, A lot of your peers are looking at us." I said.
"Well, you are a unique familiar." Louise replied.
I hadn't thought about it before, but I did now realize that there were no familiars that were human or humanoid in any way.
"I see. Does it bother you?" I asked. Louise seemed to think on it for a moment before responding
"Well, You're the only familiar that can tell good stories." Louise replied.
I chuckled in response but was interrupted but a commotion a little ways away.
There was an argument going on at a table and a crowd was beginning to form.
'A fight? And there are no adults in sight I should intervene before things get too out of hand.'
I began making my way towards the gathering with Louise trailing behind and when I had made it I saw the event in question. Two girls were shouting at a boy drenched in some drink. At first, I thought they were bullying him but what they were saying changed my perception.
"So you have been meeting with others." One girl said the boy tried to defend himself but the other spoke up
"How could you? You said that I was the only one." The second girl said
"Ladies please if you would just calm down I'm sure we can.."
"Liar!" Both of the girls shouted in unison before one slapped him across the face.
The surrounding students began laughing and one spoke up
"Looks like you just got dumped Guiche. Finally got what was coming to you."
Now I understood the situation the boy had just been caught two-timing. I felt somewhat bad how he was treated though but that quickly went away when he spoke
"You've soiled my clothing and the hearts of two lovelies you oaf. You realize there will be consequences." The boy began speaking to a maid who was bowing in response.
"Hold on a moment." I spoke up pushing my way past the crowd of students. "Now then I understand you are distraught but do not take your anger out on an innocent person."
"Learn your place familiar! Lest I have to punish you as well." The boy snapped back
His response wasn't anything too crazy. The embarrassment he is feeling is clouding his judgment
"Calm yourself I don't want you to do something you may regret." I replied calmly
"Listen here familiar this uncoordinated commoner spilled Tea all over me and is the sole reason this situation has happened." The boy tried to defend himself
"Irregardless of what has happened you cannot blame her for your disloyalty." I replied
"You dare accuse me of such a thing." The boy responded
He was aggravating, to say the least
"It seems you need to learn a peasant's place, meet me at Vestori Square and I will show you what respect truly entails." And with that, he took his leave.
That boy was a handful but there were more important things at hand. I made my way to the maid who was no longer bowing
"Are you alright?" I asked her
"I'm fine but you can't fight a noble for me." She replied sounding very worried
"Fight?" And it clicked it was clear now he intended to fight me at that place
"Genji! What were you thinking?" Louise had forced herself into my view "Come with me!" Louise began walking away and I followed
"Where are we going?" I asked.
"We're going to apologize, make it sincere and hopefully he will forgive you."
'Apologize? For explaining to him the error of his ways?'
I stopped and spoke
"I refuse."
"What do you mean?" Louise replied
"That boy has an error in his judgment. He creates excuses, displaces blame, and will refuse to look into himself and question his character. I chose my words and will stand by them if he wishes to fight me then so be it." I spoke coldly
"You don't understand peasants will never win against nobility." I tuned Louise out and spoke to a student
"Where is Vettori Square?" I asked a random student
"Just that way." The boy pointed in the direction in question
"Thank you." I bowed slightly and walked away with Louise shouting and urging me to stop
I made my way to Louise's room to pick up some pieces of gear I thought I might need.
'The magic in this world is something I have not seen yet so I shouldn't underestimate the boy's abilities'
Louise was still Urging me to apologize to the boy.
"Louise, do you think me so incapable to deal with him?" She was stunned for a second before replying
"I'm not doubting your abilities as a swordsman I'm saying your lack of magic will only lead to you getting yourself injured!"
When we arrived at the room my weapons were lying against the wall
"Listen, Louise, I am not going to apologize nor do I intend to hurt the boy this is simply a moment for me to learn."
"Learn? Enough with this!" Louise was livid at this point
"Calm yourself." I strapped my sword and kodachi to my body "All will be revealed in time."
I arrived in vestori square geared up and ready to deal with whatever the boy intended to use against me. Unsurprisingly many of the students showed up to watch the ensuing fight
"You actually showed I applaud your bravery and you equipped yourself nicely." The boy spoke
"I have no reason to continue this conversation if you wish to duel then ready yourself." I replied and got into a bladed boxing stance with a high guard.
"You have sealed your fate familiar." The boy spoke he drew a rose and shook a petal off of it onto the ground. From the petal, a white glow was made and an armored creature rose from the ground
"Behold the power of I Guiche the brass and my Valkyrie." It dashed towards me for a body shot, It was fast and I had little time to react
'No time to dodge gotta block it.' The valkyrie went for a left straight aiming for my body.
I raised my leg so the punch would connect with my armored shin.
I took the opportunity to back up but the valkyrie was on me again this time throwing a wild hook at my head. I ducked and countered with an overhand. It stumbled back and I knew I had to seize the opportunity. I rushed forward ready to continue my offense. The valkyrie threw a wild haymaker causing me to step back and I decided to strike with it was not the best idea I faked a jab and shot in for a double leg takedown and brought the creature to the ground. I began to relentlessly ground and pound the creature and it did well to defend it's head so I went to the body. The students surrounding expected a decisive victory but were met with a peasant who was putting up a damn good fight. The creature finally lowered its guard and I dropped my whole body weight into an elbow crushing its head flat. I stood back up and stared the boy down.
"Is this enough to satisfy you?" I asked
He became frustrated whipping his rose causing more petals to fall and Six Valkyries had appeared before me.
'Damn, I was expecting a one on one fight but si..' My thoughts were cut short when three of the valkyries rushed me I did well to slip the punch of the first and Teeped the second but the third landed a straight punch flush against my chest, I stumbled back. I readied myself again but the same Valkyrie closed the distance lowered itself and landed a vicious hook to my side. I had collapsed from the attack and the valkyries returned to their initial starting points.
Louise rushed to my side "Do you understand now you can't win this fight. You did well just stop now."
"Move Louise." I spoke to her as I got back up to my feet
I placed my hand on my kodachi and got into my traditional stance "I've been going easy on him, I'm fine just stand back."
(Now ya'll I'm gonna be honest I don't know jack shit about fighting with weapons so expect a lot of vagueness)
"Your tenacity is commendable familiar but this fight is over." The boy began boasting
The trio of valkyries rushed me again but this time I was ready. I slipped the punch of the first and teeped the second much like before but this time I jumped over the third. I drew forth some shuriken and threw them down at the valkyries. They hadn't penetrated all the way through but it was deep enough to eliminate those valkyries. I had noticed though that my shurikens were almost weightless and I threw them with more force than usual moreover I had noticed I jumped a lot higher than normal as well. When I landed I took no time dispatching of the other three. I drew three more shuriken throwing them at the valkyries before dashing towards the grouped trio. Cutting them all in half with one swift strike. I faced the boy and dashed towards him as well I stopped short and pointed my blade at his head.
"Do you give in?" I asked
The boy fell to the ground and had declared his defeat. I sheathed my kodachi and offered the boy a hand. He took it and I helped him up.
"Listen to me boy. I do not regret my earlier statements of you and I still fully believe them. However, I hope that this fight will make you reevaluate yourself." I spoke to him calmly bowed slightly and began marching towards Louise. Many of the students were shocked but Louise even more so.
"Shall we make our leave master?" I said to her pretending to be just a faithful familiar
Louise stammered before getting out her sentence "Yes, We have much to discuss." and with that, we took our leave.
Back in Louise's room, I had expected her to be furious but she was surprisingly calm
"Genji. What kind of a swordsman are you?" she asked
"I would say I'm more of a ninja, but I assume you mean just what exactly am I capable of?"
"You bested a mage. A mage! In open combat, no less. No ordinary person would be capable of that."
"Who said I was ordinary." I chuckled a bit before continuing
"Listen, Louise, I've trained my whole life to fight against enemies far more ruthless, cunning, and resilient than those husks of metal. Believe me when I say this I am no ordinary man or familiar."
I KNOW I KNOW I'VE BEEN AWAY FOR LIKE 7 YEARS BUT I AINT DEAD YET.
On the real, though I have no excuse for being away so long with no updates just got lazy (and my brain is super preoccupied with a secondary story that I want to write more info later)
The most important thing I want to say now is that I have spent a good amount of time balancing work life and school so that I can write this story and maybe a second one if you guys like the idea of it on a consistent basis and have out a new chapter by every weekend.
SO FRET NOT MY LOVELIES THIS STORY WILL NOT END AND WILL BE BORN ANEW WITH MORE CONSISTENT UPDATES hopefully.
Now then I had an idea for a 2nd story I wanted to write it would obviously be updated much less frequently but I like the premise and I wanted to know how you guys would feel about it.
*Note* I haven't fleshed out the story in like any way and I also have no clue if it's been done before so if it hasn't give me ideas and if it has link it to me I wanna read it.
So the central idea is behind a group of three friends.
Friend 1 Is like a super nerd collects figurines knows almost every detail of any show or movie he's watched and is all around just really knowledgeable of animes, video games, movies, etc.
Friend 2 Is like the exact opposite of Friend 1 not really a jock or anything just not into anime and stuff, plays video games but isn't too into them. Extremely self confident (not cocky though) but all around a nice guy
Friend 3 Is an in between (Trying to be the average person) Likes anime movies games etc but isn't to the degree of friend 1.
So they're all pretty big fight fans and all train at the same gym. When leaving the gym one day something strange happens and they end up in a white room with a man behind desk with doors lining the walls. (Think of the drifters anime)
So the receptionist guy tells them that as a unit they are perfect for the issue he is having. A masked man (For reasons I may explain if interested) Is messing with various plot elements in different shows movies and games and overall just making the storylines confusing, inconsistent and just plain bad he enlists the help of the three to go into these worlds to stop him and fix what is wrong.
Now I've modeled the three friends after myself and my two best friends. We came up with this story as a unit and wanted to know what you guys would think of it.
If you guys like the premise we would definitely flesh it out more and make it into a long-running series.
But that's the end of my monologue Chapter 5 is in the works so stay tuned and I hope you guys have a damn good day. SEE YA PEEPS!